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Elaine is ripped from this world to Pallos, a land of unlimited possibilities made real by a grand System governing classes, skills, and magic.
An ideal society? What is this, a fantasy novel?
Adventures? Right this way!
A Grand quest? Nah.
Friends and loot? Heck yes!
Humans are the top dog? Nope, dinosaur food.
Healing and fighting? Well, everything is trying to eat her.
Join Elaine as she travels around Pallos, discovering all the wonders and mysteries of the world, trying to find a place where she belongs, hunting those elusive mangos, all while the ominous Dragoneye Moons watch her every move.
Hey! Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is my first writing effort, so please be kind, but don’t hesitate to point out the flaws.
The story starts off slowly, more like a slice of life than action-adventure, but it gets there!
I’m going to be posting M-W-F
I do know how the story ends, and I promise if it ever gets dropped, or I stop doing this, I will post the ending. There will be no random “this is the last chapter” out of the blue.
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LITRPG, but not too heavy on stats. A kind of Isekay and a strong, but not overpower character.
This novel goes to something that is similar to a medieval fantasy at the begining, but as the world is presented it shows that it is very original.
I like the way that this story looks very familiar but at the same time very original. The way that stats and skills are ver important, but they are not the whole of power.
Very good 3D characters.
As stated in the title, I am currently binge-reading this story. While the starting point of a reincarnation as well as the litrpg elements is nothing new, I think this story uses them well. I specifically have to point out the integration of tradeoffs between the different stats, it's bold and I like it. Same with the more realistic storytelling and character developments. Some might disagree but I appreciate the authors approach to plot armor, allowing for more immersion and better written character in my opinion. I also really like that humans are not at the top in this story!!
What I also want to mention how much I appreciate that the author also integrated larger social issues into the world such as slavery and sexism/chauvinism while doing a really god job to do it in an non-offensive way to the reader, crafting a clear image of the society of this world.
The writing style itself as well as the grammar is nothing special, in the sense that I got nothing to complain about. It's good, makes for pleasant reading.
Conclusion: totally recommend to read! (might edit later if my opinion changes after reading more ;) )
P.S. almost forgot even though it is very obvious ^^ how cool is it to have the main character be a healer??? (very!)
This is a funny story with a somewhat unique gaming system.
The story is some what standard longterm litRPG story where the goal of reading is not to se the hero save the world but to follow the mc and live in the world through the characters. So the story will live and die with how the world and the characters are.
The world is a unique take on the old classical world of the Roman republic, though it will not go in to the politics of the Roman republic while sometimes at the same time criticize it in a mostly humorous way by having the mc rant about it.
The flaw in this story is that it is unfocused. Which is the norm in most of the longterm chapter to chapter storytelling. Where if any point or moral is meant to be shown or taught it is muddled by the unfocus of the story.
The strength of the story is the world and the sense of humor in the world. This world has a great presence and at least I really feel that this is world in which to laugh and have fun in.
The grammar is not something I can comment on.
There is sometimes a tone problem with the characters and the scenes chosen. Where for example a very serious character who is known for not handeling pressure well suddenly in a serious situation started cracking jokes. Would have worked with another character but with that character. Which woresn a different problem where characters on the same side start to feel really homogeneous.
Final point, if you have the humor this will be one of the best story's you read on RR but if not then you find many characters and scenes irritating.
Last edited: August 2. 2022
Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is a story with great aspirations, I think that oozes out of this story's every pore. One really doesn't have to look further than the impressive worldbuilding, to realise this.
I never expected to see a roman-empire-esque civilisation in the tropics, coexisting with dinosaurs so seamlessly and if that isn't a testament to the sheer amount of legwork that has been done behind the scenes, I don't know what is.
In general this story manages to take the tried and true fabric of the isekai-litRPG gente and interweaves it with unique elements that keep you returning for more.
However, these aspirations also work to the story's detriment, as — in my opinion — the author doesn't have the skill to pull them off in just the right way... Or perhaps more aptly, the determination to see them through.
In general, at many points in the story it feels like the author is chasing a specific goal he has in mind, while kinda messing up the 'how' and 'why' of getting there and the consequences of both the decision made on the way and of the goal itself.
He knows where he wants to go, but he doesn't quite know how to get there and also doesn't want to go one iota further than them.
On the one hand, I admire that the author doesn't cave to audience pressure easily and doesn't present a watered-down version of the story he wants to tell.
On the other hand... God I wish he'd just cave on certain things, because I'd rather take mediocrity than something that actively hurts my reading experience.
Let's take our main character as an example: (minor spoilers)
Elaine is pretty explicitly written as having ADHD. Her mind keeps straying, jumping from place to place — Often at the worst moments.
So what does the story do with this?
It doesn't show her coping with it. She doesn't have to awkwardly ask for parts of an important briefing to be repeated because her concentration lapsed, and we rarely see her fighting to not get distracted.
