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After fulfilling the duty all arch necromancers are tasked with, Sylver Sezari was not expecting to ever wake up again.

But he did.

And after crawling his way back into the land of the living, he’s alive once again. In a strange land, a strange time, and with a strange floating screen in front of his new face.

Either through plan or chance, he’s alive again, and planning to enjoy himself to his heart's content.

-The story isn’t grimdark, but it’s not all sunshine and rainbows either. There will be lighthearted and positive moments, as well as some sad ones. That being said, it’s a whole lot more light than dark.
-This is a LITRPG story.

Chapters are published every 2 days at 21:00 GMT.

Author’s note:
-It can get very GORY. I’m somewhat desensitized to gore and violence. So while the story isn’t full of gore for the sake of gore, it can get a little too descriptive.
-The MC is a necromancer, so corpses and decay, and all the things that come with it, will be mentioned from time to time.
-I’m a huge fan of Egyptian, Slavic, and Greek mythology, so expect quite a bit of that. That said, so much is altered, you’ll be hard-pressed to guess how exactly it is being used.
-Despite being ‘immortal’ the MC can die. In the event he does, the story doesn’t end, simply time skips forward. Which in some cases is going to be worse than just dying.
-I love plot twists, as much as I love red herrings and Chekhov guns. Deus Ex Machina’s not so much.

