Rising From the War of Fog
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"The War of Fog is over. Now the true period of strife begins."
- Unknown Soldier
The world's great heroes have slaughtered one another for the ideals of their countries. Amidst the post-war struggle for survival, a towering figure emerges from the Exclusion Zone. She aids a trio of disgraced soldiers in crossing the border to their homeland, and soon takes up the mantle of a beast-slayer in one of the last sovereign city-states remaining. But tensions from the war remain, and soon trouble comes knocking at the gates...
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First off. I'll be real wif you chief. I am biased towards this series due it really vibing with me. That being said imma try my best to explain my kinks about this witholding zero shame while doing it.
BIGGEST NEGATIVE: I hate multiple lead characters stories with a burning passion, and if it weren't for the author mistakingly forgetting to add the tag, I would have passed this book like I have done with countless others. That being said, Akaso has managed to create a cast of characters that vibe well enough that I have over looked the MLC.
SECOND ISSUE: while Akaso does release chapters like pair of rutting rabbits, they also cause each chapter to be cut at odd angles. It tends to leave the start of chapters feeling out of place, and the ends to be awkward cliff hangers.
These two problems is why I scored the style as is. Being held up because MLC is more of a personal peeve than anything and the slap-Chop chapters are compensated for with a consistent quick release.
GOOD NEWS: Gawd damned 19th-century time frame got me aspiring for a shoot out at the local saloon. I'm not sure if there is an actual term for it, but I am a damned dirty western weeb, and so far while setting feels more like post WW1 Europe, I got major western vibes running rampant with all the magi-tech they got goin on.
While it may just be rose-tinted glasses, I have yet to spot majorly consistent bad grammar. There are typos here and there, but that is such a non-issue that a simple touch up can fix.
ROGUES' GALLERY: so you got an Amazonian muscle-goddess who totes around a BFC( big fucking cleaver) and an arm cannon to Fuck beasties, and has such a high Charisma score that she bluffs through just about any social interaction where she lacks knowledge.
You got a cyclopian markswoman who is such a cinnamon roll that it's no wonder she gets gobbled up by the muscle momma.
A soldier boy turned alchemical-moonshine brewer, who has to deal with being the only party member who can feel the horny, but isn't getting any.
And last but certainly not least a grizzled vet who due to using battle stims suffers from a form of PTSD-induced seizures whenever in a stressful situation, But is still able to be the wise ol man at the end of the day
CONCLUSION: this serial ticks a lot of my boxes while still having one of my most hated tags stamped on the tin. If that doesn't tell you something about me or the author, then it must be easy for you to sleep at night being that dense.
Congrats to Akaso for being one of the few authors that have made a MLC book that I have enjoyed thoroughly.
30 short chapters in, I don't know what this story is about or why I'd care. The MC is apparently an experiment of some kind, waking up in an abandonded facility in the process of destructing. She wanders about in the foglands and encounters some deserter types and gradually learns about the magical properties of the various kinds of fog. So far, thats it. Its well written, but what is the plot? Maybe I have a short attention span, but after 30 chapters it feels like we should know if this is a power fantasy, a spiritual journey, an experiment victim trying to recover her memory, if there will be some enemy or injustice to be overcome or what? Just kind of getting to be a sizeable investment of time without really knowing what I'm reading.
So, as with all of my reviews for litrpgs, I'll preface this by saying I do not like the genre. As such, I may be a little more leniant in an effort to not be biased. I will commend the author for not making too much use of blue boxes, which I personally find ridiculous. They're there, but at a frequency that didn't bother me.
Style: The author has some nice descriptions, and the writing, for the most part, is technically fine. My only big issue with it comes down to chapter size. I get writing short chapters so that you can release more frequently and maximise your exposure, but I feel like more care can be put into it to make it less jarring. On average, the chapters are 500 words long. This seemed alright, at first, but the more I read the more I understood the problems that come with having chapters at that length. That is, that chapters end at random points--when the author has hit the word count. It's cut off at 500 words. This creates many chapters that end in the middle of paragraphs. You may say "well, that just makes the reader want to turn the page to the next chapter!" But no, I don't turn to the next chapter because there's tension and I want to see what happens next; I turn to the next chapter because I'm quite literally left in the middle of a thought. I feel like the author can keep short chapters, but format them in a way that isn't irritating to read.
Grammar: I noticed some typing issues, mispellings and a few questionable word choices, but for the most part it's solid in this regard. I didn't feel like it would be fair to take points off in this category since issues are few and far between. The author has a decent grasp of the language, so he has my commendation for that.
Story: So, my second main issue with this one is the story. And, to be more specific: the pacing. It is glacially slow so far. I have no idea what the overarching narrative is. The scenes in the novel so far are fine and vivid, and on a smaller level the story is pretty good; but again, I have no idea where this is going.
Characters: They're pretty good so far. I know who everyone is, and roughly what their character traits are. I wish I knew more about them, since they're all a bit vague at the point I'm writing this review, but I'm sure their personalities are explored more as the story goes on.
