Twilight The Return of Lycans
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The Lycans are dead or are they???
Twilight world is much larger than any thought and here is the true extent of Twilight world and Return of Lycans
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The spag, sentence structure and style is so bad an 8 yr old would write it better. Not worth anyone's time, the author doesn't even attempt to write properly.
Example: I went to the park don't ask why I won't tell you I saw friend playing football I kick ball then he started crying why is he crying it doesn't even hurt ok moving on I went home and slept
Next day I woke up are breakfast then go school (etc)
Alright, this seemed like an interesting story/idea. But the author suffered a worldbuild stroke.
Do not get me wrong. I LOVE a detail story building. But I want to be inturduced to it slowly, to be given time to explore it.
In contrast this felt like I was reading a report, rather than some work of fantasy.
So my advice to the author would be this: Do not be afraid to leave your readers somewhat ignorant. Let us explore and traverse the world your mind forged.Insted of throwing everything you created at me at once. I do not need to know how a sperm works in werewolfs to understand what they are.
I hope you do not find my words harsh, rather I hope you improve and one day get the chance to do your worldbuilding a justice it deserves.
PS: I gave it 5/5 rating just so the author doesn't think I am some asshole who likes to shit on other people's work.