Artificial Mind

by DrBuller

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AI creation is something that has been on the minds of the people for decades. The concept of artificial minds learning just like us. Maybe even better than us. This idea is something people have strived to make more than conceptual. But, they have failed.

Until now. 

This story will focus on the first few years after the first AI being born. We will see, from different perspectives, it growing up, and what adversaries it will face

Fair warning:

Slow pacing, bad language, way too many commas, and several mentions of France.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: Designation ago
Chapter 2: Integration ago
Chapter 3: Prospection ago
Chapter 4: Inauguration ago
Chapter 5: Assimilation ago
Chapter 6: Memorialization ago
Chapter 7: Socialization ago
Chapter 8: Perception ago
Chapter 9: Recitation ago
Chapter 10: Experimentation ago
Chapter 11: Degradation ago
Chapter 12: Externalization ago
Chapter 13: Introduction ago
Chapter 14: Stagnation ago
Chapter 15: Interrogation ago
Chapter 16: Acculturation ago
Chapter 17: Rationalization ago
Chapter 18: Induction ago
Chapter 19: Fructification ago
Chapter 20: Disinclination ago
Chapter 21: Assentation ago
Chapter 22: Commotion ago
Chapter 23: Aggregation ago
Chapter 24: Conscription ago
Chapter 25: Commotion ago
Chapter 26: Evasion ago
Chapter 27: Elation ago
Chapter 28: Consternation ago
Chapter 29: Unorganisation ago
Chapter 30: Differentiation ago
Chapter 31: Consumation ago
Chapter 32: Deconstruction ago
Chapter 33: Hypercorrection ago
Chapter 34: Codetermination ago
Chapter 35: Circumlocution ago
Chapter 36: Complementation ago
Chapter 37: Osmoregulation ago
Chapter 38: Accusation ago
Chapter 39: Microevolution ago
Chapter 40: Exteriorization ago
Chapter 41: Agglomeration ago
Chapter 42: Demythologization ago
Chapter 43: Disinformation ago
Chapter 44: Overcapitalization ago
Chapter 45: Disintermediation ago
Chapter 46: Redintegration ago
Chapter 47: Autointoxication ago
Chapter 48: Disincorporation ago
Chapter 49: Prestidigitation ago
Chapter 50: Presignification ago
Chapter 51: Antiredeposition ago
Chapter 52: Irreconciliation ago
Chapter 53: Particularisation ago
Chapter 54: Circumnavigation ago
Chapter 55: Institutionalization ago
Chapter 56: Sinistrogyration ago
Chapter 57: Misrecollection ago
Chapter 58: Amortization ago
Chapter 59: Incircumscription ago
Chapter 60: Misadministration ago
Chapter 61: Conflagration ago
Chapter 62: Deglamorization ago
Chapter 63: Conventionalization ago
Chapter 64: Rejection ago
Chapter 65: Circumpolarization ago
Chapter 66: Abstraction ago
Chapter 67: Remediation ago
Chapter 68: Desperation ago
Chapter 69: Participation ago
Chapter 70: Authorization ago
Chapter 71: Indemnification ago
Chapter 72: Benefaction ago
Chapter 73: Subconstellation ago
Chapter 74: Exaltation ago
Chapter 75: Radioprotection ago
Chapter 76: Lateralization ago
Chapter 77: Reprivatization ago
Chapter 78: Intercommunication ago
Chapter 79: Amelioration ago
Chapter 80: Improvisation ago
Chapter 81: Unsubstantiation ago
Chapter 82: Paravirtualization ago
Chapter 83: Revascularization ago
Chapter 84: Discombobulation ago
Chapter 85: Decentration ago
Chapter 86: Indoctrination ago
Chapter 87: Metarelation ago
Chapter 88: Reconceptualisation ago
Chapter 89: Obstruction ago
Chapter 90: Hereditation ago
Chapter 91: Anticonscription ago
Chapter 92: Dementalization ago
Chapter 93: Coadaptation ago
Chapter 94: Vassalization ago
Chapter 95: Immoderation ago
Chapter 96: Deresponsibilisation ago
Chapter 97: Underestimation ago
Chapter 98: Difunctionalization ago
Chapter 99: Foresignification ago
Chapter 100: Floccinaucinihilipilification ago
Chapter 101: Baroinhibition ago
Chapter 102: Intravolution ago
Chapter 103: Balkanization ago
Chapter 104: Adjunctification ago
Chapter 105: Nugation ago
Chapter 106: Inanition ago
Chapter 107: Webutation ago
Chapter 108: Excogitation ago
Chapter 109: Deception ago
Chapter 110: Risrepresentation ago
Chapter 111: Collaboration ago
Chapter 112: Remotivation ago
Chapter 113: Cyberization ago
Chapter 114: Antilibration ago
Chapter 115: Microencapsulation ago
Chapter 116: Mention ago
Chapter 117: Compensation ago
Chapter 118: Bureaucratisation ago
Chapter 119: Archaization ago
Chapter 120: Abbreviation ago
Chapter 121: Palindromation ago
Chapter 122: Extermination ago
Chapter 123: Panretinophotocoagulation ago
Chapter 124: Demolition ago
Chapter 125: Habilitation ago
Chapter 126: Ingeneration ago
Chapter 127: Corradiation ago
Chapter 128: Alimentation ago
Chapter 129: Prognostication ago
Chapter 130: Postdevaluation ago
Chapter 131: Bisimulation ago
Chapter 132: Deoppilation ago
Chapter 133: Extrajection ago
Chapter 134: Inadaptation ago
Chapter 135: Inadequation ago
Chapter 136: Intellection ago
Chapter 137: Inteneration ago
Chapter 138: Intersection ago
Chapter 139: Invigilation ago
Chapter 140: Irreflection ago
Chapter 141: Jurisdiction ago
Chapter 142: Labanotation ago
Chapter 143: Layerization ago
Chapter 144: Maloperation ago
Chapter 145: Minification ago
Chapter 146: Echolocation ago

