Beneath the Dragoneye Moons

Beneath the Dragoneye Moons

by Selkie

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Elaine is ripped from this world to Pallos, a land of unlimited possibilities made real by a grand System governing classes, skills, and magic.

An ideal society? What is this, a fantasy novel?

Adventures? Right this way!

A Grand quest? Nah.

Friends and loot? Heck yes!

Humans are the top dog? Nope, dinosaur food.

Healing and fighting? Well, everything is trying to eat her.

Join Elaine as she travels around Pallos, discovering all the wonders and mysteries of the world, trying to find a place where she belongs, hunting those elusive mangos, all while the ominous Dragoneye Moons watch her every move.


Hey! Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is my first writing effort, so please be kind, but don’t hesitate to point out the flaws.

The story starts off slowly, more like a slice of life than action-adventure, but it gets there!

I’m going to be posting M-W-F

I do know how the story ends, and I promise if it ever gets dropped, or I stop doing this, I will post the ending. There will be no random “this is the last chapter” out of the blue.


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Image Gallery! ago
Dedication ago
Chapter 1 - Rebirth ago
Chapter 2 - System Day I ago
Chapter 3 - System Day II ago
Chapter 4 - System Day III ago
Chapter 5 - System Day IV ago
Chapter 6 - Learning Skills I ago
Chapter 7 - Learning Skills II ago
Chapter 8 - Learning Skills III ago
Chapter 9 - The System Unlocks! ago
Chapter 10 - Girl Talk ago
Chapter 11 - Shadowing Guards ago
Chapter 12 - Artemis ago
Chapter 13 - Lessons on Magic ago
Chapter 14 - Decisions I ago
Chapter 15 - Decisions II ago
Chapter 16 - General Skills Bootcamp ago
Chapter 17 - The first Class-up ago
Chapter 18 - So many new skills! ago
Chapter 19 - Funeral ago
Chapter 20 - 6 years and change later ago
Chapter 21 - Catching up ago
Chapter 22 - Injustice ago
Chapter 23 - Level 100 I ago
Chapter 24 - Level 100 II ago
Chapter 25 - Level 100 III ago
Chapter 26 - Level 100 IV ago
Chapter 27 - The Ranger Squad ago
Chapter 28 - Healing ago
Chapter 29 - Secrets, Secrets, They're no Fun ago
Chapter 30 - A conversation ago
Chapter 31 - The Adventure Begins! ago
Chapter 32 – The woods are dark and deep ago
Chapter 33 – Verdant Village ago
Chapter 34 – How far does an Oath go? ago
Chapter 35 – Unless they’re shared with everyone! I ago
Chapter 36 – Unless they’re shared with everyone! II ago
Chapter 37 – On the road ago
Chapter 38 – Voting on Elaine ago
Chapter 39 – Sheep’s Ford ago
Chapter 40 – The road to Virinum I ago
Chapter 41 – The road to Virinum II ago
Chapter 42 – Arrival in Virinum ago
Chapter 43 –Virinum I ago
Chapter 44 –Virinum II ago
Chapter 45 –Virinum III ago
Chapter 46 –Virinum IV ago
Chapter 47 –Virinum V ago
Chapter 48 – Virinum VI ago
Chapter 49 – Classing up I ago
Chapter 50 – Classing up II ago
Interlude - The Magic Elements Explained! ago
Chapter 51 – New Skills I ago
Chapter 52 – Shield Skills with Artemis ago
Chapter 53 – Dodging the Guard ago
Chapter 54 – Shield skills with Maximus ago
Chapter 55 – Fire Training ago
Chapter 56 – Adventures in Virinum I ago
Chapter 57 – Adventures in Virinum II ago
Chapter 58 – Adventures in Virinum III ago
Chapter 59 – Adventures in Virinum IV ago
Chapter 60 – Adventures in Virinum V ago
Chapter 61 – Adventures in Virinum VI ago
Chapter 62 – Leaving Virinum ago
Chapter 63 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus I ago
Chapter 64 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus II ago
Chapter 65 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus III ago
Chapter 66 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus IV ago
Chapter 67 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus V ago
Chapter 68 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus VI ago