Instead, even when she wasn't paying attention to 80% of some briefing, she just mentally shrugs her shoulders and says "Oh well. It'll be fine." — Which could also be interesting, if something happened because of this leading to her growing as a character... But nothing does.
She has ADHD, but how does this truly affect her beyond the surface level of 'I can't remember this part'?
What trouble does it cause her? How does she feel about it? How does she cope and attempt to circumvent the hurdles it brings with it.
We get none of this.
If anything her ADHD is used for comedy such as all the instances of her concentration immediately lapsing as soon as a mango enters her perception in a repeating joke that has left me stonefaced ever since it's first occurrence.
Another one of her flaws is how easily she trusts others and divulges secrets... Which does occasionally come back to bite her, but she doesn't learn from this either.
At this point I am just wondering whether she is just not allowed to have character development.
Will her character traits forever be: "ADHD, childish, trusting, likes mangos"?
As this story has progressed I keep on feeling like she's nothing but a vehicle for plot — A puppet tugged along on more than visible strings. One that increasingly grates on my patience.
As a second example, let's take a look at sexism and slavery in the story: (minor spoilere)
I honestly think it does this rather well done — In the beginning, at least.
Many reviews and comments go on and on about how "sexism isn't rational" in this fantasy world. But is it ever rational?
I liked that the story went deeper into the absolute dependence of a wife on her husband and the lack of legal protection she has. Same holds true to the practice of slavery.
So we're doing great... At least until the first arc is over. After this, presumably because the author didn't want the story's tone to be bleak, these issues are basically completely sweeped under the rug.
Sure once and again some guard will ask her why she's out at night, but that's pretty much the the extent these issues have been reduced to.
Of course, Elaine can't really do anything about them immediately. But she's never had as much as a single thought about trying to change something, either about her own circumstances, or society at large.
Just a thought of "Fuck this republic, I'm this close to living out in the woods" or her getting involved in some minor matter pertaining to any of these topics would go a long way.
Does she have any loyalties to this nation, or would she pack up her things and her family and emigrate to the next best civilisation, should the chance arise?
We don't know.
Instead... These big thematic elements have all but completely dropped off the map, for no apparent reason.
Again: There's so much good potential here, but it just gets sweeped under the rug because the author wanted to show the reader this part of the society, but didn't actually want to write on a deeper level about it.
What is it author? Do you want to make these things plot points, or don't you? Please don't half-ass it!
Edit — 14th of March 2020:
These issues have been addressed to a significant degree in recent chapters. Thanks, Selkie.
Objectively there are far less issues here than in most other stories on this site. But what really hurts about these ones is the fact that I get the feeling that they will never go away. They will just keep on mounting and mounting until slowly even the worldbuilding will not be able to keep me invested.
Because I don't disagree with the writing skill and aptitude — I disagree with the conscious decisions behind the story, the planning, the themes and tone, how they are presented and to what extent.
Edit — 14. of March 2022:
There used to be something here, it has been scrubbed.
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Very good and binge worthy story. Few story gripes that make me knock off a star
1.MC is troglodyte level dumb. We're talking 90 IQ dumb - can only barely reason out things she was directly taught. Her leveling up quickly is kinda insulting to everyone in the universe who had to actually think their way past solutions and EVERYONE seems smarter than her. Subtle critique of modern feminists? Idk
2.Abilities can literally do everything and MC rarely faces a challenge that she fails. If she does fail she is rescued immediately. Anyone who is really important to MC - for eg artemis- never faces any danger.
Overall a cliche dumb OP MC with a heavy smattering of modern identity politics thrown in. Very uninspired and by the numbers writing but I see how this will appeal to ppl who like modern YA
There's a lot of good in the story, from the characters, world, and pacing. Aside from one bump early on that made me stop reading for several months (only to decide to give it another chance), everything about the story is good. It has payoffs and set ups over a long period of time, and shorter arcs.
There are times where you, as a reader, need to put some faith in the author to put some pieces together in the future. Especially in the world building and piecing together how the status-quo got to be as it is. I think the faith isn't misplaced, but it also sometimes asks a little too much.
I have read several stories that could tentatively be described as "Isekais." This is the first one I've absolutely loved. I have been ravenously reading it the past few days. I signed up for this site specifically to follow this story. (I've read the whole thing as of this review; I don't know if that's apparent, since I didn't create the account until I'd caught up. Too busy reading.)
Thank you so much, Selkie! I eagerly await reading this as long as it goes on.
I'm gonna get the minutiae out of the way first.
Style: standard first person storytelling, really well done. The pacing is very nice, good detail when needed, but it doesnt drag and it doesn't skip from fight to fight like a murder hobo Chronicle.
Story: A lovely tale of a young woman striving to be more than her surroundings demand, and making a fair bit of a racket doing it! It's fun to watch a hero who faces obstacles beyond those that can punched into submission. How will she break the limits of her society, and will she do so in a way that opens the path for others, or is she merely one of the exceptions to the rule?
