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[I was reborn too weak to be an adventurer, so I opened an item shop by the dungeon instead!]
Reborn into a fantastical RPG-system based world, Fresh is offered a second chance at life. Initially glad to have escaped her old life, she quickly realizes that this new one might not be much better. Her new body is too frail to follow any grand dreams of adventure, her new mind is too dulled to allow any meticulous planning and this new, seemingly colorful, kind world is anything but.
Needing a way to survive in this horrible place, Fresh bands together with some unusual people and they take on an entirely new challenge; running an item shop just outside of the dungeon!
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Okay. So the biggest problem with this series is its marketing. It is really well written based on what the author wanted out of it - I'm really enjoying myself reading it - but many many readers have gone into it expecting one thing and getting disappointed when they got another.
My first impression of Razzmatazzesssess writing style is "Cinnamon Bun" if the author was a sadist that bullied their MCs. The problem of course is a certain large fraction of people checking the cover and name and seeing pastel colours then expecting Cinnabun. When the MC gets shoved into dark, bloody, grimy situations they are put off and drop due to it not being as light as they wished.
The second camp is readers who want action/a "strong MC" and come up against the Cinnabun personality. The main character is impulsive and weighed down by her stats leading to many stupid decisions but when given time to think comes up with intelligent ideas.
Once I've read more my view has shifted slightly. Razzmatazz writes series with heavy symbolism and endless references to supernatural and mythological phenomena. Less a "how deep huhuhu" and more of an "interesting Lore" effect its entirely within the background but still interesting.
The Story itself takes a while to progress but it's paced perfectly according to my tastes. Pacing has been increasing to blistering rates with a lot of modern novels while the slower "glacier pace" this runs at reminds me of older novels I read as a kid.
Grammar is a non issue. Perfectly understandable and next to no mistakes - corrected when pointed out.
Character is one of the harder parts to review. From main characters to minor time is given to flesh them out adequately. More and more information and hints are given as the story progresses are given to the main cast and they all feel unique and well thought out.
Finally the overall or enjoyment score. I rate highly on RR in comparison to Goodreads and feel like this series is rated criminally low. Personally, it's one of the stories I'm having the most fun reading right now and I'm sad to see its low rating when it hits all the right buttons for me. 5/5 across the board and I'm only slightly trying to compensate for its sad low ratings.
Greet novel, hard to start due to the small beginning chapters and little details but when you get far enough you will flow through the chapters like water. The story has lots of great elements that add to the suspense of the story, such as the blury parts of Fresh's stat menu along with the fact that you don't know what the Black-Fountain actually is.
The one problem I would have would be the excessive lack of info into the background of the world, and less into how the system works for different people. Ex- how leveling abilities works how many stats each person gets with the type of class the have, or how much does a sub-class effect the way your character grows like a class does(stat and skill wise).
The style of the story is great. The story is kinda slow in the beginning but picks up after the first couple chapters. The grammer so far has had little to no errors. The character's are interesting, especially Jubilee, she is the character that I am looking forward to knowing more about.
I'm looking forward to the continuation of this story and can't wait to see what it will become.
When it comes to this story, the first 24 chapters are a grind, things are starting to move forward after this point, with nearly everything coming before seemingly being the prologue and creating the setting and motives. In a world where stats really matter, having an Mc with an int and wis of 3 each, it's painfull to read. Story can honestly go either way after chapter 26...
At chapter 49, (25 chapters into what I would consider the actual story based off of the title), with the first 24 being a long, grinding, introduction that from now on I will call the 'prologue'. From chapter 25 onward, the story finally provides what is on the tin, the makings and runnings of a duo trying to make their way in the world by running a shop with all the dark undertones that come with living in this kind of world, making it quite satisfying to read.
As for the clarifications, the MC is not an idiot, far from that actuially, its due to her int and wis being so low that the system literially delays her ability to stop and think about what she is doing and the consequences that will follow untill after she has done so most of the time. This becomes more and more evident after you get through the prologue when the MC has the time to think and go through the delay, or the goal she is trying to achieve goes in such an obvious direction that she can take the first step in the right direction immeadieatly, and think of the required next steps as they get through the delay as she moves forward. She is no genius, but her stats make her seem dumber than she actuially is.
