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The life of a baby dragon, from birth to unknown heights. Born as a red dragon Rue will experience the benefits of such a prestigious race and the downsides. Dragon hunters, surviving in the wild, the journey will be difficult, but when you can breathe fire and weigh in at a couple of tones, pointy sticks don't do much…

The world they live in is magical with many different beasts and races, and hopefully, our young dragon will live to “taste” all of the finer points of life.

The story contains a litRPG element but I still like to have a natural feel to the way the world works. Please forgive me for mistakes and kindly point them out. I'm still new to writing.

 

The Basics: Spoiler

Magic: Yes

Smartphones: No (Dragons Can't Use Them)

Martial Arts: No (Ever Seen a dragon Punch?)

Monsters: Yes

Adventure: Yes

Basic Physics: Yes (Fire….lots of Fire)

Dialogue Boxes: Yes

Updates: 

Well, we will have to see, at least once a week though. most likely every day for the first little while. I have a backlog of chapters I will release to kickstart the story.

Author : 

This is my first attempt at writing a fiction from a female point of view, even if it is a dragon. I hope I get the tone right, please be lenient.

Content: 

The MC will be a fauking dragon, that's all you really need to know. Please give it a shot.

Notes:

(I do not own the art for the cover of this novel if someone wants it removed I will do so promptly)

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This is what a Dragon Novel should be!

Reviewed at: Chapter 3 : Hunting

It is as the review title says! Now personally, as I really like Dragons, I have read vast amounts of Dragon Novels over who knows how long, and I rarely see something as phenomenal as this. This is a hidden gem that needs just a little more polishing and it will become one of the most shining gems ever.

Now to break things first, our MC is born as a female red dragon, and it is one of the more intelligent dragon hatchlings among her brothers and sisters, excluding the black dragon and probably more cases that she didn't notice (there are over 40 dragon hatchlings there!). She is highly observant and forms her own opinions on certain things, which gives her an instinctual feeling to ask her mother for a name, which she gets! Immediately after she unlocks the System earlier than her peers (10 days by her assumption with the 1Xp per day increase), after she gets the System she quickly realizes that eating more food gives more XP per day, she begins eating more and is obviously, challenged by her sibling over the right of the left-over rabbit-remains, she wins and is awarded by the System.

Skipping over a little her mother and her sibling are attacked by the group of powerful humans which take down her mother as she took some humans along with her. Faced with this situation, she leads over 40 siblings and runs for the exit of their cave. As of now, we only know that Rue has escaped and even she didn't escape safely, with a heavy wound on her. But thankfully she killed one human and got her Xp bonus for the kill.

PROS:  (that I personally noticed)

- The Story truly represents Dragons as what they are.

- There are no Deux ex Machina moments. This is truly the kill or be killed world and one has to prevail through intelligence, will, and strength and survive to thrive and dominate.

- Usually, Dragon novels depict the baby dragon MC as born alone in some random part of the world with no mother/father in the vicinity and is left alone to survive. This novel has not only the mother but also 40 other dragons besides Rue as her siblings. And nature(color) of the dragon is not dependent on the mother either, which I like (Mother is Dark-Green Dragon, Rue is Red Dragon, and one other intelligent dragon is Black, the only Black Dragon among others).

- MC is very observant and makes the most intelligent decisions at the moment, no matter how bad or gambly they may be. It first ensures its one survival and life before thinking about anyone else, which is exactly what Dragons are (at least in my head).

- I like the system, and how it rewards Rue when she kills someone above her LVL, and how it deduces her Xp gained if she kills beings below her LVL. The latter part is rarely seen in any novel, not to mention the one focused on Dragons. I like how its structured, and how it influences the beings that use it,

CONS:  (that I personally noticed)

- The Grammar is a little bit of iffy on some parts. Some words just don't make sense in some sentences in the otherwise perfectly structured sentences which leads me to believe whatever program the Author is using (if at all) is bad or is confused at certain words and sentences.

- Although the characters are dragons and they are not possible of physical communication (as far as we know), I find that there can be more details done on the other characters themselves and their behavior and what they do.

- Same as the last point, but just for humans, but it is kind of understandable for the lack of description, given the situation, so I don't blame you entirely.

 

That is pretty much it. I would like more frequent releases(even though we, for now, get chapters daily, don't blame me I love this novel and Dragons in general) since it could help the novel get much more traction and views, but I do understand if the Author is not able due to his/her reasons.

Love this novel, keep it up and it will definitely hit trending. Have a good day!

Gamerkitt3nz
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Enjoyable and on it's way to greatness

Reviewed at: Chapter 4 : Home

Really good so far, I'm definitely going to keep up with it. This series has no weird isekai trope going on. Which is a huge positive in my mind. 

 

Style: No huge groundbreaking stuff, but also not bad.

Story: The story is one of my favorite types, about a dragon learning of the world.

Grammar: Few grammar issues that I've noticed, and all very small.

