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Chapter Name Release Date
The Book of LIBERALITY - Prologue ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter ONE ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter TWO ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter THREE ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter FOUR ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter FIVE ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter SIX ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter SEVEN ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter EIGHT ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter NINE ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter TEN ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter ELEVEN ago
The Book of LIBERALITY - Chapter TWELVE ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Prologue ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter ONE ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter TWO ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter THREE ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter FOUR ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter FIVE ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter SIX ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter SEVEN ago
The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter EIGHT ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Prologue ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter ONE ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter TWO ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter THREE ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter FOUR ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter FIVE ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter SIX ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter SEVEN ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter EIGHT ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter NINE ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter TEN ago
The Book of KINDNESS - Chapter ELEVEN ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Prologue ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter ONE ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter TWO ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter THREE ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter FOUR ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter FIVE ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter SIX ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter SEVEN ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter EIGHT ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter NINE ago
The Book Of ABSTINENCE - Chapter TEN ago
The Book of ABSTINENCE - Chapter ELEVEN ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Prologue ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter ONE ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter TWO ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter THREE ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter FOUR ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter FIVE ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter SIX ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter SEVEN ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter EIGHT ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter NINE ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter TEN ago
The Book of CHASTITY - Chapter ELEVEN ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Prologue ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter ONE ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter TWO ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter THREE ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter FOUR ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter FIVE ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter SIX ago
The Book of PATIENCE - Chapter SEVEN ago

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A unique system that questions reality

Reviewed at: The Book of HUMILITY - Chapter SIX

The premise is familiar, there's a system imposed in this world, the main character doesn't fit in the system. The MC will then carve his own path, whatever that may be. We have seen this in many stories, the question now is how does this story set itself apart from others with this familiar premise.

We have to talk about my impressions of the system (without going into spoilers). Enough of it is in the synopsis for a potential reader to get the gist of. It is a deep system that I haven't seen before, turning the familiar (the premise), into something wholly unique and interesting. It goes deeper than most world systems in stories we usually see, involving philosophy and world bending realities.

Moving on to the characters. The first part of the book focuses on three of the main cast, and the interaction is top notch. The characterization of each one is carefully crafted that you know and can differentiate them, their personalities, their quirks, etc. And because they feel so realistic and diverse, the reader can easily connect to them.

Now onto the shortcomings. At first I was really drawn in with the exposition, the world is that unique and interesting that I didn't really mind the info dumps. However, the problem was that the first book is heavy on exposition (12 chapters) and I couldn't ground myself to what was explained because I couldn't see the bigger picture in action. The prologue seems a bit confusing too and appears to be very far into the story that the reader wouldn't care about it for a long time. Lastly, the story is a bit on the slow side since it tries to carefully build up its world and characters, although some readers may be used to a faster paced story.

The writing is good, above RR standards I might say. The explanations are clear, and they need to be considering the difficult concepts in the world of the story. There are some errors and typos, but I can read past that, nothing that really took me out of the story. The author also adds in some passages from books and philosophical discussions in the notes that I find entertaining.

I mentioned character interactions before, and I just have to emphasize that this story deals into interactions and emotions perhaps more than the average RR story. That would depend on the preference of the reader how they will receive it. But it is a breath of fresh air to have this level of realism in the characters.

With well-crafted characters, and a creatively forged world, more people should try this.

P.S. That thing where the story is chopped up into books that are the opposite of the seven deadly sins is a neat idea.

Ploopie
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In my first review, I didn't like this that much. That was during chapter 5 of the first book. But now, once I've completed it, I am beginning to interesting things and I like where the story is going. First of all, I'd just like to say that I'm loving the author's characterization. They've done a really good job in the romance sector and developing relationships between characters. The only problem here is I find the main character a little unbelievable. As the author reveals in the first books final chapter, Hank, the main character, is somewhat interpreted as an important person in the bible. Unfortunately, I'm not christian so I do not know what they're talking about.

I've only got two things I really want to say in this review. One. The author has done a really great job in the romance and relationship sector. When reading it, I get that melting feeling in my heart which is what a good love story will do to you. I really like Rio, she is an interesting character- a tsundere. The second thing that I want to say is that the slow development of the plot is actually quite satisfying to read and it rewards you at the end of the book, which isn't that far away. 

Style: Amazing. Easy to read.

Story: Interesting, but seems relatively basic for now.

Grammar: Nothing I saw broke my immersion, so a 5/5

Character: Really good, except like I said, Hank is a little bit unbelievable.

DrBuller
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I have not read too far into this story. And that isn't really needed. From the seven-ish chapters I have read, I have gained a general understanding of just what this story sets itself up to be.

