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Disclaimer: The "Strong Lead" tag means "Weak-to-Strong", and not immediately strong. If you're looking for an immediate Strong Lead, then this story isn't for you.

A young woman finds herself dead and is given the chance to reincarnate in another world with cheat-like magic powers. She accepts, only to find that this world treats magic users the same way hers did— by hunting them down for heresy.

My name is MELAS?! Like... Salem spelt backwards? Oh my God, and my mother is a Witch. I am SO going to be burned at the stake!


Melas is a story about action, adventure, and most importantly, survival in a world that isn't always kind to the MC. It's a slow progression fic, and although it is NOT a SoL/fluff story, IMO it's NOT a grimdark fantasy as well; in fact, I'd be inclined to believe it's closer to the opposite, although sometimes 'dark' aspects of the world will be explored within the story. It takes some inspiration from the real life relationship between Witches and religion, involving a setting that is closer to the period of an industrializing world rather than the typical medieval fantasy-type setting.

It isn't the pinnacle of writing, nor does it pretend to be anything truly novel: I'm simply writing what I want to write. 

Covert art by Boboplushie (WARNING SLIGHTLY NSFW)

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Iago Miranda
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Was pleasantly surprised reading this story, both for the writer saying that they hadn't even read much before 2019 and because he was always apologizing (but hey, Pirateaba from Wandering Inn also apologizes at least once per chapter so maybe it's a trend of good writers)

The prose is good, solid. Not too flowery and not too sparse, giving a good amount of information on descriptions and lore dumps without feeling dreary. Not often do i read all paragraphs without jumping out of descriptions, but Delta managed to retain me in his writing.

Grammar is, until right now, perfect. Except for a single verb that is in present tense instead of past tense that i failed to report because i really wanted to keep reading. Sorry Delta, that's your own fault for writing a good story.

Good story. Yep. Delta manages to write a good story on his first (re)try. It seems to follow a classic coming of age structure with hardships first so the main character can grow later. As of right now it has been mostly hardships but that's how this kind of stories start.

Between the sadness it can be seen sparks of light beautiflly written, that given the contrast to prior scenes makes me get emotional, which is always a good thing to happen, and means the author knows what he is doing (or in this case maybe he is just magically good (first try, really?))

The story is helped also by the interesting worldbuilding, that has some mixes that i feel rather interesting. Won't say examples though, it's better to preserve the sense of discovery.

Now, my only caveat with this story (that present verb notwithstanding). This may change later as the story continues, but i don't see the need to make this story an isekai. I find that as of right now, if the story was about just a girl born in that world in the circunstances she does, the story wouldn't have changed a bit, and the author wouldn't have to struggle that much with her character (not that it makes her a bad character, just that it could be easier)

Aaaaand i think i'm done. I just wanted to write a few sentences but somehow ended writing this.

So, people that managed to get here, read this series. And Delta, stop apologizing for f sake.

 

Abbolinarks
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For those interested in a review, thats the second paragraph, the first deals with some of the negative reviews.

 

First and foremost to many of the negative reviews. The story is marked to contain gore and traumatizing content so why are you whining about exactly that. It´s not even realy gruesome. Sure there is some death and slavery. Whatever. If you realy think thats dark it makes me think you´ve only read childrens novels or filter online by fluffy content. This book is driected towars adults not children.
Secondly all the whining about the strong lead. She´s 12 right now so wait until she´s grown up. Furthermore, we´ve seen her develop realy quickly and therefore a glimpse of future power.

This story progress more along the lines of an actual book and not some weekly manga. It´s therefore still a strong lead if she takes 1000 pages or more to become strong in power. Not even taking her mental strength into consideration.

 

Now to review to story. It has a quick transport from our world to a magic based fantay world. The progress is not the fastest and we´re shown most things on a daily development base. It´s the authors first work and it´s vissible in a few places as the language is nice to read but not of masterwork quality. Same goes for the world building and story. I find it to be very entertaining amd apriciate the authors care to fix issues if pointed out and to focus on a slow paced development.
The decision to turn the charcter into a newborn when ariving in the new world is interesting and I like it. I thing I might even have preferred to experience more of her childhood.

I can recommend this to everony who likes a fantasy novel and isn´t bothered by a young lead!

gueenee
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I've been an avid reader of the original version for a while now. It's one of the few serials I read release-by-release, and of course, this rewrite is no exception.

Something I truly appreciate in any author is when they don't desperately try to chase the newest trend or meta, and writes purely for the sake of writing a good story. Genuine, heartfelt writing, in short. I've spent a huge chunk of my life slogging through this website, so believe me when I say: this isn't your usual regurgitated copy-paste isekai.

Everything a good fantasy story should have, Melas has in spades. An interesting cast of characters, solid worldbuilding, and a story that poses real, consistent challenges for its actors instead of going on a break for an instant gratification power trip every other minute.

