Knight and Smith

by FirstKnight

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity

Secrets once thought lost are coming to light...

Orin, a young thief turned mercenary, is returning to his home for the first time in four years. Orin wants nothing more than to reconnect with his family and settle down in the city he loves, but fate is fickle and has another destiny in mind for the swordsman.

Now bound to the Princess of the Realm in ways he doesn't fully understand, Orin finds himself thrust into the world of Nobility, where no one can be truly trusted and his friends are few and far between.

To ensure his survival, and that of the entire Kingdom, Orin must learn to harness the power of a Knight and work with the Princess Elora to protect those they both love, all while dealing with psychotic Knights, a mad King and Elora's own protectors.

Well, if nothing else, I'm sure it will be an adventure.


The Sword of Stars: Book one of the Knight and Smith Saga is now available on Amazon!

This is one of the ideas I've been working on for a while and wanted to see how far I can go with it.

There's nothing really original here, just something fun I wanted to explore a bit more.

Chapters will be posted once a week on Friday at five pm GMT.

Thank you for reading and I hope that you enjoy Knight and Smith!

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drwssl
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Alright, I binged it till chapter 23 and I loved every bit of it. Grammar en style are consistend high quality. The chapters are looong, so dont be fooled by the relative small number of chapters. I think were already at the end of arc two or something like that.

I'm really a fan of this trope that forces two people who dont know/like eachother to work together and grow and you have done it beautifully. Its not rushed. We get to know or main characters seperatly, get a feeling for them, before the whole thing come tumbeling down. And what a lovely crash it was.

I guess my only negative point is the moment they leave the palace (i'll keep it vague because I dont know how spoiler tags work). For me i didn't feel like they exhausted all options. At the same time, if we can learn anything from the shitshow going on in the USA, its that not everyone has to react logicial & smart to upsetting news. Or more nuanced different worldsview can lead to different logical & smart decisions. Plus I love all the consequences of this move and cannot wait for al the character drama yet to unvolve.

In conclusion:
come for the quality, stay for the characters

calle55
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A lot more grimdark than it appears.

Reviewed at: Chapter Thirteen

The characters are interesting. A bunch of good cliches that are really well fleshed out. 

The setting and story so far feels like a really good fantasy story in the making. 

The writing can be a bit hard to read through. A lot of massive sentences to tell you how things work, which makes it hard to get through sometimes. Especially the chapter of the princess basically telling you how this bond works. 

Now, for the darker part of this, the bond, Supposedly a magical force binding knight and smith together forever. This is not the marriage forever where if you call out of love you can just get a divorce. This is the forever forever, no takebacks. You can die from having it removed. 

Having to be endlessly bound to a person wouldn't be the worst if you could have a professional relationship. Same if you've been together for a long time and know your potential bonded like you would yourself.

It's just that this bond is a lot more insidious than that. Essentially mind controlling you to be with your bonded. This is made a lot worse that people should be bonded at a really young age so they get the most time to let it strengthen both parts. Now granted our MC acts a lot more level headed and articulate than most kids 18 years of age.

I am curious wether love will prout from mind control and stick together, they will stick together because of outside circumstances or split and never look back. I personally feel the entire relationship tainted by this bond. 

It's gonna be an interesting read going forward. 

If you enjoy thinking about the moral implications surrounding such things or just ignore it and read a nice romance/fantasy novel with gritty elements, I'd recommend this read.

todd
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Well written on a well trod path

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Three

First off, this is a great read. It has exciting action, interesting magic, and solid characters. That said, the more you read, the more familiar the story feels. The poor orphan with hints at a mysterious past, suddenly tied to the princess of the realm while threats near and far begin to manifest. The jealous prince-to-be and the MC who starts off stronger than he has any right to be. Unexpected complications with the magic that he gains access to and desperation pushing the princess into permanent choices. The only saving grace is that the author is writing this classic tale well. There are some issues that I'll touch on later, but for the most part, it makes for a smooth and enjoyable read.