Fresh (MC) is a sweet and wholesome, if a little needy, main character. Jubilee is the friend who is cynical of the world, and Basil is innocent and preachy, but well meaning. There is a nice atmosphere in the shop, but shadows on the horizon. A cult unknowingly pays homage to Fresh, and she'd be in real trouble if the church finds out her secret... what happens next? find out on the next episode of Dungeon Item Shop!
In all seriousness though, its a cute read. Fresh is sweet and pesters her friends and I'm curious about the obvious interference her class is attempting to have over her personality, whether it'll end up being a good or a bad thing. The church is made out to be the bad hammer in the background ready to smash all if secrets gets out.
There's enough going on in the world that leaves story hooks open, I'd be keen on finding out more about the cult and their inner workings. Though, alternatively investigated just what the hell is up with the book would be cool too. The other characters are interesting and only seen through the eyes of the MC, so I'm curious as to their world view, particularly Basil and how she does with her daily church interactions.
Jubilee is and odd lil character, clearly a little bossy and protective of their "ward" (she's a friend and you know it Jubilee). Clearly some unfortunate happenings in the past too, other than the ones mentioned.
Grammar is good, haven't been any moments where it as detracted from the story enjoyment, and writer seems to update chapters with suggested corrections.
Thank you for the story so far!
Those of you looking for a power fantasy keep looking, Fresh is not uber-jacked (as of yet) and is quite sweet for not being so. Its not to say she doesn't have some powerful abilities, she's just not looking to do that sort of thing.
Probably one of the best depictions of a low intelligence and wisdom character in a litrpg I have ever read.
Thats also the problem with the story. The main character is a complete idiot who only survives through plot armor. I only made it as far as chapter 90 because there are occasional increases to the mc's intelligence score that actually effect the story and the mc's outlook. These increases are few and far between and by chapter 90 she still acts like a 9-10 year old (this is an improvement over the 5-6 age range she started as).
I don't think I can stress how well low stats having actual downsides is portrayed here.
That doesn't change the frustration with the main character, and why I will probably drop it here. I just can't do another 90 chapters in the hope that the mc increases her stats to the point where she isn't a child anymore.
If something like that doesn't bother you I recommend this story whole heartedly.
Its not a bad story. Just not for me. I find the MC annoying. She is too childish for me / naive / kinda dumb / It feel like it would be better without her ? So yeah, not for me.
Still manage to read 100ish chapter so I can t say its a terrible tho.
For the annecdote :
Even the voice in my head when I read her talk is becomming annoying x) Like loli hight pitch voice you know. Just not for me.
A story about failing upward, or upward-ish. Well, maybe sidewards actually. Okay, anything but down I guess.
Look the MC may have been eaten by a first floor mushroom, but everyone has bad days. She got right back up, and ate that mushroom back.
Also the day-to-day business of running a shop, with magic, for profit.
Decent grammar and spelling, just a few errors that the author corrects quickly when found. Daily, or nearly daily, updates so there is always more to read.
The characters are simple, but believable. Not too much depth to them at this point though. Motivations are a bit lacking, but its clear what they are when presented. Hopefully developing more motivations, and depth to the characters, as the story goes on.
Good style for both the setting and characters. A few graphics for elements that would weigh down the narrative, and keep the chapters flowing smoothly. Don't feel the need to glaze over technical jargon on what is a sword and sorcery style setting.
Overall a nice story about dungeon support economics. The logic behind why choices are made makes sense, and the frequent updates means mysteries develop smoothly without a lot of "waiting to see" cliff hangers.
Dungeon Item Shop is both litrpg and isekai. It beings with a subtle death, and a strange transition from one world to the next. Fresh, our main character, has to build a new life as an adventurer / shopkeepr with her only party member, Jubilee. The plotline is a bit dark, but it's also wacky and fun.
