Leaves of Terranthir

by Rhaegar

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

DISCONTINUED - I won't be writing more of this fiction. Check out the latest post for a worlbuilding summary / final thoughts.

Leaves of Terranthir is a gamelit blend of ARPG, action, fantasy, and slice of life.

It's inspired in part by some of my favourite games, borrowing in themes, sense of exploration, and aesthetics from the Soulsborne and soulslike genre, mixed heavily with arpg itemization from Diablo/PoE style games.

While many may remember their Soulslike experiences as nothing more than suffering, I personally loved the sense of progression, to prevail over challenges and monsters that seemed impossible to defeat at first.

If any of that seems interesting to you, do check out the first chapter and let me know what you think.

Cheers, and thanks for reading.

Cover by Baconstrap.

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Reviewed at: Chapter 8

For those unaware (all three of you), Rhaegar is the author of one of the best ongoing stories on Royal Road, a piece of original fiction titled Azarinth Healer. This story is nothing like that one.

It is an isekai, so in that manner they are the same. As the description states though, this story is based on the Souls genre of video games. Our MC is thrust into a hostile world with no explanation and nothing but the PJ's he fell asleep in, and soon enough he doesnt even have those.

I have full confidence that this story is going to be fantastic. It might not be everyone's cup of tea, but that's okay. My only concern is whether or not our MC will ever meet other people to interact with. A story in which the main character only talks to himself is a very difficult one to write. 

Now for a breakdown to explain the individual sections.

STYLE: Rhaegar has a fairly distinct style, which some people do not like. I am a fan of using spacing and formatting to achieve emphasis, but I can understand that it interrupts flow sometimes. 4 stars for this reason.

STORY: It is a little early for this, but I trust Rhaegar to have an intriguing and interesting story for all of us.

GRAMMAR: Very few mistakes, although you will find the occasional typo, spacing, punctuation, or usage error. Nothing that distracts from the story.

CHARACTER: This has been an excellent part of this, admittedly, short novel so far. Our MC has reacted almost perfectly to his new environments and I look forward to him learning and adapting to it.

I highly recommend that you read this story, although maybe wait till there is some more content for you to sink your teeth into.

Azcheron
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Slow start, not much to go off yet.

Reviewed at: Chapter 7

Style: OK, so I'm not a fan or the style. The pacing is extremely slow, meandering and absent-minded. It's hard to tell whether the chapters are just short, or the pacing is glacial sometimes because you'll have gotten to the end and while there are a lot of words, and ramblings to get through not much actually happens . There's some exploration, and a lot of description interspersed with rambling, but that the end of a chapter it can normally be summed up as 'killed a few zombies, got potions.' and then 'killed a few zombies, got equipmrnt' and then 'killed a few zombies, used crossbow' thats about 3 or 4 chapters covered. So yeah, I'm really not a fan of this rambling style. It feels repetitive and boring. Not to mention some things just don't make much sense, like when he points out how 'antiquated' the crossbow looks compared to a modern rifle... Like yeah? Obviously? And this little snippet:

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Luckily, the second thing he confirmed was that aiming the crossbow was almost comically easy. There was a reason rifles with higher loading times took over bows as the preferred weapon to arm soldiers with.

Its just... Wrong in so many ways. I'll list a few here. Firstly he's complimenting the crossbow for being easy to aim and then saying that that's why... rifles(?) replaced... bows(?). Neither of which are a crossbow at all. Not to mention early rifles were iconicly bad at aiming, so bad in fact that the military doctrine was to form lines of riflemen who would stand clumped up in groups a hundred meters from each other and shoot until one side had to back off. 

No rhaegar, the reason firearms replaced tension based weaponry was because they were easy to USE (not aim specifically) and that they could penetrate plate armor whether they were fired by a peasant or a noble.

Nothing to do with being easy to aim. All to do with being able to use untrained and still kill an armoured opponent. 