Chapter 69 – Classing up! ago
Chapter 70 – Arriving in Perinthus ago
Chapter 71 – Plague I ago
Chapter 72– Plague II ago
Chapter 73– Plague III ago
Chapter 74– Plague IV ago
Chapter 75– Plague V ago
Chapter 76– Plague VI ago
Chapter 77– Plague VII ago
Chapter 78– Plague VIII ago
Chapter 79– Plague IX – The Greater Good ago
Chapter 80– Plague X ago
Chapter 81– Plague XI ago
Chapter 82– Plague XII ago
Chapter 83– Plague XIII ago
Chapter 84– Plague XIV ago
Chapter 85– Plague XV ago
Chapter 86– Plague XVI ago
Chapter 87– Plague XVII ago
Chapter 87.5 Bonus Chapter: Julia and Elainus react to Elaine running away. ago
Chapter 88– Plague Aftermath ago
Chapter 89– Sing my name, for a thousand years ago
Chapter 90– Brigantium I ago
Chapter 91– Brigantium II ago
Chapter 92– Libraries and babies ago
Chapter 93– A Dozen Different Methods of Death ago
Chapter 94– Entering Ariminum, The Capital ago
Chapter 95– Minor Interlude – Julius Reports to Command ago
Chapter 96– Prelude to a meeting ago
Chapter 97– Reunion ago
Chapter 98– Government Vivisectionists ago
Chapter 99– The Grand Ranger Meeting ago
Chapter 100– Major Interlude – Iona – The Tunnel to Terrabethia ago
Chapter 101– Ranger Academy I ago
Chapter 102– Ranger Academy II ago
Chapter 103– Ranger Academy III ago
Chapter 104– Ranger Academy IV ago
Chapter 105– Ranger Academy V ago
Chapter 106– Ranger Academy VI ago
Chapter 107– Ranger Academy VII ago
Chapter 108– Ranger Academy VIII ago
Chapter 109– Ranger Academy IX ago
Chapter 110– Ranger Academy X ago
Chapter 111– Ranger Academy XI ago
Chapter 112.1– Ranger Academy XII ago
Chapter 112.2– Ranger Academy XII ago
Chapter 113.1– Ranger Academy XIII ago
Chapter 113.2– Ranger Academy XIII ago
Chapter 114.1– Ranger Academy XIV ago
Chapter 114.2– Ranger Academy XIV ago
Chapter 115.1– Ranger Academy XV- Classing up! ago
Chapter 115.2– Ranger Academy XV- Classing up! ago
Chapter 116.1– Ranger Academy XVI ago
Chapter 116.2– Ranger Academy XVI ago
Chapter 117.1– Ranger Academy XVII- Graduation ago
Chapter 117.2– Ranger Academy XVII- Graduation ago
Chapter 118.1 – Ranger Convocation ago
Chapter 118.2 – Ranger Convocation ago
Chapter 119.1 – A date ago
Chapter 119.2 – A date ago
Chapter 119.3 – A date ago
Chapter 120.1 – History Lessons ago
Chapter 120.2 – History Lessons ago
Interlude - Bonus Content - Black Crow//White Dove ago
Chapter 121 – Winding down ago
Chapter 122 – What to do with myself ago
Chapter 123 – Medical Manuscript ago
Chapter 124 – Preparing ago
Chapter 125 – Traveling to Deva ago
Chapter 126 – Deva I ago
Chapter 127 – Deva II ago
Chapter 128 – Deva III ago
Chapter 129 – Deva IV ago
Chapter 130 – Deva V ago
Chapter 131 – Returning Home I ago
Chapter 132 – Returning Home II ago
Chapter 133 – Returning Home III ago
Chapter 134 – Returning Home IV ago
Chapter 135 – Returning Home V ago
Chapter 136 – Returning Home VI ago
Chapter 137 – Returning Home VII ago
Chapter 138 – Returning Home VIII ago
Chapter ???? – The Coven of Fabulous Witches 0 ago
Chapter ???? – The Coven of Fabulous Witches III ago
Chapter 139 – After Action Report ago
Chapter 140 – Smoke and Mirrors ago
Chapter 141 – Autumn ago
Chapter 142 – Schools ago
Chapter 143 – Companion information ago
Chapter 144 – Adventurer’s Guild ago
Chapter 145 – Sentinel Dawn ago
Chapter 146.1 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.2 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.3 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.4 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.5 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.6 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.7 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 147 – A day in the life I ago
Chapter 148 – A day in the life II ago
Chapter 149 – Massage ago
Chapter 150 – Formorians I ago
Chapter 151 – Formorians II ago
