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Book 1: The Legend of Tot

Synopsis:

Claud Primus, a self-declared master thief, has a simple goal. To live forever. It's a rather easy task, for miraculous objects called lifestones are able to extend one's lifespan. These lifestones are best found in the treasuries of nobles, lovely resorts that Claud pays a visit to every so often. Unfortunately, one of those nightly visits go awry, and Claud is forced to escape with just a single lifestone and a box in hand.

Normally, that's when things die down. The guards yawn, the gates close, and the night continues.

But this time, the night isn't that forgiving. A dozen schemes result in the murder of someone important, and with a convenient scapegoat — Claud — at hand, it doesn't take long for him to be framed as a heinous criminal, wanted for the indirect murder of someone high up...and it just gets worse from there.


Book 2: The Moon Lords' Rise

Synopsis:

As ordered chaos sweeps across Licencia, Claud leaves for Julan Barony, intent on making some profits there. Accompanied by the erstwhile heiress of Julan, a fellow member of the Moon Lords, the two plot against the barony's wealth...as well as a promise to bring about its downfall. Meanwhile, back home, the Moon Lords have busied themselves with digesting their gains. Eyes, however, are beginning to turn to this proverbial fish in a small pond.

The fishermen are coming.

When they cast their hook, what will Dia and the others do?


 Book 3: Murders under the Moons

Synopsis:

In the sleepy town of Nachtville, where Claud and Lily are forced to stop at, a set of nasty murders occurs. Victims scream out in fright, before a spear falls from the sky to end their suffering. Cowed and cautious, the master thief and his partner slink in the shadows, their objective that of home...

A new task, however, has fallen on Dia. With a trusty helper at her side, she has to set off towards Nachtville itself, to solve the mystery Claud had abandoned. Faced with an enemy whose sole skillset is geared towards killing, how will they succeed? 

And what dark secrets will they find?


Book 4: In the Dark of the Moons

Synopsis:

The year has ended. The four months of the full moons will soon be followed by two months of the new moons. Duke Istrel's ascension is around the corner.

Amidst this political upheaval, Count Nightfall, Licencia's strongest defender, has been called away. The Moon Lords' largest task yet — to protect Licencia in the absence of its ruler — has begun.  And yet, trouble is unrelenting. A distinguished personage, one that Claud fears, has been found dead in the county, his brains dug out and his body disemboweled. The inquisitors of the White Church have been dispatched to investigate and apprehend the murderer...as well as the person behind this puppet. 

Tormented by a call to fight, Claud directs his eyes out of the city, looking for the puppetmaster. Skulking in the shadows, the master thief will soon confront his greatest foe yet.

A foe just like him.


Book 5: Moonlit Tides and Darkened Seas

Synopsis: A new era has begun. For the privileged, the sands of time dribble away for every passing moment, counting down to the arrival of a entity of mythical proportions. The night now harbours shadows and fog, and operatives of the Moons and the Dark clash in shadow. Claud, as usual, is investigating a spate of nasty disappearances in the city, but little does he know what these disappearances truly mean.

And yet, a tide is coming. When it finally breaks, what will he do?


Book 6: Secrets in Shadow

Synopsis: The person behind a strike that would enter the annals of history flees his home, bringing with him the person closest to his heart into a new land and into a new world. Having left Istrel for the first time in his life, the two of them attempt to settle down in foreign lands, only to be caught in the middle of hostilities between two mighty powers grappling for dominion. 

Yet, none of that has anything to do with him. Following his desires, Claud eventually makes his way to the fabled Celestia Ruins, a fragment of another world. Bearing witness to truths he cannot yet comprehend, he returns from his exploration, a small break away from the machinations of destiny.  One thing, however, is for certain. 

Destiny will not wait for him.


Book 7: Reddest Rage

Synopsis: Destiny churns on, heedless of mortal machinations, and Claud watches as the battlegrounds between the Moons and the Dark are drawn up. With the forces of the great Dark occupying Lostfon, Claud comes to a startling realisation — that he may have very well be a murderer of heinous proportions. Grappling with that realisation, he struggles to prepare for his Second Tutorial...

Back in Istrel, Dia finds herself confronted with a perennial truth. Even in a time of writhing destiny, the machinations between nobles never cease to end — and unfortunately for her, the group once known as the Moon Lords are forced into dealing with a petty squabble between two counts. What they didn't account for, however, was the startling discovery they would soon make...

And the shadow of the Red God's Holy Son behind it all.


