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On just another normal Monday, the world changed. The universe had reached a threshold humanity didn’t even know existed, and it was time to finally be integrated into the vast multiverse. A world where power is the only thing that one can truly rely on.
Jake, a seemingly average office worker, finds himself thrust into this new world. Into a tutorial filled with dangers and opportunities. In a world that should breed fear and concern, an environment that makes his fellow coworkers falter, Jake instead finds himself thriving.
Perhaps… Jake was born for this kind of world, to begin with.
5 chapters a week.
Average chapter length: 2500
Tags and content warnings are mainly to give me creative freedom later on. This is my first novel ever, and English isn’t my native language, so go easy on me chaps. Any feedback is more than welcome, of course. Also, this novel is only posted on Royalroad, Patreon, and my Amazon releases, so if you are reading it elsewhere, it's pirated and you suck if you keep reading.
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Weirdly, I have fallen in love with the game like system of this genre ... and been binging them none stop, but LIKE isekai's most of them are UTTER garbage... like I have phone in fantasy land or whatever more BS concept is out there. What I have found that The Author loves to go somewhat deep into emotional understanding of our being... which a lot of book/show/movies try to bring into their fould but fail at miserably because they shy away from being truly gritty... and showing how most humans are pieces of shits and how to find those they may not resamble those pieces so much.
What I have found in PH has, great MC though process (IN CERTAIN certain scenarios), intressting concept behind the whole game system that LITrpg have, some TRULLY great side characters, great description of scenes, but leaving a lot to your imagination still so not be over descriptive... as I have found online a lot of people find it weirdly irrateting?
the stuff that could have some improvment:
-Fights.... I love them in someways but.... maybe it is that MC's can't die thus my enjoyment of Jake's figts are ... quite limited I don't know why but in this book those fights are NOT stale... but without a flare it may be done to so several factor or only one but I couldn't tell you what it is...
-Not nearly enough for shadowed stuff.... it's OOOWH so satisfying to remember a small detail that was ONCE or twice mentioned and feeling like you are a benevolent god in the universe of the story and watch it with intrest instead of a reader of it.... (this may be redone later as to I'm only at 100 chpt )
-I KNOW it's really hard but I'm quite afraid of some kind of power crep of happening in the story that turns me of... where the MC gets a power as an acheivment for something that he done and it becomes a main part of him... this could be nice in some cases and it hasn't happened so far but I'm just saying I'd love to say "Well I was wrong, nice power scaling"
this is all I had for today.... go home now
A few others here have made points about plot or rather it's absence and lack of character development. I like PH, but I struggle to disagree. What was a strong start soon turned into a carousel of hunt, level, alchemy, level. There is zero personal conflict and the NC has not been in any real danger since the tutorial. My other bone of contention is thr MC seems to be actively turning into an obnoxious douchebag (see recent curse related activity)... It was almost a plot point . But took a hard left into 'just another example of MC bring awesome' and it was a missed opportunity for character growth. Honestly it made me take a look MC's past behaviour in that light an maybe he was just obnoxious all along.
Despite nosediving into another being another Dragonball Z reskin LitRPG I did enjoy the audiobook and you don't binge 300 chapters if you get nothing out of it. The world building is great and the 'system' is implemented nicely. I am crossing my fingers for some rewrites going into the commercial releases going forward. PH has the bones of something great but needs some work (plot, conflict, character development and editing).
At first, I absolutely loved this story. It had its flaws, but the main character and the fun way combat was detailed was fascinating. And then I kept reading. The more it went on, the longer combat lasted without actually contributing to the story in an interesting way. The main character had growth, but what started as impactful, crazy scenarios to push him turned into long, boring self reflections about the same 3 ideas multiple times.
So I skimmed the combat, since while the power was scaling, the layout was not. And then it talked about alchemy, which was pretty fun, until it'll be the only actual content in a chapter for about the 25th time. And then there are the multiple perspectives. The coolest combat scenes? The ones where Jake really does something cool. Like shoot at a cloud from miles and miles away. It didn't last long, the end result was the same as any other, yet it didn't take a week to make.
William's actually the best character here. Yeah, I said it; despite what looks like 70% of all readers disagreeing with me. The thing with him is that, unlike pretty much every other character for me, the more I read about him the better he gets. He goes on his own story, but it's actually centered on the people he interacts with, instead of just going into a cave for 20 chapters and having 'development' there. It's just a shame that he represents probably the biggest problem I have with this story.
Diction: the choice and use of words and phrases in speech or writing.
