Lonely Light (Complete)

by unice5656

Original COMPLETED Fantasy Romance Short Story Female Lead Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters

Arael is an otherworldly being from the upper plane, a place similar to Heaven, full of Light. He now dwells on Earth, touched by Darkness, unable to return. When he rescues Sariel, an innocent angel from the clutches of Dark mages, he is no longer alone for the first time in centuries, but knows that he must return her home before she is also stranded on Earth.

The question is, does she wish to go?

(Pure fantasy romance)

 

 

- Cover art credit goes to Cassandra DenHartog (www.cassandradenhartog.com)

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motoshead89
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A truely beautiful short story. The main characters are deep and engaging and draw you in quickly.

Phamtomof57
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The story is short but it can still convert so much emotion ! It was breathtaking ! The story is well written, the grammar exellent ! The meaning of darkness and light in the story is well done. This is certainly the most emmotional and most beautiful romance I've ever seen in RRL ! Good job !

OrderedChaos
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If I only had one criticism though, it is that it somewhat feels hollow. Or that's just me missing the point and looking too deep into it.

JoanBac
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The most awesome short story

The story outline was plotted well. Character-wise, well thought of. World development was just so picturesque. The Prologue was so brilliantly done. Thumbs up to the author.

Yeah-uuh
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A nice, sweet short story that hit all the right parts of my inner craving for love stories.

The premise is incredibly interesting. A good twist on the whole "good vs. evil" thing.

I found the worldbuilding to be impressive despite the story being rather short.

The characters are relatable, even though they're not exactly normal.

The grammar and style leave nothing to be desired.

All in all, it is a nice read.

 

(Psst. Hey, have a bonus duck for being so good at writing)

Quack it up

Vandy
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An excellent short story.

 This is a lovely short story.

 

The style, despite the story's short length, is defined. The concepts of Light and Dark is done in a way that is interesting and not tropey.

The plot is well structured and left me interested throughout.

As far as I could tell, the grammar was flawless.

The protagonist's character was well developed. The only reason why I gave this section four, rather than five, stars was because the love interest's character was a little lacking. However, this may just be due to the fact that this is a short story (I haven't read enough short stories to know).

 

On the whole, Lonely Light is definitely worth a read!

armsdealer12
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Heart warming and Heart rending

I can not find anything bad, wrong or lacking in the story, the style, the grammar, nor the characters. The way it is written and how the message of the tale is presented to the readers is just right. Tolkien was an amazing writer and his tales made me cry with joy and sadness for I felt empathy for the characters and you sir is one of the few which made me shed tears for fictional individuals. Thank you.

CrimsonWarden
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This deserves to be published and spread to the masses

Honestly, I'm at a loss for words in how to describe the wonderful way this story lit up my day. So many have given reviews of praise and I think this story deserves a lot more.

 

Thank you for the wonderful short story.

tormanen
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I was hesitant to start reading this and it sat in my Read later tab for a few months, but when i got around to it i was a little upset i didn't read it sooner.

easy to read with characters and a world that feel real even without a bunch of character building and world building, the grammer is good and my heart is crying happy sad happy tears whatever those are. 

littleshippy
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The story is great enough to make you want more. You want to sit there and read through it again and again. The only thing that i have against this is that it's too short. You bring us in, show us a wonderful story with amazingly beautiful charicters, but leave it so short. You Tease