Hellprinces (Salvos: A Monster Evolution LitRPG)

Hellprinces (Salvos: A Monster Evolution LitRPG)

by MelasDelta

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

Follow the evolution of a Demon girl as she learns to survive in a fantasy world!

The life of an Infant Demon is a bloody grind to the top. For Salvos, a curious newborn Demon with a penchant for making friends, surviving the swarms of wild Demons in the Netherworld was always going to be a difficult task. She will adapt, gain experience, and evolve to survive this hellish landscape with the help of her sole companion.

But when her companion's life is threatened by a mysterious Demon King, she'll have to do what it takes to save him. Even if it means separating from him and being tossed into an unfamiliar world with Humans, monsters, and a bright blue sky where she is scorned for being born a Demon.

However, the law of evolution is survival of the fittest, and no matter where she is, Salvos will survive.

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Table of Contents
578 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Art Gallery ago
0. Advent ago
1. Rocks ago
2. The Others ago
3. Learning Experience ago
4. Magic Attack ago
5. Not Like Me ago
6. Red Fire ago
7. Rest ago
8. Lesser Demon ago
Poll: Which blurb is the best? ago
9. Evolution ago
10. Gratitude ago
11. My Companion ago
12. Two of Us ago
13. Awesome! ago
14.1. Wolves? ago
14.2. Wolves? ago
15.1. An Attack ago
15.2. An Attack ago
16. Not Rocks ago
17.1. ??? ago
17.2. ??? ago
18. Hazelbury ago
19.1. Adventurers Guild ago
19.2. Adventurers Guild ago
20. Temple ago
21.1. Ashes. Lots of Ashes. ago
21.2. Ashes. Lots of Ashes. ago
22. Recognition ago
23. Unwarranted Attack ago
24.1. Divvying Loot ago
24.2. Divvying Loot ago
25. Dialogue and Preparation ago
26.1. Spirits ago
26.2. Spirits ago
27. Are You Evil? ago
28.1. Liar Liar, I Make Fire ago
28.2. Liar Liar, I Make Fire ago
29. Silkfall's Crevice ago
30.1. Screech ago
30.2. Screech ago
31.1. Grinding and Learning ago
31.2. Grinding and Learning ago
32. Monster Lair ago
"Salvos: Vol. 1, Curious Beginnings" NOW LIVE ON AMAZON KINDLE! (Read up to Chapter 40 for $2.99!) ago
33. Led into a Trap ago
34. Centinels ago
35.1. Blame ago
35.2. Blame ago
36.1. City Under Attack ago
36.2. City Under Attack ago
37. Race to Silvergrove ago
38. Reunion ago
39. Lament of Lucerna ago
40. Survivor (End of Volume 1) ago
41. Daniel's Dilemma (Start of Volume 2) ago
42. Journey Back ago
43.1. Adventurer ago
43.2. Adventurer ago
44. Weird Human Things ago
45.1. Emotions and Stuff ago
45.2. Emotions and Stuff ago
46. Gold Rank ago
47.1. New and Familiar ago
47.2. New and Familiar ago
48. Testing Out Skills ago
49. Ignition ago
50. Hardest Hurdle ago
51. Centinels Camp ago
52. Expanding Vocab— Uh... Inventory? ago
53.1. Escort ago
53.2. Escort ago
54.1. Noble ago
54.2. Noble ago
55.1. Crest ago
55.2. Crest ago
56. Human ago
57. Breaking In ago
58. Cultists ago
59. Ignavare ago
60.1. Rachel ago
60.2. Rachel ago
61. Double Battle ago
62. Bounty Hunters ago
63. Revealing Secrets ago
64. Harrowed Vindicators ago
65. Eye for an Eye ago
66. Princess ago
67. Road Trip ago
68. Viechester ago
69. Cringe ago
70. Summoning Ritual ago
Side Story 1: Survival of the Fittest ago
71. Minor Harassments ago
72. Caught! ago
73. Going on a Trip ago
74. Trial of Fire ago
75. Giant Ape ago
