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On just another normal Monday, the world changed. The universe had reached a threshold humanity didn’t even know existed, and it was time to finally be integrated into the vast multiverse. A world where power is the only thing that one can truly rely on.
Jake, a seemingly average office worker, finds himself thrust into this new world. Into a tutorial filled with dangers and opportunities. In a world that should breed fear and concern, an environment that makes his fellow coworkers falter, Jake instead finds himself thriving.
Perhaps… Jake was born for this kind of world, to begin with.
5 chapters a week.
Average chapter length: 2500
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At first, I absolutely loved this story. It had its flaws, but the main character and the fun way combat was detailed was fascinating. And then I kept reading. The more it went on, the longer combat lasted without actually contributing to the story in an interesting way. The main character had growth, but what started as impactful, crazy scenarios to push him turned into long, boring self reflections about the same 3 ideas multiple times.
So I skimmed the combat, since while the power was scaling, the layout was not. And then it talked about alchemy, which was pretty fun, until it'll be the only actual content in a chapter for about the 25th time. And then there are the multiple perspectives. The coolest combat scenes? The ones where Jake really does something cool. Like shoot at a cloud from miles and miles away. It didn't last long, the end result was the same as any other, yet it didn't take a week to make.
William's actually the best character here. Yeah, I said it; despite what looks like 70% of all readers disagreeing with me. The thing with him is that, unlike pretty much every other character for me, the more I read about him the better he gets. He goes on his own story, but it's actually centered on the people he interacts with, instead of just going into a cave for 20 chapters and having 'development' there. It's just a shame that he represents probably the biggest problem I have with this story.
Diction: the choice and use of words and phrases in speech or writing.
Villy, an immortal god who's lived through the creation of universes has the same pattern of speech as our main character. Jacob, a ruler of a city and a follower of fate, talks like our main character. William, a mostly-psycopath trying to find his own road in life, talks like our main character. They have their own quirks and types of discussion, yet the diction remains the same. Who uses 'rad' in their own heads?! What kind of cold-blooded, PTSD inducing people say things like 'epic'?! It's easily my biggest issue. Please author, I'm begging you. On my knees and head to the floor: have your characters use different types of diction.
This story starts out fun, but the same flaws don't improve over time. Read it if you're bored, or don't want to read Azarinth anymore as at least this story actually does contain development and deep magic laws.
Primal Hunter starts a little shakey, but once you cruise past the opening it settles into a groove. Then it digresses for a very long time with an out of left field crafting section. While this section does end eventually and the story gets back on to solid ground, it is a perfect example of why I've decided to drop this serial. Long sections which are essentially level grinding.
Chapter after chapter is the character leveling up and many of these levels are inconsequential or feel totally unearned. There are three separate leveling systems: class, profession, and race. That last one levels up due to the other two going up levels. Each of these also features evolutions and ability choices at specific intervals. For every single level, we get a breakdown and the character's thoughts on that level. Each ability or evolution choice is outlined and followed by a paragraph or two of the character's thoughts on it. Then, after making a choice, we get more paragraphs of the character justifying their decision.
After a certain point, the level-ups feel meaningless. They happen so frequently that huge chunks of this story are just levels and level analysis. It is too much of a good thing. It doesn't feel special or interesting. It doesn't feel like the protagonist earns most of the levels. They just sort of happen.
There is little actual plot development across the 81 chapters I have read. Very little has happened and what is on the docket isn't that engaging. It isn't so much that hunting beast lords and the king of the forest is boring, but that the execution is a slog. Clearly, the author is trying to make the various battles and hunts varied and interesting, but how many ways are there to write about grinding out badgers and stags? Just skip over them! Use a sentence or two to describe how badass and cool the hunting is and then get to the fight that really matters: the boss.
This is not a bad story, but it moves at a snail's pace because every little detail is covered. Every trash mob, every level, and every thought the character has is detailed. It feels like each chapter only has a paragraph or two of actual plot development. There are interesting things being set up and I call tell there is a narrative there worth following, but it is buried underneath so much noise.
