Everyone is a Superhero! Apart from me

by Daniel Newwyn

Welcome to Loktharma, where everybody is a superhero from birth. That makes Eugene De Lavet the most special of them all. At eighteen years old, he still has no clue what his superpower is.

Loktharma has never been a fair world. There are Worldbreakers who were born to brandish the power of the universe, warp time-space, destroy lands and continents. There are Craftmasters who control the elements and terrorize countries with their might and wits. There are Commoners who are only gifted with power for the finer arts, architecture, military arts, or small-scale elemental manipulation. Even in an unjust world like Loktharma, there is always one constant: everyone is assigned a Flair since birth; the power to do something extraordinary.

And then there's Eugene. He's been running around in a secluded forest since birth, training and sparring his ass off. While he can wield a blade better than most at his age, he certainly can't throw a giant boulder using the power of his mind, or turn his skin into diamonds. He has no Flair, no purpose for leveling up his stats, and no idea why General Rizeni Baggardo keeps him confined inside a forest for eighteen years. 

At least until Lord Pyro—the Craftmaster of Tailiah—unleashes his fury on the forest, searching for a treasure Eugene doesn't even know exists. On a frantic escape for his life, Eugene starts to realize he was a part of something he's been completely oblivious to until now. Along with his companions, Melodi and Azra, he travels the land and unveils the secrets of the world.


[The story will be told primarily through the lenses of three main characters, with occasional side character POV chapters. It also draws inspiration from Japanese shounen. So only proceed if you're cool with these aspects.]

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Chapter Name Release Date
Everyone is a Superhero: Artworks, Abilities, Maps, Characters, and Easter Eggs ago
1. Every good story starts with a random dream sequence ago
2. Number of Sewer Rats left to kill until Level 2: 1,093,336,412 ago
3. Talk-no-jutsu Chapter 1 ago
Chapter delay ago
4. Talk-no-jutsu Chapter 2 ago
5. Whip it into shape ago
6. World's Most Amazing Flickr ago
7. This LV 70 scarf looks ugly, let's equip this LV 2 one instead ago
8. Sugar, Spices, and Chemical $ ago
New story out ago
9. Where's the ''female MC randomly taking a bath" scene? ago
10. An apple a day keeps the axes away ago
11. Idiocy is a very subjective term ago
12. Cheating is fine as long as no one sees you ago
13. Forgot to think of a name for this one so let's go with this for now ago
14. What reward did you expect from smashing a piece of rock a hundred times? ago
Can you spare a moment? ago
15. Don't you hate it when you're fighting a boss then you trip and die ago
16. Five chapters without a change in POV? What the hell? ago
Changes to the story ago
17. Pause that online game right now! It's dinnertime ago
18. I tried so hard, and got so far ago
19. A story isn't complete without a creepy man with a thirst for revenge ago
Slight delay ago
20. Alexa, play Despacito ago
21. Interlude: The General's Diary (1) ago
22. The best way to fight is to flee ago
23. Everybody's kungfu fighting ago
24. The village looks very nice and villagy ago

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Chaeron
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It is a good enough start, though it may be a bit on the slow side because by 15th chapter the things mentioned in the story description have yet to happen. Nothing wrong with that though, I guess.

Style and grammar are also good and easy to read.

Why this story is not for me is because it seriously reminds me some basic japanese lighthearted shounen story, with the gags that have been done to death too many times. For someone who likes (or at least tolerates) that sort of thing this is a good story so far, but it is not for me.

LurkingSomewhere
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Overall:

I think this story is worth the shot. You can read this just for the comedy. If you prefer more serious novels, this still qualifies. 

Style:

Pretty much balanced dialogue and descriptions. I like writing style, very easy to read. There is a good amount of funny and interesting lines which never makes a chapter boring.

Story:

I don't think I've read enough to judge this. But based on the introduced elements and synopsis, I'm looking forward to it.

Grammar:

Pretty good. It's readable. There are a few redundancies in phrasing but it can be attributed to the voice of the character.

Characters:

They are definitely distinct and alive. Eugene is a bit of an ass. I'm guessing it's for character development. Mel and Eugene acts like their age, which is good. I can't expect perfectly rational teenagers because teenagers are the furthest from rational.

