Borne of Caution

by Fuggmann

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

NOTE: Currently on Haitus. To return on or before 6/14/2021

An irritated Pokemon might tell you to stop what you're doing. An irritated animal will probably just attack you. Pokemon, for all their power, would be open books and a breeze to care for to any competent animal handler on Earth. After a fiery death, a professional zookeeper who never outgrew Pokemon games ends up in the world of Pokemon. The entire world is thrown onto its side.

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 422,362
  • Average Views :
  • 16,894
  • Followers :
  • 4,757
  • Favorites :
  • 1,473
  • Ratings :
  • 1,409
  • Pages :
  • 594
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
Fuggmann

Fuggmann

Inventor of Sex 2

Achievements
Word Count (12)
10 Comments
4,000 Followers
250,000 Views
Top List #4
Advertisement
Remove

Leave a review

drakan_glasses BE NICE! Fair critique is fair, but be respectful & follow the review rules. There will be no mercy.
Reviews
Sort by:
BedlessSleeper
Overall

**EDIT#2** I'm pretty confused, my review seems to be hitting the wrong notes as it's gotten a lot of dislikes? I'm pretty honest in my review and I'm actually confused as to why people don't agree with it. I feel like what I said made sense but I guess not? If you think there's something wrong with my review or disagree with some points I made, maybe PM me so I can understand why people don't think the way I do? I'm literally the only review with any dislikes at all, and I have 5!

***

I really like the story and how the author has tried to portray the world of pokemon, trying to make things more believable and make sense. The world-building is nice, and I like how although the Main character knows about pokemon events, doesn't go out of his way to try to manipulate them in his favour. He doesn't want to mess with the 'timeline' and just wants to train his pokemon into the best they can be.

**EDIT** I'll try not to spoil much, and try to keep my review based on the early chapters. Please note that I'm bad at saying why I like things, but I tend to focus on negatives a lot. Please don't take this as me hating the story, most of it is nitpicking little things, there's a whole lot I love about the story that I just cant put into words without spoiling.

Without further ado, there is one major issue I have with this novel, and it is something that mainly affects fanfiction stories. The problem is that the author writes the story expecting us readers to have knowledge about Pokemon. What this entails is when a pokemon appears, let's say a Magikarp, the author rarely describes what the Magikarp looks like, what its traits are etc. So for people like me who only know a bit about Pokemon, it's very difficult to picture events and scenes and I have to frequently resort to googling pokemon to get an idea of what it looks like. This is actually a big problem, and it's sometimes frustrating when I have to constantly google what pokemon looks like mid-combat.  

I do really like this story quite a bit, but I really really dislike the author's choice of using present tense in their writing. I personally find it very difficult to read present tense books, as it throws me off, especially when not executed well. In this story, there are many times when the author uses the present tense when they should be using the past tense. E.G, in dialogue, characters sometimes say 'Know' instead of 'Knew'.  I think this just shows inexperience with the writing style, although it does seem to slightly improve along the way. 

I also have some problems with the author forcing plot or character interactions. One of the memorable problems I have is with the early chapters. When our MC was burned and very physically injured by a nuclear explosion, he constantly refuses to go to the hospital. Maybe it's an American thing, but when people have asked you to go to the hospital multiple times maybe you should listen instead of thinking you're absolutely fine after eating a berry. The MC also had his clothing partially destroyed, and ripped some of it off to use as a bandage for his leg. For 3 days, the MC wore the same clothes, and nobody properly questioned him and asked what happened to him, or try to fix him up. The MC, after experiencing a nuclear explosion, doesn't seek to get proper medical attention, never once mentions any potential radiation poisoning, and walks around as nothings happened besides have some PTSD.

I also have a problem with Brendan, the kid. I think he is 12 years old? He has been hugely influenced by our MC, (obviously), but the influence doesn't feel gradual. It feels like Brendan was always like this, when considering his father Birch, doesn't seem to make sense IMO. Brendan seems to swear a lot for a 12-year-old, calling Zinnia a thot. I know he doesn't mean it and all, but I feel like there should have been some hesitation in Brendan using swears like these at the beginning of their journey. Considering Birch is a professor, and has never once used any form of curses, and seems like a very nice person, I doubt Brendan was taught or allowed to say any of these things. I know this is literally nitpicking, but I guess this goes to show how much I like this novel to complain about small things like this.

