Disclaimer: First attempt at writing and it's a couple years old (as of 2018). Tried too much but hey if you feel like checking it out, do so.

 

The world is at war. The clash between the great Saudi Empire and the Brazilian Alliance is reaching its climax. As the bombs fall signifying the end, many people find themselves in an unknown environment. Confused, naked and unarmed the newcomers are attacked by vicious beasts and must work together to survive in this new unknown world. Note: Short chapters. There are only small elements from VR/RPGs, the focus is definitely on the world and characters and not stats / grinding.

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My rating is subject to change, but this is a darn good story. The mechanics work pretty well so far and the story seems fairly decent for a freeflowing plot. The characters are decently in depth with only minor contradictions (which, let's face it, are necessary to make villains, well, villains). The style is nice and, although the multiple POVs can be a little disconcerting (mostly due to the length of the chapters) at this point, it is safe to say this is a pretty engaging read. Fight scenes are decent--not pokemon battles--the only thing that the story needs is just a tiny bit of foreshadowing in the edges of the background--some characters come from literally nowhere.

This is good.

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