Messiah: Soldier of the Orient

Messiah: Soldier of the Orient

by mchuang

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Tara's father saved their people in the face of Armageddon. But as with any other blessing, his existence was not destined to last forever. Before he was reclaimed by the heavens, he uttered one last wish - one that only Tara could fulfill. 

Now Tara finds herself on a distant world far more primitive than her own. She meets a soldier who resembles her father in more ways than just appearance. What answers does he hold that will guide her to her ultimate goal?

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This review is part of a review swap. The story is still very early in the development, but it does show good promise on where it can go. The story looks like it will be a high-tech into a fantasy realm type story and those can always develop in fascinating ways.

The grammar and style are solid, though there are places where some words are used incorrectly and a few places where the prose can be tightened up. The style is simple and straight forward, making the story an easy read.

The characters are still developing, the lead character Tara does have some solid underpinnings that can lead to detailed development.