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295 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Ch001-A False Start ago
Ch002-Hellos and Goodbyes ago
Ch003-Time Flies ago
Ch004-Starting Somewhere ago
Ch005-Already Dead ago
Ch006-Fee Fi Fo Fun ago
Ch007-Everybody Loves Large Chests ago
Ch008-The Calm ago
Ch009-Preparations ago
Ch010-Testing Your Might ago
Ch011-Three’s A Crowd, Nine’s An Army. ago
Ch012-On The Road ago
Ch013-There We Go ago
Ch014-Ooh You're A Cool Cat ago
Ch015-Dirty, Mean, And Mighty Unclean ago
Ch016-Blast From The Past ago
Ch017-Don't Bring Brawn To A Brain Fight ago
Ch018-And Now We Drink ago
Ch019-Coming Home ago
Ch020-Dark Alleyways Are Dangerous ago
Ch021-Back In Black ago
Ch022-Movin’ Out ago
Ch023-Now You’re Thinking With Portals! ago
Ch024-I’m Not Locked In Here With You ago
Ch025-New In Town ago
Ch026-Two For The Show ago
Ch027-Take Me To Your Leader ago
Ch028-Twists And Turns ago
Ch029-Straight Down The Middle ago
Ch030-What Makes A Good Man? ago
Ch031-The Good, The Bad... ago
Ch032-The Pathetic ago
Ch033-Ain’t No Rest ago
Ch034-Run Little Courier ago
Ch035-Choices, Choices, Choices ago
Ch036-Go Big! ago
Ch037-No Going Home ago
Ch038-Dust To Dust ago
Ch039-Blinded By The Dark ago
Ch040-Scientia Potentia Est ago
Ch041-A Hunting We Will Go ago
Ch042-Knock Knock ago
Ch043-The End Is Nigh ago
Ch044-The Long And Short ago
Ch045-Rise, My Glorious Creation! Rise! ago
Ch046-Getting Ready ago
Ch047-Day In The Sun ago
Ch048-Fear And Loneliness ago
Ch049-Skinning Cats ago
Ch050-Shifting Perspectives ago
Ch051-Friends! Friends! ago
Ch052-Can’t Play Dead ago
Ch053-Miracle Worker ago
Ch054-All The World’s A Stage ago
Ch055-Who Do You Think I Am? ago
Ch056-Sylver’s Day Off ago
Ch057-Friends Will Be Friends ago
Ch058-Who Are You? ago
Ch059-Mistakes, Misconceptions, Miscommunications. ago
Ch060-If You Can’t Walk Then Crawl ago
Ch061- Necromancy Rocks! ago
Ch062-Monkey See, Monkey Do, Monkey Die. ago
Ch063-Enough Crawling, Fly! ago
Ch064-You Can’t Handle The Truth! ago
Ch065-The Paved Road To Hell ago
Ch066-Demons, Deals, Dried Bread. ago
Ch067-Good News Everyone! ago
Ch068-When The Lion’s Hungry… (1/2) ago
Ch068-When The Lion’s Hungry… (2/2) ago
Ch069-Nice ‘n’ Easy ago
Ch070-Friends, Enemies, And The Rest(1/2) ago
Ch070-Friends, Enemies, And The Rest(2/2) ago
Ch071-A Rose By Any Other Name ago
Ch072-Damned If You Do(1/2) ago
Ch072-Damned If You Do(2/2) ago
Ch073-Buried Questions(1/2) ago
Ch073-Buried Questions(2/2) ago
Ch074-Glitter And Gold(1/2) ago
Ch074-Glitter And Gold(2/2) ago
Ch075-Halfway There(1/2) ago
Ch075-Halfway There(2/2) ago
Ch076-One Door Closes(1/2) ago
Ch076-One Door Closes(2/2) ago
Ch077-A Brisk Walk(1/2) ago
Ch077-A Brisk Walk(2/2) ago
Ch078-What A Lovely Day(1/2) ago
Ch078-What A Lovely Day(2/2) ago
Ch079-A Long Day(1/2) ago
Ch079-A Long Day(2/2) ago
Ch080-Sticks And Stones(1/2) ago
Ch080-Sticks And Stones(2/2) ago
Ch081-Fish In Water(1/2) ago
Ch081-Fish In Water(2/2) ago
Ch082-Brewing Storm(1/2) ago
Ch082-Brewing Storm(2/2) ago
Ch083-You Can’t Even Run(1/2) ago
Ch083-You Can’t Even Run(2/2) ago
Ch084-Big Words, Little Man(1/2) ago
Ch084-Big Words, Little Man(2/2) ago
Ch085-Lost And Found(1/2) ago
Ch085-Lost And Found(2/2) ago
Ch086-Bone Voyage!(1/2) ago
Ch086-Bone Voyage!(2/2) ago
Ch087-My Troubles Have Trouble With Me(1/2) ago
Ch087-My Troubles Have Trouble With Me(2/2) ago
Ch088-Staring Match With The Abyss(1/2) ago
Ch088-Staring Match With The Abyss(2/2) ago
Ch089-No Smoke Without Fire(1/2) ago
Ch089-No Smoke Without Fire(2/2) ago
Ch090-Hen In A Foxhouse(1/2) ago
Ch090-Hen In A Foxhouse(2/2) ago
Ch091-Not That Kind Of Story(1/2) ago
Ch091-Not That Kind Of Story(2/2) ago
Ch092-Collaborate And Listen(1/2) ago
Ch092-Collaborate And Listen(2/2) ago
Ch093-Reaping Rewards(1/2) ago
Ch093-Reaping Rewards(2/2) ago
Ch094-Games Of Chance ago
Ch095-Where Is The Justice ago
Ch096-Love Is The Answer ago
Ch097-Bring A Towel ago
Ch098-Cause For Celebration ago
Ch099-Goodbyes and Hellos ago
Ch100-Epilogue ago
Ch101-Leap Of Faith ago
Ch102-Smarter Than The Average Bear ago
Ch103-Made Them Equal ago
Ch104-Keep Calm ago
Ch105-Poor Alternatives ago
Ch106-No Place Like ago
Ch107-Eye For An Eye ago
Ch108-Luck Be A Woman  ago
Ch109-Get Comfortable ago
Ch110-Sentry Here! ago
Ch111-Can’t Touch This ago
Ch112-Would Smell As Sweet ago
Ch113-Tepid Welcome ago
Ch114-Blind Visions ago
Ch115-Stretch Goals ago
Ch116-Skip To The Good Bit ago
Ch117-Busy Bee  ago
Ch118-Snake Eyes ago