Overall, it's pretty decent. The writing is solid on a technical level. I definitely think there are issues with pacing and chapter length, but maybe there are readers out there who like a ton of short chapters and long narratives. I definitely don't read enough on this site to know what the average reader enjoys
This is an action fantasy story that marches to the beat of a different drum. The world building is both solid and a breath of fresh air after reading so many stories from this genre with a generic medievel high fantasy settings. Along with the recently awoken MC, we find ouselves exploring an alchemical steam punk world in the aftermath of a recent war which has deeply scarred the land and its people.
Rather than alchemy being nothing more than a tacked on magical technology to an otherwise mundane world, the essense of reality itself and the laws governing it are alchemical in nature and fundimentally different from our own. It is refreshingly deep world building for such an action focused story.
The characters are enjoyable but not overly deep or naunced which is perfectly fine for a fantasy story focused more on action and adventure. This isn't some sort of Jane Austin style romantic drama so having a larger than life MC that feels like she walked out of an action movie isn't a bad thing.
The story is still in its early stages but the over arching mystery of the MC's origin and how it's intertwined with the recent war are an effective hook as is the simple desire to learn more about this unusual world and its people.
This story deserves more exposure and is well worth a try for those looking for something a little different from the standard lit rpg fare. Although the chapters are short the author updates with new ones at a truly break neck pace.
5 stars. I'd give it 10 if I could. Grammar, pacing, character design. Everything is top notch.
A different approach to magic I haven't seen before. Characters that only fall flat when Zelsys lays them out. Intricate world-building leaving indelible marks on mind and leaving me wanting more like a Fog-addicted beggar. The ONLY complaint I have would be the chapter length. Having to flip forward every 5 seconds because I'm speed-reading it is a problem of my own, of course, not the authors.
I seriously can't find anything truly negative to say about this. So I'll say something positive and pleading. Keep it up. Forever. I wan't to read a million chapters of this and more!
Rising From the War of Fog is not your usual lit-RPG. Dieselpunk is a sub-genre that doesn't get the love and attention it deserves and every story written in it is always very welcomed in my opinion.
This particular one is well written and mature with its own unique storytelling style. Easy to read and easy to understand, yet not too simple. The only issue I could mention is the length of the chapters, or more like the lack of it. I understand that the short chapters were an authorial decision which makes frequent posting possible, but even so, the very short chapters are breaking the flow of the story somehow. That isn't a big issue, just something I, personally, cannot agree with.
The story itself starts strong with an exciting opening situation and will soon slow down a little, which is not a problem whatsoever because even without a fight in every second chapter it can grab and keep the reader's attention with the colourful and interesting world around. It's not fast-paced but I wouldn't call it a slow burner either, it found a pace that works perfectly, letting the characters and the world show themselves.
There is not much to say about grammar here, as far as I can tell, there are no major problems, as I mentioned earlier, the story is very well written and easy to read. The vocabulary is quite impressive.
As for the characters, we don't have a lot of them at first. The main one, Zelsys is trying to find and define herself at the beginning, but one thing is clear at first glance: she is a strong woman, which is always a plus. Especially because she can be tough without being manly, and she has a good sense of humour too. Bottom line, the main character is interesting and capable enough to lead the story forward, keeping the reader's attention. The three others that came a tad later showing themselves slowly, but they are becoming more and more interesting chapter by chapter.
All things considered, the story is worth checking out, by all means, it's a good and interesting read that just gets better as you go forward.
The idea of the story is interesting enough. A steampunk magic world with the protagonist being a construct (human-like flesh and blood?) and she now goes to explore the world.
The interesting parts end here. All interactions of the portagonist with pother people are forced. I still have no idea about the character of the protagonist or any of the people, and that was after we had a lesbian sex scene.
Add to that the flood of chapters that are way too short and the reading experience is not very enjoyable.
The author should put some effort into his writing and story telling instead of these short meaningless chapters.
Really a very solid story! Akaso has obviously researched "ye olde alchemy" quite a bit. Love the characters a lot!
Personally, I find the chapters a bit short, but that is just a personal preference. There are a few, very minor, grammatical errors, but they don't detract at all in my opinion.
100% would recommend, Fog Breathers welcome! Locust's forbidden!
I spend a great deal more time writing on Royal Road, than reading on it, but I have taken a look at a number of different stories in that time nonetheless. Most of the time I end up remembering that old saying about, 'If you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all' and so I leave no review.
This is one of those exceptions, the author puts together a compelling narrative with an enticing opening and a character that I couldn't help but become more curious about.
We get a clear picture of the world (a rarity in my experience) and how the character herself sees events around her, the imagery is vivid and the plot well paced for a character who is, much to my happiness, very well developed. Every name and interaction fits the theme of this fictional universe, and every character has a 'voice' of their own that sets them apart from the others, meaning you can't just 'swap dialogue' between characters, they all sound differently, and that adds a degree of life to this world and those who inhabit it, that will make this a story worth reading. Follow this one, it's worth your time.
A good story. While it won't blow you away. It is entertaining. The beginning was a little rough but the author picked his pace up nicely.
The chapters are a little short, so that may impact your reading experience. But overall a good read .
It can be a little odd at times. Still worth your time.