76. Refinement ago
77. Finally! ago
78. Drakes ago
79. Sleep Sucks! ago
80. Nightmare ago
81. Brilsum Ruins ago
82. Return ago
83. Observations ago
84. Doing Bad Things ago
85. Stampede ago
86. The Inner City ago
87.1. Cultist Scheme ago
87.2. Cultist Scheme ago
88. Minotaurs Found! ago
89.1. Seeing the Light ago
89.2. Seeing the Light ago
90. Burning with Excitement ago
91. Company War ago
92.1. A Nice Feeling ago
92.2. A Nice Feeling ago
93. Stand and Fight ago
94. Declaration and Introduction ago
95.1. Faith ago
95.2. Faith ago
96. Siege ago
A Demon's Pride: Salvos Volume 2 is now live on Amazon! ago
97. Found ago
98. Escape ago
99. Prejudice ago
100. Contract (End of Volume 2) ago
101. Consequences (Start of Volume 3) ago
102. An Offer ago
103. Compromising! ago
Announcement ago
104. Fancy Disguise ago
105. Heathens ago
106. Vampires ago
107. Apologies ago
108. Crossing Borders ago
???. A Witch and a Demon walk into a... ago
109. Big and Scary Demon ago
110. Blight ago
111. Spooky Skeletons ago
112. Plaguelands ago
113. Experiments ago
114. Ghostlight ago
115. Depth ago
116. Lost... ago
117. Xidra the [Herbalist] ago
118. The Scale Guard ago
Reminder for this week ago
119. Unarith ago
120. Shopping! ago
121. Diviner ago
122. Helping Hand ago
123. Alex Cromerth, Member of the Vaun Qiuer Empire’s Elite Swordsguard Forces ago
124. Combination ago
125. Edithe's Enterprise ago
Announcement: Salvos Vol. 1 now available as an audiobook! Also, graduating today! ago
126. Interloot ago
127. SPEED ago
128. Catching Up ago
129. Reckless ago
130. Blanket ago
131. Zombie Horde ago
132. Seeking Help ago
133. Blessing ago
134. Overzealous ago
135. Northeast... or Southwest? ago
136. Growth ago
137. Straight Down ago
138. Haunt ago
139. The Hero ago
140. Skills and Stuff ago
141. Pricks ago
142. Myths ago
143. Chains ago
144. The Truth ago
145. Revelations ago
146. Apocalypse ago
147. Trial of the Scales ago
148. Darkening Horizons ago
149. Dragonet ago
150. What an Idiot ago
151. The Next Step ago
152. A Dime a Dozen ago
153.1. Partial Mortality ago
153.2. Partial Mortality ago
154.1. Blaze of Glory ago
154.2. Blaze of Glory ago
155.1. Wishful Thinking ago
155.2. Wishful Thinking ago
Salvos Volume 3 now available on Amazon! ago
156. Weak Hero ago
157. Frozen ago
158. Mad ago
159. A Heroic Act ago
160. Lilian, My Lilian ago
161. Self-Destructive ago
162. It's Coming Home! ago
163. Proudly Awake ago
164. Cathartic ago
165. Companion Construction ago
166. Knock Knock ago
167.1. Who's There? ago
167.2. Who's There? ago
168.1. Nobody ago
168.2. Nobody (End of V3) ago
169. The Return (Start of Volume 4) ago
170. Lily the Fairy ago
171. Fairing Well ago
172. Cosmic Compression ago
173. Remembrance ago
174. Attacked Again ago
175. Mavos Academy ago
176. Facade ago
177. Interlude - Daniel's Debate ago
178. Surprise ago
179. Mountain Island ago
180. Centinels are Crap ago
181. Friendship! ago
182.1. Personal Statement ago
182.2. Personal Statement ago
183.1. Orientation ago
183.2. Orientation ago
184. First Day! ago
185. Aspiring Elites ago
186. Alchemy ago
187. Tiring Learning ago
188.1. Interlude - Edithe's Emancipation ago
188.2. Interlude - Edithe's Emancipation ago
189. Office and Library ago
190. A Mistake ago
191.1. Facts Don't Care About Your Feelings ago
191.2. Facts Don't Care About Your Feelings ago
192. And Pride ago
193. Empathy? Or...? ago
