Quest is not for sorceress

by Mia Dendragon

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In the Kingdom of Agrierd, where the art of magic was banned, a hopeless sorceress accidentally picked up the Destiny Stone.

Every men and women, when they turned sixteen, was given a chance to pursue their life quest and fulfill their purpose in life. 

Those who accomplished their life quest will be rewarded and blessed by the Goddess of Destiny. Those who stray away from their purpose will be punished by the Guardian of the Quest who comes knocking on the window at midnight. 

Mia traveled throughout the Kingdom of Agrierd to finish her quest bestowed by the Goddess of Destiny. 

Will Mia accomplished her life quest or will she lived her life haunted by the Guardian of the Quest? 


I edit, re-edit, and re-edit and I gave up. Oh, well. I'll see where this story goes and decides later whether I should get a proofreader.

Do excuse my grammars, English is my third language and I left school some times ago. I had long forgot about most of the things I learned in classroom. 

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Onch
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The worldbuilding in this story is great, and the characters are endearing. The scenes are also pretty detailled and the descriptions are spot-on. The atmosphere of the story is also commendable, it's really hertwarming!

To conclude, I would recommend this story!

Redchaos1
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From reading this i can tell that you have a great love for the fantasy genre. The world and the magic system involved here is detailed and well thought out, the fact that you managed to accomplish this in four chapters is frankly astounding. Like many have attested to, i have been unable to find any grammar errors in your work and i commend you for that.

strand VV
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This is a story made of mystery and magic, in the first chapters that I read, they conveyed great atmosphere on the magic, mystery, politics and heartwarmness this world holds.

 

The world-building was done great even when the story is only 4 chapter in, I was able to get feel where the MC current position on the world, the story gave me a small goal to look forward to and a major one, so that awesomely done for 24 pages.

 

The only thing that I found not thay good was the style, I am not the best at it, but when I read the story some really small sentences stood out, it is not bad just could be better.

As for the grammar still I am also not the best at it but what I can say, it was mostly good just a small mistake here and there that anyone can oversee, just take my words with a grain of salt. 

Hyper Suda
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Charming Characters Make This One To Watch

Reviewed at: 003: The night visit

Quests Are Not For Sorceress is charming most of all. From the author's clear love for the fantasy genre, to the well-built world and instantly endearing and creative characters, there is no doubt that this above all else a fun read. Mia is an instantly likeable protagonist and her relationship with her master Edgar is far and away the strongest point of the whole story up to this point. However, much like other reviewers, I did notice the grammar was lacking, even as someone who doesn't usually judge that with much scrutiny. I find it hs a tendency to switch tenses from past to present even when it doesn't mean to, and sometimes commas and full stops are lost to the flow of the prose.

However, with the clear reverence from the genre and the charm of the characters, these flaws are signifcantly less problematic than they would be in any other story. I'll be raiting a 4 for now, but this is really only because of the lack of chapters avaliable as opposed to anything else. This is for sure a story to watch.

Melanthe
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This review is for the first three chapters, so things may change drastically as the story continues. For now though, it's very cute (aside from the murder)! The characterization is by far the best part of the story. Mia and Edgar's interactions make me laugh, and whatever kind of monster Mia seems to keep as a pet is adorable. The plot seems like it's just about to begin, and though the author is threatening to kill off Edgar, I hope they don't until they have a good replacement for Mia to banter with.

The story's weakest part is its grammar. It's not typo-ridden and unreadable, but it does have a significant problem with changing tenses. I think the story wants to take place in a past tense, so the author should proof read to make sure it stays there!

Thanks so much for the chapters! Great work, I'm excited to read more about Mia's adventure.

I Don't Bite...
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The world that Mia inhabits is colourful and magical. Even in the pages of the story, I can feel the life within the world and those inhabiting it...

Style: The style fits the story like a perfectly tailored dress. Descriptive and lively, it can draw you into the pages as if you are experiencing the story personally. It takes you on a journey and avoids the trap of info-dumping skillfully. There are however a few redundancies here and there, but they didn't hinder my reading at all...

