The Perfect Run

by Void Herald

The Perfect Run is now available on Amazon Kindle

Ryan "Quicksave" Romano is an eccentric adventurer with a strange power: he can create a save-point in time and redo his life whenever he dies. Arriving in New Rome, the glitzy capital of sin of a rebuilding Europe, he finds the city torn between mega-corporations, sponsored heroes, superpowered criminals, and true monsters. It's a time of chaos, where potions can grant the power to rule the world and dangers lurk everywhere. 

Ryan only sees different routes; and from Hero to Villain, he has to try them all. Only then will he achieve his perfect ending... no matter how many loops it takes.

The Perfect Run updates on Tuesday, Thursday, and Saturday. Cover by Vitaly S. Alexius

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1: Quicksave ago
2: Story Branching ago
3: Men of Honor ago
4: Random Encounter ago
5: Mission Accomplished ago
6: Divergence Point ago
7: Rust Town ago
8: Past Fragment: Len ago
9: The Made Men ago
10: Heroes & Villains ago
11: Railroading ago
12: Corporate Heroes ago
13: Batman & Robin ago
14: Field Work ago
15: Good Karma ago
16: Secret Enemies ago
17: The Hidden Route ago
18: Acid Rain ago
19: The Right Road ago
20: Past Fragment: Under the Sea ago
21: The Rehearsals ago
22: Speech Checks ago
23: The Reunion ago
24: Transition ago
25: Never Enuff Dakka ago
26: FPS ago
27: Past Fragment: The Crimes of Augustus ago
28: Suicide Run ago
29: The Rampage ago
30: Bites the Dust ago
31: Knight of Faith ago
32: Change of Plans ago
33: Black Swan ago
34: Hit and Run ago
35: Pre-Party ago
36: Color Rave ago
37: The War of the Suit ago
38: The Olympians ago
39: Court of the Lightning King ago
40: Past Fragment: Mechron's Last Stand ago
41: Past Fragment: The Darkness Beyond ago
42: Progress Made ago
43: The Ghost of Drug Island ago
44: Return of the Corpo ago
45: Blood in the Water ago
46: Chekhov's Gun ago
47: While Rome Burns ago
48: Bad End ago
49: Time and Again ago
50: Past Fragment: How to Tame Your Plushie ago
51: Route Split ago
52: Chance Meetings ago
53: Fashion Disaster ago
54: A Gambling Man ago
55: The Future Past ago
56: Heartfelt Talk ago
57: The Island of Dr. Tyrano ago
58: Family Business ago

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mephi
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In another story inspired by Mother of Learning and similar to Wyrm, we have a superhero story set in a near-future dystopian society. 

While a humorous read, I just can't feel that the story makes the most of its premesis. The MC is a time looper, who makes a huge deal out of traveling all the paths to find the best answer, but... so far, there hasn't been that much variety offered.

Instead of learning and growing over loops from everyone and everywhere, the MC basically has already picked a path and just tweaking his actions down that one path. This is a bit sad, because the author is refusing to explore a lot of possibilities in favor of just grinding one path over and over.

Part of what makes time loop stories so interesting is the character growth that occures as they pick different paths through life, and see "what if." Not only are we starting off with the MC after centuries of looping, so not a lot of character growth, but we're really only getting different angles of the villains and their relationships. Nothing else.

Also, I find it rather ironic that the "best path" he found so far is the result of ... not being a jerk to his coworkers. And its somehow a surprise.

This story stands on the strength of its comedy and its characters, but less so on the strength of its actual plot. Don't get me wrong, its funny as heck and the characters are interesting, but the plot is nonsensical at times.

SkullofAce
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It's a Fun, Good Story. The MC is Fun and sometimes Hilarious to watch. Some Moments had me genuinely Crack Up because they were so funny , , , , , , , , , , , ,, , , , , , , ,, , .  . . . . . . . . . . .  . . . . . . . . . . .

Mark Michael Lewis
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Fun - funny - clever - fast paced - a joy ride!

Reviewed at: 52: Chance Meetings

54 chapters in (because that's all s/he wrote so far). It was a good day. I just wanted to find out what happened next - each chapter. 

just when I thought I would stop, it sucks me back in ... Oh yeah, and the pop culture references.

great world building.I am enjoying learning about the context and the wars and the tech. the "potion/magic system" is fascinating. It is interesting that the powers are on or off - there doesn't seem to be any development in power, only in the skill of leveraging the power that suddenly exists.

I am curious about how deep the author is intending to go into the lore of the system - can the geniuses reverse engineer the various realms? What will happen with the black?

Good superhero style dynamics and banter. So many characters to like, especially the MC. He is extremely likable even if he is not morally inspiring. They are surprisingly human vs. tropes - even though the author is not shy about brashly playing with tropes. It makes the whole read more enjoyable.



I have zero thoughts on grammar and spelling - I don't notice or care either way. I just know if I enjoy the story. 

Such a great ride. Looking forward to more.

