Beneath the Dragoneye Moons

by Selkie

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Elaine is ripped from this world to Pallos, a land of unlimited possibilities made real by a grand System governing classes, skills, and magic.

An ideal society? What is this, a fantasy novel?

Adventures? Right this way!

A Grand quest? Nah.

Friends and loot? Heck yes!

Humans are the top dog? Nope, dinosaur food.

Healing and fighting? Well, everything is trying to eat her.

Join Elaine as she travels around Pallos, discovering all the wonders and mysteries of the world, trying to find a place where she belongs, hunting those elusive mangos, all while the ominous Dragoneye Moons watch her every move.


Hey! Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is my first writing effort, so please be kind, but don’t hesitate to point out the flaws.

The story starts off slowly, more like a slice of life than action-adventure, but it gets there!

I’m going to be posting M-W-F

I do know how the story ends, and I promise if it ever gets dropped, or I stop doing this, I will post the ending. There will be no random “this is the last chapter” out of the blue.


Cover art by Lee Kent: https://www.artstation.com/leekent

High-res image of the cover: https://imgur.com/a/7MDQQC6

This story is being published on Royal Road and Scribblehub.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Rebirth ago
Chapter 2 - System Day I ago
Chapter 3 - System Day II ago
Chapter 4 - System Day III ago
Chapter 5 - System Day IV ago
Chapter 6 - Learning Skills I ago
Chapter 7 - Learning Skills II ago
Chapter 8 - Learning Skills III ago
Chapter 9 - The System Unlocks! ago
Chapter 10 - Girl Talk ago
Chapter 11 - Shadowing Guards ago
Chapter 12 - Artemis ago
Chapter 13 - Lessons on Magic ago
Chapter 14 - Decisions I ago
Chapter 15 - Decisions II ago
Chapter 16 - General Skills Bootcamp ago
Chapter 17 - The first Class-up ago
Chapter 18 - So many new skills! ago
Chapter 19 - Funeral ago
Chapter 20 - 6 years and change later ago
Chapter 21 - Catching up ago
Chapter 22 - Injustice ago
Chapter 23 - Level 100 I ago
Chapter 24 - Level 100 II ago
Chapter 25 - Level 100 III ago
Chapter 26 - Level 100 IV ago
Chapter 27 - The Ranger Squad ago
Chapter 28 - Healing ago
Chapter 29 - Secrets, Secrets, They're no Fun ago
Chapter 30 - A conversation ago
Chapter 31 - The Adventure Begins! ago
Chapter 32 – The woods are dark and deep ago
Chapter 33 – Verdant Village ago
Chapter 34 – How far does an Oath go? ago
Chapter 35 – Unless they’re shared with everyone! I ago
Chapter 36 – Unless they’re shared with everyone! II ago
Chapter 37 – On the road ago
Chapter 38 – Voting on Elaine ago
Chapter 39 – Sheep’s Ford ago
Chapter 40 – The road to Virinum I ago
Chapter 41 – The road to Virinum II ago
Chapter 42 – Arrival in Virinum ago
Chapter 43 –Virinum I ago
Chapter 44 –Virinum II ago
Chapter 45 –Virinum III ago
Chapter 46 –Virinum IV ago
Chapter 47 –Virinum V ago
Chapter 48 – Virinum VI ago
Chapter 49 – Classing up I ago
Chapter 50 – Classing up II ago
Interlude - The Magic Elements Explained! ago
Chapter 51 – New Skills I ago
Chapter 52 – Shield Skills with Artemis ago
Chapter 53 – Dodging the Guard ago
Chapter 54 – Shield skills with Maximus ago
Chapter 55 – Fire Training ago
Chapter 56 – Adventures in Virinum I ago
Chapter 57 – Adventures in Virinum II ago
Chapter 58 – Adventures in Virinum III ago
Chapter 59 – Adventures in Virinum IV ago
Chapter 60 – Adventures in Virinum V ago
Chapter 61 – Adventures in Virinum VI ago
Chapter 62 – Leaving Virinum ago
Chapter 63 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus I ago
Chapter 64 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus II ago
Chapter 65 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus III ago
Chapter 66 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus IV ago
Chapter 67 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus V ago