Chapter 152 – Formorians III ago
Chapter 153 – Formorians IV ago
Chapter 154 – Formorians V ago
Chapter 155 – Formorians VI ago
Chapter 156 – Formorians VII ago
Chapter 157 – Formorians VIII ago
Chapter 158 – Formorians IX ago
Chapter 159 – Formorians X ago
Chapter 160 – Formorians XI ago
Chapter 161 – Formorians XII ago
Chapter 162 – Celestial Class up! I ago
Chapter 163.1 – Celestial Class up! II ago
Chapter 163.2 – Celestial Class up! II ago
Chapter 164.1 – Celestial Class up! III ago
Chapter 164.2 – Celestial Class up! III ago
Chapter 165 – Skills Skills Skills ago
Chapter 166 – Party ago
Chapter 167 – Mourning ago
Chapter 168.1 – Aftermath ago
Chapter 168.2 – Aftermath ago
Chapter 169 – Sentinel Meeting ago
Chapter 170 – Heading Out ago
Chapter 171 – Let’s go fly a kite ago
Chapter 172 – The Formorian Lands I ago
Chapter 173 – The Formorian Lands II ago
Chapter 174 – The Formorian Lands III ago
Chapter 175 – The Formorian Lands IV ago
Chapter 176 – Dwarves I ago
Chapter 177 – Dwarves II ago
Chapter 178 – Dwarves III ago
Chapter 179 – Dwarves IV ago
Chapter 180 – Dwarves V ago
Chapter 181 – Dwarves VI ago
Chapter 182 – Dwarves VII ago
Chapter 183 – Dwarves VIII ago
Chapter 184 – Dwarves IX ago
Chapter 185 – Dwarves X ago
Chapter 186 – Dwarves XI ago
Chapter 187 - The Dragoneye Moons I ago
Chapter 188 - The Dragoneye Moons II ago
Chapter 189 - The Dragoneye Moons III ago
Chapter 190 Minor Interlude – Autumn – The Letters I ago
Chapter 191 Interlude - The Letters II ago
Worldbuilding - What caused the deadzone? ago
Chapter 192 – The Fall ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.1 ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.2 ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.3 ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.4 ago
Chapter 193 – Major Interlude – Iona – Julie d’Audrey I ago
Chapter 194 – Major Interlude – Iona – Julie d’Audrey II ago
Chapter 195 – Major Interlude – Iona – Julie d’Audrey III ago
Chapter 196 - Journey to the center of Pallos I ago
Chapter 197 - Journey to the center of Pallos II ago
Chapter 198 - Journey to the center of Pallos III ago
Chapter 199- Journey to the center of Pallos IV ago
Chapter 200 - Journey to the center of Pallos V ago
Chapter 201 - Journey to the center of Pallos VI ago
Chapter 202 - Journey to the center of Pallos VII ago
Chapter 203 - Journey to the center of Pallos VIII ago
Chapter 204 - Journey to the center of Pallos IX ago
Chapter 205 - Journey to the center of Pallos X ago
Chapter 206 - Journey to the center of Pallos XI ago
Chapter 207 - Journey to the center of Pallos XII ago
Chapter 208 - Journey to the center of Pallos XIII ago
Chapter 209 - Journey to the center of Pallos XIV ago
Chapter 210 - Journey to the center of Pallos XV ago
Chapter 211 - Radiance Class-up I ago
Chapter 212.1 - Radiance Class-up II ago
Chapter 212.2 - Radiance Class-up II ago
Chapter 213.1 - Shiny New Skills! I ago
Chapter 213.2 - Shiny New Skills! I ago
Chapter 214 - Shiny New Skills! II ago
Chapter 215 - The Golden Cage I ago
Chapter 216 - The Golden Cage II ago
Chapter 217 - The first escape attempt! I ago
Chapter 218 - The first escape attempt!! II ago
Chapter 219 - Alone in the Dark I ago
Chapter 220 - Alone in the Dark II ago
Chapter 221 - Beneath the Dragon’s Eyes I ago
Chapter 222 - Beneath the Dragon’s Eyes II ago
Chapter 223.1 - Beneath the Dragon’s Eyes III ago
Chapter 223.2 - Beneath the Dragon’s Eyes III ago
Chapter 224 - Flying Free ago
Chapter 225 - Free Butterfly ago
Chapter 226 - A campfire meeting ago
Chapter 227 - Shimagu ago
Chapter 228 - Biohazard ago
Chapter 229 - Barbeque ago
Chapter 230 - On Immortality ago
Chapter 231 - Elvish Adventures! I ago
Chapter 232 – Elvish Adventures! II ago
Chapter 233 - Centaurs ago
Chapter 234 - Traveling through the plains ago
Chapter 235 - The Hydra I ago
Chapter 236 - The Hydra II ago