Ch119-Prep Work ago
Ch120-Clear Cut ago
Ch121-Rabbit Hole ago
Ch122-Trapped Rats ago
Ch123-Pride Goes Before ago
Ch124-Maze Walker ago
Ch125-Two Wrongs ago
Ch126-(Do Fear) The Reaper ago
Ch127-Win Some Lose Some ago
Ch128-David Meet ago
Ch129-Redacted ago
Ch130-Friend Or Foe ago
Ch131-Bada Bing ago
Ch132-Sink Or Swim ago
Ch133-Power Up ago
Ch134-All Aboard ago
Ch135-Tired ago
Ch136-Dots ago
Ch137-More Questions ago
Ch138-There’s Only One Solution ago
Ch139-Everything’s Bigger ago
Ch140-Jet Fuel ago
Ch141-Communicate ago
Ch142-Best Move ago
Ch143-Overkill ago
Ch144-Chicken Dinner ago
Ch145-Bath Time ago
CH146-All Good Things ago
Ch147-Each Charted Course ago
Ch148-Tea Or Death ago
Ch149-Step Back ago
Ch150-Leap Forward ago
Ch151-Orange And Blue  ago
Ch152-Pillow Talk ago
Ch153-Accelerating ago
Ch154-Dark Horizon ago
Ch155-Exposition Preposition ago
Ch156-Unstoppable Force ago
Ch157-Necromancer In A Maze ago
Ch158-Bad Answers ago
Ch159-Better Have It And Not Need It ago
Ch160-Final Lap ago
Ch161-Cold Sinful Hand ago
Ch162-Desperate Times ago
Ch163-Big Red Button ago
Ch164-One Small Step ago
Ch165-Turning Point ago
Ch166-Happily Ever ago
Ch167-Talk And Show ago
Ch168-How To Win Friends And Influence People ago
Ch169-Nice Guys Finish ago
Ch170-The Story Of The Seven Suns ago
Ch171-Piping Hot Welcome  ago
Ch172-Out Of The Frying Pan (1/2) ago
Ch172-Out Of The Frying Pan (2/2) ago
Ch173-Coming Home (1/2) ago
Ch173-Coming Home (2/2) ago
Ch174-Anything You Can Do (1/2) ago
Ch174-Anything You Can Do (2/2) ago
Ch175-The Lich Is Back (1/2) ago
Ch175-The Lich Is Back (2/2) ago
Ch176-Long Lunch (1/2) ago
Ch176-Long Lunch (2/2) ago
Ch177-Upgrades People Upgrades (1/2) ago
Ch177-Upgrades People Upgrades (2/2) ago
Ch178-New Face Old Friends (1/2) ago
Ch178-New Face Old Friends (2/2) ago
Ch179-Tailor Tinker (1/2) ago
Ch179-Tailor Tinker (2/2) ago
Ch180-Prepared For Trouble (1/2) ago
Ch180-Prepared For Trouble (2/2) ago
Ch181-Three Of A Kind(1/2) ago
Ch181-Three Of A Kind(2/2) ago
Ch182-Strings Attached(1/2) ago
Ch182-Strings Attached(2/2) ago
Ch183-Lessons For The Learned(1/2) ago
Ch183-Lessons For The Learned(2/2) ago
Ch184-While It Lasted(1/2) ago
Ch184-While It Lasted(2/2) ago
Ch185-Tooth And Claw(1/2) ago
Ch185-Tooth And Claw(2/2) ago
Ch186-Tools Of The Trade(1/2) ago
Ch186-Tools Of The Trade(2/2) ago
Ch187-White Black Gold(1/2) ago
Ch187-White Black Gold(2/2) ago
Ch188-Simple Solutions(1/2) ago
Ch188-Simple Solutions(2/2) ago
Ch189-Adventure Awaits!(1/2) ago
Ch189-Adventure Awaits!(2/2) ago
Ch190-Fool In Love(1/2) ago
Ch190-Fool In Love(2/2) ago
Ch191-See A Man About A Dog(1/2) ago
Ch191-See A Man About A Dog(2/2) ago
Ch192-First Impressions(1/2) ago
Ch192-First Impressions(2/2) ago
Ch193-Let’s Get Down To Business(1/2) ago
Ch193-Let’s Get Down To Business(2/2) ago
Ch194-Slow And Steady(1/2) ago
Ch194-Slow And Steady(2/2) ago
Ch195-Scenic Route(1/2) ago
Ch195-Scenic Route(2/2) ago
Ch196-Jumping Conclusions(1/2) ago
Ch196-Jumping Conclusions(2/2) ago
Ch197-It’s Quiet(1/2) ago
Ch197-It’s Quiet(2/2) ago
Ch198-Fight And Flight(1/2) ago
Ch198-Fight And Flight(2/2) ago
Ch199-Already?(1/2) ago
Ch199-Already?(2/2) ago
Ch200-Let’s Keep Things Simple(1/2) ago
Ch200-Let’s Keep Things Simple(2/2) ago
Ch201-One Loose End(1/2) ago
Ch201-One Loose End(2/2) ago
Ch202-Lucky Lady(1/2) ago
Ch202-Lucky Lady(2/2) ago
Ch203-Twice Is Coincidence(1/2) ago
Ch203-Twice Is Coincidence(2/2) ago
Ch204-Once Is Happenstance(1/2) ago
Ch204-Once Is Happenstance(2/2) ago
Ch205-Eye Of The Storm(1/2) ago
Ch205-Eye Of The Storm(2/2) ago
Ch206-Rematch(1/2) ago
Ch206-Rematch(2/2) ago
Ch207-Be Polite, Be Efficient(1/2) ago
Ch207-Be Polite, Be Efficient(2/2) ago
Ch208-Hello Again(1/2) ago
Ch208-Hello Again(2/2) ago
Ch209-Proof Of Concept(1/2) ago
Ch209-Proof Of Concept(2/2) ago
Ch210-Land Down Under(1/2) ago
Ch210-Land Down Under(2/2) ago
Ch211-All Bark(1/2) ago
Ch211-All Bark(2/2) ago
Ch212-Mush-Rooms(1/2) ago
Ch212-Mush-Rooms(2/2) ago
Ch213-Make Like A Banana(1/2) ago
Ch213-Make Like A Banana(2/2) ago
Ch214-Pieces Of Cake(1/2) ago
Ch214-Pieces Of Cake(2/2) ago
Ch215-Sore Winner(1/2) ago
Ch215-Sore Winner(2/2) ago
Ch216-Carry On(1/2) ago
Ch216-Carry On(2/2) ago
Ch217-Crumbling(1/2) ago
Ch217-Crumbling(2/2) ago
Ch218-What’s In The Box(1/2) ago
Ch218-What’s In The Box(2/2) ago
Ch219-Conditions Apply(1/2) ago
Ch219-Conditions Apply(2/2) ago
Ch220-Dearly Beloved(1/2) ago
Ch220-Dearly Beloved(2/2) ago
Ch221-White Snow(1/2) ago
Ch221-White Snow(2/2) ago