194. Missive ago
195. Pot and Kettle ago
196. Naive? ago
197.1. Failure ago
197.2. Failure ago
198. Forgetting ago
199. Class ago
200. Surprise Present! ago
200 Special: Side Character Popularity Poll! ago
201. Elf Attack ago
202. Interlude - Daniel's Demand ago
203. Stupid Stuff ago
204. Fancily Dressed ago
205. Date ago
206. Cleaning Up ago
207. Break Time! ago
208. Rainforest of Monsters ago
209. Raining ago
210. Commune ago
211. Monster Mindset ago
212. Stonefort Labyrinth Dungeon ago
213. Wild ago
214. Enigmatic Heart ago
215. Interlude - Edithe's Evolution Part 1 ago
216. Interlude - Edithe's Evolution Part 2 ago
217. Back to Studying ago
218. Smart Salvos ago
219. Tutor ago
220. Reputation ago
221. Saffron's Sanity ago
222. Lair Tour ago
223. Portals! ago
224. He's Back ago
225. Trickery ago
226. Deal with the Devil ago
227. Mentor ago
228. Sal ago
229. Father ago
230. Oneself ago
231. Interlude - Daniel's Devices Part 1 ago
232. Interlude - Daniel's Devices Part 2 ago
233. Tournament ago
234. Potion of Regeneration ago
235. Time for the Finale ago
236. Interlude - Edithe's Evolution Part 3 ago
237. Interlude - Edithe's Evolution Part 4 ago
238. Interlude - Edithe's Evolution Part 5 ago
Double Announcement ago
239. Interlude - Edithe's Evolution Part 6 ago
240. Promises Kept ago
241. Nightsveil Part 1 ago
Another Announcement ago
242. Nightsveil Part 2 ago
243. Nightsveil Part 3 ago
244. Nightsveil Part 4 ago
245. Nightsveil Part 5 (End of Volume 4) ago
246. Begin (Start of Volume 5) ago
247. Accretion ago
Have art ago
248. Savior ago
Quick little COVID update ago
249. Beastmen ago
250. ---- Boulder ago
251. Distortion ago
252. Pebbles ago
253. Height of Hubris ago
254. Law of the Netherworld ago
255. Interlude - Saffron's Scripture ago
256. Don't Die ago
257. Bloodied Gulf ago
258. Evolved ago
259. Dissected Paths ago
260. Advancing ago
261. The Devil's Apprentice ago
262. Warped Time ago
263. Potential ago
264. Cornucopia ago
265. Changing ago
266. It Leveled Up ago
267. Interlude - Edithe's Explanation Part 1 ago
268. Interlude - Edithe's Explanation Part 2 ago
269. Titan ago
Quick update + HERE IS THE SURPRISE ago
270. Hidden Haven ago
271. Trapped? Wait... ago
New cover + very quick update ago
272. Neat Trick ago
273. Willy ago
274. Risk and Reward ago
275. Interlude - Daniel's Desire Part One ago
276. Interlude - Daniel's Desire Part Two ago
277. Centina ago
278. Planning an Escape ago
279. Calm ago
280. Storm ago
281. Cleansing ago
Salvos Volume 3's audiobook is now available on audible! ago
282. Protector of the Haven ago
283. The Fittest ago
Official Salvos Merchandise! ago
284. Invincible ago
285. Remembrance ago
286. Rematch ago
287. Despair Part One ago
288. Despair Part Two ago
289. Despair Part Three (End of Volume 5 Part 1) ago
290. Interlude - Saffron's Savior Part One (Start of Volume 5 Part 2) ago
291. Interlude - Saffron's Savior Part Two ago
Salvos Volume 5 Part 1: Corruption and Centinels is now available on Amazon! ago
292. Interlude - Saffron's Savior Part Three ago
293. Father and Daughter ago
294. Pink ago
295. Sentinel ago
296. A Demon, Two Monsters, and a Spirit Walk into a Town ago
297. A Demon, Two Monsters, and a Spirit Walk into the Adventurers Guild... ago
298. Edithe's Elaboration Part One ago
299. Interlude - Edithe's Elaboration Part Two ago
300. Return to Mavos Academy ago