Villy, an immortal god who's lived through the creation of universes has the same pattern of speech as our main character. Jacob, a ruler of a city and a follower of fate, talks like our main character. William, a mostly-psycopath trying to find his own road in life, talks like our main character. They have their own quirks and types of discussion, yet the diction remains the same. Who uses 'rad' in their own heads?! What kind of cold-blooded, PTSD inducing people say things like 'epic'?! It's easily my biggest issue. Please author, I'm begging you. On my knees and head to the floor: have your characters use different types of diction.
This story starts out fun, but the same flaws don't improve over time. Read it if you're bored, or don't want to read Azarinth anymore as at least this story actually does contain development and deep magic laws.
Sadly started of strong but then went nowhere. A lot of words in this story, but they tell very little beyond depicting fights and crafting. The shallowness and onedimensionality of the MC is surpassed only by that of the supporting cast, which seem to exist only to admire and/or fear the MC.The MC himself shows little character traits beyond his competitiveness and drive to become stronger. Aside from that he shows very little interest in his surroundings, seeming to neither care much for the people outside his closest family, nor to be very curious about the changed world beyond what it can offer to increase his power.
World building is precious little, and what little there is seems to be irrelevant as it merely serves as a stage for the next fight or material gathering, to then be quickly forgotten after those chapters.
Honestly this entire story feels stuck in the mud for at least the last 200 chapters and urgently needs to pick itself up if it doesnt want to keep degenerating into a powerwank that is just a pointless succession of battles of some uninteresting bloke.
Brub i swear I'm hooked on this like AHHHHHHH. Jake literally the protagonist I've been looking forrrrr. He's suicidal, first off, because he likes fighting life or death battles because it "isn't fun if there's no danger of dying" and the way he interacts with other people isn't annoying. He has morals, but he also lacks the common sense other people have and its funny reading about him not understanding the mentality of other people 🤣. Also, there's no romance (and personally I prefer it that way) so if you're looking for or are into that I'll have to disappoint you. Could go on, but ill spare you (because fr we could be here all day :P)
Let me start off by saying I LOVE litrpgs. They are an absolute guilty pleasure for me and I'll forgive and overlook a ton of flaws just because the whole genre is basically a constant nerdgasm for me.
However, this story has become incredibly stale and while I do understand the idea that the mc is supposed to be this super powerful hunter, it's becoming increasingly difficult to not cringe every 3 or 4 lines. Literally everyone in the story either fears and/or respects the guy. Every single chapter is the same with its "MC is the greatest and strongest ever with answers for everything". While the prose was never really something that stood out, it has fallen off the cliff entirely (and is part of the reason I cringe reading every chapter). Just look at this:
An hour after leaving the tower, he was already within another, with a new Mark of Blood in hand. Well, in his Hunter Insignia. Whatever.
While their responses differed, one thing was certain… none of them dared shit-talk him ever again. In fact, they would prefer to never even meet him or get his attention.
This is incredibly common. I believe this was just one chapter.
Most characters are like a cardboard cutout with one or two qualities to define them (and that's only for the characters that matter). No one besides the MC sees any substantial development. Jake, however, still manages to be an extremely boring MC. After 300 chapters the only thing he's managed to do is turn into even more of an edgy teenager.
While I'll probably continue reading the story becuase I have this absolute need to finish up anything I start, I just can't ever recommend anyone actually pick this story up. Which is a shame because I did like the story in its earlier days.
The rough arc I've read through so far entails the protagonist starting the battle royale of a tutorial, learning he has a strong individualist streak, refining his abilities and progressing through a trial to meet a certain someone at the end.
I can feel there is some consistency in the setting being sketched out. However, the setting lacks a great deal of depth which leaves makes engaging with the main character a bit if a trial.
For starters, Survival per se isn't much of a concern. No sicknesses, infections, hydration issues or similar ever actually make themselves known. People are certainly scared but not palpably tired, emotionally drained, fragile or otherwise overtly inconvenienced by the setting itself. The exclusive threat is by express violence delivered by some variety of monster - the human variety included.
The character writing is most accurately represented in the dialogue - there are no discernable characterizing traits at all. No verbal ticks that contribute to emotivity. No change in how contractions are (inconsistently) applied.
I can't much agree with how the rising action of leveling was arrested with a Challenge that shifted the combat focus to an academic one, either. Moreover, I take issue with it being far more rewarding than actually taking the survival challenge head on as the protagonist originally set out to do. The updates from all the side characters while the protagonist was off being spoon-fed power were far more intesting.
I did appreciate the portrayal of how the others are advancing during the tutorial on contrast with the protagonist's path. I just wish they actually had discernable characters
I forced myself to read this as someone recommended it. The main problem are the characters. They lack depth.