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Arbalesto
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Side-Quests Galore...If That's What You're Into

Reviewed at: Ch189-Adventure Awaits!(2/2)

The worldbuilding is some of the best on this site. The author created a beautifully complex and varied setting, with an equally complex and competent MC. Starting the story with an OP character might be setting up for boredom, but it works out perfectly here.

The main downside becomes apparent immediatley, but really wears on you after chapter 100: the lack of any explanation whatsoever as to what the heck is going on. Exposition seems to be the dreaded evil to the author, events happen with no subsequent explanation for them. Do you enjoy getting sidetracked by multiple side-quests with side-quests? Then this is the story for you.

I would ask the author to consider abandoning this style of narration, where the protagonist is 100 steps ahead of the readers, to give some semblance of coherence to the story. An explanation does little good if it comes 20 chapters and 3 months after the actual event. It become seriously confusing and pointless to try and understand an event that won't happen again and has already been overcome by the MC. Lack of tension = lack of interest.

Personally, the plot moves too slowly (or may be nonexistent) for my tastes, hence the style score. Regardless, give it a shot since this is undoubtedly one of the richest worlds created on RoyalRoad.

Eregares
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A great story that really sucks you in.

Reviewed at: Ch048-Fear And Loneliness

Small disclaimer, I'm not the best writer so this review might seem chaotic in places. 