Book 8: Darkness Descends

Synopsis: Nightmares haunt the horizon as Claud sinks and awakens from a seeming dream. What was once illusory begins to play out before him, in a way he cannot imagine. Dia, forced to wield arms, begins and ends a battle that opens her eyes to the vast dangers that lurk in this sundered world. Under the banner of humanity and divinity, she beholds the silent, forgotten protectors of Orb...but there is no forgetting the battle between the divinities.  

The Dark descends, the Moons writhe, and the horns of war blow once more.

But this is not their battle.

Not yet.


Book 9: Moons Muster

Synopsis: As more and more events fall into place, Claud finds himself desperate. Not for himself, but for the person who has turned into his world. Armed with the knowledge of a certain future, he approaches the only person that could possibly help him in his time of need, trading information for a promise of help. With that as solace, he returns to the grim task of understanding and seeking, revisiting an ancient, shattered fragment of another world...unleashing changes that he never knew was possible.

Back in Istrel, Dia and the others must now navigate around a familiar spirit, who seeks to investigate the death of his master's Bearer. With them as prime suspects, the Seekers of Life must move carefully...but the Coloured Gods are not the only divinities eyeing them closely. The Moons, bristling from repeated defeats, are looking for new recruits, and the Seekers of Life are prime cannon fodder.

Above all, destiny marches on, the unfeeling clock a warning to all.

The Trial of Aeons will soon arrive.


Book 10: Destiny Divine

Synopsis: ???

Release frequency: one every few days or something, I guess.

 

(This work is also being serialised on Webnovel under the name Revile as a trial run)

