Salvos (A Monster Evolution LitRPG)

by MelasD

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

Please keep in mind that this story has neither the "Villainous Lead" tag or "Anti-Hero Lead" tag for a reason.

Born in a world of violence, prideful and curious Salvos seeks to not only distinguish herself from the others, but to survive the constant bloodshed and death all around her. She will fight, she will learn, and she will evolve as she grows up in this harsh world.

Also— she’s a Demon.

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Salvos is a story about action, adventure, and evolution. It follows a Demon's journey from her birth and onwards as she grows and gains experience from encountering new things through the various lenses of her life.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
0. Advent ago
1. Rocks ago
2. The Others ago
3. Learning Experience ago
4. Magic Attack ago
5. Not Like Me ago
6. Red Fire ago
7. Rest ago
8. Lesser Demon ago
Poll: Which blurb is the best? ago
9. Evolution ago
10. Gratitude ago
11. My Companion ago
12. Two of Us ago
13. Awesome! ago
Final Poll: Blurb ago
14.1. Wolves? ago
14.2. Wolves? ago
15.1. An Attack ago
15.2. An Attack ago
16. Not Rocks ago
17.1. ??? ago
17.2. ??? ago
18. Hazelbury ago
19.1. Adventurers Guild ago
19.2. Adventurers Guild ago
20. Temple ago
21.1. Ashes. Lots of Ashes. ago
21.2. Ashes. Lots of Ashes. ago
22. Recognition ago
23. Unwarranted Attack ago
24.1. Divvying Loot ago
24.2. Divvying Loot ago
25. Dialogue and Preparation ago
26.1. Spirits ago
26.2. Spirits ago
27. Are You Evil? ago
28.1. Liar Liar, I Make Fire ago
28.2. Liar Liar, I Make Fire ago
29. Silkfall's Crevice ago
30.1. Screech ago
30.2. Screech ago
Poll: Volume 1 Title ago
Poll: LAST TITLE POLL ago
31.1. Grinding and Learning ago
31.2. Grinding and Learning ago
32. Monster Lair ago
"Salvos: Vol. 1, Curious Beginnings" NOW LIVE ON AMAZON KINDLE! (Read up to Chapter 40 for $2.99!) ago
33. Led into a Trap ago
34. Centinels ago
35.1. Blame ago
35.2. Blame ago
36.1. City Under Attack ago
36.2. City Under Attack ago
37. Race to Silvergrove ago
38. Reunion ago
Poll: Cover Art ago
39. Lament of Lucerna ago
40. Survivor (End of Volume 1) ago
41. Daniel's Dilemma (Start of Volume 2) ago
Poll: Is Salvos a portal fantasy/isekai? ago
42. Journey Back ago
43.1. Adventurer ago
43.2. Adventurer ago
44. Weird Human Things ago
45.1. Emotions and Stuff ago
45.2. Emotions and Stuff ago
46. Gold Rank ago
47.1. New and Familiar ago
47.2. New and Familiar ago
48. Testing Out Skills ago
49. Ignition ago
50. Hardest Hurdle ago
51. Centinels Camp ago
52. Expanding Vocab— Uh... Inventory? ago
53.1. Escort ago
53.2. Escort ago
54.1. Noble ago
54.2. Noble ago
Important Patreon Poll (Please Respond Honestly) ago
55.1. Crest ago
55.2. Crest ago
Announcement: Patreon Update (Follow up to the poll) ago
56. Human ago
57. Breaking In ago
58. Cultists ago
59. Ignavare ago
60.1. Rachel ago
60.2. Rachel ago
61. Double Battle ago
62. Bounty Hunters ago
63. Revealing Secrets ago
64. Harrowed Vindicators ago
65. Eye for an Eye ago
66. Princess ago

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PiMs
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Non-Reincarnation Demon LitRPG

Reviewed at: 9. Evolution

Unlike other non-human stories where the MC is a human in a non-human body, Salvos starts off from a [Demon Larvae] in a very similar style to "Kumo Desu ga, Nani ka?". We get to see Salvos learn how to demon, and the story has an interesting concept on demons of all varieties and their lifecycle and evolutions. Would recommend checking out if you have a soft spot for non-human progressions, demons, litRPG. Doubly recommend if you have read "Kumo Desu ga, Nani ka?" and enjoyed it, although it is not the same, it reminds me greatly of it.

The first few chapters are mostly about Salvos figuring things out, along with a bunch of action scenes. We get different types of adversaries thrown at her. Presumably, once Salvos evolves we will get to the main plot. (Will update when more chapters are released)

We get to see little bits of Salvos' personality (and others') as the story progresses, even in the larvae form. Characters feel distinctive, which is always a plus in my books.

