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Elaine is ripped from this world to Pallos, a land of unlimited possibilities made real by a grand System governing classes, skills, and magic.
An ideal society? What is this, a fantasy novel?
Adventures? Right this way!
A Grand quest? Nah.
Friends and loot? Heck yes!
Humans are the top dog? Nope, dinosaur food.
Healing and fighting? Well, everything is trying to eat her.
Join Elaine as she travels around Pallos, discovering all the wonders and mysteries of the world, trying to find a place where she belongs, hunting those elusive mangos, all while the ominous Dragoneye Moons watch her every move.
Hey! Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is my first writing effort, so please be kind, but don’t hesitate to point out the flaws.
The story starts off slowly, more like a slice of life than action-adventure, but it gets there!
I’m going to be posting M-W-F
I do know how the story ends, and I promise if it ever gets dropped, or I stop doing this, I will post the ending. There will be no random “this is the last chapter” out of the blue.
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the story is cute and moving, MC adorable slow to power progression and those 0 to 60 OP MC from other stuff. I am waiting to see how explicit the love-y scenes will be when MC older (hoping for a middle road in explicit-ness). the setting is very thought provoking on trying to figure out where this is going to go. I love the status system as it is very easy to follow and understand. The elements web is awesome and synergizes well with the statues system. This gives one a feel of a characters past progress and tiny view of their personality. The story draws you in to find out what is the god of Changes’ plan, what class/ power is MC gonna get, and how the world might change when MC gets that strong. The style of writing because the usage of time skip has been pretty spot on as it prevented the story from stagnating in areas where the stories progression could’ve slowed to a crawl. As well as the style of humor is amazing Artemis’s pun resonate with me. Shockingly enough the more painful the pun the better. These are reasons I can think of on the top of my head of why I love this story.
Let's start with the biggest criticism: the first arc (the tragic backstory) is roughly 20 chapters and it's rough in many ways (though it gets better) (although it's 1/3 of the currently 57 chapters). It was emotionally difficult and brutal in a way that seemed unnecessary and excessive, and its world building felt unjustified in places. On the other hand, the longer the story goes the better it gets.
Another common criticism I see is that the MC is dumb, but I'd argue she's inexperienced, naive, and impulsive (the difference being that she is learning from her mistakes). Most reincarnation stories have a main character that was an adult before they reincarnated which allows the child and teenage MC to be very mature and worldly. That doesn't seem to be the case here, though we've been given minimal information about her past to really be certain.
Overall this story is one of the ones where I'm quite happy to see a newly released chapter, and have failed to build up a backlog of chapters as I tend to prefer. That marks it as quite good, you just have to get through that very rough beginning until she's on her adventures.
The incidenct of the plague and investigation to solve it is a very good exploration of the idea and one I have rarely seen done well in a fantasy novel. Otherwise characters are reasonably well developed and the author has done a good job of world building. The limits of the main characters abilities are also made use of well to prevent them being overpowered.
Surprisingly fresh take on the incarnation story - setting in a dinosaur roman republic fantasy setting.
Characters are solid and interesting, the world is cool. The society is roman republic based, instead of traditional euro fantasy, which is very refreshing. And it is a very well thought out world and internally consistent. Magic is standard LitRPG, but very well designed, not overloaded with math or details. Its a deceptively simple magic system with surprising depth.
The plot is slice of life. The grammar is spotless. The pacing is solid. Character death is real, but not GoT level at all.
The MC does make it to the pinncle of society fairly quickly (if you consider 140+ chapters "quick") but thats the largest stretch of imagination I encountered (and this is a setting where some people ride dinosaurs).
overall, I highly recommend this story. One of the best newcomers to RR, with a very rapid upload schedule. 5 out of 5.
Here are a bunch of extra words to satisfy RR that this is a legit review. How many words are needed to fill this stupid 200 requirement? Apparently more than just this. This is a very long word requirement when succinctness in writing is a virtue.
So when I first picked up this story, I honestly had no expectations at all. I mean, it does sounds like a very classic isekai LitRPG story in a classic fantasy world.
The first time I noticed that was when **** died. Who expected her to die in was is literally the prologue of the story? But it really set the tone for the story, more so than even the resume; the world isn't nice.
The originality of the story really came through in a really easy fashion: the simple fact that Elaine is a healer is already perplexing enough, but her oath really seems to put her apart from other protagonists. Elaine's character is thus really original and likable, and honestly one of the most 'human' protagonist I've read.
Embellishing all of that is the impressive world building and the well-thought out System and powers. I often pause and think 'wow, that makes so much sense' when explaining a power or an aspect of the system or some world building content. It's also pretty original: not often is humanity at the brink of extinction ^^.
