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After fulfilling the duty all arch necromancers are tasked with, Sylver Sezari was not expecting to ever wake up again.
But he did.
And after crawling his way back into the land of the living, he’s alive once again. In a strange land, a strange time, and with a strange floating screen in front of his new face.
Either through plan or chance, he’s alive again, and planning to enjoy himself to his heart's content.
-The story isn’t grimdark, but it’s not all sunshine and rainbows either. There will be lighthearted and positive moments, as well as some sad ones. That being said, it’s a whole lot more light than dark.
-This is a LITRPG story.
Chapters are published every 2 days at 21:00 GMT.
-It can get very GORY. I’m somewhat desensitized to gore and violence. So while the story isn’t full of gore for the sake of gore, it can get a little too descriptive.
-The MC is a necromancer, so corpses and decay, and all the things that come with it, will be mentioned from time to time.
-I’m a huge fan of Egyptian, Slavic, and Greek mythology, so expect quite a bit of that. That said, so much is altered, you’ll be hard-pressed to guess how exactly it is being used.
-Despite being ‘immortal’ the MC can die. In the event he does, the story doesn’t end, simply time skips forward. Which in some cases is going to be worse than just dying.
-I love plot twists, as much as I love red herrings and Chekhov guns. Deus Ex Machina’s not so much.
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The worldbuilding is some of the best on this site. The author created a beautifully complex and varied setting, with an equally complex and competent MC. Starting the story with an OP character might be setting up for boredom, but it works out perfectly here.
The main downside becomes apparent immediatley, but really wears on you after chapter 100: the lack of any explanation whatsoever as to what the heck is going on. Exposition seems to be the dreaded evil to the author, events happen with no subsequent explanation for them. Do you enjoy getting sidetracked by multiple side-quests with side-quests? Then this is the story for you.
I would ask the author to consider abandoning this style of narration, where the protagonist is 100 steps ahead of the readers, to give some semblance of coherence to the story. An explanation does little good if it comes 20 chapters and 3 months after the actual event. It become seriously confusing and pointless to try and understand an event that won't happen again and has already been overcome by the MC. Lack of tension = lack of interest.
Personally, the plot moves too slowly (or may be nonexistent) for my tastes, hence the style score. Regardless, give it a shot since this is undoubtedly one of the richest worlds created on RoyalRoad.
Small disclaimer, I'm not the best writer so this review might seem chaotic in places.
Let me first just say that I have a soft spot for stories that take seemingly dark themes and manage to not make them edgy. This book does it well and when I found it I ended up devouring all the available chapters before I realised.
I really enjoy reading about the adventures of Sylver, he has a long term goal which means that the author thought the story through. I also like the Sylver as a character because he represents that gray zone in morality. I guess using the DND alignment chart he would be the chaotic neutral (or at least that's how I see him).
The side characters are also interesting and seem to be more then just 1 dimensional cardboard cutouts.
When it comes to grammar I think it's good, I'm no native English speak so I might not be noticing mistakes, if there are any but the book itself doesn't have that typical broken English quality, a lot of books have nowadays.
Overall I feel like the story is really solid and there's a lot to explore. The system certainly intrigues me and I want to learn more about Sylver's past. As long as the author doesn't make the MC do some weird out of character things, this story will go places.
I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.
It has all the hallmarks of a LitRPG so don't expect anything different here.
The premise set up in the prologue is damn good. Everytime the plot moves forward and the mystery of the system and the world starts unravling bit by bit, it gets good. However, these moments are sprinkled nn between long, pointless, and disconnected story arcs. And it sucks you have to slog through to get to the good parts.
The side characters or Sylver's "friends" are not good. As a reader I feel a little bad for Sylver treating these people like they're his friends. Cause it certainly doesn't feel that way. More like they tolerate his presence. Every "friend" he's made he either saved them or has such a large leverage over them they couldn't say no to him. Instead of building up the relationship we just skip to them being friends which makes it unbelievable. Plus, they don't get much screen time so they're quickly regulated to bland npcs Sylver visits once and a while.
The bad guys are generic bad dudes who just do bad things. Not at all interesting.
There are some character I would consider interesting but they involve, you guessed it, moving the plot forward. Anything that doesn't have to do with the original premise and plot is just not very interesting.
So far so good kinda gory for some people like a necromancer should be
Different take on the lich direction too instead of just a dead skeleton/body held together by magic its a living dead
Keep up the good work I am looking forward to this a fair amount and hope that it's going to be a looong book
To start off, I loved the prologue. It was badass, emotionally charged, and it established Sylver as a character.
I wish I could say the same for any other part of the book.
