A World of Monsters

by Ankur_93

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For an unforgivable crime, the universe is sundered apart. From its splintered shards, a Sorceress is made to reborn. However, a human was unneeded thus what was once a human is now a monster- vermin and nothing more. With mere months for lifespan, the Sorceress fights to survive.

Meanwhile, Kiran leaves his home to defy mediocrity. Named after the hope he represents, he seeks a [Class] so austere that hundreds fail in their search. Yet, before this [Class] even the Gods bow their heads in respect.


Also known as A world of Monsters, the story follows a monster and humans in a system word with a Buddhist/Hindu philosophy. The System is especially influenced by this philosophy.

Cover by the ever so awesome Jefferymoonworm


Updates on Fridays and Mondays. Bonuses on Wednesdays.


Warning!

Not for trauma survivors.
The human part of the story is a commentary on human nature.
You have been warned.


Can't forget to thank ArDeeBurger for the help with the blurb.


[participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge]

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Ziggy
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Inflated reviews and a xianxia feel

Reviewed at: Chapter 27

There are a disproportionate amount of reviews for this just hitting trending. A LOT of them have "review swap" on them so I'm assuming that's playing a factor. But this story is not nearly as good as these reviews make it seem.

Before I get into the biggest problem, let's focus on the feel of the story. In spite of the "litrpg" tag, it has the distinctive feel of xianxia. Which is a genre I tend to loathe. It has the typical phrases like, "boundless heavens!", overly flowery and needlessly convoluted wording, concepts of Dharma/reincarnation, etc. So technically a litrpg, but reads like a xianxia fiction.

Now the big issue. The prose. It is just.. awful. The very first chapter, the prolgue? It is painful to try to read through. There are consistently 40 words used when 4 would do, in the most obtuse and clunky way possible. This gets a little better in later chapters, but the style of needlessly convoluted wording remains the same. I managed to power through a lot of chapters out of sheer stubbonness, but eventually I was groaning and skimming whole chapters. It's intolerable. And if the characters go, "tch!" one more time, I'm going to scream. And they will, because they do it 5 times a chapter.

If you somehow enjoy the painful prologue? You might actually like this. But for everyone else? Hard pass.

veted
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bland like cardboard

Reviewed at: Chapter 7

It's not bad, ok. It's just a sort of slice of life with a smattering of philosophy and religion, but no real plot and the barest of descriptions of anything. Things happen in a way that lean towards it being a real world, but it acts more like a video game. Why do insects take injurious fall damage? Why can a snail, despite being slow, bite and tackle? Why can a caterpiller furrow it's brows, dilate its pupils and and have heart palpitations? Uh... they just can because that's how the universe works.

It's the sort of story where things happen, but the reader needs to fill in all the blanks, events, objects, places (and everything else, really) because nothing is described, and if it doesn't really make sense? Eh, hand wave it away. It happens because the narrator said it did.

Author even created a character whose purpose is to beg for a review at the end of every chapter, too, which might explain why there are so many reviews gushing about the story. Begging seen here:

-X-

Within a desolate desert, inside a dilapidated shop, on a simple chair, a youth seemingly slept.

-X-

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Cringed a little every time I saw it. Just... why? I suspect people might disagree with this assessment. They'd be wrong, but they are free to disagree. At least I'm not being mean about it, but you asked for it.

Samsara With Words
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Adventures in the animal realm

Reviewed at: Chapter 21

A buddhism-influenced story about an MC reincarnated into a caterpillar. So there are some usual tropes, but overall this is well written. The grammar has no issues and the pace is steady. You get the feeling the author has a proper outline for this and knows where he wants to go. Looking forward to where this takes me.

neilu
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A tale of mortals and immortals

Reviewed at: Chapter 13

Reviewed as of chapter 11 (~100 pages in) as part of a review swap.

overall : 4/5

A World of Monsters is a story with some very real potential. It is focused on the slow progress of a monster that starts really small, however the world has some very unique mysteries and greater picture stuff that I really liked.


style 4/5 :
Style-wise, the author has a good handle on description and good character interactions (in the human centered chapters)

However, the story comes with some heavy mystical lore that I'm personally not a big fan of.

