The Primal Hunter

The Primal Hunter

by Zogarth

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

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On just another normal Monday, the world changed. The universe had reached a threshold humanity didn’t even know existed, and it was time to finally be integrated into the vast multiverse. A world where power is the only thing that one can truly rely on.

Jake, a seemingly average office worker, finds himself thrust into this new world. Into a tutorial filled with dangers and opportunities. In a world that should breed fear and concern, an environment that makes his fellow coworkers falter, Jake instead finds himself thriving.

Perhaps… Jake was born for this kind of world, to begin with.

 

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5 chapters a week.

Average chapter length: 2500

Tags and content warnings are mainly to give me creative freedom later on. This is my first novel ever, and English isn’t my native language, so go easy on me chaps. Any feedback is more than welcome, of course. Also, this novel is only posted on Royalroad, Patreon, and my Amazon releases, so if you are reading it elsewhere, it's pirated and you suck if you keep reading.

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Table of Contents
323 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Another Monday morning ago
Chapter 2 - Introduction ago
Chapter 3 - The tutorial commences ago
Chapter 4 - First battle ago
Chapter 5 - Big pig ago
Chapter 6 - Questioning ago
Chapter 7 - Training & rest ago
Chapter 8 - A wonderful night ago
Keep reading/listening on Amazon's Kindle, Kindle Unlimited and Audible! ago
Chapter 206 - A Real Shitfest ago
Chapter 207 - Enhanced Splitting Arrow ago
Chapter 208 - Dervish ago
Chapter 209 - Worthy Opponents ago
Chapter 210 - Rules of Monkey Hunting ago
Chapter 211 - Matriarchs ago
Chapter 212 - City/Monkey Management ago
Chapter 213 - Monkey Business ago
Chapter 214 - Enjoyment ago
Chapter 215 - Fragmented ago
Chapter 216 - The Calm Before the Politics ago
Chapter 217 - The World Congress Begins ago
Chapter 218 - World Congress: Friendly Talks ago
Chapter 219 - World Congress: Reunion ago
Chapter 220 - World Congress: A Quick Vote ago
Chapter 221 - World Congress: "Confrontations" ago
Chapter 222 - World Congress: On The Flip Of A Coin ago
Chapter 223 - World Congress: System Events ago
Chapter 224 - World Congress: Challenge ago
Chapter 225 - World Congress: Master Negotiator ago
Chapter 226 - World Congress: Final Talks ago
Chapter 227 - Shopping Spree ago
Chapter 228 - A Question of Morality ago
Intermission 6 - William (1/3) ago
Intermission 6 - William (2/3) ago
Intermission 6 - William (3/3) ago
Chapter 229 - A Healthy Diet ago
Chapter 230 - This Chapter Contains Alchemy ago
Chapter 231 - Man Cave(s) ago
Chapter 232 - Nanoblade ago
Chapter 233 - Evil Incarnate ago
Chapter 234 - Questionable Choices ago
Chapter 235 - Golden Mushroom ago
Chapter 236 - Deepdwellers vs Cave Troll (feat. Jake) ago
Chapter 237 - The Paragon Option ago
Chapter 238 - A Distraction ago
Chapter 239 - Justice From Above ago
Chapter 240 - To Upgrade Or Not To Upgrade, That Is The Question. ago
Chapter 241 - The Morality of Domination ago
Chapter 242 - Righteous Crusade ago
Chapter 243 - Schemes Of An Old Man ago
Chapter 244 - Heartwarden ago
Chapter 245 - Assessment ago
Chapter 246 - Census Taking (Hard Mode) ago
Chapter 247 - Gravity Is Your Friend ago
Chapter 248 - Minor Miscalculations ago
Chapter 249 - Priorities ago
Chapter 250 - Altmar Signet ago
Chapter 251 - Stats, Tables & Gear - all the LitRPG! ago
Chapter 252 - Something Long Overdue ago
Chapter 253 - Leatherworkers ago
Chapter 254 - Personal Improvement ago
Chapter 255 - Temple & Blessings ago
