Beneath the Dragoneye Moons

Beneath the Dragoneye Moons

by Selkie

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Elaine is ripped from this world to Pallos, a land of unlimited possibilities made real by a grand System governing classes, skills, and magic.

An ideal society? What is this, a fantasy novel?

Adventures? Right this way!

A Grand quest? Nah.

Friends and loot? Heck yes!

Humans are the top dog? Nope, dinosaur food.

Healing and fighting? Well, everything is trying to eat her.

Join Elaine as she travels around Pallos, discovering all the wonders and mysteries of the world, trying to find a place where she belongs, hunting those elusive mangos, all while the ominous Dragoneye Moons watch her every move.


Hey! Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is my first writing effort, so please be kind, but don’t hesitate to point out the flaws.

The story starts off slowly, more like a slice of life than action-adventure, but it gets there!

I’m going to be posting M-W-F

I do know how the story ends, and I promise if it ever gets dropped, or I stop doing this, I will post the ending. There will be no random “this is the last chapter” out of the blue.


Cover art by Lee Kent: https://www.artstation.com/leekent

This story is being published on Royal Road, Tapas, and Scribblehub.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Image Gallery! ago
Dedication ago
Chapter 1 - Rebirth ago
Chapter 2 - System Day I ago
Chapter 3 - System Day II ago
Chapter 4 - System Day III ago
Chapter 5 - System Day IV ago
Chapter 6 - Learning Skills I ago
Chapter 7 - Learning Skills II ago
Chapter 8 - Learning Skills III ago
Chapter 9 - The System Unlocks! ago
Chapter 10 - Girl Talk ago
Chapter 11 - Shadowing Guards ago
Chapter 12 - Artemis ago
Chapter 13 - Lessons on Magic ago
Chapter 14 - Decisions I ago
Chapter 15 - Decisions II ago
Chapter 16 - General Skills Bootcamp ago
Chapter 17 - The first Class-up ago
Chapter 18 - So many new skills! ago
Chapter 19 - Funeral ago
Chapter 20 - 6 years and change later ago
Chapter 21 - Catching up ago
Chapter 22 - Injustice ago
Chapter 23 - Level 100 I ago
Chapter 24 - Level 100 II ago
Chapter 25 - Level 100 III ago
Chapter 26 - Level 100 IV ago
Chapter 27 - The Ranger Squad ago
Chapter 28 - Healing ago
Chapter 29 - Secrets, Secrets, They're no Fun ago
Chapter 30 - A conversation ago
Chapter 31 - The Adventure Begins! ago
Chapter 32 – The woods are dark and deep ago
Chapter 33 – Verdant Village ago
Chapter 34 – How far does an Oath go? ago
Chapter 35 – Unless they’re shared with everyone! I ago
Chapter 36 – Unless they’re shared with everyone! II ago
Chapter 37 – On the road ago
Chapter 38 – Voting on Elaine ago
Chapter 39 – Sheep’s Ford ago
Chapter 40 – The road to Virinum I ago
Chapter 41 – The road to Virinum II ago
Chapter 42 – Arrival in Virinum ago
Chapter 43 –Virinum I ago
Chapter 44 –Virinum II ago
Chapter 45 –Virinum III ago
Chapter 46 –Virinum IV ago
Chapter 47 –Virinum V ago
Chapter 48 – Virinum VI ago
Chapter 49 – Classing up I ago
Chapter 50 – Classing up II ago
Interlude - The Magic Elements Explained! ago
Chapter 51 – New Skills I ago
Chapter 52 – Shield Skills with Artemis ago
Chapter 53 – Dodging the Guard ago
Chapter 54 – Shield skills with Maximus ago
Chapter 55 – Fire Training ago
Chapter 56 – Adventures in Virinum I ago
Chapter 57 – Adventures in Virinum II ago
Chapter 58 – Adventures in Virinum III ago
Chapter 59 – Adventures in Virinum IV ago
Chapter 60 – Adventures in Virinum V ago
Chapter 61 – Adventures in Virinum VI ago
Chapter 62 – Leaving Virinum ago
Chapter 63 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus I ago
Chapter 64 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus II ago