Let me first just say that I have a soft spot for stories that take seemingly dark themes and manage to not make them edgy. This book does it well and when I found it I ended up devouring all the available chapters before I realised. 
I really enjoy reading about the adventures of Sylver, he has a long term goal which means that the author thought the story through. I also like the Sylver as a character because he represents that gray zone in morality. I guess using the DND alignment chart he would be the chaotic neutral (or at least that's how I see him). 
The side characters are also interesting and seem to be more then just 1 dimensional cardboard cutouts. 
When it comes to grammar I think it's good, I'm no native English speak so I might not be noticing mistakes, if there are any but the book itself doesn't have that typical broken English quality, a lot of books have nowadays. 
Overall I feel like the story is really solid and there's a lot to explore. The system certainly intrigues me and I want to learn more about Sylver's past. As long as the author doesn't make the MC do some weird out of character things, this story will go places. 
I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. 

BrackPoopL
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A disjointed story held by a good premise

Reviewed at: Ch189-Adventure Awaits!(2/2)

It has all the hallmarks of a LitRPG so don't expect anything different here. 

The premise set up in the prologue is damn good.  Everytime the plot moves forward and the mystery of the system and the world starts unravling bit by bit, it gets good.  However, these moments are sprinkled nn between long, pointless, and disconnected story arcs.  And it sucks you have to slog through to get to the good parts.

The side characters or Sylver's "friends" are not good.  As a reader I  feel a little bad for Sylver treating these people like they're his friends.  Cause it certainly doesn't feel that way.  More like they tolerate his presence. Every "friend" he's made he either saved them or has such a large leverage over them they couldn't say no to him.  Instead of building up the relationship we just skip to them being friends which makes it unbelievable.  Plus,  they don't get much screen time so they're quickly regulated to bland npcs Sylver visits once and a while.

The bad guys are generic bad dudes who just do bad things.  Not at all interesting.

There are some character I would consider interesting but they involve, you guessed it, moving the plot forward.  Anything that doesn't have to do with the original premise and plot is just not very interesting.

Toxicbrah
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So far so good kinda gory for some people like a necromancer should be

Different take on the lich direction too instead of just a dead skeleton/body held together by magic its a living dead

Keep up the good work I am looking forward to this a fair amount and hope that it's going to be a looong book

Kaj
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starts ok, devolves into confusing whatthefuckery

Reviewed at: Ch041-A Hunting We Will Go

To start off, I loved the prologue. It was badass, emotionally charged, and it established Sylver as a character.

I wish I could say the same for any other part of the book. 

The grammar is good, the style is nothing to write home about, and while the supporting cast is unrealistically willing to befriend eccentric young men who do weird shit to bodies, it's generally decent. This would have been a good, if unremarkable story, if not for one thing; the plot.

here be spoilers

So what's wrong with the plot? A lot of things, honestly, and it seems to get proggresively worse.

First, we had the cat arc, which the author had ripped from The Ancient Magus' Bride down to the damn island covered in miasma.

After that, we got the prison arc, which was just bad (and slightly incoherent) in general.

But then the author decided to finally grace us with a proper antagonist in the form of the Grey Mane, an evil organisation extorting high level mages and running things from the shadows.

Except nope, they're actually called the Black Mane, and they're a relatively small group of gangsters controlling some land with nothing but villages on it. Sylver, seeing the easy exp left out for him by the author, makes up a bullshit excuse, makes unreasonable demands of them (having their leader kill himself), and then when they don't give in to his ultimatum, he starts murdering them. One camp at a time. All of which, we get the "pleasure" of watching.

But the best is yet to come, in fact it's waiting right around the corner with a massive mallet, ready to bash your brains out.

You see, Sylver, despite being an immortal achmage, cannot perform even the most basic of divination spells. Thus, while trying to ambush a bandit camp, Sylver walks straight into an ambush. he survives because his opponent is shit at ambushing, and barely wins the fight. Unfortunately, his little scuffle has now woken the rest of the camp, a problem which he solves by... Challenging them to honourable duels, one at a time. 

This works. And he wins. And that's why I dropped the story.

 

Oh yeah, and Sylver is a schizophrenic sociopath, so that's something.