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Table of Contents
369 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: The smallest heist ever ago
Chapter 2: Re-organisation and return ago
Chapter 3: A Twilight Encounter ago
Chapter 4: The blame game ago
Chapter 5: Closing up ago
Chapter 6: Stealing for the dead ago
Chapter 7: The eccentric bartender ago
Chapter 8: Princess in peril ago
Chapter 9: Crash course ago
Chapter 10: Princess at a pub ago
Chapter 11: Meeting the fakers ago
Chapter 12: The thief's first trace ago
Chapter 13: Spellhounds, suspicions and soldiers ago
Chapter 14: To the City of Trades ago
Chapter 15: Tutorial, start! ago
Chapter 16: Tutorial v.s Master Thief ago
Chapter 17: The master thief who talks to a jiggling box ago
Chapter 18: Forced acquisitions, forced meetings ago
Chapter 19: Adopted? ago
Chapter 20: Triple-D's ultra-pure, flammable water ago
Chapter 21: The ultra-weird Licencia ago
Chapter 22: Natural Selection in Licencia ago
Chapter 23: Planning a baron's end ago
Chapter 24: The exciting streets of the city and a story-teller ago
Chapter 25: Rumours of her escape have been greatly exaggerated... ago
Chapter 26: Tales of Tot ago
Chapter 27: Survivor of a past era? ago
Chapter 28: The Spear of Fate ago
Chapter 29: Odd skills, odder times ago
Chapter 30: The lifestone markets ago
Chapter 31: The thief's hobby ago
Chapter 32: A quick and easy heist ago
Chapter 33: Mana for the masses ago
Chapter 34: Shadows that strike ago
Chapter 35: A non-violent end to a violent confrontation ago
Chapter 36: The thief flaunts with a borrowed purse ago
Chapter 37: Creative applications ago
Chapter 38: Shopping, safety and surpluses ago
Chapter 39: Protection rackets and plans ago
Chapter 40: A very roundabout method ago
Chapter 41: The spear hanging above the City of Trades ago
Chapter 42: The Legend of Tot ago
[Book 2: The Moon Lords’ rise] Chapter 43: The shocked city ago
Chapter 44: The master thief's new life ago
Chapter 45: To lead, conquer and overawe ago
Chapter 46: Clearing the field ago
Chapter 47: The blade, the chain and the one that was spared ago
Chapter 48: The Moon Lords ago
Chapter 49: From one who understands another ago
Chapter 50: The master thief on a shopping trip ago
Chapter 51: Moon Street ago
Chapter 52: Moon Phase — a game of personality and luck! ago
Chapter 53: An unexpected guest joins the one-man party! ago
Chapter 54: In the same bedroom? ago
Chapter 55: Odd incidents, and odder ways of flying ago
Chapter 56: Cooking outdoors... ago
Chapter 57: ...can attract lookalikes that demand food. ago
Chapter 58: Exchanging intelligence with one of the lookalikes ago
Chapter 59: Bombs count as general items? ago
Chapter 60: The distinction between guards ago
Chapter 61: The epic clash in the middle of the street ago
Chapter 62: A shattered memento ago
Chapter 63: The true memento ago
Chapter 64: Novelties, news and national natters ago
Chapter 65: The dirtiest of bar counters ago
Chapter 66: The master thief strikes! ago
Chapter 67: Theft, arson and eavesdropping ago
Chapter 68: The end of a barony ago
Chapter 69: Witness to a robbery ago
Chapter 70: The odd box and a brand new day ago
Chapter 71: The trouble-maker and a new contract ago
Chapter 72: The mansion that took to the skies ago
Chapter 73: The trump cards of the dukedoms ago
Chapter 74: Nachtville once more ago
Chapter 75: Mercenaries in motion ago
Chapter 76: Mornings, mists and meetings ago
Chapter 77: The letter that came from the count ago
Chapter 78: The little harmless envelopes ago
Chapter 79: Of events in motion ago
Chapter 80: Bringing siege weapons to a two-man fight ago
Chapter 81: Flowers in the red moon's night sky ago
Chapter 82: The Moon Lords' Rise ago
Chapter 83: Spear from the sky ago
Chapter 84: Investigators arrive! ago
Chapter 85: Suspicious points and sorrowful partings ago
Chapter 86: The interrogation next door and the undercurrents below ago
Chapter 87: The benefits of being forced... ago
Chapter 88: Irony and responsibility ago
Chapter 89: Reactions ago
Chapter 90: Cornering and cooperation ago
Chapter 91: Of thieves and time ago
Chapter 92: The commotion at the east gate ago
Chapter 93: Awakened ago
Chapter 94: The aftermath ago
Chapter 95: Homeward ago
Chapter 96: The Moon Lords' first assignment ago
Chapter 97: The investigators, onward ago
Chapter 98: Getting to know each other ago
Chapter 99: A father's love is as silent as a mountain ago
Chapter 100: The duo from afar returns to rest ago
Chapter 101: The thief's debriefing ago
Chapter 102: The reason behind the emperor's anger ago
Chapter 103: Wrong process, right answer ago
Chapter 104: Mental Assault ago
Chapter 105: The opening move ago
Chapter 106: Preparations in the night ago
Chapter 107: Settling in ago
Chapter 108: Clairvoyance and countermeasures ago
Chapter 109: The investigators and the reinforcements ago
Chapter 110: The lookalikes cross paths ago
Chapter 111: Counter-measures and commencing capture ago
Chapter 112: Traitor? ago
Chapter 113: Dark clouds upon the mind ago
Chapter 114: The first foray ago
Chapter 115: Last preparations ago
Chapter 116: The inhuman spear-user ago
Chapter 117: The innocuous little bottles ago
Chapter 118: Bonding over the worst of topics ago