Chapter 65 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus III ago
Chapter 66 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus IV ago
Chapter 67 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus V ago
Chapter 68 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus VI ago
Chapter 69 – Classing up! ago
Chapter 70 – Arriving in Perinthus ago
Chapter 71 – Plague I ago
Chapter 72– Plague II ago
Chapter 73– Plague III ago
Chapter 74– Plague IV ago
Chapter 75– Plague V ago
Chapter 76– Plague VI ago
Chapter 77– Plague VII ago
Chapter 78– Plague VIII ago
Chapter 79– Plague IX – The Greater Good ago
Chapter 80– Plague X ago
Chapter 81– Plague XI ago
Chapter 82– Plague XII ago
Chapter 83– Plague XIII ago
Chapter 84– Plague XIV ago
Chapter 85– Plague XV ago
Chapter 86– Plague XVI ago
Chapter 87– Plague XVII ago
Chapter 87.5 Bonus Chapter: Julia and Elainus react to Elaine running away. ago
Chapter 88– Plague Aftermath ago
Chapter 89– Sing my name, for a thousand years ago
Chapter 90– Brigantium I ago
Chapter 91– Brigantium II ago
Chapter 92– Libraries and babies ago
Chapter 93– A Dozen Different Methods of Death ago
Chapter 94– Entering Ariminum, The Capital ago
Chapter 95– Minor Interlude – Julius Reports to Command ago
Chapter 96– Prelude to a meeting ago
Chapter 97– Reunion ago
Chapter 98– Government Vivisectionists ago
Chapter 99– The Grand Ranger Meeting ago
Chapter 100– Major Interlude – Iona – The Tunnel to Terrabethia ago
Chapter 101– Ranger Academy I ago
Chapter 102– Ranger Academy II ago
Chapter 103– Ranger Academy III ago
Chapter 104– Ranger Academy IV ago
Chapter 105– Ranger Academy V ago
Chapter 106– Ranger Academy VI ago
Chapter 107– Ranger Academy VII ago
Chapter 108– Ranger Academy VIII ago
Chapter 109– Ranger Academy IX ago
Chapter 110– Ranger Academy X ago
Chapter 111– Ranger Academy XI ago
Chapter 112.1– Ranger Academy XII ago
Chapter 112.2– Ranger Academy XII ago
Chapter 113.1– Ranger Academy XIII ago
Chapter 113.2– Ranger Academy XIII ago
Chapter 114.1– Ranger Academy XIV ago
Chapter 114.2– Ranger Academy XIV ago
Chapter 115.1– Ranger Academy XV- Classing up! ago
Chapter 115.2– Ranger Academy XV- Classing up! ago
Chapter 116.1– Ranger Academy XVI ago
Chapter 116.2– Ranger Academy XVI ago
Chapter 117.1– Ranger Academy XVII- Graduation ago
Chapter 117.2– Ranger Academy XVII- Graduation ago
Chapter 118.1 – Ranger Convocation ago
Chapter 118.2 – Ranger Convocation ago
Chapter 119.1 – A date ago
Chapter 119.2 – A date ago
Chapter 119.3 – A date ago
Chapter 120.1 – History Lessons ago
Chapter 120.2 – History Lessons ago
Interlude - Bonus Content - Black Crow//White Dove ago
Chapter 121 – Winding down ago
Chapter 122 – What to do with myself ago
Chapter 123 – Medical Manuscript ago
Chapter 124 – Preparing ago
Chapter 125 – Traveling to Deva ago
Chapter 126 – Deva I ago
Chapter 127 – Deva II ago
Chapter 128 – Deva III ago
Chapter 129 – Deva IV ago
Chapter 130 – Deva V ago
Chapter 131 – Returning Home I ago
Chapter 132 – Returning Home II ago
Chapter 133 – Returning Home III ago
Chapter 134 – Returning Home IV ago
Chapter 135 – Returning Home V ago
Chapter 136 – Returning Home VI ago
Chapter 137 – Returning Home VII ago
Chapter 138 – Returning Home VIII ago
Chapter ???? – The Coven of Fabulous Witches 0 ago
Chapter ???? – The Coven of Fabulous Witches III ago
Chapter 139 – After Action Report ago
Chapter 140 – Smoke and Mirrors ago
Chapter 141 – Autumn ago
Chapter 142 – Schools ago
Chapter 143 – Companion information ago
Chapter 144 – Adventurer’s Guild ago
Chapter 145 – Sentinel Dawn ago