Chapter 300 Special: Salvos Side Character Popularity Poll 2 ago
301. Divine ago
302. First Impressions ago
303. Repair ago
304. Interlude - Daniel's Destiny Part One ago
305. Interlude - Daniel's Destiny Part Two ago
306. Interlude - Daniel's Destiny Part Three ago
307. Interlude - Daniel's Destiny Part Four ago
308. Aftermath ago
309. Save the Princess ago
310. The Emperor ago
311. Emperor's Explanation ago
312. Saving the [Hero] ago
313. Vanity ago
314. Grace ago
315. Catching Up ago
316. Interlude - Belzu's Blessing ago
317. Back to Shedos ago
318. Time for a Talk ago
319. Faith's Formidability ago
320. Daniel's Depth ago
321. Interlude - Saffron's Struggle Part One ago
322. Interlude - Saffron's Struggle Part Two ago
323. Interlude - Saffron's Struggle Part Three ago
324. Interlude - Saffron's Struggle Part Four ago
325. Payment ago
326. Given ago
Salvos GERMAN Translation is OFFICIALLY Available! ago
327. Misplaced Confidence ago
328. Triple Confrontation ago
329. Hasty Preparation ago
330. Likes and Dislikes ago
331. Weirdo ago
332. Aerial Battle, Ground Zero ago
333. Battlefield ago
334. Wyverns Dead ago
335. Interlude - Edithe's Embarrassment ago
336. Get Good ago
337. Weird Woman ago
338. Lonely Princess ago
339. Clone Convalescence ago
340. Clone Combat ago
341. Champion Part One ago
342. Champion Part Two ago
343. Champion Part Three ago
344. Champion Part Four ago
345. Champion Part Five (End of Volume 5 Part Two) ago
346. Willy's Will (Start of Volume 5 Part 3) ago
347. Edithe's Elation ago
348. Companion Reunion ago
349. Feast ago
350. City Destruction ago
351. Rematch of Pride ago
352. Being Saved ago
353. Succumbing to Corruption ago
354. Explaining Stuff and Other Boring Stuff ago
355. Difficult Choices ago
356. Interlude - Belzu's Bane ago
Grand Skill: Book 6 is now available on Amazon! Give it a buy and a review to support me! ago
357. Grudge ago
358. The Scheme ago
New fic announcement: Violet (Not a chapter) ago
359. Sickleshade Valley ago
360. Oddities ago
361. Afraid ago
362. Last Resort ago
363. Purpose Served ago
364. Ripples ago
365. Vain ago
366. Insect ago
367. Weaknesses and Strengths ago
368. Portal ago
369. Back in Time ago
370. Intuition ago
371. Hunch ago
372. The Search ago
373. Empathy, Probably ago
374. Predator ago
375. Not So Wild ago
376. Wisdom ago
377. Manifestation of the Old Gods ago
Not A Chapter: Some Introspection After A Year of Full-time Writing ago
378. Overly Sensitive ago
379. Meeting Royalty ago
380. Arrival in Alyras ago
381. Can't Escape ago
382. Revealing Stuff That May Or May Not Be Important ago
383. The Full Details ago
384. What Now? ago
385. Figuring Out Options ago
Not A Chapter - Deleting Commenting Rules + Quick Little Announcement ago
386. Mama ago
387. How to Train Your Wyverns ago
388. Names and Stuff ago
Quick Update + Something is coming ago
389. So It Begins (End of Volume 5 Part 3) ago
New Fic Announcement: Thera (Not a chapter) ago
390. Level Difference (Start of Volume 5 Part 4) ago
391. A Sneak Ambush! ago
392. Apologies and Excuses ago
393. The Conference of Alyras ago
394. Responsibility and Consequence ago
395. Treasures that Don't Work ago
Salvos Book 7 is NOW AVAILABLE ON AMAZON! Also, another sneak preview of that big announcement! ago
396. The Boots of Alexander ago
SALVOS WEBTOON (pre-emptive) ANNOUNCEMENT + Patreon tier updates ago
397. Stark Juxtaposition ago