Daoist Enigma
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Style: Good writing style, what is written is exactly as what it is meant to be interpreted, leaving the reader with a smooth reading experience. The various character and world descriptions are also adequately described, with enough exposition there to help the reader visualize the scene. 

Story: I don't want to go into spoilers in the review, but since this is a comedy I am liking where it is going so far and I can see the potential for future hilarity to ensue. What surprises me is that the world building and supporting elements are sketched out in great detail, definitely a pleasant surprise there.

Characters: The MC is supposed to come off as standoffish and a bit of a prick, but that only makes me want to see what character development he has in store for himself as the story progresses.

Grammar: A few minor issues here and there, but overall I've had no issues in readablity. The prose is to my liking, neither too complicated nor too simple- just about right. 

Final: if you want to read a story that will get make you laugh while having litrpg elements and action + adventure tags, check it out. The world is well sketched out enough to do justice to the other tags while ensuring you get some holiday cheer in this otherwise dull year.

M. Z. A.
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This is really well thought out, with action given priority, but comedy given the spotlight. The jokes and banter is witty and funny, and really lightens up the mood. The characers are great, with enough room for future character development that it probably won't ever be a problem. Will update my review when I've read the rest!

Luxmes
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Sub-title: ...with a very fun main duo.

- Style:

This is not performance-writing, the style is very flexible, organic and full of energy. The lack of rigidity may annoy some, but through the read you can feel this is the style of the author, the one they write naturally and with this breath that more artificial works lack.

4.5 out of 5

- Grammar:

Nothing to say.

5 out of 5

- Story:

The plot foundations are simple and the actual story takes it’s time to kick in, but all the build-up done before is useful because there’s a lot of information to absorb from the system and world-building.

Moreover, the time “before-plot” isn’t annoying downtime but exciting action, so it’s even less of a “problem”. It’s a bit battle-heavy but it’s a style on its own.

4.5 out of 5

- Characters:
The limited character cast let the author switch PoV with surprising ease and, doing so, give us a glimpse of each character’s inner working, which do marvel to involve us. Moreover, the opportunities created by the PoV switches are well-exploited to show the other characters in action, which is welcomed.

5 out of 5

- Overall:

A good, efficiently built litrpg that will entertain you like a good light novel. Not the best out there but good enough to give it a shot.

4.5 out of 5

- Stray thoughts :

BLUUUUUUUUE BOXEEEEEEES BLBVLBLBLBLBBL (read: Warning! Blue Boxes detected! Caution advised!)

Nice colour-coding.

I like the relationship of the two MCs, it’s fun to read ^^

Sara Mullins
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So, I'm glad this story popped up on my radar. I enjoyed reading it. It's pleasant while still being engaging, and there's hints of some great future developments.  

Style: It's very successful at blending RPG elements into prose and having the considerations the characters make in everyday situations reflect this. The humor feels natural. Minor thing, just don't expect the chapter titles to necessarily correspond to the content of the chapters themselves. It's fun to just appreciate the jokes, and there's tons, and they work.

Grammar: Yeah, there are typos, but that's bound to happen. Nothing impedes comprehension of the story, though, and it's improving as it goes along. There are also some nice sense of place moments where a few simple sentences build a scene with precise wording, and that's appreciated. 

Story: Like the title of the review says, it's promising. Most of the chapters to this point have been a slow burn to establish characters and the functions of the RPG element within this specific world. The excerpts before the chapters do very well to give a sense of looming and lingering danger, so that gives me faith that the premise outlined in the story description will have a pay off. The whole thing has a simmering sense of intrigue that, again, makes me think we should all stay tuned in to see what happens. 

Character: The characters are probably the best part so far. Based on the popularity poll included in one of the chapters, I'd say that Melodi is very underrated. She's relatable, and she balances Eugene out very well; they compliment one another's strengths and weaknesses, and the stage has been set for us to see how their basic teamwork will get them through more difficult situations in the future. It's a character dynamic that's been done a lot (the insecure but powerful female lead who beats up the loveable asshole male lead), but it's effective here too. They're characters that can be rooted for. Lastly, there's Azra. Hints at his backstory definitely draw me in to keep reading, personally. All that said, I think the characters are one of the strongest elements of the story so far, and I'm interested to see how they will develop. 

