Trash No More

by thejokernl

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Male Lead Martial Arts Wuxia Xianxia
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Jake went from a promising disciple of the sect to trash because of a problem with his Dantian.    All his possessions had been stolen after it was learned he could not cultivate and he was forced to do all the menial and humiliating tasks in the sect.  Could he fix his dantian and become a cultivator?

Hi all.  This is my first attempt at writing a novel.  Please bear with me and give me your honest opinion.

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Lex Talionias
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Total amature hour writing but amusing enough and unlike many much better written stories this one doesn't beat around the bush. Every chapter so far has actually added to the story with zero padding which hoestly is kinda rare on this site. Biggest complaint is the characters are so far a bit flat, mostly that the bad guys seem to have little reason to act like jerks. Then again this is a cultivation novel so cartoonishly evil and selfish villians is pretty much par for the course.

I will be reading and hope to see the authors prose improve with time.