Chapter 68 – Adventures on the way to Perinthus VI ago
Chapter 69 – Classing up! ago
Chapter 70 – Arriving in Perinthus ago
Chapter 71 – Plague I ago
Chapter 72– Plague II ago
Chapter 73– Plague III ago
Chapter 74– Plague IV ago
Chapter 75– Plague V ago
Chapter 76– Plague VI ago
Chapter 77– Plague VII ago
Chapter 78– Plague VIII ago
Chapter 79– Plague IX – The Greater Good ago
Chapter 80– Plague X ago
Chapter 81– Plague XI ago
Chapter 82– Plague XII ago
Chapter 83– Plague XIII ago
Chapter 84– Plague XIV ago
Chapter 85– Plague XV ago
Chapter 86– Plague XVI ago
Chapter 87– Plague XVII ago
Chapter 87.5 Bonus Chapter: Julia and Elainus react to Elaine running away. ago
Chapter 88– Plague Aftermath ago
Chapter 89– Sing my name, for a thousand years ago
Chapter 90– Brigantium I ago
Chapter 91– Brigantium II ago
Chapter 92– Libraries and babies ago
Chapter 93– A Dozen Different Methods of Death ago
Chapter 94– Entering Ariminum, The Capital ago
Chapter 95– Minor Interlude – Julius Reports to Command ago
Chapter 96– Prelude to a meeting ago
Chapter 97– Reunion ago
Chapter 98– Government Vivisectionists ago
Chapter 99– The Grand Ranger Meeting ago
Chapter 100– Major Interlude – Iona – The Tunnel to Terrabethia ago
Chapter 101– Ranger Academy I ago
Chapter 102– Ranger Academy II ago
Chapter 103– Ranger Academy III ago
Chapter 104– Ranger Academy IV ago
Chapter 105– Ranger Academy V ago
Chapter 106– Ranger Academy VI ago
Chapter 107– Ranger Academy VII ago
Chapter 108– Ranger Academy VIII ago
Chapter 109– Ranger Academy IX ago
Chapter 110– Ranger Academy X ago
Chapter 111– Ranger Academy XI ago
Chapter 112.1– Ranger Academy XII ago
Chapter 112.2– Ranger Academy XII ago
Chapter 113.1– Ranger Academy XIII ago
Chapter 113.2– Ranger Academy XIII ago
Chapter 114.1– Ranger Academy XIV ago
Chapter 114.2– Ranger Academy XIV ago
Chapter 115.1– Ranger Academy XV- Classing up! ago
Chapter 115.2– Ranger Academy XV- Classing up! ago
Chapter 116.1– Ranger Academy XVI ago
Chapter 116.2– Ranger Academy XVI ago
Chapter 117.1– Ranger Academy XVII- Graduation ago
Chapter 117.2– Ranger Academy XVII- Graduation ago
Chapter 118.1 – Ranger Convocation ago
Chapter 118.2 – Ranger Convocation ago
Chapter 119.1 – A date ago
Chapter 119.2 – A date ago
Chapter 119.3 – A date ago
Chapter 120.1 – History Lessons ago
Chapter 120.2 – History Lessons ago
Interlude - Bonus Content - Black Crow//White Dove ago
Chapter 121 – Winding down ago
Chapter 122 – What to do with myself ago
Chapter 123 – Medical Manuscript ago
Chapter 124 – Preparing ago
Chapter 125 – Traveling to Deva ago
Chapter 126 – Deva I ago
Chapter 127 – Deva II ago
Chapter 128 – Deva III ago
Chapter 129 – Deva IV ago
Chapter 130 – Deva V ago
Chapter 131 – Returning Home I ago
Chapter 132 – Returning Home II ago
Chapter 133 – Returning Home III ago
Chapter 134 – Returning Home IV ago
Chapter 135 – Returning Home V ago
Chapter 136 – Returning Home VI ago
Chapter 137 – Returning Home VII ago
Chapter 138 – Returning Home VIII ago
Chapter ???? – The Coven of Fabulous Witches 0 ago
Chapter ???? – The Coven of Fabulous Witches III ago
Chapter 139 – After Action Report ago
Chapter 140 – Smoke and Mirrors ago
Chapter 141 – Autumn ago
Chapter 142 – Schools ago
Chapter 143 – Companion information ago
Chapter 144 – Adventurer’s Guild ago
Chapter 145 – Sentinel Dawn ago
Chapter 146.1 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.2 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.3 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.4 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.5 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.6 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago
Chapter 146.7 – Major Interlude – Iona – The 300. ago

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Agasthenes
Overall

First of all writings is good, characters are good, grammar seems fine, system is good. Overall solid story.