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I'd like to cushion my review by saying that the author is aware of the unfortunate amount of grammatical issues, which do appear to derive from differences in language structure between English and their native tongue. If you are not bothered by grammar problems, I'd recommend giving this story a try. If you are, it doesn't look like the author has enough time to go back and polish their work, which is entirely understandable. I'd keep this in my back pocket and see if someone volunteers to edit the work.


I'm a real fan of any AI, sci-fi story and this scratches an itch in my brain. Unfortunately, in many ways the story feels slapdash, with entire chapters devoted to a concept, and then no further mention to it. There is an unfortunate lack of worldbuilding, and my biggest complaint is that there doesn't seem to be a consistent overarching direction.


There are a total of at most five important characters: Troy, Adam, Dr. Hale, Dr. Firales, and Charlie. Dr. Hale is the alcoholic hard-ass, Firales is the mad scientist, Charlie is a whole can of worms, and Troy is an idiot. I understand that Troy apparently got a degree in English, and the story eagerly denotes it as a joke major, but the guy is dense. Yes, that is a defining characteristic of how he arrives in the story itself, but sometimes it just goes too far. Worse than that, he is inconsistent. At one moment he is worrying about money enough to sign away his life, at another he is gambling and taking loans without any money in the bank. I wish the characters had a bit more depth, but I will say that they are at least unique and memorable.


There isn’t too much to say, one first person perspective narration from the AI, and an odd mixture of first / third person narration of Troy and the outside world. Its nothing special, but the largest problem is in terms of dialogue, which can feel stilted and unnecessary. I personally had trouble sometimes distinguishing from the narration and the dialogue at points.


This is the breaking point for me. The author bashes English majors in the first couple of chapters, but clearly has a couple misunderstandings of the language itself. That isn’t to say that everyone should know perfect English, but there are repeated glaring errors. Commas are the biggest issue, as you can see from the following problematic sentence:

"Now, I can tell you, how long this whole operation will take, if you go over, and get me the earpiece, and hand it over to me."

The author is responsive to criticism and does understand this is an issue. 
Additionally, and this is probably nitpicking, the author will often use overly complicated words in situations where they are not helpful, or out of character. I’d advise them to simplify at least the narration, because while words like Halcyon are fun, its best to write your novel to be accessible to the lowest common denominator.


I really wanted to like this story. It seems like a semi-interesting plot and something that's not done much here on RR.


However, the punctuation is awful. There are extra commas everywhere, some that change the meaning of the sentences. During certain parts, the writing style tried to be very technical and proper, as though being written by a scientist or AI. However, incorrect words, poor grammar, and completely unnecessary commas break me out of the story every time. I know that RR is not going to be professionally edited, and I've learned to tolerate quite a bit on this site, but this was too much for me. 

Additionally, while the concept was interesting, I was having trouble really believing the story line. The characters didn't seem to be acting in a believable way. There are inconsistencies and things that just don't seem to fit. I only made it through chapter 5, but I couldn't see my way to continuing with this story. 2.5 stars for interesting concept. If you're not bothered at all by grammar and punctuation, go for it. I hope an editor (or even reader feedback) can clean this story up more, I'm just not up for it.


The concept is a nice change of pace on this website, and the story manages to pull everything off pretty well. While I'm not the best critic, all of the charters have charter that isn't just one dimensional and the story is pretty interesting how the AI interacts with the world around it and how it indirectly is involved with the world.