Knight and Smith

Knight and Smith

by FirstKnight

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Secrets once thought lost are coming to light...

Orin, a young thief turned mercenary, is returning to his home for the first time in four years. Orin wants nothing more than to reconnect with his family and settle down in the city he loves, but fate is fickle and has another destiny in mind for the swordsman.

Now bound to the Princess of the Realm in ways he doesn't fully understand, Orin finds himself thrust into the world of Nobility, where no one can be truly trusted and his friends are few and far between.

To ensure his survival, and that of the entire Kingdom, Orin must learn to harness the power of a Knight and work with the Princess Elora to protect those they both love, all while dealing with psychotic Knights, a mad King and Elora's own protectors.

Well, if nothing else, I'm sure it will be an adventure.


This is one of the ideas I've been working on for a while and wanted to see how far I can go with it.

There's nothing really original here, just something fun I wanted to explore a bit more.

Chapters will be posted once a week on Sundays at five pm GMT.

Thank you for reading and I hope that you enjoy Knight and Smith!

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 616,386
  • Average Views :
  • 9,483
  • Followers :
  • 3,198
  • Favorites :
  • 907
  • Ratings :
  • 1,076
  • Pages :
  • 2,139
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
FirstKnight

FirstKnight

Achievements
Word Count (15)
500,000 Views
1st Anniversary
3,000 Followers
75 Comments
Top List #50
Advertisement
Remove
Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter One ago
Chapter Two ago
Chapter Three ago
Chapter Four ago
Chapter Five ago
Chapter Six ago
Chapter Seven ago
Chapter Eight ago
Chapter Nine ago
Chapter Ten ago
Chapter Eleven ago
Chapter Twelve ago
Chapter Thirteen ago
Chapter Fourteen ago
Chapter Fifteen ago
Chapter Sixteen ago
Chapter Seventeen ago
Chapter Eighteen ago
Chapter Nineteen ago
Chapter Twenty ago
Chapter Twenty One ago
Chapter Twenty Two ago
Chapter Twenty Three ago
Chapter Twenty Four ago
Chapter Twenty Five ago
Chapter Twenty Six ago
Chapter Twenty Seven ago
Book Two: Prologue ago
Book Two: Chapter One ago
Book Two: Chapter Two ago
Book Two: Chapter Three ago
Book Two: Chapter Four ago
Book Two: Chapter Five ago
Book Two: Chapter Six ago
Book Two: Chapter Seven ago
Book Two: Chapter Eight ago
Book Two: Chapter Nine ago
Book Two: Chapter Ten ago
Book Two: Chapter Eleven ago
Book Two: Chapter Twelve ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirteen ago
Book Two: Chapter Fourteen ago
Book Two: Chapter Fifteen ago
Book Two: Chapter Sixteen ago
Book Two: Chapter Seventeen ago
Book Two: Chapter Eighteen ago
Book Two: Chapter Nineteen ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty One ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Two ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Three ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Four ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Five ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Six ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Seven ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Eight ago
Book Two: Chapter Twenty Nine ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty One ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty Two ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty Three ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty Four ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty Five ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty Six ago
Book Two: Chapter Thirty Seven ago

Leave a review

drakan_glasses BE NICE! Fair critique is fair, but be respectful & follow the review rules. There will be no mercy.
Reviews
Sort by:
Blah64
Overall

This is quite possibly the most Young Adult Fantasy story I have ever read.

It takes all the tropes and plotlines that YA is often made fun of for, and then writes a story out of it.  It throws no surprises and is about the most generic story one could imagine.  But it is competently written.

This is the the epitome of YA.  YA condensed into a story.

Take that how you will.

Stillness
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

There are certain parts of the story that I'm quite impressed with. Unfortunately, I can't help but feel the flaws tarnish the whole.

My main issue is the plot, some bits of it feel unrealistic and forced, though, I admit most of my dislike is of where the story has gone.

Style is an issue as the author is far to fond of info-dumps in the form of exposition or the more rare info-dump in form of dialogue. There is also the odd turn of phrase, which always stops me from reading and start considering editing.

Characters seem inconsistent in parts. I find myself expecting some characters to act in certain ways based on previous actions only to be confused when they don't.

Grammar is alright overall, but does need some touch ups.

