Silver Death

Silver Death

by Shinsori

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Horror
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore

On a first sight, Yuri is a quiet, cute girl. Today is the day of her execution. Why? That's because she's a serial killer. While being tortured to death, she is suddenly summoned to another world. What happens when someone like this is transferred to a world without laws? Contains: Gore, foul language, sex, bad jokes, terrible puns. This is my first original story, critics, suggestions are welcomed. 

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saielvisseng
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Who doesn't love an anti-hero MC :)

Quite unique unlike the rest of the junk that keeping repeating in a boring way. Because there are only a few chapters i really cant give much of a review but i am really looking forward to it. 

uberfridgeking
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I love this story, its very well written and the characters are cute and fluffy for the most part. And the puns, oh sweet fucking jezabelle they do not fear puns of the worst kind. It is delicious and psychotic and a great read if you just want a little more punning adorable murderer in your life. I also recommend it for near god tier lap pilloweyness. But thats a whole other review.

Mirikon
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Not for the faint of heart

If you liked Watchmen or Wanted (the comics, not the movies), then you're going to like this story. The main character is crazy as hell, but so far the people she's killed 'on camera' were all generally jerks, or witnesses. She's not the raving psycho you see in other stories of this type, nor is she the shining hero trope that is old enough to make cliches seem fresh in comparison.

 

The story is well written, and the grammar is good. Even though there are multiple personalities for the MC, I don't have trouble figuring out what is going on.

 

Keep up the good work.

[DevilScarlet]
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This story is about a cute little girl doing cute things… yeah… like killing ppl. That’s what make this novel so good : Characters are really original, especially the MC, cute but at the same time deadly… You can’t help but like her.

Aside from the cast, the story seems promising, an anti hero route while our MC do cute things…

Yeah there’s a bit of wish fulfuilment, yeah there is plot armor and plot hole but the author is still debutant and we’re just at the start of the story…

You should still try to read it at least for the characters and the original setting.

Kaiby
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This review was posted after only the first two parts of the prologue were released.
Keep in mind, that my opinion might change while the story developes.

I did enjoy reading the prologue quite a bit, although not perfect I felt the writing style to be one of the better ones here on RR. The grammar does have some slight flaws, it is negligible though.

As not much had happened as of now, rating the characters is slightly difficult. I do feel as if they act a little weird though, hence only three stars for Character (as of yet).

I am patienly waiting for more to come, keep at it author-sama!

 

- Kaiby

Rikkafuruike
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 The story is interesting, but the grammar and style could use a bit of training. The characters seems to be pretty nice and i would very much like to read more, and i am ofc quite interesting in the direction you'll take the story. :)

-EXeLD-
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I went to http://shinsori.com/sd/ but the panel were always on my screen, how can I disable or hide it? (I'm using mobile phone)

kay.lenson
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have you removed this novel from your blog as well???

fleeny13
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It reads like a poorly thought out script

 A few major errors made this story hard to read. 

 

1. Script-like qualities. (boy #1) said this. Who is boy 1? You kept doing stuff like this. 
         1. A. Very little description. As stated above, the characters were described in script version as if they were standing on a stage reading something where an audience could see the setting and what they looked like. 

 

2. Poor Grammar. Look up grammar rules. A common problem is the author’s use of run-on sentences such as this one: As soon as he leaves, the gas starts to fill the room, a static runs through Yuri’s body. 

 

3. The plot/logic of story was missing. This story appears to be an attempt at a twisted version of re something but the author skipped over most of why the MC is important on earth b/f she is transported/reincarnated. I get that she’s a criminal who killed people but stating that she did and showing that she did are two completely different things. Further, the decisions in the story don’t seem to be made by people but rather the author’s directive. This includes actions such as the prison making the MC have an all female staff. Eh, ok great. The author explained himself why this occurred; however, this action needed to be taken by a character within the story as the author’s explanations took away from the narrative rather than improving it.