Chapter 119: The odd status screen ago
Chapter 120: Names and notions ago
Chapter 121: A triumphant return ago
Chapter 122: Webs of plans ago
Chapter 123: Towards Nightfall Palace ago
Chapter 124: Count Nightfall ago
Chapter 125: A familiar-looking skill name ago
Chapter 126: Absolute Domination? ago
Chapter 127: Sub-folders ago
Chapter 128: Reflection ago
Chapter 129: The Seekers of Truth ago
Chapter 130: The Verdant Interrogator ago
Chapter 131: Memories and confirmation ago
Chapter 132: Stress ago
Chapter 133: Exposed... ago
Chapter 134: A peaceful day ago
Chapter 135: Her first heist ago
Chapter 136: Her own way ago
Chapter 137: Yet another crime ago
Chapter 138: Floating sky ruins ago
(Chapter 139) The trip back home ago
Chapter 140: Back to the city ago
Chapter 141: Countermeasures against contact ago
Chapter 142: The welcome party ago
Chapter 143: A vast sea of doubts ago
Chapter 144: Training the newbies ago
Chapter 145: The broken spear ago
Chapter 146: Murder most foul ago
Chapter 147: The hollowed head and the murderer's motive ago
Chapter 148: The interim ruler of Licencia ago
Chapter 149: The fiancée from Lostfon ago
Chapter 150: Contacting the higher ups ago
Chapter 151: The deacon and the secretary ago
Chapter 152: Case Consolidation ago
Chapter 153: Taboos and inquisitors ago
Chapter 154: The bartender's counsel ago
Chapter 155: Mana Control Proficiency: Intermediate ago
Chapter 156: The coward's way of fighting ago
Chapter 157: The master thief's influence ago
Chapter 158: Suspicious personnel sighted ago
Chapter 159: Schwarz-style interrogation techniques ago
Chapter 160: Inquisitors! ago
Chapter 161: The Cord of Cause ago
Chapter 162: The Knife of Karma ago
Chapter 163: The Holy Daughter's thoughts ago
Chapter 164: Claud's influence ago
Chapter 165: The visit inspired by a skill ago
Chapter 166: Countermeasures against the Third ago
Chapter 167: The bar that opens for the new year ago
Chapter 168: The Moon and the Makers ago
Chapter 169: A story for the new year ago
Chapter 170: Preparing the encirclement ago
Chapter 171: Irrational Aggression ago
Chapter 172: Cause, effect and destiny ago
Chapter 173: The thief's own ambush ago
Chapter 174: The ominous proclamation and a deluge of screens ago
Chapter 175: Legend reborn? ago
Chapter 176: Missions and Bearers ago
Chapter 177: Omen and Understanding ago
Chapter 178: A wild Holy Son appears ago
Chapter 179: In the aftermath of the beginning ago
Chapter 180: In the Dark of the Moons ago
Chapter 181: New Moon's Eve ago
Chapter 182: Odds and ends ago
Chapter 183: The inquisitive Holy Daughter ago
Chapter 184: Blind cats and dead mice ago
Chapter 185: Unwelcome visitors to a foreign county ago
Chapter 186: Preparations to depart ago
Chapter 187: The changing night ago
Chapter 188: A very foggy outlook ago
Chapter 189: The countess and her past ago
Chapter 190: The Lamenter of Sorrowful Partings ago
Chapter 191: A long-awaited chat with family ago
Chapter 192: Daily Life of the Holy Son ago
Chapter 193: Of the three continents ago
Chapter 194: The distress caused by a generous Holy Daughter ago
Chapter 195: A discreet restaurant and a promise of secrets ago
Chapter 196: Foodfights and poems from antiquity ago
Chapter 197: The countess, inbound ago
Chapter 198: The high-spirited countess ago
Chapter 199: The countess' extraordinary means of raising money ago
Chapter 200: Daily life in the new county ago
Chapter 201: Gluttons, guards and gifts ago
Chapter 202: The county at night ago
Chapter 203: Monsters in the market ago
Chapter 204: Monsters in the dark ago
Chapter 205: Changed by the Dark ago
Chapter 206: Courtesies and obligations ago
Chapter 207: A little assignment... ago
Chapter 208: The problematic forest and a heart-to-heart talk ago
Chapter 209: A quiet recounting ago
Chapter 210: Mages in the military ago
Chapter 211: Burning down a forest ago
Chapter 212: Musings, Meatballs and Mysterious Ruins ago
Chapter 213: An explanation about the ruins ago
Chapter 214: Ritual magic, Theatro Animi ago
Chapter 215: Ruler Istrel and Emperor Grandis ago
Chapter 216: Fears for the future ago
Chapter 217: The ruler's imminent arrival ago
Chapter 218: Intimidation ago
Chapter 219: Quirks and questions ago
Chapter 220: The field of bones ago
Chapter 221: The undercurrents that surface ago
Chapter 222: Moon Emissaries ago
Chapter 223: Introducing Crown ago
Chapter 224: Sweeping developments ago
Chapter 225: Back home ago
Chapter 226: Terra Jewels ago
Chapter 227: Contemplations and consultations ago
Chapter 228: Emissary Imminent ago
Chapter 229: His quiet desperation ago
Chapter 230: From one heart to another ago
Chapter 231: The duo's resolve ago
Chapter 232: The duo's duplicitous departure ago
Chapter 233: The singular strike ago
Chapter 234: One's Order ago
Chapter 235: Coincidence? ago
Chapter 236: The killer's identity ago
Chapter 237: Yet another assignment ago
Chapter 238: The mana wagon and the threat of death ago
Chapter 239: How to raise a Holy Son ago
Chapter 240: Conversations on the road ago
Chapter 241: Recreating the attack ago
Chapter 242: Nihila ago
Chapter 243: The undercurrents that surface briefly ago
Chapter 244: One's Order (2) ago
Chapter 245: The bundled package of house and identity ago
Chapter 246: Cover identities ago