Chapter 256 - Servant & Territory ago
Chapter 257 - Will of the Chosen ago
Chapter 258 - Jake the Corpse Merchant ago
Chapter 259 - Taking Advantage of Mistakes ago
Chapter 260 - Keeping It Friendly ago
Chapter 261 - Introspection & Self-Control ago
Chapter 262 - Sultan ago
Chapter 263 - "I don't like you." - Jake Thayne, Year 1, 93rd Era. ago
Chapter 264 - Executive Decision ago
Chapter 265 - Concessions Today, Profits in the Future ago
Chapter 266 - Sultan Has Wares, If You Have Coin ago
Chapter 267 - Five Lights in the Darkness ago
Chapter 268 - Stupid Monkeys & Their Many Uses ago
Chapter 269 - Singular Focus ago
Chapter 270 - Presence ago
Chapter 271 - Memories of (Questionable) Past Deeds ago
Chapter 272 - Skill Choices Are Hard... ago
Chapter 273 - Birds of Prey ago
Chapter 274 - Beatdown ago
Chapter 275 - Teaching the Young ago
Chapter 276 - Sylphie Gets a New friend ago
Chapter 277 - Union Oath ago
Chapter 278 - A Higher Power? No Thanks. ago
Chapter 279 - Scorching the Plains ago
Chapter 280 - Bow & Blade ago
Chapter 281 - Better Boots ago
Chapter 282 - The Power of Haven ago
Chapter 283 - Treasure Hunt? "Let's <CENSORED> Go!" ago
Chapter 284 - Treasure Hunt: A World of Mist ago
Chapter 285 - Treasure Hunt: No Flying Too High ago
Chapter 286 - Treasure Hunt: Fire & Ash ago
Chapter 287 - Treasure Hunt: History Lesson ago
Chapter 288 - Treasure Hunt: Armor of Mist ago
Chapter 289 - Treasure Hunt: The Girl & The Hawk ago
Chapter 290 - Treasure Hunt: Viscount & Count ago
Chapter 291 - Treasure Hunt: Annoying Boss Fight ago
Chapter 292 - Treasure Hunt: Count Down for the Count ago
Chapter 293 - Treasure Hunt: Thief! ago
Chapter 294 - Treasure Hunt: Judging Stuff ago
Chapter 295 - Treasure Hunt: Puzzle ago
Chapter 296 - Treasure Hunt: Collaborative Project ago
Chapter 297 - Treasure Hunt: Pure Ones ago
Chapter 298 - Treasure Hunt: Blood ago
Chapter 299 - Treasure Hunt: Broken Tower ago
Chapter 300 - Treasure Hunt: Root of Resentment ago
Chapter 301 - Treasure Hunt - Count Hunting ago
Chapter 302 - Treasure Hunt: Actual Speedrunning (mostly) ago
Chapter 303 - Treasure Hunt: Blades & Brothers ago
Chapter 304 - Treasure Hunt: Punching Back ago
Chapter 305 - Treasure Hunt: Invincible ago
Chapter 306 - Treasure Hunt: Unreasonable People ago
Chapter 307 - Treasure Hunt: Exchange ago
Chapter 308 - Treasure Hunt: Phase Two ago
Chapter 309 - Treasure Hunt: Vaults ago
Chapter 310 - Treasure Hunt: Out Of Place ago
Chapter 311 - Treasure Hunt: Arrogant Young Master ago
Chapter 312 - Treasure Hunt: Test of Character ago
Chapter 313 - Treasure Hunt: Rubik's Cube ago
Chapter 314 - Treasure Hunt: Valuable Asset ago
Chapter 315 - Treasure Hunt: Another Collaborative Project ago
Chapter 316 - Treasure Hunt: The Importance of Word Choice ago
Chapter 317 - Treasure Hunt: Not Extortion ago
Chapter 318 - Treasure Hunt: Spatial Storage & Parting ago
Chapter 319 - Treasure Hunt: Vault Run = Loot 5.0 ago
Chapter 320 - Treasure Hunt: Submerged ago
Chapter 321 - Treasure Hunt: The Depth of Water ago
Chapter 322 - Treasure Hunt: Be Like Water ago
Chapter 323 - Treasure Hunt: Boss Room, Please? ago
Chapter 324 - Treasure Hunt: A Scaly Intermission ago
Chapter 325 - Treasure Hunt: Serenity & Conflict ago
Chapter 326 - Treasure Hunt: Arrow Time ago
Chapter 327 - Treasure Hunt: The Final Stage ago
Chapter 328 - Treasure Hunt: Starting Shots ago
Chapter 329 - Treasure Hunt: Quite the Mix ago
Chapter 330 - Treasure Hunt: Proposition ago
Chapter 331 - Treasure Hunt - Target Prioritization ago
Chapter 332 - Treasure Hunt: Will of the True Ancestor ago
Chapter 333 - Treasure Hunt: A Leveled Look at Power ago
Amazon Announcement + AMA! ago
Chapter 334 - Treasure Hunt: One Down ago
Chapter 335 - Treasure Hunt: Paths ago
Chapter 336 - Treasure Hunt: Countermeasures ago
