Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG
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*BIG NOTICE!* I've decided to put the story on hiatus until further notice, so I can really focus and revise my whole shallow story so far. Revisions could minorly or majorly effect the story so far, I don't know yet, but revised Chapters will have a Name added to the Chapter # to let you know that it has been revised.

Thank you to all my consistent readers, and I hope to see you again when the story continues

A story about a promising archer who loses his eyes in an accident, but finding himself chosen to participate in a fantasy world.

Note: I don't know what I'm doing, I just wanted to write. I also write with the Dark Theme setting, so if I make a colour mistake it’s probably why.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: Loss ago
Chapter 2: Recover And Change ago
Chapter 3: Gains ago
Chapter 4: Classes And Skills ago
Chapter 5: Infinity And Battle ago
Chapter 6: The One Who Sees ago
Chapter 7: Making Friends ago
Chapter 8: A Decision ago
Chapter 9: Asheton ago
Chapter 10: The Blacksmith's Apprentice ago
Chapter 11: Into A Dungeon ago
Chapter 12: The First Dungeoneers ago
Chapter 13: The Sleeping Forest ago
Chapter 14: Money And Discounts ago
Chapter 15: Whereabouts ago
Chapter 16: The Adventurer's Guild ago
Chapter 17: A Small World ago
Chapter 18: Ordinary ago
Chapter 19: God-Make ago
Chapter 20: Tracking And Encounters ago
Chapter 21: Oros ago
Chapter 22: Dumbfounded And Boosted ago
Chapter 23: Goblin Attack Part 1 ago
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Dalsgaardian
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Easily digestible fun

Reviewed at: Chapter 60

This is your typical isekai litrpg story. We have Eyes the OP MC and a slew of characters some of which are literally npc's. 

The pace is fast and the grammar excellent.

There is plot armor and not a whole lot of character development. The MC seemingly gets whatever he wants, i presume because of his Luck stat (which i always hate in stories).

Despite all that i really like the story. In my opinion it's a great RR story. Simply because it's like a popcorn flick. Easily digestible and just simple fun. I think the author could, if they wanted to, turn this into a much better story by slowing the pace and spending some time to get to know the characters a little better but he could just as easily continue like they have and i will continue reading.

 

TLDR: Popcorn webnovel is fun

 

Keep up the good work

endoria
Overall

Typical unrealistic game world story

Reviewed at: Chapter 21

While the story starts of good enough, it really takes a turn for the worst quickly. The inspiration for this novel seem to be all those really shitty asian "transmigrated to game world" crap novels and the author really pulls it off to create a "game world" that is nothing like an actual game.

While I like the idea of an Archer class, the protagonist simply gets all the good stuff right away. A rare extra class that accidentally synergizes with archery, free stats points because he completes the full tutorial, instant quest from the secretly master blacksmith dwarve that leads to him getting an overpowerted weapon.

This is a typical wish fulfillment "what if I was good at a game" type of story and it really isn't any good.

- Unrealistic story telling

- Overpowered main character

- Free overpowered gear for everyone (everything is a oneshot)

- Overpowered side characters who group with the MC (because one OP guy isn't nearly enough)

- Convenient plot armor in all the right places 

- Everyone except the MC is basically at braindead levels of incompetent

 

2 stars for not failing at English grammar, but as a story this really isn't worth anyones time.

Silent night
Overall

I like the story because it is simple. The main character is overpowered in the beginning but he is not the only one. The pace of the story is slow so give it a chance. If u are looking for a slice of life story with game elemants this is a good story. I was hooked soon after I started reading. 

0011
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I like the story but it is a bit too fast pace.

Reviewed at: Chapter 60

So this story is good overall. The punctuation and grammmer are great, the only problems it has is it's fast pace and lack of character developement. The mc really does have no charcter developement. He is was just abducted from his world and given back his lost eyesight which would let him do archery his one passion and there is no emotional response to it. No crying no thankyous not even tears of happiness, there was literally nothing which is weird because if a blind person was suddently given sight they would cry for joy. This is a common problem in the story, the mc kills people for the first time no reaction, he gets seriously injured no reaction and this problem isn't just for the mc it is for everyone. For example the mc saves a bunch of abused women from goblins and there is no shown tramatisatiion or reaction. This doesn't make the story bad but I think that the lack of character developement caused by the author wanting to progress the story fast has reduced a potential 4 or 5 star story to a three star story.