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Khent Mercer
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Intelligent Characters making Intelligent Choices

Reviewed at: Chapter 234 - Traveling through the plains

I found this story incredibly enjoyable. It's really not that out there for Royal Road it's just better than most of the other offerings around. 

Style - 4.5/5  It's not perfect by any means but it earnestly tries to subvert the trope traps it might otherwise embrace. People die but not all the time. It's Dark but not Grimdark. The world by no means revolves around the MC even if the story obviously does. Also the magic is well... Stylish AF. 

Story - 4/5 This is probably where it is traditionally weakest. (Weakest does not mean weak) This is the tale of the life of one girl, not the tale of an empire or the epic tale of 6 houses vying for power. It's a story about 1 powerful healer making her way in the world and going on adventures. Points for those adventures being foreshadowed early and making sense in the world. Pay attention and you see that the author clearly has this well planned out.

Grammer - 5/5 I have seen precisely two typos. Admittedly I just binge read it and there were a few more that got noted in the comments and then fixed. 

Characters - 4.5/5 This is the make it or break it section of a story for me. I like Elaine, mostly I understand (even if I don't always agree with) her choices. The actions make sense and the world reacts appropriately, mostly. There are some Mary Sue like tendencies but nothing I can't live with. However it's the side characters where the author outdoes themself.

They fucking think, they make intelligent well reasoned decisions. Even when they are in the wrong the reader can respect them as people. It's really refreshing. Admittedly some REALLY minor characters get short shrift on this point but it's mostly clear it's because the MC just doesn't care enough to know them.

All in all this is the best 6 books (God I appreciate clean arcs) I've read on this site all year. 

Final note. Dragons are better done in this than in anything else I've seen. Kudos.

VoraVora
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tl;dr: Some neat twists on progression litrpg, an interesting perpetual source of conflict in the form of a restriction skill, and the occasional delightful delve into the ethics of medical practice.