Chapter 337 - Treasure Hunt: Holy Blade ago
Chapter 338 - Treasure Hunt: A Final Fight ago
Chapter 339 - Treasure Hunt: Vanity & Patience ago
Chapter 340 - Treasure Hunt: Limit Shatter ago
Chapter 341 - Treasure Hunt - The Duel Begins ago
Chapter 342 - Treasure Hunt: Passion ago
Chapter 343 - Treasure Hunt: Misconception ago
Chapter 344 - Springtime Advent ago
Chapter 345 - Peak of Humanity ago
Chapter 346 - Summer Rain ago
Chapter 347 - A (Potentially) Momentous Duel ago
Chapter 348 - To the End ago
Chapter 349 - After the Hunt ago
Chapter 350 - Reflecting On A Loss and the Question of What the Hell A Transcendence Is ago
Chapter 351 - Combat Styles ago
Chapter 352 - Travel Preparations ago
Chapter 353 - Road Trip Entertainment: Vampire Lore ago
Chapter 354 - Unexpected Visitor ago
Chapter 355 - Visiting Skyggen & Skyggen ago
Chapter 356 - Family Reunion ago
Chapter 357 - Exploring Relationships ago
Chapter 358 - Umbral Lotus ago
Chapter 359 - Sorting Time ago
Chapter 360 - To sell or not to sell, that is the question ago
Chapter 361 - The Auction (Read: Alchemy) Begins! ago
Chapter 362 - A Brief Intermission ago
Chapter 363 - An Epic Mixed Bag ago
Chapter 364 - A Cursed Intermission ago
Chapter 365 - Actually Buying Things ago
Chapter 366 - Bees, Pants & the Geopolitical Landscape ago
Chapter 367 - The Legendaries Cometh ago
Chapter 368 - Scammed ago
Chapter 369 - A Unique Encounter ago
Chapter 370 - You get an item! And you get an item! Everyone gets an item! ago
Chapter 371 - The Good Stuff ago
Chapter 372 - Soul Renewal ago
THE PRIMAL HUNTER BOOK ONE OUT ON AMAZON! ago
Chapter 373 - Time Wizard & Future Plans ago
Chapter 374 - Jake's Laboratorium & To-do List ago
Chapter 375 - Oh Gosh, It's a Time Skip! ago
Chapter 376 - A King Reborn ago
Chapter 377 - Jake vs the King (Rematch?) ago
Chapter 378 - Unique Lifeforms ago
Chapter 379 - A Truly Cursed Ritual ago
Chapter 380 - Hunger ago
Chapter 381 - Eternal Hunger ago
Chapter 382 - Progress Through Cursed Slaughter ago
Chapter 383 - Skills & Paths ago
Chapter 384 - Fumigation ago
Chapter 385 - A Path From Inferiority ago
Chapter 386 - First Contact: C-Grade ago
Chapter 387 - Underground ago
Chapter 388 - Onwards! To Haven! ago
Chapter 389 - A Good Eye For People ago
Chapter 390 - A Monumental Monument ago
Chapter 391 - Clearing Up Misconceptions Left & Right ago
Intermission 7/9 - Holyland: All By the Grace of the Holy Mother ago
Chapter 392 - Off He Goes ago
Chapter 393 - Designing the School Uniform ago
Chapter 394 - To Feel the Shroud ago
Chapter 395 - The Weight of Time ago
Chapter 396 - Finding the Purpose ago
Chapter 397 - A Shroud of Stars & School Life Dangers ago
Chapter 398 - School Preparations ago
Chapter 399 - A New Era ago
Chapter 400 - A Diverse Crowd ago
Chapter 401 - Dungeon: Order of the Malefic Viper D-grade entrance-test ago
Chapter 402 - You Win Some, You Lose Some ago
Chapter 403 - Elective Tests ago
Chapter 404 - Readiness Not Found ago
Chapter 405 - Angry Transmutation ago
Chapter 406 - Pretty Easy ago
Chapter 407 - Dominating the Test ago
Chapter 408 - Meeting Expectations ago
Chapter 409 - Extra Credits Hydra ago
Chapter 410 - Beast vs Man ago
Chapter 411 - A Legendary Warrior ago
Chapter 412 - Fangs of Man ago
Chapter 413 - The Human Has Fangs ago
Chapter 414 - Academy Entry Token ago
Chapter 415 - A Different TIme ago
Chapter 416 - An Uncertain Future ago
Chapter 417 - Rules & A Very Good Question ago
Chapter 418 - "The Positive Side" ago
Chapter 419 - Conversations Are Hard ago
Chapter 420 - Blaze It! ago
Chapter 421 - A Life of Punishment ago
Chapter 422 - First Lesson ago
Chapter 423 - Willpower, Flames & Dragons ago
Chapter 424 - Mysterious Senior ago
Chapter 425 - Soulflame & Exposed ago
Chapter 426 - A New Path ago
Chapter 427 - Windy Times Ahead ago