Chapter 247: Warnings ago
Chapter 248: Murkier and murkier ago
Chapter 249: Collective seclusion ago
Chapter 250: The old trade ago
Chapter 251: The events that day ago
Chapter 252: The status screen from another world ago
Chapter 253: Discussing professions ago
Chapter 254: Equals, not followers ago
Chapter 255: The invading shadows ago
Chapter 256: The lull caused by an explosive lance ago
Chapter 257: Conscription and confiscation ago
Chapter 258: Count Lostfon ago
Chapter 259: The world adrift and the peace within ago
Chapter 260: The triumphant return from an aborted war ago
Chapter 261: A small feast ago
Chapter 262: Pandemic of paranoia ago
Chapter 263: Moments of contemplation ago
Chapter 264: Preparing for the ruins ago
Chapter 265: The Celestia Ruins Exploration Package ago
Chapter 266: Dreams and Ruins ago
Chapter 267: Celestia Ruins and a weird graveyard ago
Chapter 268: Cross-referencing statuses ago
Chapter 269: Deeper into the ruins ago
Chapter 270: Breaking and Entering ago
Chapter 271: Celestia's final moments ago
Chapter 272: Cosmic Geography ago
Chapter 273: A new companion and a new warning ago
Chapter 274: Returning from the ruins ago
Chapter 275: Vast changes ago
Chapter 276: Lostfon's resistance ago
Chapter 277: Secrets in Shadow ago
Chapter 278: The Trial of Aeons ago
Chapter 279: Nightfall's Terra Jewel ago
Chapter 280: The tri-coloured toddlers ago
(TOT) Chapter 281: Dividends and discussing age ago
(TOT) Chapter 282: The ongoing hostilities ago
Chapter 283: Negotiations and reappearing legends ago
Chapter 284: Establishment of neutral ground ago
Chapter 285: The quiet city ago
Chapter 286: Transient peace within lasting turmoils ago
Chapter 287: The Profiteers ago
Chapter 288: Information-gathering and Dark-awaiting ago
Chapter 289: The Second Shadow ago
Chapter 290: Rituals and shadows ago
Chapter 291: A new name? ago
Chapter 292: The Seekers of Life ago
Chapter 293: The count's own petty mission ago
Chapter 294: Qualifications to cause trouble ago
Chapter 295: Departing for Daybreak ago
Chapter 296: The little shadowy toddlers ago
Chapter 297: The hollow sunlight ago
Chapter 298: A startling thought ago
Chapter 299: The dangers of power ago
Chapter 300: Count Lostfon's visit ago
Chapter 301: The Dark Herald ago
Chapter 302: Meeting the great Dark's herald ago
Chapter 303: A new assignment ago
Chapter 304: Daybreak County ago
Chapter 305: Petty pranks... ago
Chapter 306: Oddity in Daybreak County ago
Chapter 307: Prana mines ago
Chapter 308: The thief and the bandits ago
Chapter 309: The "bandits" ago
Chapter 310: The Count and the Herald ago
Chapter 311: Information on the Second Tutorial ago
Chapter 312: A small break and a week's wait ago
Chapter 313: The dome above Daybreak County ago
Chapter 314: Preparing for the enemy ago
Chapter 315: Entering Daybreak ago
Chapter 316: The back and forth with Daybreak ago
Chapter 317: A short rest before the storm ago
Chapter 318: Sudden changes ago
Chapter 319: The dead and the living ago
Chapter 320: Red lights and grey domes ago
Chapter 321: The God of Precision ago
Chapter 322: Bringing in the Moons ago
Chapter 323: The seeming end to a sidetracked mission ago
Chapter 324: Tri-coloured lightning and the reddest radiance ago
Chapter 325: Watching the pursuit ago
Chapter 326: Resolution ago
Chapter 327: The Second Tutorial begins ago
Chapter 328: The Frozen Emperor (1) ago
Chapter 329: The Frozen Emperor (2) ago
Chapter 330: Rimestar and the Frozen Coffin ago
Chapter 331: The last of the original Moon Lords ago
Chapter 332: The dream that lasted two centuries ago
Chapter 333: Outside the dream, and a newfound discovery ago
Chapter 334: Breakfast in Rimestar ago
Chapter 335: The culture formed over two hundred years ago
Chapter 336: The geographical shifts that occurred over two centuries ago
Chapter 337: The one who reminisces, and the one who experiences ago
Chapter 338: One way to survive in a ruined world ago
Chapter 339: The present contemplating the future ago
Chapter 340: The end of the beginning ago
Chapter 341: His resolution ago
Chapter 342: Rewards ago
Chapter 343: Returning home ago
Chapter 344: Clothes, counts and children ago
Chapter 345: Back home ago
Chapter 346: An assassin ago
Chapter 347: Planning a hit ago
Chapter 348: Reencountering the enemy ago
Chapter 349: Murder most foul ago
Chapter 350: Of maggots, madness and men ago
Chapter 351: Limbo and Logia ago
Chapter 352: The omens of a horrifying future ago
(TOT) Chapter 353: Visiting the Lostfon Palace again ago
(TOT) Chapter 354: The expected and the unexpected visit ago
Chapter 355: Istrel, the trade and the hunt ago
Chapter 356: New strikes and new news ago
(TOT) Chapter 357: News about a familiar spirit ago
(TOT) Chapter 358: Anti-familiar spirit measures ago
Chapter 359: Inspiring stories that lead to summary executions ago
Chapter 360: The Eternal Bulwark ago
Chapter 361: Rising cases and shrinking attendees ago
Chapter 362: The talk before Half Moon ago
Chapter 363: Descent ago
Chapter 364: Lesser Half ago
Chapter 365: Diverging from the wrong paths ago
Chapter 366: A quiet memorial ago
Chapter 367: Vast changes and enormous plans ago
Chapter 368: Prelude to an execution ago
Chapter 369: Paintings and portents ago