My main issue is that what was a story about a mercenary coming home after years at war to provide for his orphanage and protect his family has turned into some sort of political romace drama. I personally find all the political manuvering uninteresting and would have perfered if the princess could have just unbonded Orin. He could be rewarded with or go on to find a different smith. Instead, the princess, who claims to love her fiance but doesn't really show it after bonding Orin, seems to be growing ever closer to Orin. Maybe the author will pull a fast one and it'll all be platonic, but curcumstances seem aranged just so that they won't be able to break their bond and will stay married. I've never been a fan of NTR and I'm honestly unintereted in the princess as a character as it is.

 

Krischan
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Less would be oh so much better

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty One

So here we have a classic story of the princess and the pauper and the dragon that needs slaying and the jealous world that interferes and thereby helps the dragon.

Good rousing stuff overall: death and grit and adversity and the possibility of a HEA. At times it is told with admirable pace, at times we are made to wade through neverending dialogue and sentences that are just too long. God do I hate those sentences.

The hero and mostly narrator of this story is an orphan, a street-rat, a mercenary. Yet he waxes lyrical about every shite. I had to jump to the next chapter at times when the pressure of all this wrongness was just too much for my ADHD.

The Princess had confirmed, in no uncertain terms, a few days ago that I was safe as long as I was Bonded with her, reinforcing what Yale had told me during our short meeting.

I pushed myself upright with a single finger, smelling the clear air that washed down from the distant White Peaks and the feeling of the wind brushing against my skin. I could clearly see the flat plains that surrounded the wagons of the band, so beautiful despite their simplicity, devoid of tree's and shrubbery, but the blades of tall grass rustling against each other was something of a symphony to my ears. What a rush.

Stylistically poor and grammatically suspect - not good, sorry. This is the norm, not the exception. The wordiness smothers the story at times and unfortunately it is not an elegant juggling of words and constructions. It reminds me a bit of Stevie Wonder songs (without the genius) where you want to beg him to finish it already, but no such luck. The princess tells him at some stage that he speaks better than most people in the palace: somebody flog her tutors for me.

I'm not that struck by the characters and the MC is a hard, gritty ponderer?

Is it worth 4*? It is for RR. If this were a published piece I'd give it 2* at the moment.

I am aware that I am for outside the throng of steadfast admirers and expect a lot of thumbs down.

 

 

 

redria7
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

*update*

Current chapter is book 2, chapter 7. The author has dropped to 1 chapter a week. The extra chapters are missed, but story progress is still solid. 

Complaints and "plot holes" from book 1 have been largely and naturally addressed over the early parts of book 2. The author continues to deliver a high quality story. For anyone wondering if the story has had staying power - it has!

*end update*


What a treat of a story. Forget Isekai standards, this story is an incredible implementation of a fantasy swordsman and his story.

Style

The style is clean and progresses the story nicely each chapter. There are a few POV switches, but only between a few key recurring characters, and each switch provides important information without rehashing the same scene over and over.

Grammar

Almost flawless. I have noticed a few instances of the wrong word being used (fair vs fare I have seen at least twice), but these are inconsequantial and extremely rare. Spelling and sentence structure have been great, and there are no problems that interrupt the reading experience.

Story

The story is gripping. Between wanting to know more about the core magical concepts, wanting to know more about the characters, and wanting to see what unexpected (yet reasonable or feasible in hindsight) event happens next, each chapter is exciting to open.

Characters

The 2 main characters are largely written as realistic, "knows their place in life" characters. Both have a streak of fatalism, knowing what to expect from their circumstances and not whining when said circumstances treat them poorly. But both are optimistic and strong and unafraid to take the actions required of them. Most of all though, the list of named and relevant characters has been kept trimmed down, allowing readers to keep up with all (or most) of the names thrown at them in different perspectives. Truly, this is a treat, given how many stories tend to bloat with extras.

Disclaimer

I am writing this review at chapter 17. While this is a low chapter count, it is also 500 pages in, which is more than enough content to know the story is fantastic and worth reading. Current release pace is twice a week. Chapter size is large enough that even if the author drops to once a week in the future the story should continue to move briskly.

to do
Overall

Writing is great, prose is on point(if a mite overly flowery at times), grammar and spelling is perfect.

The setting is vivid and easy to picture and the world-building seems to have some depth

The plot progresses at a natural pace and never gets too dull or too quick.

The magic system is unique and interesting.