Also the pacing of the early chapters is really slow. With the few options available to the MC given its unique reincarnation, the author made the choice of still showing all its progress. Which took a while of much of the same.


story 3.5/5 :

The world-building (well, multiverse building, really) is really cool, there are some mysteries that really have me wondereing where this is all going.
However, the mc seriously lack a goal besides , the character motivations aren't very clear.
I also took some points off because there are some situations that feel inconsistent with the worldbuilding. While it is cool to see the mc overcome his problem (short life expectancy) through cunning, the mc form is not unique, so, how are the normal individuals of the specie living and evolving? The experience shown by mc indicates that they simply don't have the time to grow into adults before dying in infancy of old age.
Finally, I liked the system, as it is more an obstacle than the main focus but it works well nonetheless. It strikes a nice spot where it feels fair, giving some perks but also refusing to let the mc be overpowered.


grammar 5/5 :
very few mistakes, there are a couple typos but they are quite far in between. The english is about as clean as it gets by RR standards.
Extra kudos for making the mystical munbo jumbo heavy yet readable.

characters 4/5 :
So i'm giving this a tentative 4, but that's really because the characters on the human storyline are definitely 5s and the character on the monster storyline is more like a 3...

Sadly, it's the mc. The thing is, it makes sense, this mc is a human soul whose ego is being eroded by living as an "immortal". It has little possibilities, starting as a very weak being almost at the bottom of the foodchain. But yeah, basically, it's not a very likeable or relatable character, and it physically can't do really cool things.

It's still a 3 cause that situation is objectively well crafted. But I'm certainly not reading this story for its MC...

 

 

alcroix
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Good concept, mediocre presentation

Reviewed at: Chapter 35

We delve into a world of system-using monsters, cultivators, and deific beings through A World of Monsters, following two main characters (so far). The story is meticulously crafted, with every action precisely described -- and yet herein lies the problem. The world is lifeless.

Teeming masses of characters are recorded in punctual detail. The prose railroads us with description after description, never allowing the reader to imagine fanciful imagery or catch glimpses of motives. Skills are acquired, described, and redescribed; ignoring the advantages of what's left unsaid. Each paragraph reads as if a stream of conciousness was transcribed verbatim, ever quickly, ever steady. The rhythm of the text marches on, and on, and on. Monotony. 

The author attempts to circumvent this, of course, utilizing scene cuts and shifting viewpoints, but even the changes feel predictable. We're told about unseen plans and mystery, but they don't feel enticing. In fact, the intent and the execution clash on a fundamental level, splitting the narrative in twain: a layer of chalk-like description and a flowery gloss of allegory.

It's disappointing, because the concept has a lot of potential. I truly enjoy the set of circumstances set up for the protagoni, but their development dessicates in their textual cradle. They're left as nothing more but leather dolls puppeteered in the name of ephemeral meaning. Yet I feel nothing.

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Indomitable Insect Invades

Reviewed at: Chapter 28

An amazing story about the progression of a being that doesn't belong but struggles for survival for he not Mortal and only Mortals can grow in peace. This being is Immortal and Immortal grow through the odds that have been stack against them. A beautiful tale of metamorphosis both internal and external.

Style:
This is a third-person story of the primary MC, who is unnamed, and beings his life as a caterpillar, and a secondary MC, who is a boy trying to achieve a class for himself. The story alternates regularly between the two, with longer chapters being about the main MC and her/its life as an insect and shorter chapters being about the boy. Now, sometimes the story may come off as a bit wordy but that is because its intentional, its meant to stretch your brain and get you to think beyond your normal scope as the author is also leading you on your own journey of internal growth.

Grammar:
Because the grammar can get wordy, you either wind up with things that make no sense due to a typo. Or there is a lot of repetition that leads to some confusion as well.

