The Atropos Schema

by Plasticpebble22

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy GameLit LitRPG Magic Male Lead Post Apocalyptic Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Tutorials. Monster invasions. Fantasy towns in a post-apocalyptic world.  Follow Jarek Novak as he fights for survival with the “help” of his personal A.I.    


“To recap,” I said, trying to ignore my growing headache.  “I have a mind-controlling parasite in my brain. The Atropos Schema is facilitating the destruction of my world as I know it, and if it discovers this parasite, then I’m as good as dead.  Currently, my world is being overrun by monsters and soon other sapient species will fight for control over my world—unless they already control my world from the shadows.”

<That’s mostly correct,> Samantha said.  <Although I do take offense at being called a parasite.>


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kexD
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Good story ruined by annoying MC

Reviewed at: Chapter 25: Spar

I feel bad to give this bad rating, since the writing and grammar are alright, the litRPG systems make sense  and don't snowball out of control, and characters seem to written with some depth in them, even though nobosy of them seemed particularly unique.

I fe like a have to write this review though, cause main character is an absolute tool. Not only he constantly sabotages his AI companion efforts to help him, but doesn't remeber when she helped him at all.

Worst of all, there was sudded change in direction related to mind control, which came out of nowhere and was really annoying.

I had to drop the novel, since it felt like a plot good derailed by the MC efforts. I can't begin to care about interesting game systems, when the persons who uses them is an idiot.

Maybe this is supposed to be one of those prequels to character growth arcs, where MC changes who he is, grows as a person and realises his mistakes, but so far there was no trace of it, and my patience only lasted so long. Part of the reason MC feels like a fool so much is there is nothing else standibg out about him: we don't really know who he is, what he cares about, etc. The few things we are given feel forced on him, like quest objectives (e.g. need to find his family: it's never shown why he cares about them, or why are they so important for him)

Overral, I feel like this could (and maybe will) be a good novel, but as it standa now I just don't want to read it

Half Life
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Chewy LitRPG Goodness Coated in Blood

Reviewed at: Chapter 8: Floating Points

The Atropos Schema is an extremely easy-to-read, character-driven story told from the first-person POV. Unfortunately Jarek, the main character, is a less than a stellar example of guts and glory. Luckily, Samantha is the 100% awesome AI goddess in his head, who keeps Jarek from being too much of a weenie.

Tropey goodness abounds in this slick and polished presentation that just begs for an anime adaptation. So far, this is not a story that gets bogged down in the weeds of detailing out the system. Instead, it gets right into the action, which delivers plenty of blood-gushing, bone-crunching pleasure.

Read it! Now!

TaxReligion
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This is a great fun story, that I'm sure is destined to gain traction here on Royal Road.

The first five chapters concludes the tutorial of the litrpg.  A guy is transported to the tutorial and immediately bonds to an A.I., and this A.I. interaction for me was the best part of the story.  There's already a budding relationship between the MC and the A.I. with the A.I. being forced to negotiate with it's host.
This story looks like it will be a power fantasy, with the MC gaining significantly more power than his peers.  I suggest reading to the end of chapter 5 as that is when you will get hooked, even though the first 5 chapters are an easy enjoyable read.

The only problem I saw in the first 5 chapters is a lack of depth in the MC, or who I viewed as the MC.  The character I liked better was the A.I., and it would be interesting if going forward the story treated the A.I. as the main character.  Maybe that is the plan, as so far the A.I. is a far more interesting character.

For Style, there is a lack of flair that would make it a 5/5, but aside from that the style serves it's purpose.

Overall, 5/5. 

Redchaos1
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LitRpgs are amongst some of my biggest let down's on web novel website's, it isn't because i hate the concept but rather because many times they are executed poorly. I am thus happy to say that this story is one of the blessed few that have not followed the trend and rather written a unique and engaging story. The A.I is my favorite character and whatever you doing author keep on doing it, because you are doing something right. 

Bingon9s
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Well written story, with a main character that has a unique and believable voice and vivid descriptions that transport the reader into each scene. Already the first chapter is dynamic, engaging, and unpredictable. I'm excited to see where the story goes from here!

LelandLL
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The story is enjoyable with an A.I. and our character role in it.

There are some things that irked me about the story. MC is little too whiny.The A.I. concept however I've enjoyed especially when show emotions and being annoyed at being called an parasite.

I would continue to read the story to see how it goes. Also with the prologue, how did the protagonist get into this situation should have been more elobarated. Other than that I enjoy so far.

RicksySnowy
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Fun digestible story sure to hit trending in few days. Kudos author

Style

Okay. I have a heavy bias here. I prefer my stories to have a distinct flair of its own, which Atropos clearly lacks. But don't let my bias let stop you. There is nothing wrong with a generic style, and hell, it may make the story better for some.

Story

Tropey but handled really well. Like really well. Tropes aren't just jammed in to grab more eyeballs but instead are laid on a solid foundation. The author understands what makes the genre work and emphasises on those points.

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Nothing to add here. Didn't notice anything wrong. I don't notice them anyway. 

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Story is a delight to read. You know why? Because holy sh*t, I need a Samantha in real life. Where can I get a Samantha? Help me find a Samantha!!! 

Elateam
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The Atropos Schema is an interesting, first-person POV involving a man named Jarek who finds himself relying on his newly-obtained AI to overcome the hurdles heading his way. It's a nice story that I found myself, a non-LITRPG reader, enjoying rather well. There's action, good dialogue and an interesting plot. This review is still quite early, but despite that, I would recommend giving this story an honest try.

 

My only gripe with this work is the grammar. Though I found it to be a minor problem, there are times where the sentences could have been written a bit more efficently. I am unsure; however, if it's done intentionally to fit with the first-person POV. My only recommendation in this regard is for the author to give the sentences a good read-through a few times. Despite that, the majority of the work is clear and the wording is understandable.

bootstrap_paradox
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great for those who want a story with well-developed rules and details, and enjoy action-heavy and gripping narratives

the style is good and the grammar is decent, though personally i find that the main character is hard to figure out

however if you are looking for something that focuses on dynamic plot progression with high stakes, this story is definitely for you

VMJaskiernia
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I really like this story. It's a LitRPG with an AI 'companion' - something we see a lot on RR, but it's done very very well. The main character is great, the writing is fluid, it pulls you in. It's polished as well and has a good flow.

There are great touches here and there showing you the author knows what they're doing. At the very beginning even adding a 'Hell' version of difficulty reminded me of DOOM and similar old games. I like Samantha and her commentary on what's going on and how the OP does.