Chapter 428 - Bit of Dragon Lore ago
Chapter 429 - The History of Bloodlines ago
Chapter 430 - Relationships Are Hard. Oh, and Neurotoxins ago
Chapter 431 - Slow And Steady Wins the Race ago
Chapter 432 - Party Prepping ago
Chapter 433 - The Power of Booze ago
Chapter 434 - Outed ago
Book 2 of the Primal Hunter now out on Amazon + Coins. ago
Chapter 435 - Political Maneuvering & Preperations ago
Chapter 436 - Presence of a King ago
Chapter 437 - Discussing the Future of Earth ago
Chapter 438 - Paths To A Better Future ago
Chapter 439 - A Good Chat & Hidden Agendas ago
Chapter 440 - A Case of Bad Communication ago
Chapter 441 - The Right Path ago
Chapter 442 - Golden Opportunities Only A Moron Would Waste ago
Chapter 443 - Vampire Visit ago
Chapter 444 - The Sentiment of Vampires ago
Chapter 445 - Vampire Hoarders ago
Chapter 446 - Heart of the Alchemist ago
Chapter 447 - Momentum + Wealth = Progress ago
Chapter 448 - Unexpected New Paths ago
Chapter 449 - Oras ago
Chapter 450 - Comprehending the Incomprehensible ago
Chapter 451 - Ambermill: A Quaint Little Town ago
Chapter 452 - Friendly Advice & Competition ago
Chapter 453 - Earth Elemental Prima ago
Chapter 454 - The Great Escape ago
Chapter 455 - Grand Mangrove River ago
Chapter 456 - Bend! ago
Chapter 457 - The Depths of the Grand Mangrove River ago
Chapter 458 - Making "Friends" ago
Chapter 459 - Port City Changlun ago
Chapter 460 - Crossing the Great Pond ago
Chapter 461 - City-Hopping ago
Chapter 462 - Tracking & Danger Bird ago
Chapter 463 - Paradise ago
Chapter 464 - Gambling Time ago
Chapter 465 - The Importance of Keeping Up Appearances ago
Chapter 466 - The Salvento Family ago
Chapter 467 - Peak Family Drama ago
Chapter 468 - A One-Sided Family Feud ago
Chapter 469 - Catharsis ago
Chapter 470 - The Morning After ago
Chapter 471 - Jungle Hunting ago
Chapter 472 - Skills, Statuses, & A Stealthy Future ago
Chapter 473 - Covert Wills ago
Chapter 474 - Stealth Archer Training ago
Chapter 475 - Phantomshade Panther ago
Chapter 476 - In the Jungle... ago
Chapter 477 - The Mighty Jungle... ago
Chapter 478 - The Hunter Sleeps Tonight ago
Chapter 479 - A Step Forward For the Universe ago
Chapter 480 - Seat of the Exalted Prima ago
Chapter 481 - Unrealistic Planetary Standards ago
Chapter 482 - Path of Myriad Choices ago
Chapter 483 - A Very Different Life ago
Chapter 484 - Understanding Thyself ago
Chapter 485 - A Lonely Existence ago
Chapter 486 - Profession?? ago
Chapter 487 - A Path To Survival ago
Chapter 488 - The Faint Line Between The Virtual & Reality ago
Book 3 the Primal Hunter now out on Amazon/Audible! ago
Chapter 489 - Internal Developments ago
Chapter 490 - Beneath the Stars ago
Chapter 491 - Meetings & Leaving the Seat ago
Chapter 492 - Great Wonders & Wondering What To Level ago
Chapter 493 - Not Blackmail ago
Chapter 494 - Learning Styles & Internal Struggle ago
Chapter 495 - Two Geniuses Making Plans: Me & Myself ago
Chapter 496 - A Counter+Intuitive Fighting Style. ago
Chapter 497 - "So, you want to join the Order of the Malefic Viper?" ago
Chapter 498 - Minor Misunderstandings & Dungeon ago
Chapter 499 - Oversharing & One More Beer ago
Chapter 500 - Spontaneous Decisions Are The Best Decisions ago
Chapter 501 - Girl Time & Guy Time ago
Chapter 502 - Mushrooms... So Many Mushrooms. ago
Chapter 503 - Truly Evil Dungeon Design ago
Chapter 504 - Heroes of the Ninth Floor ago
Chapter 505 - Mushroom Massacre & Friend Visit ago
Chapter 506 - United In Hatred ago
Chapter 507 - Reflecting On Stats & Supreme Final Boss ago
Chapter 508 - A Rude Interruption ago
Chapter 509 - (Un)expected Situation ago
Chapter 510 - Reika & the Insurmountable Task Of Trying To Explain Jake ago
Chapter 511 - Friendships & The Question Of Why They Are So Damn Hard. ago

