The Perfect Run

by Void Herald

Ryan "Quicksave" Romano is an eccentric adventurer with a strange power: he can create a save-point in time and redo his life whenever he dies. Arriving in New Rome, the glitzy capital of sin of a rebuilding Europe, he finds the city torn between mega-corporations, sponsored heroes, superpowered criminals, and true monsters. It's a time of chaos, where potions can grant the power to rule the world and dangers lurk everywhere. 

Ryan only sees different routes; and from Hero to Villain, he has to try them all. Only then will he achieve his perfect ending... no matter how many loops it takes.

Cover by Vitaly S. Alexius

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BoopDaSnoot
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This is Void Herald's, so you know it's guna be gud.

Real review: The MC has OP power but limited by cooldowns and the human body. He is witty and hilarious, to the point I heard Ryan Reynolds every time I read his line. He is a chaotic good murderhobo and he is awesome.

The plot is good, our MC trying to travel the world to find his long-lost girlfriend/ bestie, in a world of post-apocalypse dystopia with PR-slave superheroes, bands of cannibal drug-addicted lunatics, and supervillains running the underworld.

It has humor, touching moments, and badass fighting scenes with explosions. Only a few chapters so far, but I have a high expectation for this.

JollyRancher
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I'm enjoying it so far.  Hopefully it keeps up with itself.  It's decently unique with it's neo europe and the humor lands well enough for me to keep me reading. Maybe the occasional excessive semi colon every once in a while (I don't like semi colons ever). Overall, I like it

chaogoesmu
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It starts off like typical wish fulfillment and quickly gets better. Theres enough subplot and character growth that even the over the top insanity of the mc is likeable. I highly recommend it and wish there was more already done. It is very action focused with the plot coming in the lulls in the storm so the only group I see it not appealing to are those specifically looking for a slice of life, and even then I'd recommend they give it a shot.

QiJia
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Original and entertaining

Reviewed at: 21: The Rehearsals

Its a great read, i recommend it to anyone who likes 'superheros' stories. :D

first time writing a review i wanted to keep it short but need to be 50 words long rip so im just writing this to add to the word count lol lmao XD great story hope to read more of ittttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt

 

235shaun
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like most things that void herald wright this is great, to summarise without getting into spoilers i'd say that it has buildup and there isnt and endless progression it has an end in mind and that elevates his writing becuase its no meandering inexaustible plotlines that burn out its selfcontained and that's what make his storys great becuase they are planned as storys 

LogOff
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The story is really amazing. It lives up to the story that predated it, Vanquier, and provides a new world to experience the comedy and story that Void Herald is known for. The style is amazing, with witty commentary and interesting descriptions given to each and every person, place, or thing that appears. I'm always hesitant to read time loop stories, as they can sometimes get really crummy and boring as the loop goes on, but Void Herald has done a good job at making sure that there are some real stake for the protagonist and set up some really good foreshadowing. The grammar is astoundingly perfect, with excellent word choice and no misspellings. The characters are amazing, with funny interactions from the main character, and threatening villains that I can really hate. 

Nomad1791
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Void Herald has done it again

Reviewed at: 15: Good Karma

Honestly I don't know how void does it but here we go again another great story with a mc you instantly like and plot that gets better every chapter. I'll write a advance review when there's more. I hate having to write fifty words much less two hundred. When will I make fifty?

RedPine
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This is a work of art.  Its like groundhog day not only in premise, but in comedy, tragedy, and heart as well.

Filler filler filler filler banana filler filler filler fish fillet filler filler i hate typing on a smartphone filler filler filler filler am i at 50 yet? Filler filler filler

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Interesting world marred by an unlikeable MC

Reviewed at: 2: Story Branching

TL;DR Don't let the plethora of rave reviews by this author's fanboys fool you. If you like intelligent, thoughtful, or sympathetic MC's this story is not for you. I explain exactly why, in detail, below. 

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The prose and grammar are good. And the world building is interesting. It is set in an alternate earth with superpowers and near-future sci-fi tech you typically see in fictions with super heroes. The problem is the MC. 

MC acts in stupid or suboptimal ways because he is easily bored. This makes him less than sympathetic, as it really feels like a waste of this powers.

As an example, in the very first chapter, he's shot to death by a superpowered gang enforcer who is after the owner of the bar he's just made a delivery to. So he loads his save, then drives through the front of the bar with his car to run over the superpowered Assassin before beating him to death with a bat. Sounds kind of badass right?

Except that he then has to bribe the shit out of the bar owner to have him testify to the cops that he was helping. He also needs to pay for repairs. Then he has to bribe the shit out of the cops so they don't arrest him for being a vigilante because he isn't a licensed hero or law enforcer. He ends up spending several times the money that the delivery job earned him.

This dude has all the time in the world to make decisions because he can load quicksaves in real life. Yet one part of this entire encounter perfectly encapsulates his idiocy and thoughtlessness. After hitting the guy with the car, he goes to the trunk of his car and stands there contemplating what weapon to pull out on the guy as the guy is struggling to get up, running through multiple weapons in his head.

Yea... The thing his, his save/load point was 2 hours before the enforcer showed up. He was camped in front of the bar for a good while waiting for the enforcer to show up. Yet in all that time, he didn't think about what weapon he'd use after driving through the bar with the car. He had to wait until he was in the middle of a confrontation with a superpowered combatant to start thinking about it. Hell, he could have intercepted the enforcer outside of the bar or in a way that produced less collateral damage so he wouldn't have had to bribe so many people. Yet despite all of the additional subjective time he must have experienced through his powers, he does not act more mature than his age. Instead, he acts like a wacky hyperactive toddler. 

It almost makes the title and Synopsis of the story a lie. He's looking for the perfect run? In what universe was the outcome of this encounter anywhere near perfect or ideal? Why would he even attempt to do it this way if perfection was what he sought? 

Even his costume is self-admittedly impractical for fighting. But he wears it because it looks good. 

In the very next chapter, the opening lines talks about how he does his tinkering in boxers because clothes represent conformity, and taking his clothes off represents freeing himself from the constraints society imposes on him. What utter hipster nonsense. Eccentricity for eccentricity's sake. Experimenting with weaponized gadgets requires PPE. Especially, as he himself put it, he hates loading in quick succession to solve for things. 

In other words, the MC is a grandstanding idiot more concerned with dick waving, face-slapping, and standing apart from the crowd than prudence. For anyone who has read Outer Spheres, he's like a post time-skip Garth. Poor impulse control. No foresight. No prudence. And a grade schooler could use his power in smarter ways than he does. 

For those looking for a good time loop/reset story. Mother of Learning is a classic. Menocht loop is also pretty good, though the time looping aspect of it goes away pretty quickly. For more recent stories that are still ongoing, and entirely focused on the time loop concept, try Reroll and Re:monarch instead. They both have well rounded character interactions. Sophisticated world building. Compelling plots. And likeable MC's. Reroll is a direct competitor to this story in that it also has superheroes. Re: monarch is set in a sword and sorcery fantasy world. Both stories are better than this one by a substantial margin. 

Reader 24
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I found the first chapter annoying to read due to the poor writing. A quick proofread would fix some of the obvious issues. 

Story is a bit rough but interesting. 

Maybe the quality increases as the story progresses, but I think i'll pass. Not worth my time, when the author isn't putting enough deligence into his craft.