The main character is supposed to be a working adult but can't maintain a proper conversation with others. That's going to be very rare in real life. I've met a few people during my time but it's just not a common thing. Also, you are told that certain characters are great leaders, they're outgoing, etc. but they don't show those characteristics. A girl is beautiful because the author says she is. However the descriptions and her behavior doesn't convey it.
The aliens are not alien at all. Instead they behave just like human beings. A character who is supposed to be one of the most powerful and long-lived in the multiverse acts like the MC's close childhood friend. No sophistication at all.
I could care less about the leveling system. It's really dumb. The main gimmick is that the MC has a bloodline that makes him superior and that falls outside of the System. Then the author introduces 5 skills every few level ups and the author goes at length to explain why 4 out of those 5 skills suck. Repeat this ad nauseum.
Also, archery. Yes, I think using archery is a mistake. It's not even interesting archery. It's the stupid type that you see in most RPGs. Skills like power shot, split shot, etc. There has to be a way to make it more enjoyable. I groaned when I saw the author choose that class.
At the end of the Tutorial arc, you realize there was almost no character growth. Instead the MC is doing his own thing levelling up. What happens while he is doing dungeons? Exactly. Waste of charcters and the whole arc. Why would you do this to your characters that you have invested such little time in growing? Oh, maybe this makes a lot of sense. May as well have skipped the tutorial and pretend the novel begins afterwards.
Finally you have the MC learning magic and everything without the aid of the System. He also obtains beast allies and pets. They will guard his settlers while he is off training in the mountains again. Ah, I see, they are like turrets in Fallout 4. I understand now. They can act as mounts too and even teach the travel skill. What a bargain.
It's readable, but I ended up skimming through most of the self-training parts. It's not interesting enough to read as you realize it's the same litRPG recycled garbage. It's the characters and the decisions the authors makes that are bad in this story. If the MC was a bit more mature and interacted with others it could have been interesting. If you like a loner going into the mountains to train then you may love this story. I don't hate it but neither do I particularly like it. The writing is readable, as I said.
My recommendation is to pass this story and spend your valuable time elsewhere.
Reviewed at Ch 25. Some core stuff worth reading here, but the social and character dynamics are holding it back to feeling like another by-the-numbers power growth fantasy with too little character work.
A main character issue is the protag/antagonists themselves. Not sure I'm a fan of William on a meta level. Doesn't seem to add much, even if intended to just make the MC seem less antisocial/edgy by contrast, provide a cleaner bad guy opposite to MC than Richard. TBH, makes me want to see more from others like Jacob or Shield Guy Who Is Good #1. Give me someone to root for with agency and motivations.
Openly but irrationally sociopathic William (no reason to kill the trio, more to gain from connecting them to Richard's group and 'letting then grow') vs MC being neurotically, selfishly, myopically asocial vs Richard as social-but-Bad... the contrast is being set up but somehow they all scan as overly similar or at least equally hard to root for, with only Richard at least showing rational forethought (if scummily/clumsily). The MC isn't actively scummy to others, but neglecting/ignoring others isn't a big enough contrast to "sleazy but so far it's working to keep others safe and alive" to mark one as protag and one as antag.
Three levels of social dependency (Richard>William>MC) and social maladaption doesn't make for interesting commentary YET. William sucks, but he understands others can be useful. The MC is one moment of NOT having plot armor away from disaster with no acknowledgement of it.
No challenge has been presented that requires teaming for MC, but becoming an alchemist that can make potions or poisons for others is a synergy that'd be awesome to see explored. "Ooh, interesting, poisons are risky to experiment with and could require healing support or gatherers to help- oh, Got Skills For That, nvm, carry on."
Things so far are just a bit too tidy. MC rolls Archer class which has limitations, shows benefit of teaming with a good front liner and healer, gets enough vitality to not need anyone. K. Dungeon Challenges are a thing, but requirements are perfectly aligned to (so far) solely the MC. K. 1 dimensional awful destructive selfish nihilist DarGonz exists and MC is on the same path of strength for its own sake? K. Jacob says MC is his friend, K, but how shown in either direction?
Cool to see SOME agency, challenge (nameless workers trying to unlock profession at camp) and/or collaboration (early fights with Jacob group), but the three main driving characters are coming across pretty shallow or frustrating. MC: "oh I can make mana potions! yay stat points from discovery!" not " wonder if the healers (including that token love interest girl I forgot about) would need these/I could barter to have them help me search for other materials or items from chests."
Lotta good stuff here but the social and character dynamics so far are making it rougher going for me as a reader.
So first of all let me clarify why this is a very subjective review. Of course every person is different, but i do find myself quite peculiar, not special, but peculiar. There are things that i absolutely detest and cannot stand and this eill naturally affect my review.
