Demon Prince Familiar

by underhanded

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Romance Harem School Life
A saint is executed for helping a demon and in his soul form remembers his previous life on earth where he was fan of light novels and when god asks for his fives whises as reward for his saintly deeds he aims to live a fantasy style life of light novels.


guys this is my first try on writing novel so I am sorry in advance if make some mistakes.

Warning: May contain mature contents in futures. Of what kind though I am not entirely sure.
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Three stars for effort

Huh. What do I think...

 

The first chapter was bad. I'm assuming that those were typos rather than you not knowing how to spell. But the later chapters mostly had good spelling, which means you're better than most people on this site in that particular area.

 

The summoning seems like an excuse to get the protagonist hooked up with a new harem member and involved with a plot. It also establishes the protagonist's motivations that the only reason he's involved in the plot is because of "boredom".

 

Some things, like spending a chapter on the protagonist staring at someone's butt, are sort of boring to read.

 

And on that subject, none of the characters are really... likeable? Interesting? I especially feel that Anna is plain. Pairing a protagonist with multiple women is sort of pointless when you can't even make one women feel like a person.

 

Reading about the different circles of mages made me feel like I was reading a Wuxia/Xianxia fic. Not that that's a bad thing inherently, but I somehow feel like adding Immortals... I don't feel like it meshes well with the fic.

 

I would recommend reading more fanfiction. Eventually you'll become aware of Sturgeon's Law and become more aware of the differences between good and bad fanfiction. Though since I don't write fanfiction myself, my advice might not be that helpful.

Conviter
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So far it seems interesting keeep up the good work

SilverTongue
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 had not laugh like this for a while now...

ur fic is refreshing, a saint turn to a demon..

and as a saint he was noble and pure....

while as a demon his completely opposite to his former self

pretty good.... LOVE IT.... KEEP IT UP...

CUZ IT IS GREAT AND IT IS WORTH THE READ