Chapter 146.1 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.2 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.3 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.4 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.5 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.6 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.7 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 147 – A day in the life I ago
Chapter 148 – A day in the life II ago
Chapter 149 – Massage ago
Chapter 150 – Formorians I ago
Chapter 151 – Formorians II ago
Chapter 152 – Formorians III ago
Chapter 153 – Formorians IV ago
Chapter 154 – Formorians V ago
Chapter 155 – Formorians VI ago
Chapter 156 – Formorians VII ago
Chapter 157 – Formorians VIII ago
Chapter 158 – Formorians IX ago
Chapter 159 – Formorians X ago
Chapter 160 – Formorians XI ago
Chapter 161 – Formorians XII ago
Chapter 162 – Celestial Class up! I ago
Chapter 163.1 – Celestial Class up! II ago
Chapter 163.2 – Celestial Class up! II ago
Chapter 164.1 – Celestial Class up! III ago
Chapter 164.2 – Celestial Class up! III ago
Chapter 165 – Skills Skills Skills ago
Chapter 166 – Party ago
Chapter 167 – Mourning ago
Chapter 168.1 – Aftermath ago
Chapter 168.2 – Aftermath ago
Chapter 169 – Sentinel Meeting ago
Chapter 170 – Heading Out ago
Chapter 171 – Let’s go fly a kite ago
Chapter 172 – The Formorian Lands I ago
Chapter 173 – The Formorian Lands II ago
Chapter 174 – The Formorian Lands III ago
Chapter 175 – The Formorian Lands IV ago
Chapter 176 – Dwarves I ago
Chapter 177 – Dwarves II ago
Chapter 178 – Dwarves III ago
Chapter 179 – Dwarves IV ago
Chapter 180 – Dwarves V ago
Chapter 181 – Dwarves VI ago
Chapter 182 – Dwarves VII ago
Chapter 183 – Dwarves VIII ago
Chapter 184 – Dwarves IX ago
Chapter 185 – Dwarves X ago
Chapter 186 – Dwarves XI ago
Chapter 187 - The Dragoneye Moons I ago
Chapter 188 - The Dragoneye Moons II ago
Chapter 189 - The Dragoneye Moons III ago
Chapter 190 Minor Interlude – Autumn – The Letters I ago
Chapter 191 Interlude - The Letters II ago
Worldbuilding - What caused the deadzone? ago
Chapter 192 – The Fall ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.1 ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.2 ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.3 ago
Chapter ??? - Dragoneye Mortis 1.4 ago
Chapter 193 – Major Interlude – Iona – Julie d’Audrey I ago
Chapter 194 – Major Interlude – Iona – Julie d’Audrey II ago
Chapter 195 – Major Interlude – Iona – Julie d’Audrey III ago
Chapter 196 - Journey to the center of Pallos I ago
Chapter 197 - Journey to the center of Pallos II ago
Chapter 198 - Journey to the center of Pallos III ago
Chapter 199- Journey to the center of Pallos IV ago
Chapter 200 - Journey to the center of Pallos V ago
Chapter 201 - Journey to the center of Pallos VI ago
Chapter 202 - Journey to the center of Pallos VII ago
Chapter 203 - Journey to the center of Pallos VIII ago
Chapter 204 - Journey to the center of Pallos IX ago
Chapter 205 - Journey to the center of Pallos X ago
Chapter 206 - Journey to the center of Pallos XI ago
Chapter 207 - Journey to the center of Pallos XII ago
Chapter 208 - Journey to the center of Pallos XIII ago
Chapter 209 - Journey to the center of Pallos XIV ago
Chapter 210 - Journey to the center of Pallos XV ago
Chapter 211 - Radiance Class-up I ago
Chapter 212.1 - Radiance Class-up II ago
Chapter 212.2 - Radiance Class-up II ago
Chapter 213.1 - Shiny New Skills! I ago
Chapter 213.2 - Shiny New Skills! I ago
Chapter 214 - Shiny New Skills! II ago
Chapter 215 - The Golden Cage I ago
Chapter 216 - The Golden Cage II ago
Chapter 217 - The first escape attempt! I ago
Chapter 218 - The first escape attempt!! II ago
Chapter 219 - Alone in the Dark I ago
Chapter 220 - Alone in the Dark II ago
Chapter 221 - Beneath the Dragon’s Eyes I ago

