Knight and Smith
Secrets once thought lost are coming to light...
Orin, a young thief turned mercenary, is returning to his home for the first time in four years. Orin wants nothing more than to reconnect with his family and settle down in the city he loves, but fate is fickle and has another destiny in mind for the swordsman.
Now bound to the Princess of the Realm in ways he doesn't fully understand, Orin finds himself thrust into the world of Nobility, where no one can be truly trusted and his friends are few and far between.
To ensure his survival, and that of the entire Kingdom, Orin must learn to harness the power of a Knight and work with the Princess Elora to protect those they both love, all while dealing with psychotic Knights, a mad King and Elora's own protectors.
Well, if nothing else, I'm sure it will be an adventure.
The Sword of Stars: Book one of the Knight and Smith Saga is now available on Amazon!
This is one of the ideas I've been working on for a while and wanted to see how far I can go with it.
There's nothing really original here, just something fun I wanted to explore a bit more.
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What a treat of a story. Forget Isekai standards, this story is an incredible implementation of a fantasy swordsman and his story.
The style is clean and progresses the story nicely each chapter. There are a few POV switches, but only between a few key recurring characters, and each switch provides important information without rehashing the same scene over and over.
Almost flawless. I have noticed a few instances of the wrong word being used (fair vs fare I have seen at least twice), but these are inconsequantial and extremely rare. Spelling and sentence structure have been great, and there are no problems that interrupt the reading experience.
The story is gripping. Between wanting to know more about the core magical concepts, wanting to know more about the characters, and wanting to see what unexpected (yet reasonable or feasible in hindsight) event happens next, each chapter is exciting to open.
The 2 main characters are largely written as realistic, "knows their place in life" characters. Both have a streak of fatalism, knowing what to expect from their circumstances and not whining when said circumstances treat them poorly. But both are optimistic and strong and unafraid to take the actions required of them. Most of all though, the list of named and relevant characters has been kept trimmed down, allowing readers to keep up with all (or most) of the names thrown at them in different perspectives. Truly, this is a treat, given how many stories tend to bloat with extras.
I am writing this review at chapter 17. While this is a low chapter count, it is also 500 pages in, which is more than enough content to know the story is fantastic and worth reading. Current release pace is twice a week. Chapter size is large enough that even if the author drops to once a week in the future the story should continue to move briskly.
This is quite possibly the most Young Adult Fantasy story I have ever read.
It takes all the tropes and plotlines that YA is often made fun of for, and then writes a story out of it. It throws no surprises and is about the most generic story one could imagine. But it is competently written.
This is the the epitome of YA. YA condensed into a story.
Take that how you will.
This is awesome. The world building, characters, the plot is all well written and engaging.
The only complaint I have is that the author seems to have done zero research on medieval combat (sadly, a very common error). Examples: people who fight for a living are for some reason going into battle armed only with a sword, that they use with one hand only and can't be bothered to bring a shield. They wear "leather" and there are several mentions of swords being so heavy that they couldn't be lifted or so heavy that they were equal in weight to small women (though still not large enough to be used with two hands). Author, please realize that your sword are at least 20 times heavier than they would be in reality!
The world this author builds is, even with the low amount of chapters released until now, quite frankly amazingly beautiful.
I started reading and was drawn in with the first paragraph and could not stop until I was finished with the seventh chapter (latest release at time of review) and I look forward to whatever the author has in store for us next.
- The grammar is, as far as I can tell, perfect. I did not notice a single error when I read it. (I have to confess not having the best eye for grammar mistakes and spelling errors, since english is not my first language and I tend to get absorbed in good stories, like this one)
- His writing style paints a picture of the world so vivid as if you yourself were right in that moment, living the story.
- I love the story up until now and I hope it stays that way.
- The characters are (up until now) fleshed out, with their own goals, wishes and dreams, but we will have to see if they develop further (with the quality of the story, i have no doubt they will)
I can easly picture myself buying this as a hardcopy, the first few chapters have completely convinced me of that fact.
So here we have a classic story of the princess and the pauper and the dragon that needs slaying and the jealous world that interferes and thereby helps the dragon.