Style: Smooth, and largely well-balanced. Exposition is mostly delivered through point of view and the descriptions of the world and characters flow well together.

Grammar: Recurring issues with homophones and minor errors, but overall, they're rare enough that it isn't an issue to read through.

Story: As I said earlier, the bones of the story are formulaic. I won't get into any spoilers, but the setup is familiar to anyone that enjoyed Young Adult fiction. The unusual hidden power of the protagonist (Orin), unexpectedly being tied to the princess, the beginnings of romance between the two as she appreciates his common-born candor and he her beauty and strength of will. A dark conspiracy floats in the background while a second conspiracy seems to shroud the MC. And lastly, Orin's control of his power grows exceptionally quickly. That said, formulaic structures aren't necessarily bad, so long as the author can tell an interesting story with them. My primary concern is that the story will play out precisely on the marked ground, with characters walking the same paths that so many have before. That said, there's still plenty of room for the author to grow the story in a myriad of directions, and the world is lush with curious details just waiting to be revealed, so it's certainly not a trial to enjoy it.

Characters: Overall solid. They each come off as individuals, with their own concerns and interests. I especially appreciate the shift in Orin's speech between interacting with the people in Myrin and the mercenaries that he fought with. It's little details like that, that make a story breathe. While the characters aren't unintelligent, there are one or two moments where choices are made that were necessary for the plot to move forward, but were a bit extreme. Even though things worked out, and winning against impossible odds is the bread and butter of these stories, it's something to keep in mind for the future. Otherwise, there's a large cast of side characters that manage to avoid being relegated to cardboard cutouts, which is great to see. There isn't much else to say without edging into spoiler territory.

In summation, it pulls together into an enjoyable, if familiar fantasy tale. I expect that fans of Chosen One or weak to strong storylines will find it right up their alley, and the dyad magic system makes for an interesting fantasy setting without even touching on Scribed magic. Some might be needled by the cliches, but the author's writing has been more than solid enough to support it so far. I would recommend giving it 10-15 chapters to get a sense of whether or not it appeals to your taste.

CharlyHa
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Twists and turns - all but obvious

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Seven

Sometimes one feels like most fantasy is more or less the same. 

Even new ideas are merely a facade of the well-known. Sometimes comforting but after a while it is hard not determine the after the first few pages. 

I promise this one is different. Nothing is like it seems. 

You get to know a main character full of determination and spirit - well both of them.

Stubborn and loyal to a fault. 

These mc are set into a well-built world that isn't to fancy but somehow down to earth. 

It's captivating and nicely written.

But I really hope for the second to offer answers. 

 

Turambar
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One of the best Epic Fantasy stories I've read

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Seven

This story is wasted on Royalroad. It is my opinion that the author could be rolling in dough if they published this in any format and should do so at the first opportunity.

Knight and Smith does not have any very innovative ideas and most of the tropes that you would expect of a coming-of-age story are clearly present. But where it shines brightest is in execution.  

Writing style is very good. Dialogue feels natural and there are no exposition dumps or areas of bad prose. Story is amazing and pulls you in and does not let go. Also liked the power system a lot and what little the author has introduced till date has been fascinating to think about. Can't wait for book 2 to reveal a lot more about this. Could not find any grammar mistakes. And finally, the best part of this story, the characters. Characters are realistic yet likable and are written extremely well. All characters (main, side and the villains) are well fleshed out and there are no evil-just-for-the-sake-of-it guys yet.

Overall, this is a must-read for all fantasy fans and I urge you to binge this now that book 1 is finished.

P.S. I'm not good at criticizing books that I love and hence have refrained from it. Please refer other reviews for the same. :P 

 

Frodo_Sagbag
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A unique take on classic fantasy

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Seven

This is my first review on RR, but I have read dozens of stories so far. So you get an idea of what I like, I will leave my top Web Series at the bottom of the review.