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Ignar_herceg
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Weirdly, I have fallen in love with the game like system of this genre ... and been binging them none stop, but LIKE isekai's most of them are UTTER garbage... like I have phone in fantasy land or whatever more BS concept is out there. What I have found that The Author loves to go somewhat deep into emotional understanding of our being... which a lot of book/show/movies try to bring into their fould but fail at miserably because they shy away from being truly gritty... and showing how most humans are pieces of shits and how to find those they may not resamble those pieces so much. 

What I have found in PH has, great MC though process (IN CERTAIN certain scenarios), intressting concept behind the whole game system that LITrpg have, some TRULLY great side characters, great description of scenes, but leaving a lot to your imagination still so not be over descriptive... as I have found online a lot of people find it weirdly irrateting? 

the stuff that could have some improvment:
-Fights.... I love them in someways but.... maybe it is that MC's can't die thus my enjoyment of Jake's figts are ... quite limited I don't know why but in this book those fights are NOT stale... but without a flare it may be done to so several factor or only one but I couldn't tell you what it is...


-Not nearly enough for shadowed stuff.... it's OOOWH so satisfying to remember a small detail that was ONCE or twice mentioned and feeling like you are a benevolent god in the universe of the story and watch it with intrest instead of a reader of it.... (this may be redone later as to I'm only at 100 chpt ) 

-I KNOW it's really hard but I'm quite afraid of some kind of power crep of happening in the story that turns me of... where the MC gets a power as an acheivment for something that he done and it becomes a main part of him... this could be nice in some cases and it hasn't happened so far but I'm just saying I'd love to say "Well I was wrong, nice power scaling"

this is all I had for today.... go home now

MattMcCormick
Overall

A few others here have made points about plot or rather it's absence and lack of character development. I like PH, but I struggle to disagree. What was a strong start soon turned into a carousel of hunt, level, alchemy, level. There is zero personal conflict and the NC has not been in any real danger since the tutorial. My other bone of contention is thr MC seems to be actively turning into an obnoxious douchebag (see recent curse related activity)... It was almost a plot point . But took a hard left into 'just another example of MC bring awesome' and it was a missed opportunity for character growth. Honestly it made me take a look MC's past behaviour in that light an maybe he was just obnoxious all along.

Despite nosediving into another being another Dragonball Z reskin LitRPG I did enjoy the audiobook and you don't binge 300 chapters if you get nothing out of it. The world building is great and the 'system' is implemented nicely. I am crossing my fingers for some rewrites going into the commercial releases going forward. PH has the bones of something great but needs some work (plot, conflict, character development and editing). 

crazy cupcake wizard
Overall

At first, I absolutely loved this story. It had its flaws, but the main character and the fun way combat was detailed was fascinating. And then I kept reading. The more it went on, the longer combat lasted without actually contributing to the story in an interesting way. The main character had growth, but what started as impactful, crazy scenarios to push him turned into long, boring self reflections about the same 3 ideas multiple times. 

So I skimmed the combat, since while the power was scaling, the layout was not. And then it talked about alchemy, which was pretty fun, until it'll be the only actual content in a chapter for about the 25th time. And then there are the multiple perspectives. The coolest combat scenes? The ones where Jake really does something cool. Like shoot at a cloud from miles and miles away. It didn't last long, the end result was the same as any other, yet it didn't take a week to make.

William's actually the best character here. Yeah, I said it; despite what looks like 70% of all readers disagreeing with me. The thing with him is that, unlike pretty much every other character for me, the more I read about him the better he gets. He goes on his own story, but it's actually centered on the people he interacts with, instead of just going into a cave for 20 chapters and having 'development' there. It's just a shame that he represents probably the biggest problem I have with this story.

Diction: the choice and use of words and phrases in speech or writing. 

Villy, an immortal god who's lived through the creation of universes has the same pattern of speech as our main character. Jacob, a ruler of a city and a follower of fate, talks like our main character. William, a mostly-psycopath trying to find his own road in life, talks like our main character. They have their own quirks and types of discussion, yet the diction remains the same. Who uses 'rad' in their own heads?! What kind of cold-blooded, PTSD inducing people say things like 'epic'?! It's easily my biggest issue. Please author, I'm begging you. On my knees and head to the floor: have your characters use different types of diction. 