398. Deal with the Devil's Daughter ago
399. Recoiling ago
Salvos Volume 4 Audiobook is now available! ago
400. Legendary Battle ago
Chapter 400 Special: Side Character Popularity Poll! ago
401. Finding the [Witch] ago
402. Her ago
403. Not Mama ago
404. Error ago
405. Deal Between a Witch and a Demon ago
406. Exposed ago
407. Act of Heroism (FIXED) ago
408. End Things Here ago
409. On the Edge ago
410. Grand Skills ago
411. Your Turn to Die ago
412. Nightcrawler Shadower ago
413. Beginning of the Fall of Alyras ago
414. What the Horn Called ago
415. Round Two ago
416. Plans Going Awry ago
417. Love and Fury ago
418. Demon Slayer ago
Salvos Volume 2 Part 1's GERMAN EDITION is now available! ago
Salvos Book 1 Currently Free on Amazon! ago
419. Sleep is for the Weak, so Sleep ago
420. Blaze ago
421. Everywhere ago
422. Trading Gear ago
423. Dreams and Tricks ago
424. Humanity's Primal Fear ago
Salvos Book 5: Corruption and Centinels is now available on the audible store! ago
425. Copycat ago
426. Her Domain ago
Salvos Book 8 is now available on the Amazon store! Give it a rating! ago
427. Greaves Versus Boots, Hero Versus Demon ago
428. Reveal and Return ago
429. Clone Team Up ago
430. Leaping into Action ago
431. Diligent Damnation ago
432. Severance ago
433. End of the Siege of Alyras ago
434. Falling Sky ago
435. So He Lives (End of Volume 5 Part 4) ago
Salvos German Translation Book 3 is up! ago
436. Family Trip (Start of Volume 5 Part 5) ago
437. Fair and Square ago
438. Heartbeat ago
439. Cardinal ago
440. Treasure Gift ago
441. The Start ago
442. Interlude - Spill ago
443. Keep it ago
444. Lightning ago
Announcement: Patreon now at 30 chapters ahead! ago
445. And Thunder ago
446. Mana Tempest ago
447. Awkward Confrontation ago
Sick + Another Webcomic preview ago
448. Empath ago
449. Interlude - Death and Dealing ago
New Salvos German Edition out now! ago
450. The Resurrection ago
451. Deceit ago
452. Return of Regrets ago
453. Familiarizing ago
454. Interlude - Cloaks and Daggers Part One ago
455. Interlude - Cloaks and Daggers Part Two ago
456. Interlude - Cloaks and Daggers Part Three ago
457. The Long March ago
458. The Plan Is Simple ago
I messed up + webcomic arts ago
459. Insane Challenge ago
460. Quick Duel ago
461. The Vow ago
462. Heroic Behavior ago
463. True Hero ago
464. Interlude - The Inoria Empire Part One ago
465. Interlude - The Inoria Empire Part Two ago
466. Shadows Unveiled ago
467. Legions ago
468. Battle for Ertos ago
469. On the Ground ago
New Salvos German Edition out again! Check it out! ago
470. Wildmaster Fiend ago
471. Archarachne ago
472. Wild Primeval Demon's Skill ago
473. Web of Death ago
474. Unable to Use Grand Skills ago
475. Types of Skills ago
New Fic Announcement: Amelia The Level Zero [Hero] (Not a chapter) ago
476. Feats of Divinity ago
477. Cause for Celebration ago
478. Pyrrhic Victory ago
479. Netherfication ago
480. Regroup ago
481. Contingencies ago
482. Amiss ago
483. Reactivation ago
484. Risk ago
485. Staying Put ago
486. Unknown Danger ago
487. Differences Between Primeval And Arch ago
488. Wrath ago
489. Bloody Battle ago
490. Mindless Beast ago
491. Hellprince ago
492. Sub-ritual Subverted ago
493. Hellprincess ago
494. Lesser God ago
495. Final Piece ago
496. Final Preparations ago
497. Lonely ago
498. Love ago
499. The Finale ago
500. First Into Battle ago