If you're a fan of progression litRPG, this does a few interesting things with the genre. The protagonist begins her journey as a healer rather than a traditional combat role, and relies on a mix of medical knowledge from her past life and the boosting effect of a very restrictive skill. The System of this world is fascinating for how it seeks to "balance" skills: the more you restrict the scope of a skill, or the more restrictions on yourself you accept, the more powerful your abilities will be. It rewards specialization, while also having a handful of stat mechanics to prevent hyper-specialization (i.e. dumping all your physical stats to become the world's best mage).

The world is about what you expect from any classical fantasy story: you have your better-than-everyone-else elves, your crafting-obsessed dwarves (though there is at least one refreshing twist when it comes to the dwarves), a human nation based on Rome (including reproducing the vast majority of Roman biases despite the game-changing presence of magic), and various non-sapient monstrous races to be slaughtered for XP. That's not necessarily a bad thing, as if you're at all familiar with fantasy you basically know what to expect from this world and don't have to learn a lot of new concepts aside from System-related concepts. The worldbuilding is very digestible.

Elaine's Oath is probably the most interesting part of the story: it forces her to heal those who need healing, and it prevents her from causing harm unprovoked. This, combined with her general demeanor, keeps the story from being a classic murderfest where people are just seen as XP (I quite like that kind of story, but it's nice to see the opposite as well). It forces her into unique and unusual situations, often creating interesting conflict.

There is plenty of "number go up" in the story, as it is progression litrpg, and it's always exciting to see her class-up and get new skills and stats. I also enjoy the healing scenes, dealing with plagues and patients and various medical problems and medical ethics problems. 

Tatzelwurm
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One of the best stories on Royal Road

Reviewed at: Chapter 229 - Barbeque

An excellent, consistently well-written story. One of the best ones I've found on Royal Road.

There's a few world building and character decisions that I wasn't initially a fan of, but the author pulls it all together quite nicely. The story is engaging and well written. I haven't noticed any issues with the grammer, and MC is likeable.

zedlor75
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This story gets fairly dark, but it works so well.

Style:It is mainly first person adventure, exploring new things and discovering solutions. There are points were battles go on for tens of chapters, but those are built up to enough that it doesn't feel like the story switched to only action. The author also drops hints earlier in the story as innocent enough details that forshadow later events, so rereading is fun because you pick up on things you missed.

Story:This story hits some hard topics at points, but don't let it scare you away. It may begin by discussing gender inequality, but it never gets preachy. To me, that argument got ended at this point in the story due to the fact that the system of the world doesn't seem to care about your biological sex. The arcs lead into one another, the problems solved help the main character grow as a person realistically, everything flows naturally.

Grammar:Might be using grammar/spelling correcting software, might have an editor. Either way, I have no problems with reading it.

Character:Characters are well done. Side and characters that will die are fleshed out enough to not feel out of place. Main character's growth is fully believable. Multiple new characters are introduced every arc, so don't expect many to be seen in every arc going forward.

Arcane_Pozhar
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A well written slow burn with a fun MC.

Reviewed at: Chapter 71 – Plague I

Overall, I really enjoy this series. It took it's time in the beginning to establish the MC and the supporting cast, and I appreciate that. The author's style is fine and effective and engaging, and they aren't afraid to mix it up a bit when it suits the story.

Grammar is solid (and I assure you, there are many stories I would not say that about. I've stopped reading some RR stories because the grammar literally gave me a headache. I notice bad grammar). I've noticed a few very minor things here and there (though I'm also reading older chapters, so it's hypothetically possible they were oringally worse, but the author get points for going back and making corrections, if that's the case).

As I said in the title of the review, the story is a slow burn. It has plenty of slice of life moments. But it also has wins (and losses) for the MC, and a nice variety of issues for her and the people around her to deal with. Not every encounter is a win, which I appreciate. So obviously, if you don't like slice of life chapters being common, or an MC who doesn't win win win (though she does win a lot, the story is genearlly pretty posistive, but not always), this story may not be for you. But I would suggest anyone give it a shot, if they have any patience at all for world building and character building.