This story starts out fun, but the same flaws don't improve over time. Read it if you're bored, or don't want to read Azarinth anymore as at least this story actually does contain development and deep magic laws. 

gln9
Overall

Sadly started of strong but then went nowhere. A lot of words in this story, but they tell very little beyond depicting fights and crafting. The shallowness and onedimensionality of the MC is surpassed only by that of the supporting cast, which seem to exist only to admire and/or fear the MC.The MC himself shows little character traits beyond his competitiveness and drive to become stronger. Aside from that he shows very little interest in his surroundings, seeming to neither care much for the people outside his closest family, nor to be very curious about the changed world beyond what it can offer to increase his power.

World building is precious little, and what little there is seems to be irrelevant as it merely serves as a stage for the next fight or material gathering, to then be quickly forgotten after those chapters.

Honestly this entire story feels stuck in the mud for at least the last 200 chapters and urgently needs to pick itself up if it doesnt want to keep degenerating into a powerwank that is just a pointless succession of battles of some uninteresting bloke.

FloatingPencils
Overall

Read if You're on the Fence ig

Reviewed at: Chapter 158 - Why?

Brub i swear I'm hooked on this like AHHHHHHH. Jake literally the protagonist I've been looking forrrrr. He's suicidal, first off, because he likes fighting life or death battles because it "isn't fun if there's no danger of dying" and the way he interacts with other people isn't annoying. He has morals, but he also lacks the common sense other people have and its funny reading about him not understanding the mentality of other people 🤣. Also, there's no romance (and personally I prefer it that way) so if you're looking for or are into that I'll have to disappoint you. Could go on, but ill spare you (because fr we could be here all day :P)

Eisensin
Overall

Not even remotely as good as it once was

Reviewed at: Chapter 453 - Earth Elemental Prima

Let me start off by saying I LOVE litrpgs. They are an absolute guilty pleasure for me and I'll forgive and overlook a ton of flaws just because the whole genre is basically a constant nerdgasm for me.

However, this story has become incredibly stale and while I do understand the idea that the mc is supposed to be this super powerful hunter, it's becoming increasingly difficult to not cringe every 3 or 4 lines. Literally everyone in the story either fears and/or respects the guy. Every single chapter is the same with its "MC is the greatest and strongest ever with answers for everything". While the prose was never really something that stood out, it has fallen off the cliff entirely (and is part of the reason I cringe reading every chapter). Just look at this:

An hour after leaving the tower, he was already within another, with a new Mark of Blood in hand. Well, in his Hunter Insignia. Whatever.

 

or this,

 

While their responses differed, one thing was certain… none of them dared shit-talk him ever again. In fact, they would prefer to never even meet him or get his attention.

Ever.

 

This is incredibly common. I believe this was just one chapter.

Most characters are like a cardboard cutout with one or two qualities to define them (and that's only for the characters that matter). No one besides the MC sees any substantial development. Jake, however, still manages to be an extremely boring MC. After 300 chapters the only thing he's managed to do is turn into even more of an edgy teenager.

While I'll probably continue reading the story becuase I have this absolute need to finish up anything I start, I just can't ever recommend anyone actually pick this story up. Which is a shame because I did like the story in its earlier days.

LostAncilla
Overall

The rough arc I've read through so far entails the protagonist starting the battle royale of a tutorial, learning he has a strong individualist streak, refining his abilities and progressing through a trial to meet a certain someone at the end.

I can feel there is some consistency in the setting being sketched out. However, the setting lacks a great deal of depth which leaves makes engaging with the main character a bit if a trial.

For starters, Survival per se isn't much of a concern. No sicknesses, infections, hydration issues or similar ever actually make themselves known. People are certainly scared but not palpably tired,  emotionally drained, fragile or otherwise overtly inconvenienced by the setting itself. The exclusive threat is by express violence delivered by some variety of monster - the human variety included.

The character writing is most accurately represented in the dialogue - there are no discernable characterizing traits at all. No verbal ticks that contribute to emotivity. No change in how contractions are (inconsistently) applied.

I can't much agree with how the rising action of leveling was arrested with a Challenge that shifted the combat focus to an academic one, either. Moreover, I take issue with it being far more rewarding than actually taking the survival challenge head on as the protagonist originally set out to do. The updates from all the side characters while the protagonist was off being spoon-fed power were far more intesting.

I did appreciate the portrayal of how the others are advancing during the tutorial on contrast with the protagonist's path. I just wish they actually had discernable characters

SeekTrueTruth
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Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Loner goes into the mountains to train

Reviewed at: Chapter 178 - Names

I forced myself to read this as someone recommended it. The main problem are the characters. They lack depth.

The main character is supposed to be a working adult but can't maintain a proper conversation with others. That's going to be very rare in real life. I've met a few people during my time but it's just not a common thing. Also, you are told that certain characters are great leaders, they're outgoing, etc. but they don't show those characteristics. A girl is beautiful because the author says she is. However the descriptions and her behavior doesn't convey it.