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Beneath the Dragonseye Moons Advanced Review

Reviewed at: Chapter 189 - The Dragoneye Moons III

Well. I discovered this story four days ago, and binged it all the way through. Highly reccomend it.

The greatest praise I can give this story is that you can tell the author read most, if not all of, The Wandering Inn. I don't think any author can read through those 8+ million words unchanged, and the quality and some of the formatting in this story reflects that.

The story follows Elaine, a Healer. A girl who had her brain scrambled by a haughty and capricious god and then forcefully put into a harsh fantasy world, and giving off a vibe of a pre-medieval era civilization. Almost Roman. The author perfectly captures the perspective of an aloof and naive female protagonist, and you can tell a lot of thought went into making the character real. After several important moments, you can tell that she matures somewhat, but still maintains her kid-like personality. You have to consider, 189 chapters in, and she's still only 19 years old (not counting her life on Earth, as her memories were scrambled during reincarnation). What kind of 19 year old can be mentally stable after the types of challenges the MC is put through? Who wouldn't be constantly spacing out and forgetting things after their brain was put through a divine cheese grater? The other reviewers seem to completely disregard this fact. If she were posited to be at least 50 years old, or even more, then maybe yeah, the immaturity would be cringe-inducing and hard to read. But you're reading a journey of this young woman put into a place of responsibility and tough choices, Oath-bound to a noble cause, and it is hard not to cheer for her.

And it's not any flaw of the author to write a childish main character. It is clearly a stylistic choice. Once you meet and parse all the supporting characters, you realize that they all have significant depth to them - histories, relationships, dreams, aspirations, goals. I would bet 20 coins that the author has watched Brandon Sanderson's lectures on character building. Be forewarned, there are character deaths, just like in any fantasy epic like this. The stakes are always high.

The world is well written, with the geography refreshingly taken into account when being introduced to new locations. In the author's own words, "Geography becomes history. History becomes politics." All the cities mentioned are examined though this lens, and are well thought out, the trade routes reasonable, and the mangos critical. There's only one major qualm I have with the setting presented, in that the story claims a staunch position of a heavily patriarchal society. When the System gives equal treatment to both sexes. It is hand-waved away in a couple sentences in some chapter that this is primarily due to the neverending war with giant ants happening on the western border, and that the Senate decided that women need to stay at home and make as many children as possible, or some-such. When in reality it is shown that any woman with a modicum of power gets her way. But the story eventually concedes and it mentions that rebellions often happen because of this stupid rule. Oh well. It is easy to ignore most of the time.

Another strange thing the author did is introduce another character that shares a very similar background and personality to the MC's late childhood friend, but set several hundred years or so in the future. This happens in sort-of interlude chapters between the published books. I recommend skipping them entirely and then going back once this character become relevant to the story (as the author has claimed they will be), but I will begrudgingly say they present an interesting second cultural setting in this world and give some useful background info to the Dwarves arc, and so may be worth a read in the order presented.