Character: The character hasn't had much time to shine, but is still being developed into an interesting personality.

 

Overall: A series that I very much look forward to watching grow. 

 

Godspeed Wordsmith

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A fantasy dragon in its natural habitat

Reviewed at: Chapter 5 : Clash Of Claws

Here we have a cute little dragon with a cute little dragon mind. No isekai stereotypes in sight! There is no unexplained love for humans or suicidal drive to get into civilization. We get to look inside the mind of a believeable enough (at chapter 5) wild beast with cool wings and boxy system.

The setting is not new, but is executed quite well. There has not been any modern idioms that stand out for instance, like people lamenting the lack of something oddly resembling some modern electronics. The system is a natural part of life and not some UI in a buggy game that can be cheated or severely exploited.

I'm looking forward to what comes of the protagonist, and hoping that here are no unreasonable urges to give up half her legs.

gorn_gorn
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The focus on dragons is nice, although the doesn't seem to be usefull for now (until chapter 5). 

There are some annoying grammer errors.

The MC and her actions are nicely described and explained but there is a lack of connection with the MC. At least for me that is.

 

ThousandOdysseys
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Very much enjoying this read. It hasn't developed too much as a story yet, but I find myself emotionally invested in finding out what is going to happen. 

Most importantly for this genre of story perhaps, I feel that the author has managed to capture the experience and thought process of what it would be like to be a dragon very well. 
This without falling into the common "I be arrogant, hear me roar!" 2d stereo type that many writers of dragons fall into. Not that Rue and Noe aren't arrogant, simply that that is not their only personality trait. 

Style: Nothing brilliant, but engaging. 
Stroy: Has me wanting more
Grammer: Sentence structure needs work. 
Characters: Well rounded and interesting. 

Phipsi
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sets a new standart for dragon novels

Reviewed at: Chapter 17 : Slaughter & Mind

so first to my statement in the titel:

I think till chapter 17 a world and eco-system has been build that should be a standart inspiration when desining a dragon centered world. That doesnt mean you shouldn't change anything; personally I'd say there is to little varity. But every human has only so much creativty once they have a picture already in mind so its not a negative for this story but a thing people should think about when they build their Dragon novels. Obviusly in less centered storys on the dragon as a natural part of the world, do whatever you want. Vainqueur is a great example for a more over the top build.

It is always the question where you want your Dragons to be, which heavly limits my statment. So to be true to my statment it would have to say: This Story sets a new standart for dragon novels, THAT want to tell a story about a world in which Dragons are a part of everybodys live and not only of Kings and Emperors. [also personally im less a fan of system, so i want to make it more acute that what I said before refers to the eco-system and not the whole story!!!]

 

NOW to the actual review of this story:

I have to give great credit to ZIEL as his review was close to bullseye to how i see it too. Though it was only close as his review was in chapter 3 and a few things cleared up since then (imo):

 

Now personally, as I really like Dragons, I have read vast amounts of Dragon Novels over who knows how long, and I rarely see something as phenomenal as this. This is a hidden gem that needs just a little more polishing and it will become one of the most shining gems ever. {me too}

Now to break things first, our MC is born as a female red dragon. She was born in a clutch of 40 eggs, which was noted to be on the higher end of the spectrum of how many eggs appeare in a normal clutch.

As in the real world people are born with diffrent IQ, here too: Sometimes in a clutch there is a child that gains intelligenz before the first level is reached (First step on the way to maturity). {this is an assumption im not to sure of. We dont have much info for now. I think it will depend on how the author wants to build the realtion between tamed dragons and well their tamers. So this paragraph may fall away in the future}

In the MCs big clutch another probability occurs which is the rare birth of a black dragon species. [as for now we dont have many infos on this species but a  assumption can be made for black dragons to always be born already "aware"] This early awareness seems to be the steping stone for the birth of an alpha of the corresponding species.{same as the paragraph above}

There are Green [the majority of all dragons and your more standart agile airborn hunter, they also have generelly smaller body. Till now only know to posses a toxin gland. No know magic], Brown [your typical bear inspired tank. Has wings, however more groundbased. Till now only know to have deffensive(temporary enhancment) and earth controll magic], Red [your standart dragon. More focused on offensive strenght. Owns a ethanol gland to breath fire which is then enhanced by ther magic. Overall more of a bruiser] and Black [well except Black following the earlier assumption][a mgaic focused dragon. Born with a affinity to shadow magic. Till now it looks like they seem to also be able to learn other kinds of magic freely].

 

She is highly observant and forms her own opinions on certain things, which gives her an instinctual feeling to ask her mother for a name, which she gets!