Nice work. Definitely going to check out the author's other stories. 

Graffiti
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Overall this story is probably the most LitRPG, LitRPG I have read on this site. It's pretty much taken videogame mechanics and put it in writing ramped up to 11. It's creative, but can be a bit intimidating to start off with. Still, overall, it's a pretty solid piece.

 

Style - As I've said, this story takes "videogame" aesthetic and ramps it up to eleven. You've got your typical stat screens, your exp points, your level ups, your hit points, all of that. What separates this fiction from every other that I've seen, though, is the usage of color coding to identify items and monsters. 

The color coding is frequent and numerous, which, for a person just hopping into the genre (like myself) can be a bit overwhelming to remember and hard to keep track of. Especially since there's so many levels of items like common, epic, mythic, along with color-coded enemy types like fire, water, ice, (for example), etc.

 

Its a lot to take in. But if you're up for the challenge of memorizing it all, the story reads exceptionally smoother later on. Because at that point everything instantly is identified the moment you see the color. It's a very creative approach that takes some getting used to, but does make this piece stand out.

 

Story - The main premise follows Eugene the most as the MC and is your trademark underdog story for the most part. It starts off a bit slow and jumbled (following three characters with one taking the lead each chapter) but you get accustomed to it. Nothing really I can say about this category. The pacing is slower than normal, but it picks up later on. 

It's more of a comedy and lighthearted adventure than it is the grimdark edge.

Grammar - I don't remember seeing any spelling errors or weird sentences. Everything read rather fluidly. So, no points off right there. 

Character - The story gives you a rather distinct set of characters that follow basic tropes, but are not reliant on them. Eugene, for example, is the goof that thinks he's the greatest thing since sliced bread but trips over rocks when he tries to show off. 

When you read about him, you can easily pinpoint the tropes that inspired his personality. The portrayal is amusing to read, especially when it comes to his undeserved ego during interactions. The other characters follow similar pathways in terms of archetype. 

Overall if you like light novels and anime in general, this fiction is a comfortable piece for you to hop right into. It's one of those staples of the genre that everyone likes and will always be open to reading a different version of. And on RR, the creativity of this one stands out from the rest. 

I give it a 5 overall because of this, and recommend giving it a look.

YuKurogane
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I've read a couple chapters so far, and I never felt bored doing it. The setting is great, not only does it take the time to explain new concepts in a way that's not too info dump heavy, but it also implements things like stats and levels. For a guy who plays a lot of RPGs like me, it makes it easier to know how strong or weak the characters are. I also love the narration, especially the MC sneaking in how great every aspect of himself is when describing such, it's pretty funny.

 

Overall, great read, looking forward to seeing more!

DestroyerXL
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So far, this story is awesome. The author is juggling multiple stories on RRL and still makes sure not to mess up any grammar, and to make them interesting. This story is one of the better written LitRPGs I have seen, check it out! I don't know what else to write, so I'll just put some filler here. This story is really good, you should read it.

B_N_Miles
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"That adrenaline-packed knobhead"

Reviewed at: Can you spare a moment?

Never whilst watching a Marvel movie did I think to myself "Man, I wish this was a book set in a deep fantasy world which reads like a published light novel". But yeah, I should've because Everyone is a Superhero! Apart from me is just like that, and it's also awesome.

The novel follows a small cast of characters of which the main one is Eugene. He's likeable, goofy and stubborn. Melodi's similar to him, though she has superpowers. Overall, I liked the whole cast and they all felt distinct.

The story is instantly captivating and surely not one you've seen done many times before. I didn't expect the world to be so deep and detailed. A lot of the worldbuilding is done through short paragraphs before the chapters. They tend to give the story an epic fantasy feel.  

It's written in such a way that feels exactly like a light novel. This book will you make eat up in one sitting then beg for more. Yet, I was off-put by the tense and a few grammar issues.

The final verdict? Great! If you like Marvel movies, anime or light novels, check it out - it has the same vibe to it.