Finally, I really like the characters. They are interesting, and they have flaws and peresonalitiies. I don't want to say too much more, for fear of spoilers, but I'll just say that I would like to be friends with the MC from this story, if we could somehow meet up.


BearCookieSquire
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I have work tomorrow but I keep hitting the next button. Enough said. Or not beacuse reviews have a minimum word count. Whi;e thsi isn't detailed, the story keeps you engaged. The author does a lot to help show off the world they've created. Also their beggining and end snippets just make for a better experience.

Beewine
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Competent and balanced  (not over powered)  Isekai protagonist in a fantasy world where apparently the Legio IX Hispana ended up.  Great world building, not “an everything on a silver platter” MC.    Elaine is a reincarnated human from modern earth in a  world with the "System". The God that reincarnated her has deliberately removed world breaking knowledge while still leaving Elaine "Elaine", that remaining knowledge has her set out for as much of a independant life she can get. The "System" quantifies physical and magical abilities, skills and all aspects of life in a MMO like world. 

 And Elaine is a woman in a culture where women are chattel and her actions have real reprecussions.  And every ability she has is achived thru struggle, tough choices and sacrifice.

WytchHunter
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Why all 5 stars? Well simply put I enjoyed it the most of any series I've read so far, and want other people to read it. Call me dishonest or whatever but at the end of the day algorithms favour good reviews and I want to push this up. They doesn't mean the story isn't awesome, it is! 

Style. All first person, all information is what the main character knows. If the main character gets distracted from a conversation then we don't hear it either. As someone who also struggles with attention span, I love this. It feels very genuine to me. On top of that the style helps everything feel grounded even when things get super fancy fantasy. Setting it through the main characters eyes just makes it feel more real. Finally the author loves to sprinkle in details that mean nothing at first but upon reflection later give you little "oh that's what that was!" Moments.  The author is also very good at making foreshadowing. Putting enough information to put together the puzzle before the main character does. Not that the main character is unintelligent, just that she doesn't know she's in a novel :P

 

Story. Isekai reincarnation. Main characters growth as a litRPG healer. A real one. Actually focused on healing others. Not Ilea. So far it covers her growth from childhood into young adult life. It clearly details her development and growth and that of those around her. When she makes decisions we know why, and the story never feels like the main character is just reacting the whole time, but rather acting. 

 

Grammar is good! Proper sentences, occasional puns, good range of vocabulary, few mistakes and a gift for making mangos sound amazing. There were a few typos here and there, and a couple sentences that I had to go over a couple times to get the idea, but compared to every other novel I've read on the website it was really well written. Heck I've read published novels with more mistakes. 

Character. I've never felt like the characters are stereotyped. They all seem to me well thought out and motivated. The power dynamics between different people is very well done, and characters always feel believable. My favourite character is the main characters Aunt figure. She's awesome. 

All in all if you like fantasy litRPG then check it out! 

 

 

 

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Beneath the Dragonseye Moons Advanced Review

Reviewed at: Chapter 236 - The Hydra II

Well. I discovered this story four days ago, and binged it all the way through. Highly reccomend it.

The greatest praise I can give this story is that you can tell the author read most, if not all of, The Wandering Inn. I don't think any author can read through those 8+ million words unchanged, and the quality and some of the formatting in this story reflects that.

The story follows Elaine, a Healer. A girl who had her brain scrambled by a haughty and capricious god and then forcefully put into a harsh fantasy world, and giving off a vibe of a pre-medieval era civilization. Almost Roman. The author perfectly captures the perspective of an aloof and naive female protagonist, and you can tell a lot of thought went into making the character real. After several important moments, you can tell that she matures somewhat, but still maintains her kid-like personality. You have to consider, 189 chapters in, and she's still only 19 years old (not counting her life on Earth, as her memories were scrambled during reincarnation). What kind of 19 year old can be mentally stable after the types of challenges the MC is put through? Who wouldn't be constantly spacing out and forgetting things after their brain was put through a divine cheese grater? The other reviewers seem to completely disregard this fact. If she were posited to be at least 50 years old, or even more, then maybe yeah, the immaturity would be cringe-inducing and hard to read. But you're reading a journey of this young woman put into a place of responsibility and tough choices, Oath-bound to a noble cause, and it is hard not to cheer for her.