 

Story: Too early to judge fully, but the setting at least seems interesting and non-generic. Enough 'unique' things have come up that I'm interested to say the least. That said, considering how /many/ chapters there are I'd expect more, but I'm putting that down to the style more than anything else. The magic tree, the castle city, the little bits of lore picked up. It's a nice mystique and setting. 

 

Grammar: The grammar is good. Rhaegar is an experience writer who has a handle on this, no complaints. 

 

Character: Once again, too early to tell for the most part. Having the main character use a dog which he hasn't even adopted yet as a core motivational force is a bit... not great. Also the temper tantrum early on where he threw away some metal boxes and broke a window felt contrived and more like an attempt to try and convince the readers that the MC was experiencing emotions in way which perhaps the rambling monologues had failed to do. I wasn't really a fan of either to be honest. We'll need to see characters interact and how they make decisions to actually judge this. 

RagnarBlackmane
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There's not much to say yet.

If you have read the previous Authors story, then you pretty much know what you are in for.

 

The negatives include- disjointed sentences, random callbacks to conversations or thoughts half a chapter ago, mismatches dialogue, people talking very strange for no reason at all.

 

The positives are often inventive storylines and unique setpiece battles. The author can move the story and plots along at a very good clip if he has a mind to, but can often get bogged down in meaningless side quests.

 

Time will tell.

pringlescan
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There is a huge problem with this fiction.  Mainly that I discovered it via the author's notes on Azarinth Healer and then devoured the 21 existing chapters in a day or two.

The mystery is written so well, with so many questions posed i'm dying to be asnwered. The litrpg system on top of it is also well done, with some reasonable investigation by the protagonist as to what each of them does.  The protagonist is not an idiot and has a good mix of applying logic and practicality while still making mistakes due to the human factor of being in danger and emotions taking over.

Hope to see more soon!

moredread
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I originally bookmarked this story a while ago. I wanted to wait until it had some chapters to it. I don't like starting a new story unless it has plenty of chapters because it's hard for me to get into a story with only 1 chapter coming out per week.

So when I did start it I have to say I'm a little disappointed.  While this is a good story, coming from this author i expected greatness. This isn't greatness. 

The story is good however.  It's your typical plot. Man wakes up, has a system. He goes around killing. It does have a little twist in that he does die, and get respawned. 

The pacing is slow. So far he is just killing zombies and getting better loot. No overall plot has emerged as of 20 chapters so who knows just where it's going.

That-Which-Shall-Hug-You
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A guilded vessel, no matter how gleaming. Is useless without a center, this is a great story! But the protagonist is.. Not emotionless, but I can feel absolutely nothing. I can't relate, they feel like staring at a blank piece of paper instead of an actual character. Don't get me wrong, the protag expresses emotions. But they don't feel... Real, there're written down quite well. But it's just not there. 

13lack12ose
Overall

Another great novel from one of the best authors here on RR.

Obviously this will draw comparisons to Azarinth Healer but I think judging Leaves of Terranthir on its own merits is a much more valid.

That said this story is fairly similar so if you liked AH you’ll probably like this one too!

 

Give this a go folks it's EPIC!

 

Much love as always BR

WildEagle1989
Overall

The story starts off super slow. But it is very fun and I can see me reading this for a very long time. Some scenes are repetitive and the main character is stuck in a town with only undead and one other human. I will update this review later on

Ashlawrence
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Story I find is intriguing leaves a lot of mystery and imagination a slow burn with its ramping moments and subtle character change.

 I like the world atmosphere. Really liked that you didn't include a guide or maiden at start or walls of icon and stat text: very refreshing. 

The_reader'_'
Overall

Dont read through tinted glasses

Reviewed at: Chapter 21 Options

 

Dont compare

If you are reading this alongside azarinth healer and hoping for the same story but just in a different world, stop. This is a different story with a well developing Web of motivations and world building with just enough suspens but never leaving you dissatisfied. but what it is not is azarinth healer, so do not come into this story expecting the same battle lusting character or easy system, this is anything but easy. The story is a slow burner by design ment to make every power up feel deserved and every struggle feel real but also meaningful.