What sets this story apart is first the world building and second the MC.

We have seen plenty portal fictions on this side. All different in their own ways. But one thing they (almost) all have in common. The gender equality. Magic as the great equalizer. But not in this story. 

The inherent and stark sexism in this world sets interesting (new) chalanges for our mc with 21st century expectations for life. 

It explores themes too often overlooked and therefore stands apart from other more comfy stories.

The second strong point is the mc. There is no talking around it, but she is kinda dumb. Or at least short sighted. She makes questionable decisions that lead to bad things. The great thing is, you don't hate her for it. The decisions are reasonable from her perspective and tbh I could find myself doing the same things.

Overall a good story.

tllgsis1
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Beneath the dragoneye moons is straight, solid fantasy. Novel quality, it boasts twisting narratives, gripping plot and character, and just a real good time in general. It doesn't use tropic or blatant sexual appeals (beyond the level up system, but let's be honest this is RR) to retain attention: it sustains that though just solid, solid writing. English major stamp of approval!

 Style:

Main POV of a happy character, who processes and feels her trauma and motivation. Captures how a child feels without breaking immersion that isekai stories often lose by ignoring the mentality/thoughts processes of an experienced person. Humor when needed, tension when needed.

Story:

 great world building; it doesn't get lost in the details, but keeps that technobabble edge that maintains immersion. Good at gripping hints that leave you wanting more exposition, and releasing it at an appropriate pace.

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 novel quality, 5 stars ez

 Character score:

 well written characters, both in terms on the main POV as well as NPCs. You feel attached to them, while knowing that they are all dancing on the edge of the mortal coil; the author has successfully avoided Mary Sues so far, and power trips are mostly avoided by having a massive world and a long way to go.

Dolamun
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Beneath the dragon eye moons is in my opinion underrated. In contrast with regular LITRPG's this story has less of a focus on fighting. This gives the author time to build the world in a cohesive way. The class system is similar to azarinth healer,  but the twist that passive skills consume mana regeneration is creative. 

The style is in my opinion fine, i have found no issues with the pacing or the word choise. 

The story is well set up from the premise. The reason Elaine went out to explore is in my opinion tragic, but the way the author managed to evoke feelings in those early chapters shows how immersive it was set up. There are no flat, one dimensional characters, except maybe for the fiancee guy. 

Elaine's family is dynamic and the underprivileged position of women in this setting can convey a feeling of frustration. But not at the story itself, no the frustration is aimed at the world she lives in. You want to see how Elaine will change these situations over time and how people will react to her actions. From the way Elaine's family tries to contol her to her to her admiration of Artemis, and her friendship with Lyra, the world feels real.

Grammar wise, again, i have found no major mistakes. 

The author has clearly planned this story with care and it shows

That-Which-Shall-Hug-You
Overall

It's a good series, with a few glaring flaws. First off, as the other comments mention there is the issue of sexism, I don't mind things like that in stories. As long as there are good reasons for it. But there aren't, and secondly. The protagonist is ditsy, but she also recognizes her faults and works to improve herself! That more then makes up for it in my book. So.. This novel has several glaring flaws, only two of which I've mentioned. But it's quality and other characters more then make up for it

Logistics Officer Laith
Overall

As the title says, it's not quite a 5, but it is close.

For me the only thing holding it back from that last half star is the inconsistent pacing. Now don't get me wrong, I'm loving the story it's just that it can go from action packed to fluff without warning. I like a little more wind up/down, but again, personal preference.

Nayruke
Overall

The grammar is excellent and the writing is near the best you can find on the site. The story hasn't progressed much as of chapter 9 but the world building, characterization and magic system seem well thought out and implemented. If you like LitRPG you should give this a try.

Yakosh
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My overall review is that the story is definitely worth a read. 

This story has several good features, but chief among them is the main character.

Character score (5 stars): She has her flaws, both as a character and as a person, but the author has committed to making her a good person in a world that is largely quite shitty, which is practically unique as far as I've seen. There's stories like Cinanmon Bun (also great), where the main character radiates an aura of wholesome, but the world itself bends to her aura. Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is not like that, and Elaine's commitment to doing good takes effort and has its costs (though the system does reward her for it). I will note, the MC is not a pacifist, so don't worry about that.