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A Tasty, Lighthearted Romp

Reviewed at: 80. Nightmare

Salvos is not a groundbreaking masterpiece.  It's not an exciting adventure the likes of which you've never seen before.  You will not be bowled over with awe at its unrelenting magesty.  But that's not what a story has to be in order to shine.  Sometimes I just want to read something that gives me a goofy smile.  Salvos is that story.  

A lighthearted adventure about a demon trying to go home to see her friend, Salvos starts off a little dark but quickly progresses into an almost sitcom-style journey about a silly, dorky demon girl who likes to fight making friends with humans and repeatedly baffling them.  The plot progresses smoothly and sensibly, the character motivations are simplistic but consistent, and Salvos's slow character progression, while occationally heavy-handed, is satisfying and enjoyable to read.

MelasD is a fantastic author with an excellent sense of grammar and flow.  Chapters are snappy and I never found myself getting bored with the pacing or uninterested in the current objective.  Past the beginning section, the story just feels fun.  Tropes from similar stories are introduced with amusing twists, combat is snappy and interesting but never feels grim, and the constantly upbeat attitude of the main character is a joy to read.  

To anyone looking for a simple fantasy romp to make you grin, I can't recommend this enough.


The main character is silly, adorable, and thoroughly fun to read about as she progresses from a 'demon larva' as innocently cute as a puppy into a 'midday demon,' an overpowered toddler bubbling over with enthusiasm and energy. Her adventures and interactions with the secondary characters are amusing and enliven the usual LitRPG setting and world. Grammar, spelling, and sentence structure are superior. 


Action Adventure with MC that undergoes Evolutions

Reviewed at: 245. Nightsveil Part 5 (End of Volume 4)

I like this story. It follows a young demon learning about the world and gaining levels and evolving to different subspecies based on her experiences. During her story she meets a variety of different beings. Some are sympathetic, while others are less so. But her adventures and personal growth are engaging and sometimes even emotional. There is also some great artwork in some of the chapters.

The writing style fits in well with this type of story. The story contains typical but highly enjoyable aspects of gaining skills, levels and evolving to more powerful demon subspecies. Salvos starts off knowing very little of the world and how it functions. As she learns about it, so do we. She is not OP, but she is a survivor. She does not always win her fights and sometimes has to run away, but she grows more powerful over time and gains more skills.

In terms of story and pacing, the first volume is really great. The second volume starts expanding on the world but also loses a little of its focus and direction; as it seems more like the random wanderings of Salvos and her daily life. The first volume was where Salvos had a long-term goal and a short-term goal and the focus was on achieving these goals with the occasional interlude. The second volume reverses this in that it seems like the focus is on side quests with the occasional interlude mentioning the main long-term goal in passing. There is nothing wrong with this new approach, but it is sufficiently different from the first volume's to feel a little jarring. The third volume seems to have more direction in it, in that Salvos is more focused and drive while still occasionally have side-quests that pop up or external events derail her from her current plans. I enjoyed it much more than the second volume. I like the fourth volume more than the previous two, and while there are still interludes with other characters' POV, I think Salvos is given more time to shine and show more of what made me so interested in this story in the first place (i.e. intriguing main character with a interesting view of the world). The interludes also show interesting character growth for some of Salvos' companions and help flesh out what is going on in other parts of the world.

If you enjoy this genre, this is an entertaining story and you should at least try it out. Just note that the second volume is a little less focused on Salvos and more on the larger world and the side characters.