Grammar: Well, it's difficult to say since the story is so wonderful, but the grammar is really a bummer. Although it doesn't affect the readability too much, inappropriate forms of verbs and tense mistakes are too much to ignore. As of now, the chapters could really use some editing...

Story: I have almost nothing to add here. It's a story full to the brim with fun and excitement. Though the latest chapters lessened the tension a bit more than I'd like, that's just my personal gripe...

Characters: The characterization is so good it makes me jealous as an author. Everyone is distinct and fun to read, with their own quirks and specialities. Though the protagonist didn't really feel as like she's 16 yet, whether that is a conscious decision by the author or not, it can only say, I like her as she is...

Readers beware, you might find yourself entangled in the wicked sorcery Mia Dendragon has woven into the story, and unable to escape, you'll become like me, someone waiting desperately for the next chapter...

(Disclaimer: This review is only based on my opinions, so take it with a grain of salt if you will)

Marg_Naroth
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This fiction is delightful to read. So light and tense as the same time. Mia Dendragon, Onyen and Baddie will make your heart happy with their charisma and odd personalities. This have, for me at least, serious Ghibli vibes and pictured the entire story in that style. The pacing is very good and Mia shines everytime she opens her mouth.

Graffiti
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Overall the biggest thing that got me about the story were the grammar errors (made me scratch my head at times) but they weren't terrible. The reading overall was pretty decent if I'm being legitimate. The pacing and the plot is interesting enough to warrant an overlook of any grammatical errors. 

Anyway, the story follows Mia, a girl with quite a lot of personality to her and arguably one of the most lovable MCs I've read about on the site. She's the selling point of the story for me (her interactions with Edgar are pretty good too) and there's a lot of humor and light-hearted vibes to be felt throughout the fiction. 

It gives me a sense of awe and amazement that hits the inner child button moreso than the typical high-fantasy vibes you normally expect from a story. This isn't bad, mind you. In fact, I think it's a nice change of pace. 

I'd recommend this story if you like Disney movies, weird as that sounds. Give it a try, and sorry that it took me so long to review the story. Had a lot going on.

Damien Hanson
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I am very much enjoying the story. It needs a light edit but honestly that can be done before publish. Mia is a fun character with her own distinct sense of personality and dialogue, with well enough heart and ability to fill out a full novel. I look forward to seeing where Mia goes and what she does next :-)

ArthurScott
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The magic is in the pudding!

Reviewed at: 004: The night visit

SOMEPLACE FAR, although I'm not sure how far exactly, there exists a sorceress amongst a compact seclusion of powerful people. Not unlike the dreamy characterisation of J.K. Rowling's Harry Potter or the sharp attention to individuality of Stephen King, this story, I believe, pieces together a realistic portrait of love, politics, and mystery, bound together by a hint of magic. 

The style, as evidenced by the opening lines, is reminiscent of line-to-line literature, where the reader can easily follow the path of the characters whilst maintaining their own interpretation of how such descriptions shape the world. There are many reasons I think this story will go far: the pacing is impeccable and is shoehorned by the characters, leaving us with a deliberately fast-paced story, the characters are real, each possessing their own speech patterns and thoughts, and the worldbuilding follows a unique pattern that makes the reader drip into the ink of the pages. 

The story follows Mia, so far as I know or can tell, with a relationship with Edgar, and a morally grey attitude drifting off the screen to the reader's imagination. Cinematic storytelling, easy to read, and realistic, even for a fantasy. 

There were grammar mistakes, of course, but I will not mark the author down. Grammar is something mastered over a long time. I'm a dyslexic individual, and I can tell you, it takes a while to get used to. But something I noticed was that the flow of the story was very clean; you don't stumble on sentences as you would with incohesive stories, and that's something difficult to master even if you held within you the grammar and vocabulary to make George Orwell look like an amateur. Kudos to the author on that!

Overall, I highly recommend, not because it is great where it is, but because of how much greater it is going to become. Definitely receiving a follow and a favourite from me!