 

Vadalken
Overall

An attempt at an edgy unknown badass.

Reviewed at: Ch034-Run Little Courier

The story is not bad but I found it increasingly frustrating to read.

The story is rife with narrative dissonances:
- The main character is dealing with many large unknown quantities and jumps into largely unknown danger; and the main character has a plan where everything is under controll.
- The main character is a consumate badas far more competent than everyone else; and the main character is the underdog.
- The capabilities of the main character are largely unknown and unexplained; and most of the tension and exitement in the story comes from conflics resolved though the main characters capabilities.

Based on my interpretation of the story and author notes; I think the points above are intentionally put into the story. If that is the case then i applaud the attempted innovation, despite it's failure (failure in my eyes). Otherwise I think the author is trying realy hard not to make a power fantasy; while making a realy edgy power fantasy.

TotallyNotEvil
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The MC is riding on a horse so high he can barely see the ground.

He is at the same time a heartless mass murderer that won't hesitate to do inhuman experiments on you if you so much as steal a loaf of bread, but will also go through great lengths to save some little girl or "protect those who are his".

In essence, your standard murderhappy-but-righteous Xianxia MC: it's perfectly fine for him to commit what he considers makes others not even human, which largely involves being in his way in any form, but he isn't scum like his targets because... he is the MC, I suppose?

Either own up that you are evil or be actually good. Don't keep dispensing moral judgment while rocking up the evil counter to the max.

More xianxia elements include how everyone in his way is a murdering rapist and he has yet to fail to punch way, way above his weight class, and levels don't really matter to him.

The worst part is that this all drags down some pretty interesting elements. What's up with this system? Who's the woman in white? Why can't he recall Lola? What's the needle? How did he survive? Was the system the end of the world the traitor reincarnator was trying to stop?

But the little bits of that we get are amidst extremely stilted character interactions.

Characters are divided in two categories: friends of the MC and unrepentant scum of the earth. The difference isn't in actions or character, it's just in how much he likes you and in how much one could threat his Chad-ness. 

To sum it up, there are hints of interesting things going on, but it's largely Xianxia MC with a coat of paint. The interesting bits were enough to keep me hooked till the

Prison arc

But the faults in the writing started showing more and more: modern words and terms and analogies, stilted dialogue and interactions, flat or highly confusing descriptions (the fuck was going on during the whole climax of the cat arc? Who knows), one-dimensional and repetitive characters we don't care about, spelled out know-that-you-know dialogue, little to zero tension, others being massively dumb, the MC acting like a generic 20 year old edgy Isekai instead of a calculating old man, etc.

But it did keep me going for some twenty-something chapters, so hey. There's something there, just need to cut away the inconsistencies, edginess and give characters some depth.

msng
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Interesting MC & entertaining story

Reviewed at: Ch152-Pillow Talk

The story follows a necromancer who unexpectedly finds himself once again alive (or 'unalive') in a place that seems to be on his homeworld but that he doesn’t recognise. That is not the only novel thing he finds though as he also discovers that there is an omnipresent LitRPG system with classes and levels that everyone seems to have including himself. Being alone in a new place with a new reality/system, he sets out to give his new life meaning and enjoy himself despite being far from and losing everything that he ever cared about. And also to prove that necromancer isn’t a trash class like many of those around him seem to think.

The story is interesting and different enough from other RoyalRoad stories to benefit from some novelty, despite being a LitRPG. The MC has clear and believable long-term and short-term goals, which help drive the story and evolve as the plot progresses and more information is revealed. Decisions made are explained convincingly and without becoming too preachy or becoming a boring lecture. 

In terms of characters, I especially like the main character. He has a set moral code but does not pretend that he is some morally righteous person. He will put his life above those of a stranger, even a possibly good person, and he will not sugar-coat it or play it off as being morally righteous. However, he will help those he deems as good people, even if they cannot repay him. Just not at the cost of his or his friends’ lives. In terms of side-characters, they seem interesting and not total stereotypes.