This rewrite fixes the issues and rough edges that plagued much of the first take. The grammar is fixed, prose tightened up. The pacing issues that had been grating me on the original are now gone. I'm looking forward to what the author can do with this story now that they have so much more experience under the belt.

Christie
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I am not one to write much, so, to be simple and direct: the plot is awesome, slow-paced but realistic.  I kind prefer slow-paced novels since you can see the character growth, and this is what you get with Melas: yes, a weak character that grows through pain, through the "tragedy" many reviews are complaining about. I was caught on the flow just as soon as I started and this is now one of my favorites.
Read the first 3 chapters, then you will be the judge of your next hours!

Dorrin
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Can't wait till this catches up with the first draft.  Many flow issues have been resolved, characters are slightly more consistant.  Not to say that the orignial was in any way actually lacking but the rewrite is pretty damn well polished.  

What I said in my initial review in the first draft of this story still holds true.

"Better than the vast majority.   MC with character, solid plot, progression, worldbuilding, great hook, fun side characters, full kitchen sink, wait.  There are some small rough spots but they don't really matter.  I certainly have no regrets picking this one up.  Look forward to more from the author."

Ipoopalot
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NOT THE TYPICAL ROYAL ROAD STUFF

Reviewed at: Chapter 25: Dark Crusader

Rough edges, but the writer is developing this into a true RR gem. Give the story some time (there are some sadge moments littering the beginning portions of the story). If you're looking for a wish fulfillment fantasy, this story definitely is not for you.

 

Can't wait to see how the writing develops-- noticeable improvement from the first version of the story. 

vladerag
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The thing about "reincarnation in another world" stories is that they often rely on a gimmick of some kind; a unique selling point that makes them different from the others.  They rely on this because the genre is oversaturated, and many web novels and light novels have set the bar low.

In some ways, the first chapter of this novel could be swapped with the first chapter of nearly any other reincarnation novel and the casual reader would be hard pressed to note the difference.

However, I think that this novel's USP is a good one and as a result it is worth a look at.

So obviously the character dies in a truck related accident (hail our lord Truck-kun and his unknowable ways) and ends up in front of maybe God.  She died because of God so he grants are a request for her next life, to which she responds that she wishes to be the greatest magic user of all time.  So far, so generic, however the next part is where things diverge because magic is illegal in the world she is reincarnated in.

On the whole, this throws a twist into the usual formula and the author has thrown in a couple more twists as well.  I will stop talking specifics here because this is where it matters, things are bent enough that it doesn't feel like every other reincarnation story, and that makes it worth reading.

The only real problem I have is that the protagonist constantly talks about how mature she is with her adult mind, but is actually only occasionally mature.  You would think that someone planning to be a lawyer would know that you can't make everyone happy but this girl simply can't handle the idea that someone doesn't like her.

Someone calls her out for her use of illegal magic in a catastrophe and instead of saying, "we can talk about this after we escape the giant death monsters," she runs away.  When confronted with some random ass who doesn't like her because he thinks she is weak, instead of laughing at his frankly ludicrously childish philosophy, she agrees and tries to prove herself instead.  When working to escape from a horrible situation, she simply cannot seem to wrap her head around the idea that people near her could get hurt.

I wouldn't mind her inconsistency in the maturity of her actions if she didn't bring up his mature she supposedly was all the time though.  Most people would not have the level of maturity to act properly in these situations, but since she brought it up...

 

Tl;dr good story, worth a read with a slightly whiny protagonist.  (Perhaps deservedly whiny though)

Soldieratarms
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As I said above, I'll keep this short. I just want to point out that while I understand where the plethora of negative reviews come from, with them finding a certain major arc unbearable, I do not find their arguments valid, as multiple times the author has pointed out where the difficult parts are, and has even given a way to bypass it entirely, and, given that you're reading this review, you are likely already well informed of the problems people have. the high average star rating speaks for itself. 

IAmTeethMan
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This story is one of the few that I get legitimately excited about when I receive a notification. The writing and characters are super well done and it has a more realistic feeling to it. It's nice to see a protagonist work up her power instead of being able to Blitzkrieg through it. Since it feels like the protagonist goes through a constant downhill slope of luck it feels more realistic. When I read these chapters I get nervous for the MC because it seems like the only plot armor she has is death prevention. Bad stuff can still happen to her, unlike in most books/movies/shows where the MC always pulls through and comes out relatively unharmed.

I really love this book and I hope to read much more of it!

Nova96
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a perfect example of grimderp

Reviewed at: Chapter 31: Iron-y Golems

 if you have ever read a story with a grimdark tag that was a brutal and extremely unpleasant read that could be best described as 'it gets worse' and then you thought to yourself. "hmm, I understand everything is horrible for this main character and their only way out of untold torture is to kill themselves(and somehow they can't even do that)" followed by "Meh those protagonists had it too good and where obviously mary sues that had everything handed to them. wheres the REAL grimdark?" well, you might want to read this.

 I also recommend this story to people who are into CBT and feel like they need some real pain in their lives