PS: As officially required for an advanced review, some details on the spelling and grammar: it is decent. There are some errors but it is not an unreadable mess. Unfortunately, time constraints seems to mean that suggestions in the later chapters are left unaddressed. However, on the plus side chapter releases are relatively frequent and if I had to pick between more chapters to more editing, I would prefer the former.

Hope this feedback both helps the author as well as potential new readers.

Originally written 10 Dec '20 (when Chapter 12 'Two of Us' was the latest chapter); latest update 15 December '21 (when Chapter 245 'Nightsveil Part 5 (End of Volume 4)' was the latest chapter).


I respect the passion, but there are problems

Reviewed at: 195. Pot and Kettle

First off, I really do have mad respect and even envy for anyone who can keep consistently cranking out words on a regular schedule to this extent. That's a gift and no mistake. Nothing I nor anyone else can say can devalue that level of commitment and drive.

That said, there are issues here that are hard to miss.

The first of note is that including a litRPG system built into the world sets up a bunch of different pitfalls for the story and suspension of disbelief to get caught in, and Salvos proceeds to plunge headfirst into each and every one with enthusiasm. I won't go into detail because others already have.

Second: "Tell, Don't Show" is in full effect nearly all the time. A bit more subtlety would go a long way towards improving immersion and flow.

On a related note: brevity is all but avoided. All too often, many words are superfluous and don't really add anything to the meaning being conveyed. On the contrary, there are occasional bursts of purple prose that are just distracting. Too much of the time you can get by with just skimming the first sentence of every paragraph and backtracking if something catches your attention. You are unlikely to miss anything of consequence to the story.

Tied right into that last line is why you might be tempted to start skimming over things: pacing. The amount of writing it takes to progress the story a meaningful amount varies quite a bit. I suspect that's mostly just because this is a web serial where planning is problematic.

Characters: I actually don't really have much of a complaint about the characters. I think mostly they are simple but effective and show thought and feelings in a way that's a cut above most similar stories. Character progression, (and to an extent motivation) can certainly feel stunted at times for aforementioned reasons, but the characters are pretty good all things considered. I kept reading generally to see what happens to Salvos next.

Story: a bit meandering and nebulous. Doesn't exactly have much in the way of urgency or a compelling hook to it. It's been called SoL, but from what I've seen that wasn't really the initial intent. I think perhaps it just grew into that direction over time as that was what felt natural. But there are unresolved plot hooks from a hundred chapters ago that don't look to be wrapping up aaaaany time soon.

Bottom line: I don't like litRPGs. I still kind of like Salvos. Make of that what you want. 


Salvos the MC basically carries the entire story. She is an interesting character, cute, witty and smart. I would have called her mary sue if not for the fact, she does have flaws. But the story is too light hearted for any of the consequences to affect her in any meaningful way.

The world, if looked at from an ordinary human perspective, is an incredibly dark place. I am still not sure how the hell do humans still exist. They have been made too weak and the demons in contrast are too strong. A level 40-60 demon can basically rampage across towns and cities and totally destroy them. Later on this problem keeps getting bigger, when a couple of archdemons(<150) can  fuck around with dozens of level 150+ elites.

 Worldbuilding is pretty weak.

The story style follows a partial shonen anime style with character arcs and plots build ups. This has become more and more apparent in the latest arc. We have dozens of chapters of irrelevant side characters fighting these irrelevant demons all with those dialogues announcing their skills mid fight. Despite many fights occuring, there are no deaths. Atleast no deaths which mean anything to the MC. This reminds me of those dragon ball z episodes.

Basically I hated the Alyras arc. Too shonen for my taste

 The main side characters Daniel and Edithe are kinda interesting characters. While their interactions with MC is entertaining, unfortunately they cannot stand on their own. Daniel basically cripples himself by selecting a non combatant second class. Author may have something in mind for that so Ill give it a pass.

As I mentioned earlier, Story is pretty much shonen type. New Enemies keep popping up randomly after defeating pervious one. These new antagonist are higher level which Salvos somehow defeats by having....special power ups. Well atleast its not the power of friendship.