Good rousing stuff overall: death and grit and adversity and the possibility of a HEA. At times it is told with admirable pace, at times we are made to wade through neverending dialogue and sentences that are just too long. God do I hate those sentences.
The hero and mostly narrator of this story is an orphan, a street-rat, a mercenary. Yet he waxes lyrical about every shite. I had to jump to the next chapter at times when the pressure of all this wrongness was just too much for my ADHD.
The Princess had confirmed, in no uncertain terms, a few days ago that I was safe as long as I was Bonded with her, reinforcing what Yale had told me during our short meeting.
I pushed myself upright with a single finger, smelling the clear air that washed down from the distant White Peaks and the feeling of the wind brushing against my skin. I could clearly see the flat plains that surrounded the wagons of the band, so beautiful despite their simplicity, devoid of tree's and shrubbery, but the blades of tall grass rustling against each other was something of a symphony to my ears. What a rush.
Stylistically poor and grammatically suspect - not good, sorry. This is the norm, not the exception. The wordiness smothers the story at times and unfortunately it is not an elegant juggling of words and constructions. It reminds me a bit of Stevie Wonder songs (without the genius) where you want to beg him to finish it already, but no such luck. The princess tells him at some stage that he speaks better than most people in the palace: somebody flog her tutors for me.
I'm not that struck by the characters and the MC is a hard, gritty ponderer?
Is it worth 4*? It is for RR. If this were a published piece I'd give it 2* at the moment.
I am aware that I am for outside the throng of steadfast admirers and expect a lot of thumbs down.
There are certain parts of the story that I'm quite impressed with. Unfortunately, I can't help but feel the flaws tarnish the whole.
My main issue is the plot, some bits of it feel unrealistic and forced, though, I admit most of my dislike is of where the story has gone.
Style is an issue as the author is far to fond of info-dumps in the form of exposition or the more rare info-dump in form of dialogue. There is also the odd turn of phrase, which always stops me from reading and start considering editing.
Characters seem inconsistent in parts. I find myself expecting some characters to act in certain ways based on previous actions only to be confused when they don't.
Grammar is alright overall, but does need some touch ups.
Great story so far! The backstory for our MC has been interesting and realistic, the characters have understandable goals and ambitions and their decisions make sense. This story has been wonderful to read and I'm looking forward to reading future chapters. The author has done a marvelous job in creating a unique story that is understandable from the beginning.
It's pretty good. Not much more to say besides keep it up author. Supporting evidence for my opinion you can find by reading the story. I will say it's not pushing any big boundaries but I don't think you're on Royal Road for the next classic. Gotta get to 50 words. Hurrrrrrrhhhhhhh. Power Overwhelmingly!
This story does in a handful of chapters what many authors struggle to do with hundreds. The characters are all believably flawed with enough depth to them that keeps them both sympathetic and likable. No self insert MC's/Dead eyed waifu's to be seen here! I'm very impressed with how the author handles introspection, we are given very clear insights into the protagonists head without losing too much of the word count to whatever is going on in their head. Again I will say that a lot happens in this story very quickly.
The world that has been created has a real history and texture to it even though we have only glimpsed a very small part of the world. This is also due to change as at the time of this review we are about to take out first steps outside of the city where the initial action takes place.
The plot moves quickly, effortlessly straddling a fine line between being fast paced without feeling rushed. The characters actions are all consistent with their established personalities, and nobody really commits stupid actions to manufacture suspense.
The writing style is good maintaining excellent grammar and sentence structure whilst showing strong signs of being thought out well in advance.
The concept isn't all that ground breaking, (the whole Smith and Knight concept feels very anime) and the antagonists plots do feel a little simplistic at times but it is all so wonderfully executed that all of this can be forgiven. So far there are no dead chapters or filler content, just a strong cohesive story that deserves a shot.
My only criticism is that this story feels more like an actual novel than a web serial and I can only pray that the author continues to maintain this kind of quality as the story grows both in word count and complexity.
I love how you flesh out your side characters. The story has me at the edge of my seat wanting more. The best new story I have seen in a while! God how I wish there were more chapters already, but I guess ill just have to stay a while :)
Could not recommend it enough and I look forward to seeing you at the top of ongoing fictions soon!