The aliens are not alien at all. Instead they behave just like human beings. A character who is supposed to be one of the most powerful and long-lived in the multiverse acts like the MC's close childhood friend. No sophistication at all.

I could care less about the leveling system. It's really dumb. The main gimmick is that the MC has a bloodline that makes him superior and that falls outside of the System. Then the author introduces 5 skills every few level ups and the author goes at length to explain why 4 out of those 5 skills suck. Repeat this ad nauseum.

Also, archery. Yes, I think using archery is a mistake. It's not even interesting archery. It's the stupid type that you see in most RPGs. Skills like power shot, split shot, etc. There has to be a way to make it more enjoyable. I groaned when I saw the author choose that class. 

At the end of the Tutorial arc, you realize there was almost no character growth. Instead the MC is doing his own thing levelling up. What happens while he is doing dungeons? Exactly. Waste of charcters and the whole arc. Why would you do this to your characters that you have invested such little time in growing? Oh, maybe this makes a lot of sense. May as well have skipped the tutorial and pretend the novel begins afterwards. 

Finally you have the MC learning magic and everything without the aid of the System. He also obtains beast allies and pets. They will guard his settlers while he is off training in the mountains again. Ah, I see, they are like turrets in Fallout 4. I understand now. They can act as mounts too and even teach the travel skill. What a bargain. 

It's readable, but I ended up skimming through most of the self-training parts. It's not interesting enough to read as you realize it's the same litRPG recycled garbage. It's the characters and the decisions the authors makes that are bad in this story. If the MC was a bit more mature and interacted with others it could have been interesting. If you like a loner going into the mountains to train then you may love this story. I don't hate it but neither do I particularly like it. The writing is readable, as I said. 

My recommendation is to pass this story and spend your valuable time elsewhere. 

tockblue
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Promising but characters hold it back

Reviewed at: Chapter 25 - Enjoying life

Reviewed at Ch 25. Some core stuff worth reading here, but the social and character dynamics are holding it back to feeling like another by-the-numbers power growth fantasy with too little character work.

A main character issue is the protag/antagonists themselves.  Not sure I'm a fan of William on a meta level. Doesn't seem to add much, even if intended to just make the MC seem less antisocial/edgy by contrast, provide a cleaner bad guy opposite to MC than Richard. TBH, makes me want to see more from others like Jacob or Shield Guy Who Is Good #1. Give me someone to root for with agency and motivations.

Openly but irrationally sociopathic William (no reason to kill the trio, more to gain from connecting them to Richard's group and 'letting then grow') vs MC being neurotically, selfishly, myopically asocial vs Richard as social-but-Bad... the contrast is being set up but somehow they all scan as overly similar or at least equally hard to root for, with only Richard at least showing rational forethought (if scummily/clumsily). The MC isn't actively scummy to others, but neglecting/ignoring others isn't a big enough contrast to "sleazy but so far it's working to keep others safe and alive" to mark one as protag and one as antag.

Three levels of social dependency (Richard>William>MC) and social maladaption  doesn't make for interesting commentary YET. William sucks, but he understands others can be useful. The MC is one moment of NOT having plot armor away from disaster with no acknowledgement of it. 

No challenge has been presented that requires teaming for MC, but becoming an alchemist that can make potions or poisons for others is a synergy that'd be awesome to see explored. "Ooh, interesting, poisons are risky to experiment with and could require healing support or gatherers to help- oh, Got Skills For That, nvm, carry on."

Things so far are just a bit too tidy. MC rolls Archer class which has limitations, shows benefit of teaming with a good front liner and healer, gets enough vitality to not need anyone. K. Dungeon Challenges are a thing, but requirements are perfectly aligned to (so far) solely the MC. K. 1 dimensional awful destructive selfish nihilist DarGonz exists and MC is on the same path of strength for its own sake? K. Jacob says MC is his friend, K, but how shown in either direction? 

Cool to see SOME agency, challenge (nameless workers trying to unlock profession at camp) and/or collaboration (early fights with Jacob group), but the three main driving characters are coming across pretty shallow or frustrating. MC: "oh I can make mana potions! yay stat points from discovery!" not " wonder if the healers (including that token love interest girl I forgot about) would need these/I could barter to have them help me search for other materials or items from chests." 

Lotta good stuff here but the social and character dynamics so far are making it rougher going for me as a reader. 

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So first of all let me clarify why this is a very subjective review. Of course every person is different, but i do find myself quite peculiar, not special, but peculiar. There are things that i absolutely detest and cannot stand and this eill naturally affect my review.