Well, I've never been good at reviews. I usually just complain like above, but this novel is pretty good. I really like the world building and characters, although I really hate the present tense of the style and there are some things that I feel like the author forces, overall I would recommend this novel to anybody who has any interest in realistic pokemon fanfic. 

Markomasou
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

This will be a real short one, cuz all the people here who actually can make a review already did (and really know how to do one).
Alas, I will just try with pointing things out.

-The characters all feel real, not like I am a professional, but I can't find any flaws in them because they all have (I'll repeat) a very real feel from their personalities.
Even the Pokemon do. I can't imagine how mind boggling it is to make characters this way. 5/5 imo

-The grammar is on the better side for this website but there are sometimes flaws which can be seen, but they don't really hinder the storytelling. Sometimes you literally just overlook them as I think does the Author when proofreading.

-It may be a problem to read this for people who don't know any pokemon lore, but I don't have any problems with it even if I have to google for every Pokemon except Magikarp.

-I think that the battles are well done and the story itself, sucks one into it, as it has a lot to offer. Even the "Logs" chapters are nice because one can see the logs which weren't told in the story itself and see Prof. Birch's perspective on the travles of our Protag. Lee.

I am hereby ending this review, as it is still short but still more than I expected I could conjure up without making it sound like filler.

ps. If you already aren't, read this story right this instance.

Cheers!

Edit: Eeey, even Zethuron made a Review

Edit²: I played through Pokemon Gen 3 becuase of this and am now enjoying Pokemon Y. Imma thank this author because I wouldn't have ever started playing pokemon games otherwise. (Do mind that I never had anything like a Gameboy Advanced or other stuff. Emulators for the win!)

lightbl4de
Overall

well this is one of (if not) the best fanfiction i have read , in just one chapter ash got more character development than in a whole new season of s/s  and that by  itself speaks volumes of the author. All in all a better worldbuilding and main/side stories 

Vitanima
Overall

The one flaw: There arent enough chapters.

seriously though, dont look down on this because its a pokemon fanfic, It is a great story through and through so far.

Im still waiting for the day when Lee and Brock geek out together over how to feed pokemon and which foods and nutrients go best for different types of pokemon

Breanna Mcgonigal
Overall

This is my first ever review on royalroad but this story deserves it This story is a work of art plain and simple no ifs ands or buts this story is a wonder to read and this is coming from someone who never got into the pokemon fandom BECAUSE of the unrealistic and downright childish way all story's I have found handle the SI or OC transported into the pokemon world trope and this story has RUINED most of the pokemon fandoms showings for me...it's a true story of friendship hardship and overcoming your problems as lets not forget the Pokemon training part of the story it shows a really in depth and entertaining realism to what we all Know and love about pokemon and brings the nitty gritty of real life people into the childhood fantasy of going into the pokemon world as every kid who played a pokemon game on their game boy or ds has had it really made me stop and think about whether or not I would be able to handle watching my pokemon battle if I was living in that world...my only request for the author is something one of my fellow reviewers brought up in his review....longer log chapters! I love it when we get to see just how shocked the world natives get at Lee's training methods and behavior regarding pokemon training! It's the second best part after the training that makes the logs so if your looking for a true to reality pokemon fan fiction this is your one stop shop for cute pokemon cool battles and real people and NO ANIME PROTAGONIST PLOT ARMOR BULLCRAP

Thomas Palfrey
Overall

Don't let the Pokemon fan-fic scare put you off

Reviewed at: Chapter 15

I have to admit that I started chapter 1 simply because I love stories about modern day people being transported into a fantastic fictional universe and forced to cope. The word "Pokemon" alone almost pushed me to close it before giving it a try, not because Pokemon is a bad fictional universe, but because many of the fan-fics that come from that community tend to be rather weird and not at all up my alley as a rule of thumb.

I'm glad to say that I was absolutely wrong and almost missed out on a true gem of a story. The author takes the basic foundations of the Pokemon universe and expands on it in a way that feels, ironically, really realistic. The story spins a damn good yarn, the fights are thrilling and well-executed in a way that even the show would have a hard time to match and if I read this in a book, I'd be satisfied with my purchase.