One thing I look for when I pick a story to read on Royal Road, is the distinctiveness of the summary. It could be something weird and wacky, dark and rich in lore, or - as this is - Fantasy with a unique twist. Funnily enough, the decidedly bland name drew me in. I could feel from the way that the author introduces the story, that it would be well-written. For me, that is something few and far between on RR. It is not a necessity for me to read a story that is particularly well-written, as quite often non-English speakers write very unique stories. However, the prose and flow of writing in this story are heads and above a lot of its peers.

This ties in well with how each character is written. Whilst a lot of characters feel trope-y, the way the author introduces them all and lets them evolve makes them feel so very real. Orin's 'hero' feel, and Elora's 'princess turned badass' demeanour somehow feel fresh, and the way they interact and their relationship changes over the book draws you in for more.

The first book (just finished at the time of this review) builds and breaks bonds between many of the characters; showing love, hate, prosperity and hardship in bounds. Bonds, being the overarching theme of the series, are introduced well, and subtly grow throughout the book. That ties in well with the 'Bond' between a Knight and a Smith, something which draws two people together, allowing them to grow and strengthen as people, both emotionally and physically. I cannot wait to see how the series develops this further, and what part the lore and backstory given so far, play in the lives of Orin, Elora, and their loved ones.

The drop in gramma is simply because writers aren't infallible, and whilst the story is written very well, small mistakes to seep through, and it isn't written perfectly (much like this review).

I do not wish to go into the story, suffice it to say that it was fantastically done, bringing out emotion and drawing me in, as the reader. It may not be the most unique series on here, but it's quality of writing, character development, and pace are almost second to none. I heartily recommend you read this series, and I hope you enjoy it as much as I have done.

 

1. The Wandering Inn

2. Azarinth Healer (though it has it's ups and downs)

3. Metaworld Chronicles

A Journey of Black and Red, Magic-Smithing, Melas, everything by RavensDagger, A Fractured Song

wackysmacky
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Fantasticcccc! Seriously. This books is awesome. I would spam every nice word existing here in this review because this books deserves it. I love the characters, their building archs, and the style of writing is incredible, too :) It's genuinely a pleasure reading it and I'm very glad the first book is being released and as well continued. Can't wait to see what happens further on :)

Awesomeness.

 

Daphne
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A Brilliant Gem of Royalroad

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Seven

Loved the story, simply adored it. Such a wonderful combination of action, fantasy and romance. A pure work of art. 

The characters are amazing, forget the leads who are amazing themselves but the side characters too, so so interesting. 

Loved the setting and the concept of magic too, the soul-bonding gives it a whole another meaning. 

Loved the huge chapter lengths too. Totally kept me hooked for 2 days straight. 

All in all, a quality work, would definitely recommend it to anyone on this site. Definitely one of the finest works here! 

pyroxcat
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I will be honest, I didn't like the cover or the name of the novel and was very hesitant about starting this novel... but as they say, don't judge a book by its cover. You can really see that apply here.

From the start to the point I am at currently I just couldn't stop reading. The way the story is told and the way the characters interact with each other is just unbelievable. Every character seems to have their own back story, their own way of seeing the world. I loved it very much.

This novel almost feels like a real book but isn't as heavy but at the same time isn't like light(junk food novels). The author is really good at telling the story, you are never left behind which I loved as well. Everything is simple yet complicated enough to keep the readers interested. 

I can honestly say that this is one of those underrated and underappreciated novels in RR(Not by much but still), I was rather surprised that this novel didn't make it to the top 5 list of novels right now. 

Finally, all I just want to say is well-done sir. You have created a really amazing piece of work. 

Denroz
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This story is head and shoulders above the rest that I’ve read on this website. 

It honestly reads and flows just as well as a high fantasy novel that you might pick up from a local bookstore. 

The story trajectory, settings, and character development are done very well.

Highly recommend reading this one!