The story is still entertaining, although the last couple of arcs made me lose some interest. I also dont like, how little we know of the rest of the world or other species like elves, beastfolk  etc. Its way too concentrated on Humans/Demons conflict.


Salvos got a really unique feeling to it

Reviewed at: 0. Advent

To keep it simple this story is really catchy, the vocabulary is varied and makes the reader's progression alongside the lines really smooth. 

The narration doesn't have loopholes and the author is always here to clarify some questions that we may have.

Really a nice book to read ! 

Juan Gomez

The protagonist is not human

Reviewed at: 92.2. A Nice Feeling

With the premise of the title I already get caught, I always like to see a non-human protagonist with a good development.

A demon that is born, thinking, in a world where everything is interesting for the new being, will soon find others and will have to interact with them to survive. The first few chapters already show the kind of approach that MelasD, the author, wants to give to this adventure and action story, it is worth giving it a try. 


Salvos, a demon with a penchant for making friends

Reviewed at: 100. Contract (End of Volume 2)

I don't write reviews often, but this is such a great, easy-going story, about a fresh, naive mind, new places whilst making some fantastic friends and companions. 

What makes Salvos so good, is the way MC interacts with the world, and how others react to that. Her relationship with Daniel and other humans is fantastic, bringing out more and more of Salvos as the story progresses. What starts out as a simple, single minded quest to return home, turns into battles for levels, friendship, growth and vengeance.

The growth during her journey is immense, both in the classical LitRPG sense, and emotionally and mentally. Her endearing yet clearly demonic nature makes her both loveable and interesting, showing a different side to what is out a classic demonic race. 

The humour, light hearted nature, and cast come together to give a story well worth reading. Something easy to read, with more depth than you'd think, and characters you can't help but love. Give it a go (and Melas), you won't regret it!

Thank you, for making such a good story! And don't be disheartened, ignore the haters and tell reviews, you've got a green in your hands, polish it good and proper! 


the story follows a battle-junkie demoness as she stumbles through life and meeting hardships such as losing friends, getting spirited away and adjusting to human society when people don't really get along with demons well in general. The characters are well-rounded and the writing style invites you to keep reading, I enjoyed it very much.

I will rate this a 4.5 since for the standards of this site it is top notch, but it is not a masterpiece yet.


Good, but something needs to change

Reviewed at: 168.1. Nobody

This is a great story. The characters are all interesting and the grammar is great but there is one galaring problem and that is the main character herself. While her naivety and bluntness were fun for a while I slowly began to notice myself skipping past her dialogue and antics as time went on. She never changes and she rarely faces consequences for her actions. Instead the people around her are punished and she could care less.


Now the author tries to play her off as eccentric but intelligent yet the more I read the less it makes sense for the character (to me at least) that she suddenly swaps from having no idea what the hell is happening to a tactical mastermind.


The character goes from funny to annoying around the 50th chapter and it just keeps getting worse. I implore the author to bite the bullet and kill a main character because Salvos needs to change and this is the only way it would make sense for it to happen in the story. Her obsession with being a princess was funny for until the author continued to (and still does) hammer the same joke into everyone’s skull. Running jokes can be funny but when the same ones are used in almost every chapter they quickly become infuriating.


Daniel and Edith are better characters in every way imaginable. Their backstories interesting, their motivations are stronger than “I want to save the friend I barely knew!”, they actually acknowledge their flaws and actively try to improve themselves. Salvos on the other hand only has one of these things going for her. The Netherworld and her birth are very interesting and the situation as to how she ended up trapped outside of the Netherworld is interesting as well. But unlike her companions she never grows as a character, refuses to acknowledge both her flaws and weaknesses, is incredibly naive, and extremely prideful.


I understand why many people like her character but I’m at the point where I can’t stay invested in the story anymore because I find the MC infuriating. I’d recommend this book if you don’t care about character development all that much but if that’s something you like the just move on to something like “The Prefect Run”.