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First, the Good:

- The writing/editing is much more polished than the majority of the stuff published on RR. I appreciate authors who take the time to proofread their work. 

- I read a lot on RR, and sometimes, it can feel as if there isn't a lot of difference between characters across a lot of the stories here as the characters often have a sense of sameness in that they're blase and kind of jerks. The characters in this story standout as unique individuals.

The Somewhat Good/Somewhat Bad:

- The humor. I much prefer a light-hearted tale to grimdark, and the humor in this story definitely lightens the mood. On the other hand, the comedic aspects didn't really resonate with me, making parts of the story just seem silly. While I like light-hearted, I don't care for silly. Obviously, though, this is a big YMMV element. What I find annoying, you might find hilarious.

The Bad:

- LitRPG lite. If you come to RR looking for LitRPG, you're not going to find the elements in this story satisfying. There's little progression and the system is very minimalistic.

- Unfocused Story. While the characters have clearly defined goals, their plan for reaching their goals is very wishy washy. They switch focus from one thing to the next too easily, and it's not always clear how their current path is supposed to resolve the overall plot.

- Lack of Satisfying Moments. Again YMMV, but while I found the story readable, I didn't find it satisfying. Take for instance the end of the first arc. Another author might have chosen to have drawn out the protagonist's struggle against the Big Bad and really shown off the ingenuity and grit involved. Instead, the whole thing was resolved anticlimatically with a deus ex machina. As a reader, it just wasn't satisfying. To be honest, this type of situation is pretty common for webserials where the authors aren't known as meticulously plotting out ways to manipulate their readers' emotions. For most of the stories that I enjoy, though, I find the progression satisfying enough to keep reading. This story really had nothing for me.

Usually when I find a story to be readable, I reach the end of the posted chapters before making a decision whether to mark it as "Not Interested" or to continue reading later. I ended up stopping reading this one a few chapters early when I realized just how bored I was.

TL;DR - I found this a little too unsatisfying, but the writing is decent quality. Check it out; you may like it a lot more than I did.

King_k
Overall

a good story, held back by lack of ambition.

Reviewed at: Chapter 68: The end of a barony

Its a good story, with deep interesting lore but it lacks ambition. its very slice-of-life, the short term plotlines dont tie into the main overarching story and are very small time, slice-of-life-ey. you may enjoy it for the lore and magic system (which is great) but the plot quickly changes from something cool, to lacking gravitas and is not epic at all. if you like slice-of-life youll enjoy this.

the good:

  • The magic system is unique, amazing and enjoyable
  • the system and skills leads to unique and interesting combinations and makes everyones skills feel important. 
  • the MC's personality and occupation is enjoyable, and great to read
  • him being so far out of his depth but also lucky and improving is great to read about
  • the worlds characters are interesting and unique
  • the MC outwitting his 'betters' is fun, smart & great
  • the underdog, against all odd, genious master thief trying to chase his dream of immortality.

 

i ended up dropping it because the story diverges from the main plot and goes on tangents and short term adventures that pale in comparison to the amazing main plot for lenghty periods of time. the first 5 chapters are the best in the story. after that it goes into things that feel like "filler episodes"

  • in short, the initial story about a masterthief with mysterious skills, who is a bit of a genius, and underdog, in an amazing world, full of interesting skills and characters, having to face things wayyy out of his league.... is abandoned for a much, much, lesser story.

this amazing, unique, fun, top trending level plot.....is completely ignored, the story ends up focusing on boring side-plots and story tangents that do not add to the main plot. its like a ferrari being ignored for a bicycle. it may get better as the plot continues. going to revisit this later because there is a lot of talent here and i think some of the authors later stories should be amazing.

if the whole story was like the first few chapters this couldve been a favourite, as i personally like epic stories. this is held back by a lack of ambition. murder mysteries and empire building is boring to me personally. if you are into slice of life, and empire building, this may be for you. 