No grammar mistakes that I've noticed, and style reads smoothly. A first person perspective written in a way that properly conveys the MC's mental state. Author uses various methods of emphasis to good effect, especially in the fight scenes.

Dorrin
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Gather round my fellow fiends and harken unto me, for I come to bring you judgment and criticism upon the work Salvos.  The time has come at last to banish your boredom!  I will admit to not being enthusiastic about the initial premise, for demon litrpgs are a genre full of dark and terrible sins.  Not nearly as terrible perhaps as other litrpg offshoots but few have managed to possess sufficient readability to complete a single significant storyline.  The system also seems at first blush: lackluster. However, I continued reading on and my faith in delta201 was rewarded. The medium of Royal Road upon which we read these fictions requires rumination upon four categories for an advanced review: Style, Story, Grammar, and Character.  Style was never in question, delta201's fictions have style in spades.  Story is proving itself excellent, and I have high hopes for the future therefore I will not detail further to prevent spoiling your future experience.  Grammar again was never in question and enough said about that.  Lastly, Character, can be broken down into several categories, all of which Salvos has excelled at.  So my recommendation for my fellow bookworms is to exorcise your eyes with this excellent fiction which demon-strates many new ways to say hell-o!

 Jimjam
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A demon child trying to figure out who she is.

Reviewed at: 33. Led into a Trap

Salvos is the titular character of a story about a demon child trying to figure out who she is and where she belongs. I've been reading this story for awhile, and like it very much.

The characters are definitely the strong point of of the story, but it's doesn't lose out in other aspects. We see character growth, both literally and metaphorically, and personally I just feel invested in Salvos, watching her grow and learn more about the world, who she is and how she fits in it.

I can't really talk too much about worldbuilding - the demon world is described as bleak and basically a wasteland with literally nothing to see but rocks. The mortal world is well-described so far, but we haven't seen too much of it so far. What we have seen is consistent and well-described.

The writing is well-done. I don't recall any problems, or grammatical/spelling problems.

My personal take is that the story is very much about self-actualization, and goes about it in a very literal way. Character progression is measured by evolution, where each evolution essentially "resets" the character in terms of  and immediate goals.

The last few chapters have been especially good, with Salvos being 

PanzerSoul
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A breath of fresh air

Reviewed at: 7. Rest

In a world where 90% of stories are Isekai/Reincarnation stories, Salvos sets itself apart by having a protagonist that's an inhabitant of the world where the story takes place. The story is written from the perspective of a newborn demon and and it shows when the protagonist makes illogical decisions based on a foreign thought process, or from naivety.

There is not much of the story to on at the time of this review; but if the author's other work is any indication, this is one to keep an eye on.

msng
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Action Adventure with MC that undergoes Evolutions

Reviewed at: 40. Survivor (End of Volume 1)

I really, really like this story. It follows a young demon learning about the world and gaining levels and evolving to different subspecies based on her experiences. During her story she meets a variety of different beings. Some are sympathetic, while others are less so. But her adventures and personal growth are always engaging and sometimes even emotional.

The writing style fits in well with this type of story. The story contains typical but highly enjoyable aspects of gaining skills, levels and evolving to more powerful demon subspecies. Salvos starts off knowing very little of the world and how it functions. As she learns about it, so do we. She is not OP, but she is a survivor. She does not always win her fights and sometimes has to run away, but she grows more powerful over time and gains more skills.

There aren’t very many chapters (or pages) so far, so I will update my review as more turn out. If you enjoy this genre, this is a very entertaining story and you should at least try it out.

PS: As officially required for an advanced review, some details on the spelling and grammar: it is good. There are a few minor errors, but most of them seem to have been found and mentioned in the comments and corrected by the author. Being willing to read and act on these comments meant I gave the book an extra star on the style score. And as far as I can tell, the author seems to have noted and responded to every comment where someone has spotted an error (or what they thought was an error). Hope this helps.

Originally written 10/12/20; latest update 22/01/21.

Epikos
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First review on this site. Definitely deserves it.

Reviewed at: 40. Survivor (End of Volume 1)

Hello! I've been part of this site for a couple of years now, but I've only gotten more involved in LitRPG just recently. I'm fairly picky as a reader, especially since I've spent a lot of time writing and crafting my own works. And most stories I've read are either trad-published or from manga.

So, officially, this is my first review, and I hope this lifts the author's day when they get a chance to see this.