Daniel Koller
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Its a good read by a solid author a weird mix of comedy, whimsy and post apocaliptic nightmare fuel with the main character both eternally hopeful yet incredibly jaded and bored. So far I enjoy it as much as Vainqueur I just hope it ends better than Never Die Twice did.

Aemon777
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Fast Paced, Entertaining

Reviewed at: 51: Route Split

I haven't yet found a story by Void Herald that didn't make me laugh a lot, cry a little, and leave me completely glued to my screen. This story comes with an interesting premise and Void does an excellent job of digging into his main character's psyche as he strives for a Perfect Run.

lolbroman25
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As usual, Void Herald shows us what a great story is. The MC, a time-travling super "hero," is on a quest to find his own happy ending. He's died millions of tines to do son and will die millions more. The characters all feel like they should (bad guys feel bad, good guys feel good, and all have a massive grey area showing that good and evil aren't absolute). We see a panda, a dragon-shifting woman, and a living sun, among countless other powers. The fact that this is Void's 4th(?) story shows, as the introduction to this world is extremely smooth, and the story is extremely enjoyable. If you like time-travelling, superpowers, murderous rabbit slushies, and a lonely man just trying to find someone who he can call a permanent friend, read this!

SnowBoyIV
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Void Herald has always been my favorite author on this site, so i am giving this review to hopefully boost this fiction so more people can find him like i did.

I have like most people found his fictions through vainqueer the dragon and after tha got hooked on never die twice, so now hopefully we will have a third masterpiece coming. it is alredy looking promising for me after just a single chapter though i have always had a soft spot for time stop powers in fiction. 

I am giving this story a full score for now as i doubt his story wll under perform considering his previous works on this site, but since this story only has one chapter as i am writing this review might change this score at a later date but for now i will just sit back and relax while watching this story unfold.

Ps please excuse any typos or grammatical mistakes i have made as english is not my first language and i dont have grammarly or any other spellcheck websites to see if i have made any mistake son my phone. hopefully i will not have to change my score. 

bye for now

Nameless32
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My First Void Herald Work

Reviewed at: 2: Story Branching

I can finally say that I get why this author is rated so highly - absolutely fantastic first few chapters! I honestly didn't expect the writing to be this funny, but I'm 100% glad for it. Of course, now I'm obligated to check out his other works and potentially lose the next few days to them.

Zethuron
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Retry until perfection. An Excellent story!

Reviewed at: 15: Good Karma

Just worth the read honestly, blew through this story fairly fast, and loved about everything of it, it is just so entertaining, the unusual premise helped a lot also, not often that you see a superhero ‘timeloop’ story, let alone this well written, by an already established author to boot!  And then there is the MC, what an amazingly well written character he is!

I just love the MC Ryan and how he is written, he has just a such carefree attitude developed from his many reloads. He just fully embraced the absurdity and yet remains sane, even if it does not seem like it at first sight. He just keeps advertising what he can do, that killing him is futile, and keeps making those jokes and references, all just part of the greater personalia the MC has built.

The MC’s power is just insanely strong, as one would expect from a power that allows you to set a save point AND also use time stop, though with clear limits, and he uses it to maximum efficiency to achieve the best possible result for him and those he cares about. But even with such a power, he still has to be careful because he is not truly invincible, he may be able to ‘reload’ his way out of any bodily harm, but cannot do the same for his mental wellbeing.

In my opinion, Void Herald has done a good job with the setting this story takes place in, even more so since its rather wildly different from his other stories, which were all LitRPG’s. While this does take place in a dystopian Italy where you can get superpowers from using one of the rare Elixir’s or their more common knock-offs which grant lesser powers.

 

Grammar is great in my opinion, some typos and inconsistencies do pop up, but not frequent enough to be of any hindrance to the reading experience.

This story reads amazingly well and is paced without even letting up, it just keeps going without slowing down and drags the reader just in the story from the very start. I really like the way information is delivered in this story, more than enough information to let readers become familiar with the characters and the setting, while at the same time also keeping up a sense of mystery, without even infodumping anything! There’s also just the right kind of humour and comedy as one would expect from Void Herald.

 

Looking forward to what this story will become, I personally have high expectations due to the author's previous works, and the rather phenomal start this story has so far. The author is also very capable of writing quite different types stories and succeeded at it all, like demonstrated with this story.

Anyone interested in reading a good story with an interesting premise executed very well and fun MC, I recommend you this one. Oh also the author is one of the most reliable on this site, having completed multiple books already and in my opinion, this one is shaping up to be his best work so far. And if you loved his other stories, then of course you should start reading this one right now.

 

couchpotato
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Ill be brief here, the story is fabulous and is very captivating,

I had my hesitance at first because of superheroes and all being a bit lame but this wiped me off the floor.

The plot pulls and PULLS, if you dont like the writing youll still love the plot.

4.8/5

Ranks top 2 for me (i'm sure you all know what top 1 is).