Story:
As I stated, this is a story about self-discovery. A marvelous tale of a creature transforming into a greater version of itself. As of this review, the creature has morphed into a being capable of unlocking hidden potential that is strongly foreshadowed in the boy's part of the story. The MC not only has to battle with other animals for its survival but also itself.

The boy's story is very much one of mental self-discovery. As of now, it seems like the boy's story helps the reader understand more about the world and the things the primary MC will be able to do. It serves as a good way to build upon the world without feeling forced. It is unknown how the two stories will link if they do.

Character:
The primary character is the nameless MC who is an insect. We learn about the former life of this being and how the her of its past will help shape its future. The reader gets to witness the cleverness and growing intelligence of this bug. Not only do we witness its body changing but also its ego, its sense of self. The next character is a bit duller, which is the boy. He has been sent to learn a hard to get class by his family. He struggles to earn this class as he is given knowledge about the world the is also convenient for the reader when comparing what the boy just learned to the life of the insect. There are other great characters as well, one that puzzled me and I hope to see more of is the Tier 4 teacher from the boy's story. This character was introduced in a bonus chapter but his creepy atmosphere and how he lives are really bizarre even in this world.

Maverick26
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UNIQUE SYSTEM AND MAIN CHARACTER

Reviewed at: Chapter 11

The system used in this novel is unique and refreshing. It utilizes concepts in Buddhism and Hinduism which is not often seen. The system has many intricate facets of it to be explored in the story. The author does a good job of explaining the system when it is needed and cleverly drops hints about it as well. The grammar is also very nice.

Another unique feature of the story is the main character themselves as they are wholly monstrous as apt to the summary of the novel in both their physiology and their mentality which are both distinct from what would be expected of a humanoid character while still retaining an interesting personality that is entertaining. In addition, the level progression of the main character is also done well. Their growth throughout the story feels reasonable and very earned.

Something that does seem lacking is the absence of an apparent larger narrative outside of the main character's survival in the early chapters as the story slowly hints to what is to come later. However, the human side of the story works well in giving a nice change of pace from this along with providing greater knowledge about the world the story takes place in.

Reigsta Di Raizel
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It is a really intresting story for sure that I can tell you. To be reborn as a super weak bug that everyone consider as a thing that you don't need to worry about. That weakness will the main protoganist use to his advantage to trick his enemy's in it's traps so it could kill them. It uses it's brain and don't go around to seek it's dead in stupid ways. I really enjoy this story so try it if you want or not your choice to make. But to say that you could miss a amazing story is a shame so just try it and you see if you enjoy it or not . be sure to write a review if you want to let this story be seen from multiple views of readers but don't say I forced you to read it you yourself choice to read it or not. . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . .  .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . ..  . .

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So overall the story is pretty damned amazing and for your style of writing is great too! The descriptions you do and the clear pictures you evoke is very very good. It gets etheral at tines and spooky or earthy in others. Its in the top ten i have ever read! Seiosly your story keeps me wanting to learn more and to keep coming back even though its 4 am here. The skill leveling and such is so cool! Your blending of india pratices with thier religion and reincarnation and castes and mana etc. is wonderful. It has lit a fire in me to research india and all these things in their culture now. So thank you for that.

 

Now for your grammer it has only a few simple mistakes and is easily ignored. Like for example you said ranches in one chapter and the next line or two you spelled branches with the b like you left off the first time. I of course knew what you meant so no big deal. I just know some people are pretty anal about that stuff.

now for your characters they actually feel like real flesh and blood beings and are very very good too. Anyways i feel privileged to have been able to have read this. Thank you

The Dolphin
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This story is definately not something commonly seen on this platform, it embraces a true monster MC with a resolute protagonist. It's a story for those who want protagonist not bound by futile bonds such as morality and empathy. With the protagonist current evolution we're seing possible hive mind and a refreshing monster evolutions. 

What are you doing still reading this? Shoo, go on and read this novel!