The most obvious thing that sets this story out from the usual would be the system that the world runs on. Reality and how fragile it is. The ability to interpose one's own ideas and meanings into the very fabric of it all. Kinda neat to think about.

It needs to be mentioned that the style of the story has some very strong LN. It's mostly in how it presents the characters, but the sentence-structure also strongly hints towards it. Not my cup of tea, but most people on the platform enjoy it.

Overall, I give this story a 4.5/5 which equates to 5/5 by RR's standards. Great stuff

Poached_Egg
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This is the sort of dense, symbolism-heavy writing that tends to go straight over my head. Reading this gives me the same sort of feeling I would get when I would read one of the classics in school: I know that I'm reading something made with a lot of passion and talent, but most of the carefully-crafted work is sailing straight over my head. The dream scene in chapter three was probably the best example of this. I'm sure all of that symbolism has some really fascinating meaning behind it, but I'll be damned if I could make heads or tales of it. This is less of a matter of the quality of the writing, and more a matter of how your brain is wired. I'm a boring nerd, with a boring nerd brain. Not everyone is like me, though. If it sounds even a little bit interesting to you, then I think this story is worth trying.

In brief, if you're the sort of person who really enjoys that kind of dense, carefully crafted writing that is three parallel universes ahead of you, then this story is right up your alley. 

Bentancourt Alexsandher
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It got me right at the synopsis, I tell you, and the prologue didn't leave me hanging either.
I had a very little issue with some wording, much probably because engglish isn't my mother language, and I'm not familiar with a few word choices.
Besides that, I loved the interaction between Rio and Arius. It has that kinda not-so-serious-yet-wait-for-it anime vibe that I truly like.

The style of writing seems to be fast paced, and oh boy, how I like it!
The way you wrote the whole scene, in the middle of the ocean, it flashed through my eyes life a movie. Pretty sure it has the potential of becoming a web comic or the likes of it, and I so wish to see it in this format someday.
I’d be one of its first readers. Just announce it, I’ll be there!

Since I only read the prologue up until now, I won't mention a whole story score, but it hooked me real hard. Got me craving for the next chapter, if only I didn't have to write right now...

To summarize, keep it up, dude!
I’ll be reading it as the story unfolds, eager to get more and more.

And I promise I’ll be back for more
*Evil grin*

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Full disclosure, existentialism isn't my thing. So just bear that in mind.

So, the reason I made that disclosure statement right off the bat, is because it has a significant impact on whether or not you will accept the premise and conflicts within the story. Where characters have the ability to manipulate, alter, create or deny elements at will, Your ability to go with the flow dictates and determines whether you will enjoy the story. So I really couldn't get into it and kept coming up with questions about every little reveal or unilateral statement made by a character trying to swing the MC's mind to their point of view.

Characterisation is partly why I ranked the story so low. In the beginning of the first 'book' Hank, our MC is outlined as a generally decent guy who is pretty much a silent unassuming pillar of the community despite how relatively young he is. You get some great insights into who he is as a person, what his hopes and dreams are and then that all gets crumpled up and thrown out the window.

The first chapter should ahve been the prologue. Hank's lack of character is actually a running theme of the story, and it is very difficult to look past that. His only consistant motivation seems to be wanting to be liked by people, specifically women. Unfortunately, his lack of established character makes this bahaviour and desire come off as incredibly shallow. 

The writing style is fine, and so is the grammar and spelling. Errors are few and far between, but some segments of expositionary dialogue tend to become repetetive and ruin the flow.

In case I haven't made it abundantly clear, Dots is not for me. HOWEVER, if you get a kick out of existentialism and existential crisis, then you will probably get a kick out of it.

Smeowglivion
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Unfortunately, I haven't read far enough yet (don't look at the chapter, I just decided to read the last one before review) to leave an advanced review, but the opinion did form in my head about this book.

This book can be described with one word - ambitious. 'Dots' is way, way, way too ambitious for it's own good sometimes. Most of the time you can read it as a simple harem-like story about your average everyday Joe, who by the twist of fate becomes the only person capable of saving the world. The world, that is so fragile, people can impose their own realities on top of it. Which is a very cool concept, no doubt.


But when ArDeeBurger decides to play with symbolism and parallels to religious and spiritual concepts, then writing gets way over its head. Or it gets over my head, I am not sure. Either way, it get too much sometimes.


Now, this book is actually great at exploring deeper ideas. How world can change from a simple thought, how fragile people themselves actually are, and how it affects everyone around them. The author crealy loves his project to bits, and it shows. Outside from the weird fixation on the word 'bosom', and very flowery descriptions, that could be trimmed a bit, this book is great, especially if you love symbolism and deeper meanings.