Grammar: is good. What else is there to say?
Character: while it might be nice to have more solid physical character descriptions, there are no flat characters here, beyond maybe Kerberos, but that may be remedied sometime in the future. All characters are notable, unique, well thought out, and well executed. This is a vibrant world, full of vibrant people.
Thanks to those who read this far, and thanks to the author for writing this wonderful work!
Oh, and congrats on your wee baby!!
This is my first review so sorry if its unreadable or just outright confusing. Skip to the end if you want the short version of the review.
Let's start with the positive parts of this story, from my perspective.
The world itself is very interesting from what I have read. There is a war in the background that seems to be a threat that will come into focus later on in the story, but for now we only know that it seems to be a war with another species. The focus so far have been more on the nation and cities rather than the whole world/continent. There seems to be hints that there exists more nations with humans in them but so far we are only aware of the main nation and it's allied nation, which if I remember correctly was hinted to be more of a city-state.
What this story does very well is give off the feeling that humans are not the dominant species who rules everything. There are many stories around where the author has stated that humans are weak but have later on had problems following through on that and allowed humans to be nigh-unbeatable. In this story you will not find this flaw, as the author stated in the summary humans are not the top dog and every time the protagonist goes outside the city walls you can feel the untamed wilderness around them with dangers hidden in the surrounding. Of course there are dangers lurking in the shadows of the cities aswell.
Overall the author does a great job in conveying and really making you feel as if this is a proper world with many dangers. This is in my opinion the best part of the novel and I can barely get enough of it.
Now the negative parts.
Sexism without reason, read the review of Ziggy, unearned sexism from poor world building, I aggressive with what he is saying. Also remember this is a litrpg world where you can upgrade your stats and gain skills, classes and levels.
The characters. I do not like nor believe in perfect character, flaws are what makes characters go from archetypes to someone you wish was real so you could befriend or just chat with them, they are a necessary part in making character feel less like puppets following the authors demands and more of creatures who make their own decisions. The problem comes when the flaws are so many or so big that they overshadow everything else that the character is suppose to be, to the point one can only see the flaws in them. Another problem is when the flaws are directly opposed to the characters background and story.
Let me give you an example, someone in this world elite military unit has just gotten a direct order from their captain to protect another member of their team, this other member is extremely weak and has just spent the day healing people and by doing so essentially become a target for any slavers who could sell them at a high price or any other person desperate enough to try rob/kidnapp them. Now what should this elite member do?
A: protect the healer and escort them back to the rest of the team or any other safe spot like a guard station, and then go out in town to play around.
B: Ask some guards(or someone they can trust) to guide the healer to a safe spot, and after doing this go out to play around.
C: Abandon their duty to play around and let the healer walk home by themselves in the middle of the night while knowing full well that some people can hide from their perception skills.
I will give you a hint in what they choose to do. Let just say that the person in question does not seem to have had any sort of training to suppress their desires.
That was just a example of flaws but the most infuriating person is actually the protagonist who no matter what happens does not seem to grow up. When I made this review I had just read chapter 60. 60 chapters of very little real character growth for the protagonist does not make the future look bright for them.
I will now tell of two major problems that I have with the protagonist, other than that she never grows up.
First problem is in how she acts to counter herself. She dreams of becoming a healer and after an unfortunate accident she vows to never hurt anyone and help everyone she can. This gives her a unique skill which makes her healing much better compared to others her level. But remember this is a dangerous world where she does not only have to protect herself from monster but people too, well I'm sure you see where the problem shows up. Not only does this limit it also hinders her teammates because she might need to heal their enemies, suddenly she is a very real hinderance in human fights. But she loves her freedom meaning she does not want to be restricted and she also wants to travel with them, so not only is she hindering herself she is also a huge liability to her teammates but she never questions if she should throw away the skill. As a side not, it's kinda hilarious how she wants to be completely free but she can't because of her skills restrictions.
The other problem comes into focus when she gains the chance to get another class. Instead of choosing something that compliments her healing making it more powerful or choosing something that negates her incredible weak self-defense. Because of her childishness she forces the system to give her a class that will be able to give her two abilities in the future even after being warned that it's not a suitable class for her. Ability one, the ability to fly. Ability two, the ability to throw fireballs (remember, she is sworn to do no harm). This puts into focus her childishness and her inability to grow up, as a note, this is after she has been put in danger many times already and she has lamented her own weakness.
I have already dragged out this review so my final sentence will be the following. With the exception of the baseless sexism, the setting and the authors ability to potrey it is amazing but it is unfortunately wasted on the character to the point of making me incredible sad after almost every chapter.
I quite enjoyed the earlier parts of the series right up until just after the capital arc and the author posted a "report" that was essentially spoilers for what is currently happening. I suspect that it's their way of combining the disparate Elaine and Lyra (? I think that's the name - I started to lose interest when this side story was added) storylines. Regardless the story does not deserve the 1 and 2-star reviews that are being posted.