The Perfect Run

by Void Herald

The Perfect Run is now available on Amazon Kindle

Ryan "Quicksave" Romano is an eccentric adventurer with a strange power: he can create a save-point in time and redo his life whenever he dies. Arriving in New Rome, the glitzy capital of sin of a rebuilding Europe, he finds the city torn between mega-corporations, sponsored heroes, superpowered criminals, and true monsters. It's a time of chaos, where potions can grant the power to rule the world and dangers lurk everywhere. 

Ryan only sees different routes; and from Hero to Villain, he has to try them all. Only then will he achieve his perfect ending... no matter how many loops it takes.

The Perfect Run updates on Tuesday and Saturday. Cover by Vitaly S. Alexius

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1: Quicksave ago
2: Story Branching ago
3: Men of Honor ago
4: Random Encounter ago
5: Mission Accomplished ago
6: Divergence Point ago
7: Rust Town ago
8: Past Fragment: Len ago
9: The Made Men ago
10: Heroes & Villains ago
11: Railroading ago
12: Corporate Heroes ago
13: Batman & Robin ago
14: Field Work ago
15: Good Karma ago
16: Secret Enemies ago
17: The Hidden Route ago
18: Acid Rain ago
19: The Right Road ago
20: Past Fragment: Under the Sea ago
21: The Rehearsals ago
22: Speech Checks ago
23: The Reunion ago
24: Transition ago
25: Never Enuff Dakka ago
26: FPS ago
27: Past Fragment: The Crimes of Augustus ago
28: Suicide Run ago
29: The Rampage ago
30: Bites the Dust ago
31: Knight of Faith ago
32: Change of Plans ago
33: Black Swan ago
34: Hit and Run ago
35: Pre-Party ago
36: Color Rave ago
37: The War of the Suit ago
38: The Olympians ago
39: Court of the Lightning King ago
40: Past Fragment: Mechron's Last Stand ago
41: Past Fragment: The Darkness Beyond ago
42: Progress Made ago
43: The Ghost of Drug Island ago
44: Return of the Corpo ago
45: Blood in the Water ago
46: Chekhov's Gun ago
47: While Rome Burns ago
48: Bad End ago
49: Time and Again ago
50: Past Fragment: How to Tame Your Plushie ago
51: Route Split ago
52: Chance Meetings ago
53: Fashion Disaster ago
54: A Gambling Man ago
55: The Future Past ago
56: Heartfelt Talk ago
57: The Island of Dr. Tyrano ago
58: Family Business ago
59: Corpoalition ago
60: Lucky Break ago
61: Death Warrant ago
62: Quest Complete ago
63: End of Disc One ago
64: Past Fragment: A Death in Monaco ago
65: In Mysterious Ways ago
66: The Hit ago
67: Murphy's Law ago
68: Death Stranding ago
69: Limited Time ago
70: Gotcha ago
71: A Friend in Need ago
72: Plushieland ago
73: Civil War ago
74: Running the Asylum ago
75: Foreign Policy ago
76: Brainy Work ago
77: Change ago
78: Happiness Overdose ago
79: Past Fragment: Goodbye, Monaco! ago
80: Lonely Together ago
81: Good Morning New Rome ago
82: Corporate Raid ago
83: R&D ago
84: Left Behind ago
85: The Light Beyond ago
86: The End Times ago
87: Medical Care ago
88: Atom Smasher ago
89: Past Fragment: Bloodstream's Last Stand ago
90: Past Fragment: The First Run ago
91: Bloodline Empire ago
92: Best Laid Plans ago
93: Defenders of the Realm ago
94: Cheat Code ago
95: Double Date ago
96: Beast of the East ago
97: A Breath of Fresh Air ago
98: White Night ago
99: How I Met Your Daughter ago
100: Past Fragment: No Planet for Old Men ago
101: Lover's Breath ago
102: Moving On ago
103: Drug Bust ago
104: Return of the Cashmere ago
105: Miracle Cure ago
106: Mice Trap ago
107: Black Dinner ago

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RedPine
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This is a work of art.  Its like groundhog day not only in premise, but in comedy, tragedy, and heart as well.

Filler filler filler filler banana filler filler filler fish fillet filler filler i hate typing on a smartphone filler filler filler filler am i at 50 yet? Filler filler filler

Newbage
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Interesting world marred by an unlikeable MC

Reviewed at: 2: Story Branching

TL;DR Don't let the plethora of rave reviews by this author's fanboys fool you. If you like intelligent, thoughtful, or sympathetic MC's this story is not for you. I explain exactly why, in detail, below.

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Ok Prose and Grammar. Decent world building. But the MC is utterly insufferable, which bleeds heavily into the direction of the plot. MC acts in stupid or suboptimal ways because he is easily bored. This makes him unsympathetic.

For example, in the first chapter, he's shot to death by a superpowered gang enforcer who is after the owner of the bar he's just made a delivery to. So he loads his save, then drives through the front of the bar with his car to run over the superpowered Assassin before beating him to death with a bat. Sounds kind of badass right?

The problem is that he then has to bribe the bar owner to have him testify to the cops that he was helping. He also needs to pay for repairs. Then he has to bribe the  the cops so they don't arrest him for being a vigilante, since he isn't a licensed hero or law enforcer. He ends up spending several times the money that the delivery job earned him. In what universe is this outcome part of a "perfect run"?

He has all the time in the world to consider his actions. Yet when during his final altercation with the enforcer, he had to stand in front of his trunk for several moments after hitting him with the car, deciding what weapon to use. He did this despite having just waited for the enforcer outside the bar in his car for upwards of an hour (his save point was a couple hours back). The fact that he hadn't already worked out exactly how he was going to dispatch the enforcer highlights just how big a fool the main character really is. 

In the very next chapter, he is tinkering in his boxers because, according to him, clothes represent confirmity, and taking them off represents freeing himself from the constraints imposed upon him by society. What hipser nonsense. This is eccentricy for eccentricty's sake, to the detriment of plot and character. Experimenting with weaponized gadgets requires PPE. Especially, as he himself put it, he hates loading in quick succession to solve for things.

Bottomline: he MC is a grandstanding fool more concerned with dick waving, face-slapping, and standing apart from the crowd than practicality. Poor impulse control. No foresight. No prudence. And a grade schooler could use his power in smarter ways than he does.

Reader 24
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I found the first chapter annoying to read due to the poor writing. A quick proofread would fix some of the obvious issues. 

Story is a bit rough but interesting. 

Maybe the quality increases as the story progresses, but I think i'll pass. Not worth my time, when the author isn't putting enough deligence into his craft.