 

ThousandOdysseys
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I have given this story a middling score of three stars, because while it is sufficiently entertaining so that it kept boredom away as I read it for the day... it's not such that I feel at all compelled to continue. 
Not to say that I won't continue reading it if I get sufficiently bored enough again. I'm just really very "Meh.." about this one. 

The story and writing style were ok, though I should probably put under these categories, the fact that there were many small inconsistencies. Eg. Día says that she will give him the note book as soon as she gets it off her friends, only to produce it from her pocket to give to him later on in the same shopping trip, and not in a "I forgot I already had it" kind of way, but the author forgot that they already wrote that she didn't have it kind of way. (Many little moments like this) 

Grammer is fine for the most part, but could use some work to just refine the use of words (Not sure if that makes sense sorry, and I can't think of a specific example off the top of my head) Basically work on sentence structure and vocabulary. 

The characters are well thought out for the most part, but in some ways that just makers it more glaring when the are big inconsistencies to them. 


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Such as the MC, who is frequently said to be 1, a survivalist, and 2, someone who will go to great lengths to avoid conflict and violence, just randomly agrees to take out the top mob bosses in the city, and become a mob boss himself..... also, another inconsistency in that scene, was the fact that Día was the one to make the proposition, but by the end, she was the one saying "We accept".. I think it was because he was the one who asked if her friends would join too, and she was speaking as a group, but in that case it should have been "They accepted" because Dia's participation was never the question. 

.... sorry if I rambled, I'm half asleep and going to go all the way asleep now. 

lenkite
Overall

This is a more of a [Comedy] story than a [Fantasy] story but is missing the [Comedy] tag. It starts off pretty good with a great opening chapter and after that drags down into boredom with very little action. The characters are...strange and weird and regularly make irrational decisions. The MC isn't really a [Master Thief] but a happy-go-lucky lifestone-stealing guy who mostly bumbles his way through things thanks to his [OP Skills]. Now His bacon is now being regularly saved by a [OP Magical Box] that also keeps upgrading him. I stopped reading after he and the female MC and her sidekicks suddenly decide to become  [Crime Bosses].

On the plus points, the writing is good. If you can suspend your disbelief and ignore all the strange actions and weirdness of the characters, you might enjoy the story.

gyro42
Overall

What we have is a world that is ruled by corrupt, power-hungry, egomaniacal, sadistic bastards. Dont even think about annoying one of them, let alone actually pissing one off. Dozens of innocents will die if some aristrocrat is in a bad mood while strolling through town. Its a harsh world. A bit unrealistic perhaps, but it is the perfect setting to make a first class felon look like a saint.

I love the characters. I mean sure, some side characters are rather single dimensional, but the main characters are awesome. Im absolutely cheering them on with every chapter. If i were to rate this novel based only on the interactions between the characters, then this would be hands-down first rate work. 

The story is good. Really good. Its clear the author has a talent for this sort of thing. Its mostly a drama broken up with some action and the authors quirky humor. He seems to be a natural at working with the tension to make the story flow.

When it comes down to the details of the plot there are a few issues. A couple of logical inconsistencies. A little forced in places. Some deus ex machina and one super convienent deus ex archa. Overall none of them stand out so much as to detract from the story, but they do exist.

There is a system, but its a super chill system. If youre not really into litRPGs then this might be doable for you. The main isnt the OP type and i seriously doubt there will be power creep issues later on. Its just not one of those stories.

The real travesty and why i say there is no justice is that this story isnt getting any attention. Trust me, it is far more worthy than many of those stories that are getting attention.

  

Mofy
Overall

I had first come across this story when I was looking in the new updates section and I have read over 150 chapters straight. The world building is incredibly detailed and I couldn't help but feel as if it is a real world as I read through the stories. All the characters are real with their own motivations and what drives them, and the protagonist is actually, quite weak, with higher powers he cannot even imagine trying to kill him, and doing his very best to fulfill his humble dream of living forever.

xcares
Overall

Great world-building. Every aspect is being fleshed out through character interaction and the eyes of the cast. There is no wall-of-text forced on the reader.
Both the locales, the ordinary people and the organizations that function there seem natural considering the effect of magic. Wish the author was more descriptive of buildings or clothing etc. How everything is affected by everyday magic and all that.