The grammar is good, the style is nothing to write home about, and while the supporting cast is unrealistically willing to befriend eccentric young men who do weird shit to bodies, it's generally decent. This would have been a good, if unremarkable story, if not for one thing; the plot.
here be spoilers
So what's wrong with the plot? A lot of things, honestly, and it seems to get proggresively worse.
First, we had the cat arc, which the author had ripped from The Ancient Magus' Bride down to the damn island covered in miasma.
After that, we got the prison arc, which was just bad (and slightly incoherent) in general.
But then the author decided to finally grace us with a proper antagonist in the form of the Grey Mane, an evil organisation extorting high level mages and running things from the shadows.
Except nope, they're actually called the Black Mane, and they're a relatively small group of gangsters controlling some land with nothing but villages on it. Sylver, seeing the easy exp left out for him by the author, makes up a bullshit excuse, makes unreasonable demands of them (having their leader kill himself), and then when they don't give in to his ultimatum, he starts murdering them. One camp at a time. All of which, we get the "pleasure" of watching.
But the best is yet to come, in fact it's waiting right around the corner with a massive mallet, ready to bash your brains out.
You see, Sylver, despite being an immortal achmage, cannot perform even the most basic of divination spells. Thus, while trying to ambush a bandit camp, Sylver walks straight into an ambush. he survives because his opponent is shit at ambushing, and barely wins the fight. Unfortunately, his little scuffle has now woken the rest of the camp, a problem which he solves by... Challenging them to honourable duels, one at a time.
This works. And he wins. And that's why I dropped the story.
Oh yeah, and Sylver is a schizophrenic sociopath, so that's something.
The story is not bad but I found it increasingly frustrating to read.
The story is rife with narrative dissonances:
- The main character is dealing with many large unknown quantities and jumps into largely unknown danger; and the main character has a plan where everything is under controll.
- The main character is a consumate badas far more competent than everyone else; and the main character is the underdog.
- The capabilities of the main character are largely unknown and unexplained; and most of the tension and exitement in the story comes from conflics resolved though the main characters capabilities.
Based on my interpretation of the story and author notes; I think the points above are intentionally put into the story. If that is the case then i applaud the attempted innovation, despite it's failure (failure in my eyes). Otherwise I think the author is trying realy hard not to make a power fantasy; while making a realy edgy power fantasy.
The MC is riding on a horse so high he can barely see the ground.
He is at the same time a heartless mass murderer that won't hesitate to do inhuman experiments on you if you so much as steal a loaf of bread, but will also go through great lengths to save some little girl or "protect those who are his".
In essence, your standard murderhappy-but-righteous Xianxia MC: it's perfectly fine for him to commit what he considers makes others not even human, which largely involves being in his way in any form, but he isn't scum like his targets because... he is the MC, I suppose?
Either own up that you are evil or be actually good. Don't keep dispensing moral judgment while rocking up the evil counter to the max.
More xianxia elements include how everyone in his way is a murdering rapist and he has yet to fail to punch way, way above his weight class, and levels don't really matter to him.
The worst part is that this all drags down some pretty interesting elements. What's up with this system? Who's the woman in white? Why can't he recall Lola? What's the needle? How did he survive? Was the system the end of the world the traitor reincarnator was trying to stop?
But the little bits of that we get are amidst extremely stilted character interactions.
Characters are divided in two categories: friends of the MC and unrepentant scum of the earth. The difference isn't in actions or character, it's just in how much he likes you and in how much one could threat his Chad-ness.
To sum it up, there are hints of interesting things going on, but it's largely Xianxia MC with a coat of paint. The interesting bits were enough to keep me hooked till the
But the faults in the writing started showing more and more: modern words and terms and analogies, stilted dialogue and interactions, flat or highly confusing descriptions (the fuck was going on during the whole climax of the cat arc? Who knows), one-dimensional and repetitive characters we don't care about, spelled out know-that-you-know dialogue, little to zero tension, others being massively dumb, the MC acting like a generic 20 year old edgy Isekai instead of a calculating old man, etc.
But it did keep me going for some twenty-something chapters, so hey. There's something there, just need to cut away the inconsistencies, edginess and give characters some depth.
The story follows a necromancer who unexpectedly finds himself once again alive (or 'unalive') in a place that seems to be on his homeworld but that he doesn’t recognise. That is not the only novel thing he finds though as he also discovers that there is an omnipresent LitRPG system with classes and levels that everyone seems to have including himself. Being alone in a new place with a new reality/system, he sets out to give his new life meaning and enjoy himself despite being far from and losing everything that he ever cared about. And also to prove that necromancer isn’t a trash class like many of those around him seem to think.