With all that said though, the reason for the meh rating is that I just can't bring myself to enjoy reading about the main plot point of the entire story, the "Bond".

To me personally reading about the development of a relationship whose entire foundation is predicated on mind control is just not compelling.

It's obvious that the author put some effort into establishing that the MC still has some self-control and that he can somewhat separate his own feelings from the psychic shenanigans but when it colours every major interaction that occurs between the MC and the female lead it's just too much to ignore.

I don't like having to question every word out of a characters mouth and wonder whether an action is taken just because of magical mind buggery.

Obviously given the prevalence of this sort of thing in romantic fiction and the amazing ratings this has it's not a popular opinion, but that's just me, and I rate based on enjoyment more than anything.

Beaste01
Overall

I read a great deal of fantasy fiction, normally accessed through a certain multinational online retailer. This is much better written, more original and better edited than many of the officially published products. Love the chapter notes from the author too. Nice to get an insight into how they see it.  I've read the whole story in three days and can't wait for the next bit!

John Jungman
Overall

Review may include spoilers up to Book 2.

Updated at early book two. Agree with one of the top reviews.

YA fantasy in a nutshell, complete with hard-won romance, much proving oneself, and power-ups, with the MC's particular variant being distinguished by hidden darkness and edginess. And of course, the MC is the One, born to Uncertain Parents and raised an orphan, with Something Different about him by dint of Blood, Birth, and Line ala the Dramatic Exposition Reveal by the Surrogate Mother Figure who Knew All Along.

Plenty of angst and action, growth and gyration. A dash of a hint of upcoming sexy-times, likely skipped with a fade-to-black and subsequent teasing with many-a red dusting on the main pair's cheeks.

Pretty well-written prose-wise. Characters easy to root for, at least until the end of Book 1, though plenty of bitter undertones to many of the interactions to reveal a general underlying youthful cynicism.

All in all, not a bad read - definitely in the 90th percentile on this site overall quality-wise.

Garretty101
Overall

Great story that’s not another Litrpg

Reviewed at: Chapter Twenty Four

Very enjoyable read. I like how the smiths and knights magic work and can't wait to learn more about it. It's also written well which is something I really appreciate it though I can look past it if the story's good. One thing I'm not really a fan of is the some of the romance elements between our two main characters. 

Shunji
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

The world this author builds is, even with the low amount of chapters released until now, quite frankly amazingly beautiful.

I started reading and was drawn in with the first paragraph and could not stop until I was finished with the seventh chapter (latest release at time of review) and I look forward to whatever the author has in store for us next.

- The grammar is, as far as I can tell, perfect. I did not notice a single error when I read it. (I have to confess not having the best eye for grammar mistakes and spelling errors, since english is not my first language and I tend to get absorbed in good stories, like this one)

- His writing style paints a picture of the world so vivid as if you yourself were right in that moment, living the story.

- I love the story up until now and I hope it stays that way.

- The characters are (up until now) fleshed out, with their own goals, wishes and dreams, but we will have to see if they develop further (with the quality of the story, i have no doubt they will)

 

I can easly picture myself buying this as a hardcopy, the first few chapters have completely convinced me of that fact.

Whynd
Overall

I had high hopes for this story...  What's not to like about a "hero/MC" that's well intentioned and just wants to "do the right thing"?  Then the hero "rescues" the princess, so far we're good...but that's where the story starts to slide.

The writing and grammar structure are a cut above without doubt.  The story progression is what's totally killed this story for me...I say that because the story progresses, but the characters don't seem to keep pace.  Oh sure, they change for a while then immediately revert back to their previous selves creating a constant yo-yo of character growth that always seems to land them back where they started, a couple of immature children who just can't seem to grow up, bullying a guy who just wanted to do right by his family but ended up entangled with a highschool drama queen and an emotionally unstable child.  Couple that with scenes of domestic abuse played off with an "oops, I didn't mean for that to happen", and a whole lot of character interactions that just don't play out like that outside the halls of a highschool...it's no wonder there's no character growth, there's not much potential for it...  Sorry, I'm trying to suspend my disbelief and let the story be what it is, but I just can't.  I hope the author has some legit character growth planned, things not brought about by bullying, intimidation, and abusive behavior in the place of legitimate relationships.  I hope for the future of this story things get better... but as of this point in the story, things aren't looking too good.