Characters, both the main two characters and the rest of the "named" cast, are very interesting.Their thought process and actions are consistent and natural. No forced stupidity to further the plot.
One of the reasons this novel shines is the knowing look it gives when it comes to the human psyche. The wry humor of the first chapters that reminds of Terry Pratchett's diskworld series is unfortunately not present later on. More caustic and often cynical humor would really help this novel shine.

When it comes to plot and pacing all i can give is praise. It's a constant flow  of new images of places and people. From fighting assassins to quiet dinners with friends to flying through the clouds, everything is presented at such a steady pace and "density" it's a real treat to read. No fluff or irrelevant stuff to pad the word count in this novel.
No forced encounters to further the plot or deus ex machina saviors (cute "box creature" included.It's not some kind of random character that just happens to save the MC).  It all makes sense considering the world-building and characters.

TLDR
There are a lot of other authors "couple swap" reviews for this novel. While usually that means the novel is some kind of vanity project for the author and a waste of time for the readers....there are exceptions. This was a real treat so far. Well done author. Keep up the good work.

p.s Story really picks up a lot later. Just read chapter 243 and the main plot arc is still ramping up. This is a slow burn type of story. Probably the antithesis of a classic xianxia.

FIEND
Overall

Overall, incredibly well written. The story currently follows a crafty, and intelligent protagonist who is escaping from what seems to have escalated from a petty theivery to nations most wanted for murder. But the way it is written makes the reader feel immersed in this world with magic, unique spells and litrpg setting. The litrpg is also excellent, there are no idiotic blue screens taking up half the page shoving down meaningless numbers down the readers throats. I am suspecting an idiotic romance along the way which I may have to knock some stars down for later especially if it takes away from the story. Each charecter is very well done , very 3D have their own motives and persona. Upto ch 20 thusfar it is a 5/5

Luxmes
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Sub-title: Wait, no, you’re too badass to be Robin Hood

- Style:

The style is full of energy and quick-paced, description, dialogue and thoughts linked flawlessly for an exciting effect. The content of the descriptions, in particular, is very good, giving enough to the reader to immerse properly in the action without creating a flood that would slow the whole pace down.

Another very good point is that the author knows when to tell, when to show, and when to only imply things.

5 out of 5

 

- Grammar:

Nothing to say, zero, nada, niet, rien.

5 out of 5

 

- Story:

The plot kick in right away and the tension is properly managed, the lows and highs flowing just as well as the description supporting them, all with a logical structure without any apparent plotholes.

5 out of 5

 

- Characters:

The MC is described as a thief and, throughout what I read, the author does a great job at building and reinforcing this vision, using details or side thoughts of the character to build him in a natural, yet comprehensive, way.

The second MC, for the tiny amount I’ve read about her, look really promising, by her own character and the interaction she and the thief could create.

5 out of 5

 

- Overall:

A perfectly balanced mix of preparation and action, Thief of Time is a great novel about a master thief following in instinct and stealing life itself from the hand of corrupted nobles.

When even the title of your thief novel is stolen, you can be sure this will be a treat.

5 out of 5

- Stray thoughts :

Seriously, why is this so underrated? This just doesn't have the followers it deserves

I mean, it’s just better than my own novel that hit Trending. I really don’t understand.

Okay but, seriously, this has the exact same name as one of Terry Pratchett, , which really made me laugh when I realised this XD

Welp, that need a proper Romance alright (tho nearly any novel need a proper Romance imo, but this one even more since there's already a proper dynamic that could be grown between the MCs I think)

silentreading
Overall

Great story. Uses a system sparingly and effectively. Giving 5 to make up for another review that gave a low score even though they say its a 5/5.  I would rate the story 4 or 4.5. The only issue is really how implausable the princess side story is. I like the side story a lot, but it feels forced to me. Maybe add in some more plausability by having a culture that is more likely to show respect by mimicry? If there were more people that mimic nobles and named people as a sign of respect, then id be more willing to accept 3 characters that all mimic the princess being in the same inn.... I mean a few references in inns to those Damn noble mimics. Even fads of copying different people's clothing and mannerisms... Or it being common for people to copy their idols skills would drastically increase my ability to believe that the side storys plausability.  Maybe press more into the experienced bootlickers being copy cat specialists or something....Anyway, its a great story. Well worth the time.