The style and grammar are ok. Some of the sentences are phrased ambiguously in that they can be interpreted to mean different things. There are also some spelling errors, but most of them seem to have been found and mentioned in the comments and corrected by the author. Being willing to read and act on these comments meant I gave the book an extra star on the style score. I am a little ambivalent about the flashbacks that sometimes occur. They add some colour to the story, but I am not sure they add anything necessary to the story to detract from how they interrupt that main plotline. Maybe they are adding important details or Chekhov guns, but if they are, I have yet to notice any.

TL:DR version – You should read this story. It's not perfect, but I found it entertaining enough to spend my time writing a relatively long review on it to encourage other people to read it. And to relatively regularly update it since this is an ongoing story.

Originally written sometime in Dec 2020; latest update 19 December 2021 (when Chapter 152 ‘Pillow Talk' was the latest chapter).

FoolRegnant
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This is a story which starts off with a lot of potential. It wastes that potential quite quickly.

 

The idea is interesting - a powerful, centuries old necromancer dies and returns to his world many years later, but now a system is in place. This could be a solid plot, but we quickly get bogged down in a dozen little things.

How long has it been since Sylver died? Why hasn't he found some sort of reference to figure out when in time he is? What is the world around him like? What country is he in? Is it a country he knows or is it entirely new?

 

There's a lot of praise for the world in these reviews, and I don't see why. The world building is pretty lackluster at best and the system is poorly designed - level seems largely meaningless yet characters look down on the MC for his low level. The world feels empty. I don't know how many races live there, who the major political powers are, or any identifying cultural aspects beyond generic fantasy town. The most detail we have is about crime syndicates which are both somehow amazingly powerful and a bunch of thugs living in the woods.

 

The story is limited as well. There isn't any driving force behind Sylver's actions. He isn't driven to seek out his apprentices who might have survived him, or any other Immortal beings whom he once knew. No, instead he plays around, kills a frankly obscene number of bandits (why are there so many bandits, it's ridiculous), and earns levels. He is supposed to be new to the system, but he doesn't try to study it or explore, he just accepts what it tells him and rolls with it.

 

The grammar is fairly good. There are a lot misplaced commas, but most of the flow is solid.

 

The characters are the weakest part of the story. The MC, Sylver, is meant to be a wise, powerful necromancer with centuries of experience. Instead he comes off as an impatient teenager rushing from thing to thing. He acts wildly different in different situations. Sometimes he is calm, collected, and ruthless, while at others he can barely control his anger and kills in a fit of rage.

Other characters aren't much better. Most exist either for the MC to give a speech about moral relativity or to hire in some sort of weird business-progression subplot.

 

This is not a revolutionary story, or a genre-defining one. It's not even particularly good as litrpg or even generic fantasy, with it's weak world building and lackluster characters.

One final note is the "gore". Most of the gore descriptions are short and honestly don't fit the flow of the narrative. It feels like the author really wanted gore in a story, so we get lots of gore spraying everywhere. The MC gets covered in blood constantly or does horrible invasive surgery on living torture victims but his main undead force are shadows, not rotting corpses. It's an incredibly awkward dichotomy, where the obvious gore is missing and instead it gets added in at strange parts to punch up a scene - need to show a dramatic fight? Have someone cut off a limb and spray blood everywhere.

danlern2
Overall

Strong case of isekai protagonist.

Reviewed at: Ch036-Go Big!

The MC suffers from a strong case of "isekai protagonist". A cold hearted killer with many justifications of why he's allowed to kill. He has just enough brain cells to make up bullshit justifications, but not enough creativity to ever do anything without copious amounts of violence. And even though he is a mage and knows magics from every affinity, he like sticking daggers into people, and frequently gets injured for no good reason. He's honestly just a dumbass. So many of the things he does is just for the cool factor, even though his stupidity makes it all very uncool.

His stupidity really shines when he is unsure about the System, but immediately starts progression through it instead of using the tried and true methods of gaining power as a mage. Every perk in the system has a downside, while the same is not true for the natural learning of magic. One would think a top tier mage such as himself would know ways to progress quickly without using the System, but he never even tries. Instead he just goes around doing stupid shit for the sake of "plot" that the author seems to barely think through.

I'm pretty sure there isn't any storyboarding being done, because the plot is so inane that it has to be off the cuff.