Author needs to go back to the first 100 chapters and cut out chapters or condense it greatly. Too many chapters conveying information readers already know or doesn't need to know.
As for reading this?
It's another litrpg story that follows the same formula often found within this genre. If you've read litrpg stories you know what to expect by now when it comes to the main character and story beats. Jake is a cardboard cutout of a litrpg main character. The guy's introverted, lacks social skill and likes to keep to himself. Before his new life? It was boring and mundane and he felt like he's was always missing something until now. Now, he revels and excel in the new setting he's found himself in. Sound familiar? Yeah it's been done over and over, again, and again.
You're gonna find Jake training a lot. Looting a lot. Fighting a lot on repeat. God, there is so much chapters focus on pointless details and combat you can just skip most of it and you wouldn't be missing out on much. All it does is stall the story to a glacial and boring pace.
It's a decent story, I find the characters largely believable and their actions understandable with some exposition.
Some spelling and language mistakes, but then I've seen a lot worse, and they do get fixed quickly when mentioned.
As to the system and 'rules', I read for pleasure and don't geek out on a numbers game, so I can't comment on that, but it's not too excessive.
At this point it's a good read overall, unless you are someone who needs a trigger warning on a hunting video, or can't accept someone else' point of view without going into a autistic screeching rage.
I am really enjoying the story so far. The classes and system are great, and the MC isn't gifted an OP class just because he is the MC. He starts from the beginning, and works for his power. The story is progressing well, and I really like how he is a loner. He does make contact with other people for plot progression, but he mainly works alone, which is great. I don't like city-building stories, but fortunately this doesn't turn into one. Some LitRPG's are ruined for me because of this.
He does become a Lord of a city, but it looks like he will give some people the power to manage his city, while he is the figurehead and benefits from this, and then goes on his way to get stronger.
Also, I like the class that he starts with, it was my favorite option, I like hunters and people with bow and arrows. I am happy he also embraces the melee option of the hunter. There are versions of hunter or ranger where they have a bow and arrow, and are told their class is good with short ranged weapons like daggers and shortswords, but instead they only have one tiny dagger for almost the whole story and whenever they lose their bow, they can't do anything with their dagger.
I also really like his proffession, alchemy and making poisons. That is another really cool thing that I enjoy. He also does have a bit of magic, but it isn't really prominent, which is great, because it is more fun to read about someone fighting with someone else, not throwing bolts from behind tanks and just repeating the same thing each time, just with more advance spells. In addition, as of now, there is no romance, which is awesome. He did have a short crush, but it didn't last too long, didn't have a meaningful role on the story, and unlike other novels, his crush didn't just instantly through herself at his feet as soon as he gets slightly stronger than everyone else. Romance usually subtracts from the story, with the MC struggling with the girl and she has him wrapped around her finger.
The story is a lot of fun to read, the characters are great, and overall, I really like this story. Thank you for Primal Hunter! :)
Many times i feel frusturated at book for many minor or major flaws.
This 1 is almost perfect in any sense, highly recomended!
Story line, logic(in the bounds of the World created in the book), pace, kindness&ruthlessness, suspense, characters, grammer, and style all very well executed.
I hope the story would keep going, it has much potential, i would keep a close Watch!
Like the setting and character personality and i'm excited for the future of the story !
Hope there are many more chapters to come in the future .
Great story overall and also very fun . Cool Mc and i like the archer + poison build type right now .
This book has the many things required to have a good book so let's give 1 for each star
1. Actual character development
2. A great sense of humor
3. The worlds(multiverses) lore is great, makes sense, and isn't just there so the mc can do whatever he wants
4. Challenges for the mc. You'd be surprised how hard it is to make the things the protagonist faces hard for them
5. The protagonist has flaws and he actually recognizes it and trys to improve himself
One of my favorite novels. I wait every night at the same time to have the chapter of the day.
No grammar issues, the style is good. The characters are good, funny, complex and deep. The story is good too. Love it
...Yeah I suck at writing reviews. But try this novel, it deserves it.
there's some parts i didn't like but the story as a whole is definitely one of the best on here and won't be leaving my library unless something massive happens.
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