Evolution of the Skeleton who walked alone in a Dungeon

by IAmNotVoid

Original ONGOING Action Fantasy Psychological Satire Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon GameLit Grimdark High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Mythos Non-Human lead Ruling Class Secret Identity Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural Villainous Lead
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An army of skeletons was summoned by the necromancer during his battle.However in the end of the battle none survived except a Skeleton . Follow our protagonist as he struggles to survive in a foreign, RPG-like setting surrounded by danger and monsters.

This is my first time writing so I apologize for the grammar and spelling in advance. I'm open to criticism so please mention it in the comments and help me improve.Also this was inspired by the novel "Overlord,Lv1 Skeleton,Skeleton Soldier Couldn'T Protect The Dungeon"

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This is a work of fiction. Unless otherwise indicated, all the names, characters, businesses, places, events and incidents in this book are either the product of the author’s imagination or used in a fictitious manner. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental.

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Evolving skeleton, evolving story

Reviewed at: Chapter 0061

The story starts off with a skeleton that has an RPG-like system and gets conveniently trapped in a dungeon where he is forced grind up. The story will not be contained to the dungeon later on, just the start.

The first few chapters are focused on the development of the MC, who starts off appropriately simple minded but gets both power and intelligence along the way. As the story progresses there crop up more other considerations besides the instinctive desire for power, and this fits with the MC transcending his stock mindless skeleton self to an eventual undead overlord.

As the MC evolves, so does the storytelling. The initial heavy reliance on the System slowly decreases and more of the progression is shown by example, descriptions get more elaborate and side characters and more intelligent opponents start to appear. Once some intelligent side characters appear, the MCs interactions with them start off decently strong and start to drive some actual plot. In the early phase there is some leveling math that seems somewhat arbitrary, which really irks anybody who has played an RPG, because stats are so important. As the system loses relevance this annoyance similarly fades to the background, present, but rarely noticable.

Some notes with regards to the scores:

  • The early chapters bring down the story score a bit, but the second half of what has currently been published could otherwise be a 4.
  • The character score might seem a bit high since there does not appear to be much of note in the first few chapters, however this is simply due to starting in the low-level kiddie area. Later on as more characters are introduced they are always well fleshed out for how they contribute to the story, and often have distinct personalities and motivations. 
nirzalwick
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 If there’s one thing that people who read a lot are good at, it’s being able to describe their ideas and phrase their words in the loveliest of ways. Many people don’t stop to appreciate the simple, yet wonderful, things in life, so when someone speaks and their words really affect you, it’s an amazing feat.

 

alcelaphinae
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 it is boring actually. Character is became op pretty fast and the events which happening in the story sooo abstract, i mean events also characters lack descriptions. Though i readed to 25th chapter and they are short so i can say there is no plot so far. MC makes a decision similar to; "i will do that" and he does it in following paragraph instantly. There is noting to read except summary of  "to do list" which like:

"lets go there", "we arrived", "lets kill king", "oh i am in king's palace right now", "king is killed"....

So my point is, i dont recommend this novel. Could be better, but boring as hell right now

Wieland Vandebotermet
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The story is going nowhere. But writing is quite good.

Reviewed at: Chapter 0018

The story is pretty much going nowhere at chapter 18 he alr has pretty much everything and he can do almost everything. So there isn't really a reason to hang on reading it.

But the writing is definitely better than most novels.

So if the story could actually go anywhere it would be nice.