The pace of the story is slow, yet it's a fast read. While it takes a while to get going, there is plenty of drama, a touch of action, and some good character interactions. It feels like you're flying through, and I think the slow pace adds a touch of realism. Realistically, how fast could someone go from crummy stats to great stats? Not very. Do we need realism in litrpg and isekai? Maybe not, but I appreciate it. It makes any advancements feel very earned.
So far, there are really only two characters in this story. Fresh is the main character. She's got her low stats, and it shows. She's weak. She's dim, but she's honest and kind. She's got room to grow. Jubilee is the opposite of Fresh. Jubilee is blunt, capable, quick-witted, and sometimes cruel. Well, maybe often, cruel. Readers might relate to one more than the other, but I found myself going back and forth between the two. It's an odd balance that works. The characters also have some pretty great dialogue. It feels natural.
Grammar is pretty solid here. I didn't see anything that broke the rules of our Modern English.
The style is straightforward. It doesn't lean too hard into description, dialogue, or action. It's just very balanced. The story is told in present tense but sticks to it. I know that's a bit outside the norm for fiction, but after a few paragraphs, you won't really notice. The third person narration is pretty standard.
Overall, I had a fun reading and reviewing this. There are some great funny parts, some clever lines, and a couple of heart wrenching moments. My spoiler button has ceased to work since I updated my computer, so I'll just say one word: Mushrooms. If you want to know why I'm sad about mushrooms, read the story.
Edit: I read through to chapter 20 when I reviewed, but forgot I did most of it on my phone (never logged in there). So, I'm just making the system correct where I am in the overall story. Sorry about that!
This review is subjective and based on my personal taste.
I hate stupid MCs, even more those clueless than make no sense and still do things. The mc of this novel is of the charts.
The characters seem decent and correct, the writing is good (no grammar errors) the pacing is slow, the characters are too stupid and there is little to no description. The mc as previously said is off the charts childish and stupid (which irritates me a lot).
Also the worldbuilding is nill, to this point you know that
A) adventures are a thing but when you sign up you get indebted.
B) dungeons exist.
C)people go into dungeons to farm monster parts and then sell them.
there is no more worldbuilding, no explanation of anything of how things work, the novel develops at a snails pace (it was said that it was slow but there is no progression whatsoever).
also there is no description of anything, the guild hall was made of materials? Had smells? The dungeon was perfectly squarish? Like a cave? Stone floor? The torches were magical? Burned due to oil? Did no one found where she cooked the shroom till she went back?
TLDR: There are waaay to many questions and no explanations with the stupidest MC I have ever read. Not fun nor recommended.
Disclaimer : this is my opinion and only MY opinion. I am only sharing my thoughts about this fiction, NOT about its author.
The story :
There is none. MC just farms the dungeon. Where? When ? Why ? No one knows. The worldbuilding is non-existent. Nothing is ever justified or explained in any way.
What I find surprising is that the MC gets reborn precisely because she feels numb, and yet, goes on to do the most boring thing possible in such a setting : farming.
The characters :
I've seen 3 characters total so far, one of whom was pretty much an NPC who gave a quest to the MC.
Of the other two, one is decently written, but lacks depth.
Which leaves the MC : they are the most useless human being I have ever seen in fiction. They have no redeeming quality wahtsoever.
I'm personally not too fond of that. I like having a more balanced MC.
The style :
No time is given to describe the places and people seen in this world. In fact nothing is described beyond the most basic of description.
the dialogues and overall social interactions are lackluster.
A few discrepancies with tenses every once in a while, but nothing too problematic.
I'm not sure where this is going, but, so far this has been... not even frustrating. I feel nothing when reading this.
Not even anger or frustration at how useless the MC is. Just... boredom.
A lot of people seem to say this is a redemption story, and I'm inclined to agree. But that's not enough. Having a good concept is not enough.
I remember watching an anime called Grimgar, a few years ago (and even reading some the novel associated with it). It had weak as hell protagonists. BUT the art itself was great.
THAT is what you're missing in my opinion. Inprove your style, improve your dialogues, your social interactions, and above all else, your world building.
And be careful about tenses.
Without it, just like with overpowered characters, this is all boring.