9001: A Dungeon Ship Odyssey

by VRDraco

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Dungeon Female Lead Magic Multiple Lead Characters Reader interactive Reincarnation Slice of Life

 Leah Binoli is a recent graduate of the Magic Academy of her world. Living in one of the hundreds of colonized worlds of the Galactic empire, this young human girl dreams of being the greatest space traveling adventure, named Space Cadets. To her luck, or by fates intervention, she finds a winning lottery ticket for a prize of 25,000 which is enough for a ship. In the world, like in all the galaxy, dungeons also exist and as time went by the were capable of being tamed. With her new found wealth she purchases a newborn core which instead of bringing her takes her to heaven, it annoys her to hell.


 

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Ultrabenosaurus
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From a resident of the Den

Being part of the Den I was able to access this since VRDraco started writing a week or two ago, and have read up to chapter 8. It's a very interesting and fairly unique idea, good chapter lengths, a setting with lots of potential, and good characters with decent depth.

 

Being about magic and dungeons there's lots of fun fights as you'd expect, but also with the modern conveniences of TV and spaceships. VRDraco seems to have combined these aspects quite well, especially with the premise of how they use "tamed" dungeon cores and magic crystals in their tech. Up to the point I read only the two MCs and the first add-on character have been introduced and they're all good fun in their own way. I won't say much about them because spoilers, but I will warn you not to take them at face value especially at the beginning.

 

If there's one negative thing to point out it's that the grammar isn't perfect, but VRDraco's native language isn't English and it's really not that bad. As you'll know if you've read any of his other stuff it's plenty readable and should only be a turn off for major grammar nazis.

 

Over all I love this, and I hope you will as well.

 

P.S. I'm the guy who named the chapters, at least until chapter 8. I have no intention of editing this if I stop for any reason, so just assume it's all me.

wills1999
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Will you pick up this novel again or has it been dropped but from what I see it's a good novel so please do continue the good work you've started 

iron
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The author has taken generic story lines and combined them to form something new and refreshing. The chapters are interesting. Although there is a bit of trouble with the grammar its not that big of a deal as the content is more important. Keep up the good work.

Moridain
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A fun and unique take on Dungeon Keeping

An interesting story based on the dungeon lord premise that has become recently popular. For the first time a dungeon takes to the stars!

I like the main character, who first comes off as a bit of a naive weakling but quickly shows she is actually a surprisingly mature and kickass adventurer.

I would give this story five stars, except I have some issues with the personality of the Tony entity running the dungeon core. He goes from a wild and uncontrolable genius to a near passive neet within a few chapters with very little explanation. It is a bit jarring...

There is also some grammar issues, but not enough to bother me personally.

Still very worth reading though. I hope it continues for a long time. :)

Darkere
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 I like this story very much till now (7 Chapters out). There seems to be alot of potential for a really good story. No complains about the characters for now the MC still seems a bit one dimensonal but thats expected with how much is written.

The only thing i would really recommend is an editor and the author should look over what would be corrected it seems alot of mistakes in grammar could be easily fixed. (then =/= than for example) While I am not bothered too much by bad grammar I can see that posing problems for some people. 

Contradiction
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Ok, first off, this review is unfair. I haven’t looked at this story in about 2 months, but that was also the last update. Secondly, I’m going to be bashing this story. I can’t remember the finer details since it’s been a bit, but it’s not really necessary to give potential readers an idea of what they’re getting into. But, I do like the concept of this story so let’s start out with the good. Lastly, there’s slight spoilers describing some of the world mechanics, but no plot details cuz I’m not that kind of guy.

The Good

VRDraco is a fan of the dungeon and evolution genre. I am too. That’s beside the point though. He brought in a different take on the dungeon genre, which is quite refreshing. In this story, dungeon cores are put in spaceships and they kind of blend tech with the core making a sort of living spaceship. I can’t remember the details of how it works, but basically you have a living spaceship that will change and become more powerful over time. Which tickles me a bit, cuz I love spaceships. Another nice point to bring up, is that the monsters or bots created by the dungeon cores mana are not restricted to the spaceship. If you’ve ever read any dungeon novels, you know what I’m talking about. The reason I say it’s a good thing is because it really opens the field up for some epic space battles. That and it gives the story just a little bit immersion by taking away “safe zones.” Granted, nothings happened yet, and there probably are “safe zones” somewhere, but you won’t see something dumb like someone sabotaging a ship while all the ship’s “defenders” are unable to intervene since it’s outside the dungeons territory. Again, that’s just for immersion value but the devil’s in the details. Lastly, like all of VRDraco’s stories, the world building is passable. I say passable because it’s not like it’s awe inspiring, original, or even all that good. But he does give you a solid idea of what’s going on. He does give you a general idea of the situations our characters find themselves in without detracting from the story too much, which is probably the most important part of world building. Gotta give credit where credits due.

