Knight and Smith

by FirstKnight

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Secrets once thought lost are coming to light...

Orin, a young thief turned mercenary, is returning to his home for the first time in four years. Orin wants nothing more than to reconnect with his family and settle down in the city he loves, but fate is fickle and has another destiny in mind for the swordsman.

Now bound to the Princess of the Realm in ways he doesn't fully understand, Orin finds himself thrust into the world of Nobility, where no one can be truly trusted and his friends are few and far between.

To ensure his survival, and that of the entire Kingdom, Orin must learn to harness the power of a Knight and work with the Princess Elora to protect those they both love, all while dealing with psychotic Knights, a mad King and Elora's own protectors.

Well, if nothing else, I'm sure it will be an adventure.


The Sword of Stars: Book one of the Knight and Smith Saga is now available on Amazon!

This is one of the ideas I've been working on for a while and wanted to see how far I can go with it.

There's nothing really original here, just something fun I wanted to explore a bit more.

Chapters will be posted once a week on Friday at five pm GMT.

Thank you for reading and I hope that you enjoy Knight and Smith!

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Ema
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An incredibly well written story with living 3-dimensional characters and a magic system which is not only unique but engaging.

Unknowingly I find myself drawn back to this story day after day, waiting impatiently for another release.

Keep up the great work, I wouldn't mind buying this book on Kindle when it's finished!

Sincerely,

One of your silent followers.

to do
Overall

Writing is great, prose is on point(if a mite overly flowery at times), grammar and spelling is perfect.

The setting is vivid and easy to picture and the world-building seems to have some depth

The plot progresses at a natural pace and never gets too dull or too quick.

The magic system is unique and interesting.

With all that said though, the reason for the meh rating is that I just can't bring myself to enjoy reading about the main plot point of the entire story, the "Bond".

To me personally reading about the development of a relationship whose entire foundation is predicated on mind control is just not compelling.

It's obvious that the author put some effort into establishing that the MC still has some self-control and that he can somewhat separate his own feelings from the psychic shenanigans but when it colours every major interaction that occurs between the MC and the female lead it's just too much to ignore.

I don't like having to question every word out of a characters mouth and wonder whether an action is taken just because of magical mind buggery.

Obviously given the prevalence of this sort of thing in romantic fiction and the amazing ratings this has it's not a popular opinion, but that's just me, and I rate based on enjoyment more than anything.

Jazehiah
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A bit cliche, but in a good way

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty One

This novel does not fit the Royal Road mold. It is not a portal fantasy. It does not include a system. It does not have a vastly overpowerd main character who can do no wrong. That is the reason I picked it up.

Knight and Smith is a low fantasy teenage romance where people called "smiths" fuse with their chosen "knight" to give the knight superpowers. The story plays on the traditional rift between the upper and lower classes. It follows the "boy meets girl, and extenuating circumstances force them together," cliche. It even follows the  "plucky teenagers against the world," and "MC has a rare power" tropes.

Tropes are not a bad thing. Many novels use tropes and cliches to replace the story. In this case, they help to tell the story. They're used so audiences can get a bit comfortable, and have a rough idea of what choices the characters are going to face. When using tropes, the characters have to be the driving forces. And, the author has reasonably complex characters.

The main "love rival," Duke Cellus is very hard to hate. He genuinely cares about Elora. He does not suddenly reveal himself as a jealous and possessive jerk hell-bent on ousting Orin, just because he can't have "his" princess. He does not suddenly become a different person just because of some extenuating circumstances. Cellus is just a guy trying to figure out what to do now that his fiance is now technically required to marry someone else. Well, it's more complicated than that, but that's my whole point. All the characters are written like that.

The author has also managed to strike a very nice balance between flowery descriptions, world-building, backstory, and actual plot. There are a few places that are exposition-heavy, but they're worked in fairly organically. Even with all the descriptions, I cannot think of a single time where I wanted to yell "show don't tell," at the author. That is a feat.

If I have one nitpick, it's the grammar. The author uses spellcheck, but there are usually one or two malapropisms in each chapter (except in place of accept, whose instead of who's, etc.) along with some misplaced commas. It can be jarring at times. Thankfully, they've become less frequent as the novel has gone on.

Finally, it is very hard to talk about this novel without talking about the magic system of "knights and smiths." The complications of this magic system are what drive the plot. To me, that is the mark of a very good system, and I want to commend the author for it.