Can't wait for the next chapter, thrilling ride, 10/10, would read again - IGN, gold stars all around, hoping for a post-nuclear apocalypse so the author can grow a third arm so they can pat themselves on the back as much as is deserved.

Eligos
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Dang, I ran out of chapters

Reviewed at: Chapter 15

Excellent and well thought out. We have some poignant trauma, some solid motivation, characters that are actually interesting and not carbon copies of each other, and a unique viewpoint through the MC. It doesn't fall in the classic fanfic traps of demonizing, dominating, or tritely regurgitating the canon content. The MC, while logically at advantage due to his background, is capable of losing. This means actual stakes and dramatic tension and all sorts of wonderful things.

Some quick bullet points:

+ There are no arbitrary jumps in power or unnecessary pandering.

+ I did not cringe at any given point.

+ The author did not make me feel bad for liking Pokémon by making unnecessary allusions to slavery.

+ Gardevoir was, mercifully, left alone.

+ MC is believably disturbed about his situation without beating the self-pity drum to death or spending days exploring the depths of his own naval.

Negative:

the story is now at parity with the FanFiction, a03, and spacebattles versions, which means I'm out of chapters. And yes, I liked the story so much that when I finished I immediately went to check all of those.

Read it. Totally worth your time, even if you're not traditionally into Pokémon or Isekai. 

McKing
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Surprisingly good and mature...

Reviewed at: Chapter 15

I was impressed to see a pokemon thumbnail right there on a trending fic, which turn out to be good to great stories far more often than not IMO. So I decided to check it out after liking the premise... and I've became a follower pretty quickly even if I don't usually give fanfics the time of day. This is good stuff.

On to the story itself.

The MC has so far been marvelously developed, getting used to his new reality even as he realistically deals with the scars and traumas of his past. His bonding with his pokemon are also very well done.

The side characters (trainers/followers)... are Pokemon characters I do not know. For background, I've loved pokemon since I was a kid... but I never got past much further than season 2. There's been some development on them, but it's still a bit early.

The story itself follows the usual pokemon (anime) themes of duels / events (team rocket, accidents...) / training and bonding between characters and pokemons, and I can't complay about any of them. Everything so far has proved to be a good read. The MC with some foreknowledge and a different way of dealing with things usually shines with his experience and pragmatism.

Grammar and style are solid, very few typos and good structure.

My thanks and congratulations to the author for this fine story.

apaulose
Overall

I read this story on fanfiction. Didn't realize it was on this site. In my opinion it is hands down the best pokemon SI story. The writing is great. The main character has a really interesting perspective on raising and training pokemon due to his previous job. He also lacks the smug omnicience that a lot of bad SI characters have where they assume that their knowledge of a show or game will automatically apply to the world their in. The battles can get really intense and brutal. More like the manga than the anime. I'm interested to see where the story goes.

Contradiction
Overall

This isn't a fair ranking by me. But im a pokemon fan boy. And vulpix are adorable. And at the time of this review I was desperately craving a pokemon story. So its probably not 5 star. That being said, its a really well done story.

Grammar is great, I haven't noticed any errors

Characters are believable and compelling. 

Story is where it honestly falters. But not by much. A lot of pokemon fans are in their mid to late 20's. Its what we grew up with, and its now what our kids play. That being said, a lot of fans stopped paying attention to the series after gen 4. I stopped after gen 3. So when characters or pokemon are intruduced from later generations, its kind of immersion breaking if we have to look up who they are. Most of them are described pretty well, but not all.

Next, team rocket. Like wtf. One second we get a world on reality settings where injuries are very real. Next we get the death defying flight of team rocket with little to no repercussions. Now, in fairness, the rocket role was minor and felt more like a nod to the series. But it was still immersion breaking.

Lastly, the m.c. is a zookeeper and is good at handling animals, so those skills naturally transfer over. I can understand the general populace being worse at handling pokemon, but it was a tough pill for me to swallow that the worlds pokemon experts are surprised by his actions in the manectric arc. I mean, they've literally lived with pokemon for generations. Surely someone like the professor shouldn't be astounded by his actions or the results they produced.

Overall, this a good fanfiction to read. And if not for a couple small details, it would be a great stand alone story. I still think this is a must read because it does what it sets out to do, and is an excellent story for the genre.

I know I mostly went over complaints, but the interactions between the m.c. and vulpix not only hold the story up, but set it apart from most others.