The MC acts her biological age and basically the only affect, and the bulk of the story so far has been with her 14 years old, which also makes this one of the very few stories I've seen with a fairly realistic child MC. This may get annoying for some readers, I'm sure. She's easily distracted (though it might just be ADHD lol), kinda clueless, and easily pressured into going along with stupid shit. She's also determined, brave, and principled generally making her a fairly unique, charming MC that's fun to read.

Other characters are also interesting, consistent, and individual.

Grammar score (5 stars): No issues?

Style socre (4.5 stars): There's nothing wrong with the prose, it doesn't feel choppy or unnatural or whatever. It's also nothing exceptional so I'm knocking off half a star.

Story (4 stars): The plot itself is good by the standards of RR and litRPGs, and I would have given this 5 stars if that was everything, but world building has to go somewhere and this seems like the best category for it. The world building is, frankly, kinda sloppy. There's no glaring inconsistencies, but it does feel like it exists to serve the story rather than being built organically. As the unfortunately top review points out, there's sexism without an obvious explanation. It doesn't end up being a big problem for the story in my opinion, but it is a problem. An explanation is eventually provided, but it's kinda weak and very late into the story. The author is kinda slow with letting you in on the world building too. Obviously, I don't want an exposition dump on how the world works, but it would be nice to be less utterly lost about everything, including some things which seem to be basically common knowledge and thus odd that the MC is unaware of them. There's not really any inconsistencies that I've noticed, and it's not bad, it just feels kinda sloppy.

I suppose I might as well throw it in this category as well: The litRPG system itself is fine. Nothing particularly unique, but nothing wrong with it. The class selection aspect is pretty interesting and seems to be a plot thread, but otherwise... the only thing to note is that the system appears to encourage being a murderhobo substantially less than some. Classes level by doing what they're designed for, which is only sometimes killing. Healers get rewarded for helping in a fight though.

TeamDman
Overall

Nice magic system, what one would expect and enjoy in a portalrpg. People whine a lot about the sexism or the airheadedness of the MC, but IMO it's not done in a way that is unhealthy for the story. Some stories have catgirls, some have sexism, I don't expect a justification from the author on why an alternate magical universe would or would not have whatever issues they want to explore in their stories. MC is powerful in their own way, but not immune to adversity which is nice.

Lord Pingu
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So full 5 stars, besides that half off from the character score.

Well i would like to prefix this with me not being good at reviews, and honestly i just wrote this couse i realy like this book and want it to revice a better rating.

Style score: It is clean that is all I can say, and honestly that is all I need.

Grammar: With english being my second language, and me having LRS(idk its english name,das how we call it in german) I have no clue honestly, and I always give 5* unless it seems bad even for me.

Story score: FINALY A HEALER WHO IS A HEALER, FOR GODS SAKE THIS IS NOT SOMETHING WE EVER SEE, LIKE FFS WHY DO ALL AUTHORS MAKE HEALER MCS SOME FORM OF COMBAT MOSTERGODS.

Characters: Having some hard time remembering everyone in hte crew, kinda know all of them, kinda dont, but in general, i think everyone has a role and a purpose, but, poison boi makes me want to give 5*, but if I am honest it is more of a 4 1/2.

All in all, something I like, please skip this review and dont read it, i feel emberased writing it......

silentlurkingwriter
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MC is young, but strong and independent. All the side characters have depth. There's decent tension in the story, and problems take quite a bit of time to solve.

Grammar is really good. No complaints. Style and story are fine. It's a great coming of age and isekai story. No real romance as of yet. I personally don't really want a romance to occur, but it's up to the author.

I'm usually not into Female leads, but this one is way better than the usual stories on the site.

I'll just copy paste the above review twice more to fill up the character requirement.

MC is young, but strong and independent. All the side characters have depth. There's decent tension in the story, and problems take quite a bit of time to solve.

Grammar is really good. No complaints. Style and story are fine. It's a great coming of age and isekai story. No real romance as of yet. I personally don't really want a romance to occur, but it's up to the author.

I'm usually not into Female leads, but this one is way better than the usual stories on the site.

MC is young, but strong and independent. All the side characters have depth. There's decent tension in the story, and problems take quite a bit of time to solve.

Grammar is really good. No complaints. Style and story are fine. It's a great coming of age and isekai story. No real romance as of yet. I personally don't really want a romance to occur, but it's up to the author.

I'm usually not into Female leads, but this one is way better than the usual stories on the site.