And it's not any flaw of the author to write a childish main character. It is clearly a stylistic choice. Once you meet and parse all the supporting characters, you realize that they all have significant depth to them - histories, relationships, dreams, aspirations, goals. I would bet 20 coins that the author has watched Brandon Sanderson's lectures on character building. Be forewarned, there are character deaths, just like in any fantasy epic like this. The stakes are always high.

The world is well written, with the geography refreshingly taken into account when being introduced to new locations. In the author's own words, "Geography becomes history. History becomes politics." All the cities mentioned are examined though this lens, and are well thought out, the trade routes reasonable, and the mangos critical. There's only one major qualm I have with the setting presented, in that the story claims a staunch position of a heavily patriarchal society. When the System gives equal treatment to both sexes. It is hand-waved away in a couple sentences in some chapter that this is primarily due to the neverending war with giant ants happening on the western border, and that the Senate decided that women need to stay at home and make as many children as possible, or some-such. When in reality it is shown that any woman with a modicum of power gets her way. But the story eventually concedes and it mentions that rebellions often happen because of this stupid rule. Oh well. It is easy to ignore most of the time.

Another strange thing the author did is introduce another character that shares a very similar background and personality to the MC's late childhood friend, but set several hundred years or so in the future. This happens in sort-of interlude chapters between the published books. I recommend skipping them entirely and then going back once this character become relevant to the story (as the author has claimed they will be), but I will begrudgingly say they present an interesting second cultural setting in this world and give some useful background info to the Dwarves arc, and so may be worth a read in the order presented.

Finally I really like the LitRPG System devised by the author. Semi-subjective Classes, interesting and well named Skills, with individual control over Stats, allowing for Min-Max potential. It is shown that really every Class can be very powerful, but the name of the game is experience gain. No matter what you have, the more levels you have - the stronger you are, period. Mana Regen is the lifeline of all mages. Physical stats have a huge impact on quality of life. Vitality is not HP as is the case in most stories, decapitation is decapitation for most people, but, in theory, survivable once you have maybe tens or hundreds of thousands points in it. Lots of juicy System notifications. 

As a side note, if you like dinosaurs, they are prominent in the setting. You will be googling their names, as the author likes to skip out describing their visual aspects most of the time. Actually, also certain fantasy creatures too. The author uses terms and creatures from basically every mythology. Think retiarius, serpopards, selkies, xuanwu. It's always delightful to come across a new thing I've never heard of before! 

9.5/10 story!

PierrotNovels
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Ok so...where do i start?
 About the overall rating, i just LOVE your book. It is a really good entertainement and i was really sucked in your universe, loving the character( including the childhood part ) and the way you made your system.

STYLE

Its really well described ( a little too much sometimes to me, but i'm more used to light novels, so it's ok for me, way to readapt me to longer writings) and we can almost see the scene playing front of our eyes! Well done

GRAMMAR

Nor a lot to say here, it is nice, and as a non native english speaker, i understand everything (just had to grab some translation times to times, making my vocabulary richer, thanks ! )

STORY

Ok so! The story is up and down, not an all bright road for the main character, and i LOVE IT. Way more realistic, we feel the struggles and the pain of the main character and of the ranger team too! Pretty damn good!

CHARACTER

You managed to fully give life to all the ranger team, an hard work, especially on the long term, and we can feel the changes in Elaine mind as she suffers and cross hardship!

To conclude:
Need to keep reading, need more BTDM, need more MANGOS !

Really good job, bloody amazing book! Thanks again !