{nothing closer is know to the importance of names or its role to unnamed dragons that mature, for now}

Immediately after she unlocks the System earlier than her peers (10 days by her assumption with the 1Xp per day increase), after she gets the System she quickly realizes that eating more food gives more XP per day, she begins eating more and is obviously, challenged by her sibling over the right of the left-over rabbit-remains, she wins and is awarded by the System. {yes}

Skipping over a little her mother and her sibling are attacked by a group of humans, consisting of a squad (for now) of higly trained combatans and a bit over a dozen recruited henchman, who's use is as cannonfudder as well as helping with the capture and transportation of the hatchlings. They take down her mother however underestimating her furiosity to protect her young and suffering a kill to one of the squad as well as quite a few of the hired arms. The Humans had come to the cave with the plan of capturing the hatchlings for which they had specail equipment on them.

Faced with this situation, she leads over 40 siblings and runs for the exit of their cave. As of now, we only know that Rue has escaped. {yep}

PROS:  (that I personally noticed)

- The Story truly represents Dragons as what they are. {... in a setting where draongs a portraid as a natural part of the eco-system in the wild. As well as the following aspiration of humans to domesticate usefull wild animals}

- There are no Deux ex Machina moments. This is truly the kill or be killed world and one has to prevail through intelligence, will, and strength and survive to thrive and dominate. {yes}

- MC is very observant and makes the most intelligent decisions at the moment, no matter how bad or gambly they may be. It first ensures its one survival and life before thinking about anyone else, which is exactly what Dragons are (at least in my head). {well i would say must living beings are like that}

- I like the system, and how it rewards Rue when she kills someone above her LVL, and how it deduces her Xp gained if she kills beings below her LVL. The latter part is rarely seen in any novel, not to mention the one focused on Dragons. I like how its structured, and how it influences the beings that use it. {while im no great fan of the system part of stories i gotta say this is a good adaption to nature's law of diminishing returns. Which I personally always hate missing}

CONS:  (that I personally noticed)

- The Grammar is a little bit of iffy on some parts. Some words just don't make sense in some sentences in the otherwise perfectly structured sentences. However he takes his time to correct all mistakes pointet out to him.

- Although the characters are dragons and they are not possible of physical communication (as far as we know), I find that there can be more details done on the other characters themselves and their behavior and what they do.

TooHardToRead
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Well I break my self-imposed rule here, to not write a review before chapter 30.

But  a word is a word, so here we go:

We have a dragon-hatchling that is born as a basic hatchling, well except it is especially intelligent for her race. But that doesn't seem to completely overshadow her Dragonborn traits, like arrogance and lust for battle.(more may follow)

Style: Personally I love it, switching back and forth between Rue(dragon) and different humans, to show their motivations, their flaws and so on.

Story: it's about dragons....

Seriously, the system seems to work fine for now, a bit unbalanced (3physical stats 1 mind ) there are evolutions😍 behind certain conditions (at least I hope so)

And well for now it is growing up as a Dragon, so not sure what to say.

Grammar: there are a few misspellings here and there, but it doesn't influence the reading experience. ( It seems the author fixxes them quite quickly)

Character: The Dragon has no human remorse and so on, which I love😍 but is not pictured as a killing machine. 

Many other points, but we're still in the introduction of the storyline. So please take everything with a grain of salt 😝

 

 

Erelim
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Very good enjoyable dragon stuff

Reviewed at: Chapter 15 : Closing In

Really good. You will enjoy this if you like monster points of view, litrpg and progression. Has a good plot which is sometimes a problem for litrpg like this; not a problem here. There is something simply nice about it. Hope the author writes quickly cause im looking forward to reading more.

moredread
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FIRE breathing dragons are the best kind.

Reviewed at: Chapter 27 : Bitter

If your going to write a story with the MC being a monster, you might as well let it be a dragon. It's got a very good progression going. Start off as a cute little bundle of murder. Kill some stuff then evolve into fire breathing death on wings. 

I do like how the huumans are portrayed as the villains. Following her around trying to stop her from having lunch. If they didn't want her to eat the sheep why leave them out running around. 

Very much recommend. 

Omkilorn
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One of the best dragon point of views I've seen in a long time, the plot so far is great, and I have seen few plot holes or anything of the sort. The occasional point of view break from Rue, to Jasper or Noe provides a look at other characters who are also well made; with believable circumstances and mindsets, and these switches also gives us some worldbuilding. In regards to worldbuilding, there are no issues, and although I would like to know more (which is a good sign), it's not so little that I have no idea what is going on, and what we get is about what we could expect from the knowledge possessed by the characters we get to see. The system is well done as well, with no endless walls of text, and no unnecessary skills such as ‘running, jumping, or dodging’ which will nearly always turn me off of a book if I see it. What I also like is that the system is simple, and doesn’t give me a headache the second I try to do any math.

My only minor issues are slight breaks in grammar, but unlike many books it isn't immersion breaking, and can be overlooked quite easily as they are just simple errors in spelling.

Characters are great for what seems to be a new author, and only a few need to be a bit more fleshed out. The book hasn't been updated in about 20 days, so I'm desperately hoping it doesn't drop onto hiatus, because this book is brilliant.