Let's start with grammar and writing

Honestly i dont find any fault with either. The author doesnt use flowery phrases and words which is fine with me and grammar is also quite good. But i do have to admit that i find curse words an annoyance. I do understand that we all curse and i myself curse a lot in my everyday life, and i can see why thr author would want to use curse words as to make a story more relatable, but personally it ruins the experience for me quite a bit. Especially when an existence trillions of years old curses, its just very weird. It's also unpleasant when the MC curses in the presence of others as well, it's very rude.

Onto the style

I have to agree with my fellow readers that overly detailed descriptions are boring and often unnecessary. I myself often skip skill descriptions, the MC's thought process descriptions, fights, alchemy sessions and sometimes even dialogues. Or side character related stuff, why would i care about people like Hank, Chris and these fourth rate characters that are mediocre in every way and wont matter 2-3 hundred chaps later? All these things really ruin the pacing.

As for the story, i dont have many complaints as the idea of a multiverse does appeal to me quite a bit, and even though it's unclear where exactly thr story is going, i like it quite a bit.

Characters

Lets start with the Viper.

Mc-Villy relationship is pure BS. I dont want to talk about it extensivelly as it would take too much time, but come on. Villy is unnatural and thats how the author wanted to portray him and its fine, but he is too unnatural. Trillions of years old existence treating a 30 year old guy as a best friend? Bruh. And also listening to his hypocritical bullshit? Double bruh. 

Sylphie. I hate sylphie, hawkie, mystie, trollie, eaglie and all the other useless "characters" the author will introduce in the future.  EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER i have to read how cute sylphie is and everyone adores sylphie and finds IT cute. Every time this hawk is mentioned i feel the danger of losing my braincells. These characters dont contribute anything and are just there as a filler, which is fine, but it's not fine to have them mentioned every single chapter.  

As for other side characters , i honestly dont have too much to complain. Sword saint is interesting and likeable wise old man. Jacob is also a very interesting character for me and i find his path very fascinating. Something to look forward to for sure. Miranda is OK. William also.  I dont understand Lillian. I like Arnold and Sultan a lot. Caleb is also okay. 

Now for the MC. MC is a fucking hypocryte, stupdily dumb, an idiot, narrow minded and other bad adjectives that i dont know because english is my third language. I have mentioned that there are some things i absolutely cant stand. Hypocrisy is one of them, illogical thinking, an unreasonable character are another. There are so many flaws in MCs thinking that i dont even want to start listing them. He outright lacks common sense. 

For example, he knows that his relationship with Villy is one of a kind, but he still gets confused as to why people are either surprised or confused about the nature of their relationship. When they assume that he serves the Viper, instead of clearing up the misunderstanding or even better, just outright not caring about what they think, MC gets mad, aggressive, as i said, completely unreasonable.

Mc's character is also inconsistent. Before the system he was this anti social guy who didnt want to communicate outside of work. I am also similar so i understand. But after the system, he goes striking up conversations with strangers for no fucking reason, makes more friends and talks more than he did before the system, acts very comfortable with strangers ( be it curse words, or just using impolite manner of speech). Okay you mgith say he changed with the system and thats it or his bloodline awoke and that changed him. But no. He still says he doesnt want to communicate with strangers, but acts completely contrary to his words. 

The author tries to do too much with the MCs character. 

He is against slavery( thinks slaughtering is better than enslaving and outright hates everyone who doesnt agree with him)

He thinks post system all races are equal

He goes to beasts territories and slaughters them(whole populations of beasts)

But he doesnt like when someone( a human) kills "innocent" humans

Imposes his moronic and hypocritical views on others just because he is stronger(agree or i will kill you) and preaches to a fucking immortal GOD about whats right and whats wrong. 

His first encounter with Sultan was honestly sickening and i had to skip 1-2 chapters. Almost dropped it because of how unreasonable the MC is. You can have your views, but dont fucking preach and keep them to yourself (sometimes i hope someone very strong will show up and mc will get caught in his bullshit and have his shit beat out of him), whata re you a fucking beast right or anti slavery activist? If you think of yourself as a hunter, just hunt and dont concern yourself with useless things like fighting slavery in the multiverse.

I dont get his aversion to slavery either. Its like he thinks its obligatory to treat slaves badly. You can have a slave and treat them like a person, just that they wont be able to stab you in the back because of the contract. Wheres the fucking problem with it?

Mc also has a tendency of not using his braina t all. He just doesnt think. Says that he is a hunter and doesnt have time for his faction ( but he has time for preaching anti slavery and screaming that beasts are people too). Even while it wouldnt take him any effort to help his faction (just bringing them the bodies of the beasts he kills for example) he doesnt do it. He doesnt care at all. Then why does he even have a faction? 

 It turned out long and i do apologise for a badly structured review and errors, i wrote this on the phone.