The story in itself is really interesting and always eagerly wait for the next chapter to come out. I really liked the fact that Elaine isn't "special" -she isn't the one that will restaure the balance in the force, just a normal girl with [Recollection of a Distant Life]. It's also good that the story avoids most of isekai tropes like the Adventurer's Guild and doing a quest to collect medicinal herbs and kill goblins.
The writing is also very good, the author managing to write action scenes, as well as comedy and truly impactful moments, be it tearful or shocking. Nothing to say about the grammar though, didn't pay it any attention so it's good withouth being revolutionary awesome.
All in all, this story that seems to be a classic isekai revels itself to have awesome characters, great world-building and amazing scenes, while being very original and standing out compared to other stories with the same tags.
Recommended to basically everyone !
I started this novel which was recommended to me on the Azarinth Healer discord. Now Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is one of the few novels i am waiting the chapters each day. I love it.
The style is good, clear, fluid and funny. I don't know what to say more, just I like it?
The story is excellent, hard to predict. So many novels...i can just guess the end after a few chapters. They all look alike. Or other novels try to be mysterious by hiding information from readers. Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is different: No artificial mysteries, no cliché development
The grammar is good, English is not my native language but I did not find any annoying errors and the author quickly corrects the reported errors.
The characters are all different and well written, one of the highlights of this story. I've seen negative character reviews here: Yes, sometimes the decisions of the characters seem inconsistent or irrational, Yes I wanted to yell at them ("Why the fuck did you do that??" but... I think it makes the characters more realistic, with their contradictions, this isn't the best choice but it's their choice, according to their personality
In short: The author dares to take risks, it's rare and deserves respect, especially in a competitive market. Read, try, this novel deserves it.
Beneath the Dragoneye Moons is a story that I really really want to like, but that I am finding harder and harder to do as it goes along. This is for one reason: the main character.
She frequently acts like a moron and seems incapable of learning from her previous mistakes. There seems to be little if any character growth; she demonstrates the same lack of wisdom as a late teenager as she does as a preteen. The author states that the MC has ADHD and feels/acts appropriate to the disorder; I believe that - it doesn't make the MC any more likeable. At least for me. She is socially inept on a scale that makes my own social difficulties look like a water drop in the ocean. Any one of these things wouldn't be a bother, but the combination of her character traits create at irritation level that far exceeds what the individual ones alone would. She reminds me of having a sharp stone in one's shoe; that sharp nagging pain that never goes away and gradually grinds away your resistance against it.
Other than that, the writing is excellent. There are few if any grammer/spelling errors, the magic/gamer system has some interesting unique elements, the setting feels well fleshed out with interesting characters. It is a story well worth reading... as long as you can get past the MC. I'm not sure if I can.
It's good. Let's jump to the advanced review, I'll keep it short and sweet.
It's pretty nice. I quite like Elaine (protagonist) doing her commentary, quite entertaining.
Don't see problems.
The way the story is structured is through arcs. Each one is connected to the next in a sort of "slice-of-life" kind of way.
There isn't a overarching plot from the beginning other than Elaine's life.
The story good --great even-- in the moment, but lacks something to look forward to into the far future since problems are usually introduced and resolved in the same arc.
There is one exception, of course: the Formorians. Insects trying to invade the country where the story takes place, but the problem is that since they are mindless beasts and the story doesn't really focus on them, they feel more like a "side quest" kind of thing, and since it takes a long time for them to be relevant in any way, this feeling becomes rather solid.
Now, the story is good, even great in some places, but it lacks this long term cohesion. And to be fair, a lot of stories in this site are like this.
Characters are likeable except those that are not meant to be, so, good!
Elaine herself is also quite entertaining, like I've said.
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I've had fun reading this, give it a try.
This is an excellent reincarnation-style litrpg. I really like the main character, and the focus she has on whatever she's doing.
The world is very interesting - it's far from an ideal society, but you can see how it happened. The Roman republic parallels are obvious, but it fits the physical setting. The problems that setting causes for a female mc aren't ignored - they're part of what she has to battle against.
I enjoy how details of the world are revealed gradually yet fit together well - it feels like this world and its history were well planned out before the story ever started.
The story updates very rapidly, which is always a big plus.
The 200 word minimum review length is a horrible horrible horrible horrible horrible horrible horrible idea.
Very likable character in an interesting world. As a retired MD I particularly enjoyed reading about the details of healing, handling epidemics, and the power of the reworked Hippocratic Oath. Generally excellent grammar and spelling. The overall quality of this easily surpasses many of the traditionally published books on Amazon.