Let's start with grammar and writing
Honestly i dont find any fault with either. The author doesnt use flowery phrases and words which is fine with me and grammar is also quite good. But i do have to admit that i find curse words an annoyance. I do understand that we all curse and i myself curse a lot in my everyday life, and i can see why thr author would want to use curse words as to make a story more relatable, but personally it ruins the experience for me quite a bit. Especially when an existence trillions of years old curses, its just very weird. It's also unpleasant when the MC curses in the presence of others as well, it's very rude.
Onto the style
I have to agree with my fellow readers that overly detailed descriptions are boring and often unnecessary. I myself often skip skill descriptions, the MC's thought process descriptions, fights, alchemy sessions and sometimes even dialogues. Or side character related stuff, why would i care about people like Hank, Chris and these fourth rate characters that are mediocre in every way and wont matter 2-3 hundred chaps later? All these things really ruin the pacing.
As for the story, i dont have many complaints as the idea of a multiverse does appeal to me quite a bit, and even though it's unclear where exactly thr story is going, i like it quite a bit.
Lets start with the Viper.
Mc-Villy relationship is pure BS. I dont want to talk about it extensivelly as it would take too much time, but come on. Villy is unnatural and thats how the author wanted to portray him and its fine, but he is too unnatural. Trillions of years old existence treating a 30 year old guy as a best friend? Bruh. And also listening to his hypocritical bullshit? Double bruh.
Sylphie. I hate sylphie, hawkie, mystie, trollie, eaglie and all the other useless "characters" the author will introduce in the future. EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER i have to read how cute sylphie is and everyone adores sylphie and finds IT cute. Every time this hawk is mentioned i feel the danger of losing my braincells. These characters dont contribute anything and are just there as a filler, which is fine, but it's not fine to have them mentioned every single chapter.
As for other side characters , i honestly dont have too much to complain. Sword saint is interesting and likeable wise old man. Jacob is also a very interesting character for me and i find his path very fascinating. Something to look forward to for sure. Miranda is OK. William also. I dont understand Lillian. I like Arnold and Sultan a lot. Caleb is also okay.
Now for the MC. MC is a fucking hypocryte, stupdily dumb, an idiot, narrow minded and other bad adjectives that i dont know because english is my third language. I have mentioned that there are some things i absolutely cant stand. Hypocrisy is one of them, illogical thinking, an unreasonable character are another. There are so many flaws in MCs thinking that i dont even want to start listing them. He outright lacks common sense.
For example, he knows that his relationship with Villy is one of a kind, but he still gets confused as to why people are either surprised or confused about the nature of their relationship. When they assume that he serves the Viper, instead of clearing up the misunderstanding or even better, just outright not caring about what they think, MC gets mad, aggressive, as i said, completely unreasonable.
Mc's character is also inconsistent. Before the system he was this anti social guy who didnt want to communicate outside of work. I am also similar so i understand. But after the system, he goes striking up conversations with strangers for no fucking reason, makes more friends and talks more than he did before the system, acts very comfortable with strangers ( be it curse words, or just using impolite manner of speech). Okay you mgith say he changed with the system and thats it or his bloodline awoke and that changed him. But no. He still says he doesnt want to communicate with strangers, but acts completely contrary to his words.
The author tries to do too much with the MCs character.
He is against slavery( thinks slaughtering is better than enslaving and outright hates everyone who doesnt agree with him)
He thinks post system all races are equal
He goes to beasts territories and slaughters them(whole populations of beasts)
But he doesnt like when someone( a human) kills "innocent" humans
Imposes his moronic and hypocritical views on others just because he is stronger(agree or i will kill you) and preaches to a fucking immortal GOD about whats right and whats wrong.
His first encounter with Sultan was honestly sickening and i had to skip 1-2 chapters. Almost dropped it because of how unreasonable the MC is. You can have your views, but dont fucking preach and keep them to yourself (sometimes i hope someone very strong will show up and mc will get caught in his bullshit and have his shit beat out of him), whata re you a fucking beast right or anti slavery activist? If you think of yourself as a hunter, just hunt and dont concern yourself with useless things like fighting slavery in the multiverse.
I dont get his aversion to slavery either. Its like he thinks its obligatory to treat slaves badly. You can have a slave and treat them like a person, just that they wont be able to stab you in the back because of the contract. Wheres the fucking problem with it?
Mc also has a tendency of not using his braina t all. He just doesnt think. Says that he is a hunter and doesnt have time for his faction ( but he has time for preaching anti slavery and screaming that beasts are people too). Even while it wouldnt take him any effort to help his faction (just bringing them the bodies of the beasts he kills for example) he doesnt do it. He doesnt care at all. Then why does he even have a faction?
It turned out long and i do apologise for a badly structured review and errors, i wrote this on the phone.