The Bad.

Oh boy, here we go. Where to start. The characters feel bland. Now I realize this a little bit unfair, especially since I haven’t looked at this story in two months, but looking back there’s nothing memorable about them. We have a reincarnated hermit who became the dungeon core. He’s nothing but a nerdy pervert, which is weird since, ya know, no sexual organs. Sure, I get he has memories carried over, but he went from would be murderer to whipped bitch faster than a speeding bullet. Sure, I get how he was a bitch in his old life, and he’s a bitch now. Still, it’s a generic, over-used japanese anime male lead. The female lead flies off the handle for no reason because we need another adolescent female lead with anger issues. This whole series feels like a bland, generic anime. Which sucks, cuz the whole dungeons and spaceships draws people in like a moth to a flame. Then you realize that you’ve just wasted a bunch of time on something that was only “meh.” But this leads into my next point.

The Ugly

This “story” like most of VRDraco’s “stories” is more concept than story. Sure, cool idea with the dungeons. Sure, cool idea by bringing in spaceships. But that’s all it is. An idea. There’s no plot, there’s no real progression, there’s only cheesy anime tropes. Bitch male leads, over-bearing women, and for some reason, everyone that matters is a minor. Because there were no adults in the friggin universe that wanted to explore space. Not to mention all the parents wanna send minors on expeditions across the galaxy like it’s boarding school. “Watch out for pirates honey, look both ways before you cross the milky way, and don’t forget to feed your dungeon core.” The sad part is, I can deal with a shitty anime. I won’t enjoy it, but I can buckle down and trudge through it if I have to. But this….

Secondly, it feels like a rehash of all of his other stories. I can understand wanting to write what you want to write, but I feel like you realized you don’t know where you were going so you just abandoned ship again. In all of your stories, there isn’t a real plot other than some generic vague theme, like survive or evolve my monsters. There’s nothing really original, and sadly nothing to really give a damn about. I could really keep on going and keep on hitting you, but it’s just not worth it ya friggin Weeaboo (urban dictionary it)

Summary

.5 star for nice concepts

1 star for having decent grammar even though English isn’t your native language

.5 star for including spaceships

.5 star for no real reason. I’m about to take it away anyways

-2.5 stars for only giving half a story and never finishing it

-2 stars for no depth in anything across the board, be it characters, plot, world, world mechanics, etc.

-1 star for basically rehashing un-original ideas poorly.

-5 stars because I felt like shitting on you

-10 stars for being a Weeaboo.

-100 stars because I spent way too long on this review when a simple you suck would’ve sufficed. cuz let’s be honest, the somewhat constructive advice part will be completely ignored.

Which brings the total to 1 star, given to you by the fluffy amnesty. He’s my kitten, and he walked in here at the beginning of this review. And I just can’t get mad or be mean when that adorable little furballs around

If you don’t agree with this opinion, go fuck yourself. #fuckyourfeelings

sdsman
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It's a fun story. Sorry to see that it hasn't had too much activity recently. It's easy to find technical flaws in anything, but if the story carries you a bit away from the ordinary, it's worth it.

Thank You

Soopersoop
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I love this idea of a universe filled with dungeons it has so much potential and I can’t wait to read more as the chapters come out keep up the good work 

burf
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A unique story that combines sci-fi and fantasy

A unique and fun take on traditional sci-fi and fantasy stories. the main characters are well fleshed out with a good backstory, even one of the most annoying MC’s that I have come across becomes more understood as his backstory is revealed.

The grammar is lacking however I understand that english is not the authors first language so it is understandable, well worth the time to read and cant wait for more chapters to follow   

gnarlytreeman
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 not really impressed by all the fbombs, makes the story less interesting to read.  I mean how long would you want to stay in a room with someone like that?

 

your previous story was better. the concept for this one is good, but the fbombing by one of your mc's ruins it.