Finally I really like the LitRPG System devised by the author. Semi-subjective Classes, interesting and well named Skills, with individual control over Stats, allowing for Min-Max potential. It is shown that really every Class can be very powerful, but the name of the game is experience gain. No matter what you have, the more levels you have - the stronger you are, period. Mana Regen is the lifeline of all mages. Physical stats have a huge impact on quality of life. Vitality is not HP as is the case in most stories, decapitation is decapitation for most people, but, in theory, survivable once you have maybe tens or hundreds of thousands points in it. Lots of juicy System notifications. 

As a side note, if you like dinosaurs, they are prominent in the setting. You will be googling their names, as the author likes to skip out describing their visual aspects most of the time. Actually, also certain fantasy creatures too. The author uses terms and creatures from basically every mythology. Think retiarius, serpopards, selkies, xuanwu. It's always delightful to come across a new thing I've never heard of before! 

9.5/10 story!

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Ok so...where do i start?
 About the overall rating, i just LOVE your book. It is a really good entertainement and i was really sucked in your universe, loving the character( including the childhood part ) and the way you made your system.

STYLE

Its really well described ( a little too much sometimes to me, but i'm more used to light novels, so it's ok for me, way to readapt me to longer writings) and we can almost see the scene playing front of our eyes! Well done

GRAMMAR

Nor a lot to say here, it is nice, and as a non native english speaker, i understand everything (just had to grab some translation times to times, making my vocabulary richer, thanks ! )

STORY

Ok so! The story is up and down, not an all bright road for the main character, and i LOVE IT. Way more realistic, we feel the struggles and the pain of the main character and of the ranger team too! Pretty damn good!

CHARACTER

You managed to fully give life to all the ranger team, an hard work, especially on the long term, and we can feel the changes in Elaine mind as she suffers and cross hardship!

To conclude:
Need to keep reading, need more BTDM, need more MANGOS !

Really good job, bloody amazing book! Thanks again !

lemurianx
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Reading this far 62 chps, MC still cannot protect herself from normal thugs. And Her mentality sucks way too much. She has low common sense for a person she was supposed to be. I cannot help but to think that this novel might be worth it if not for the MC. And the world building really needs some work, rather than stuffing the novel with worthless skill level ups..

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This is one of the better stories on RR at the moment which fills your need for fun progression with constraints on the story.

I was hesitant to start this one as many reviews mentioned the casual sexism and power disparity of women to men and i usually avoid anything with that kind of flavour in it and after reading over 200 pages i actually didnt really think it was all that bad. Theres no rape in it, i think maybe 1 off screen mention earlier on and thats about it. There is a difference in the way women are treated and the author has stated it was written in because it somewhat mirrors the real world however the main issue i have with it is that its inserted early on as an issue with the world that the protag has (same with slavery) yet nothing is ever done about it. You get the impression that she is eventually going to do something about these systemic issues and then as the story goes on its barely mentioned which, i feel, is a lost opportunity, The MC seems to ust ignore the issue completely and its a real shame. This, i think, is why a lot of reviews have mentioned it being uneccesary as theres functionaly no plot related reasons for these issues to be present. At best it slightly builds the world and at worst it makes the reader frustrated at the lack of thought thats gone into the worldbuilding, or lack therof. These things can be easily overlooked though.

Some other thoughts, Elaine is a mostly fun character, if a little childishly written and biege. It feels like she has been letting the story guide her and doesn't feel particulary assertive, often going where the plot and other characters guide her, however this is changing in recent chapters.

Her main class get overpowered really early i think, which put constraints on the character growth but it has been managed well but i do feel that the fight scenes and levels can be confusing.

We get a lot of level skill ups and without really understanding what they do or what effect they are having. There are some skills that you actualy don't know what there effect is and it seems the levelling of them is arbitrary numbers that are just being thrown around but its still a satisfying climb to become better and Elaine does choose her skills/classes carefully which i greatly appreciate as its not ust haphazardky chosen on a whim.

The side characters are fairly well drawn but i do wish there was more of a focus on fleshing them out instead of introducing a bunch of new ones that really don't make a difference.

All in all, the story is really fun, definitely addicting, i basically read this whenever i could until i caught up to the current chapters so its worth a go.