Overall, I'd give this story a 4.5/5. It's not perfect, but it is very good. A few minor touches to catch the grammar bugs, and I'd give it a 5. I will be watching this story with interest.

Bookman
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Read it you wont regret it

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Five

I read until the current chapter thinking of going to the authors Pantreon afterwards.
.....
Only to find out there isnt one.

Now im sitting here on a cliffhanger unable to read the next chapter.


This Story is so dam good. It like a oasis in the ocean of medicore wirtting on this site.
I belive the first arc is coming to a close soon and its so dam well done.
Beliveble characters and their motives.
Side characters that have goals and dreams on their own and dont just exist for the Main character.

In time i will write a more in deph review but for now im just saying this:
"Read it you wont regret it"

123whothatbe
Overall

I'd say this is professional level and could easily be published as is, its all round impressive in every aspect. My initial impression was that it would cliched and possibly cringey; it should be - if it was written by anyone else maybe. The author executes everything so well that they've proven why some of the story elements became cliche in the first place, because they can be done right; if written by the right author. This is defintely the right author.

As an addition the characters are where this story excels in my mind. Seriously impressive, considering how fast paced the story feels.

posiedon11
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I'm not big on reviews so this will be short.

like what I read so far. No comments on pacing, story, grammer and what not.

Only thing I hope for is that the author doesn't resort to me having to learn a new dictionary with words regarding to the smiths and knights.

blobofblobs
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Grammar - some minor typoes here and there, but great.

Story - sometimes a little predictable since I've read thousands of books and understand foreshadowing and tropes/cliches, but still excellent and enjoyable.

Characters - well-developed, emotional, tug at your heart or make you feel heartsick for someone no longer in your life. Ouch.

Style - excellent. A different take on magic or supernatural abilities, and a thoughtfully-made world.

 

Personally, I root for Tess and Orin, though I know Elora is first. I want everyone to be happy, that's the problem. Even if it means technically making a harem of 2 wives for Orin. Who cares, as long as everyone's truly happy and not sad, jealous or hurt?

 

I love the story and want more, more, more! It's a great way to fill time, to relax, to get some feels, or get some action(the violence kind, not sexual. So far, and probably never).

 

There's some humor and jokes sprinkled in, not too much and not too little, though that's a bit subjective.

 

If you miss someone, were recently heartbroken, or something like that, I both do and don't recommend you read this. It'll make you feel heartsick to the point of nausea, but it'll also help you process those emotions a bit.

Impulsive Monkey
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I honestly don't know how you'd be able to give this story anything but a 5. This is one of the best on RR.

Charcters; The charcters are all their own people and each have their own characterization. The main character doesn't really fit into any trope and none of the others really do either. Actions in the past have had consequences in the present and most the charcters have interconnecting backstories. (For now at least because we are in the home city)

Story: There's a story there but it's unique enough that you honestly don't know what will be happening the next chapter.

Grammar: The grammar is great too. Only very minor errors that are hardly noticeable unless you're a grammar freak.

Style: His writing style changes for each character that is being followed. A douchebag of a nobles Chapter is written completely differently then the one for the main character and you can feel it.

Great story and you should give it a chance if you're doubtful.

this needs to be at 200 words now for some fucking reason so I'm just going to be typing random shit to reach it.

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Techman
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Early in the story yet, but I'm already hooked. This is hands down some of the best writing I've seen anywhere, not just on RR. We're talking better than most professional novels I've read.

Style is excellent. Like I said, professional author quality. Good details, good pacing, good everything. After reading the first big fight scene, my heart was pounding and I was full of adrenaline. The world building is slowly unfolding. We don't really know much about how magic works yet, but it's clear that we will learn about it as the MC does.

Story hasn't gone very far yet, just about barely caught up to where the synopsis leaves off. But I see lots of juicy story hooks being set up, so I'll give it 5 stars for now.

Grammar is perfect. See Style for more raving about the writing.

Characters are fascinating and have depth. Our MC has a good heart, but is flawed and is very rough around the edges. There's lots of opportunity for further character growth for both him and the others around him.

All in all, this is a fantastic read that has me desperate for more. I'm so glad that I stumbled across it today. It should hit Trending no sweat. I heartily recommend this story.

BlankUsername
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Don't do reviews often so I'll keep it short. 

Interesting characters and world, original ideas implemented well. Characters are more than 2d caricature's of people and the story and plot is engaging. 

Has some minor SPAG issues but nothing that interrupts reading pace. I highly encourage you to read this story. Even if you prefer to stick to bread and butter litRPG's this probably has something for you.