The story is interesting and different enough from other RoyalRoad stories to benefit from some novelty, despite being a LitRPG. The MC has clear and believable long-term and short-term goals, which help drive the story and evolve as the plot progresses and more information is revealed. Decisions made are explained convincingly and without becoming too preachy or becoming a boring lecture.
In terms of characters, I especially like the main character. He has a set moral code but does not pretend that he is some morally righteous person. He will put his life above those of a stranger, even a possibly good person, and he will not sugar-coat it or play it off as being morally righteous. However, he will help those he deems as good people, even if they cannot repay him. Just not at the cost of his or his friends’ lives. In terms of side-characters, they seem interesting and not total stereotypes.
The style and grammar are ok. Some of the sentences are phrased ambiguously in that they can be interpreted to mean different things. There are also some spelling errors, but most of them seem to have been found and mentioned in the comments and corrected by the author. Being willing to read and act on these comments meant I gave the book an extra star on the style score. I am a little ambivalent about the flashbacks that sometimes occur. They add some colour to the story, but I am not sure they add anything necessary to the story to detract from how they interrupt that main plotline. Maybe they are adding important details or Chekhov guns, but if they are, I have yet to notice any.
TL:DR version – You should read this story. It's not perfect, but I found it entertaining enough to spend my time writing a relatively long review on it to encourage other people to read it. And to relatively regularly update it since this is an ongoing story.
Originally written sometime in Dec 2020; latest update 19 December 2021 (when Chapter 152 ‘Pillow Talk' was the latest chapter).
This is a story which starts off with a lot of potential. It wastes that potential quite quickly.
The idea is interesting - a powerful, centuries old necromancer dies and returns to his world many years later, but now a system is in place. This could be a solid plot, but we quickly get bogged down in a dozen little things.
How long has it been since Sylver died? Why hasn't he found some sort of reference to figure out when in time he is? What is the world around him like? What country is he in? Is it a country he knows or is it entirely new?
There's a lot of praise for the world in these reviews, and I don't see why. The world building is pretty lackluster at best and the system is poorly designed - level seems largely meaningless yet characters look down on the MC for his low level. The world feels empty. I don't know how many races live there, who the major political powers are, or any identifying cultural aspects beyond generic fantasy town. The most detail we have is about crime syndicates which are both somehow amazingly powerful and a bunch of thugs living in the woods.
The story is limited as well. There isn't any driving force behind Sylver's actions. He isn't driven to seek out his apprentices who might have survived him, or any other Immortal beings whom he once knew. No, instead he plays around, kills a frankly obscene number of bandits (why are there so many bandits, it's ridiculous), and earns levels. He is supposed to be new to the system, but he doesn't try to study it or explore, he just accepts what it tells him and rolls with it.
The grammar is fairly good. There are a lot misplaced commas, but most of the flow is solid.
The characters are the weakest part of the story. The MC, Sylver, is meant to be a wise, powerful necromancer with centuries of experience. Instead he comes off as an impatient teenager rushing from thing to thing. He acts wildly different in different situations. Sometimes he is calm, collected, and ruthless, while at others he can barely control his anger and kills in a fit of rage.
Other characters aren't much better. Most exist either for the MC to give a speech about moral relativity or to hire in some sort of weird business-progression subplot.
This is not a revolutionary story, or a genre-defining one. It's not even particularly good as litrpg or even generic fantasy, with it's weak world building and lackluster characters.
One final note is the "gore". Most of the gore descriptions are short and honestly don't fit the flow of the narrative. It feels like the author really wanted gore in a story, so we get lots of gore spraying everywhere. The MC gets covered in blood constantly or does horrible invasive surgery on living torture victims but his main undead force are shadows, not rotting corpses. It's an incredibly awkward dichotomy, where the obvious gore is missing and instead it gets added in at strange parts to punch up a scene - need to show a dramatic fight? Have someone cut off a limb and spray blood everywhere.
The MC suffers from a strong case of "isekai protagonist". A cold hearted killer with many justifications of why he's allowed to kill. He has just enough brain cells to make up bullshit justifications, but not enough creativity to ever do anything without copious amounts of violence. And even though he is a mage and knows magics from every affinity, he like sticking daggers into people, and frequently gets injured for no good reason. He's honestly just a dumbass. So many of the things he does is just for the cool factor, even though his stupidity makes it all very uncool.
His stupidity really shines when he is unsure about the System, but immediately starts progression through it instead of using the tried and true methods of gaining power as a mage. Every perk in the system has a downside, while the same is not true for the natural learning of magic. One would think a top tier mage such as himself would know ways to progress quickly without using the System, but he never even tries. Instead he just goes around doing stupid shit for the sake of "plot" that the author seems to barely think through.
I'm pretty sure there isn't any storyboarding being done, because the plot is so inane that it has to be off the cuff.