I want to start by saying that the most trouble I've found reading this work is some of the commenters. There is something that could be understood when a commenter is fairly disagreeable, but then there is less to be said toward those who take their disagreeableness to toxic levels. Overall, I appreciate how the author handles these comments. Showing grit when other authors would've lost their temper or give up. 

I understand a lot of us readers are wishful thinkers. We believe that we have the best answers for every scenario. We want to fully invest ourselves (or replace the MC with ourselves) so that everything goes close to perfect unless faced with opposition way too outstanding. But there's something to be said about following a character who's less than perfect and has to struggle their way through their inherent weaknesses.

I honestly like a little bit of both. In this work, Salvos shows a child-like curiosity that's a joy to follow. She makes foolish mistakes in social settings, but that's to be expected. But she makes very great tactically decisions when up in a fight, decisions that can overcome even the greatest of odds, and the odds set against her are quite enormous from the very start to the finish. The author does a great job balancing Salvos' weaknesses and strengths, making her a fully realized, fully believable MC.

I'll like to talk more about that, but let me hit some other points quickly.

Style is a five because it works. It fits the author's voice. And it's never too purple, but some segments are quite pretty. I would suggest that the author uses more dialogue tags to make it easier for readers to identify who's speaking quickly. But that's about it.

Grammar is a five because there weren't many mistakes that interrupted my reading. If there were, the author quickly fixes them. Good job author, you did better than most in this section because there are way too many stories that are hard to read here, and the authors don't fix their mistakes.

Story score is a give because each segment of Salvos's story kept me engaged. From the start in the demon world to the end. I noticed that the author used specific story structuring techniques to set up the ending from the very beginning of the story. Kudos to you, author. You've must have been studying the craft, or you've picked it up intuitively from what you've read. It's not a bad thing that I notice--like I said above, I'm a writer myself--so for me, seeing you pull off good craft is a treat.

The character score is a five, of course. I'm glad to return to this subject because I find the MC's companions interesting. The development that they underwent to not only trust Salvos but to befriend her was sweet. I also enjoyed Salvos's gradual development of understanding human emotions and try to mimic them. It's great that she's learning to mimic rather than go straight into having human emotions already. I really appreciate how you're slowly building this rather than jumping straight into it. You show her mistakes and have her learn. One of my favorite scenes that I enjoy was how she learned about lying and tried to use it and it had me laughing. I also loved how she learned the "WEAK SPOT" and used it to get her point across. Although aggressive, it plays to her demon side, which was really appropriate.

Anyway, with all of that said, I think you're doing good work here.

Also, when I do launch and do my own thing, if I ever reach the success where I can submit to Amazon, you've inspired me not to be Amazon exclusive. While you may lose out on money, I think you gain a lot more in other ways, which is why I really wanted to write you this review and hope that it helps in some way. And I'll be purchasing and submitting this review through Amazon as well.

You deserve it. Don't let the nasty commenters get you down. And please keep on writing.

 

Sincerely,

Epikos

octonus
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Average story made worse by LitRPG stuff

Reviewed at: 21.1. Ashes. Lots of Ashes.

The character, setting, and plot are pretty bland. Not much to talk about there.

The fight scenes are well written, and carry the story. Or they would, if the flow wasn't interrupted by "Killed XXXX, gained XP" messages every other sentence. Due to this, reading the fight scenes becomes a chore.

CoCop
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I'm a sucker for monster evolution stories, and this is a good addition ot the genre.  Its a bit slower than I'm used to, replacing the dopemine rush of constant level/evolution ups with a more character heavy focus.

Frankly? I think it's a breath of fresh air.  Salvos is a curious demon trying to understand a new world with no prior knowledge, and I find her struggles to define herself both emotionally and physically an interesting counterpoint to the usual blue screens and combat skills (which are still there).

The only downside is that its short.  Well worth a read.

FIEND
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Another day another grind

Reviewed at: 9. Evolution

So far its alright. The story thus far has a moderate pacing, and mostly grinding in nature. MC is still leveling up and we have yet to see the actual plot other than just grinding and trying to evolve into her final form it seems

Will update after 20 ch

Eritis sicut Diabolus
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Starts off interesting with a lot of promise, like many stories do. Unfortunately both Salvos and the story do not appear to grow, its just the numbers. Salvos does not care about much, and it becomes difficult to care about her. The side characters don't add much to the story, and much of the tension feels artificial. The side characters KNOW Salvos is a demon, yet the keep acting like she is a person who is just rude/stupid.