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Book 1: Bound and Broken is now live on Amazon!

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A young woman finds herself dead and is given the chance to reincarnate in another world with cheat-like magic powers. She accepts, only to find that this world treats magic users the same way hers did— by hunting them down for heresy.

My name is MELAS?! Like... Salem spelt backwards? Oh my God, and my mother is a Witch. I am SO going to be burned at the stake!

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Book 1: Bound and Broken is now live on Amazon!

Book 2: The Witch is now live on Amazon!

Book 3 (Ongoing): Chapter 77-??

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Current Schedule: idk lmao. Professional Zoomer. Also, I write stuff sometimes.

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Mecanimus
Overall

Nice story if you can stand the MC.

Reviewed at: Chapter 68 - Infiltration

Melas is a take on the classic Isekai, but in a world where magic is forbidden by the church and technology is powered by mana stones. 

The story is nice enough though not exempt of flaws. There are several characters with personality and depth... but sometimes their reactions feel a bit forced through dialogues that lack direction.

The main character in particular is slightly problematic. She is a reincarnated young adult with strong values and a drive to learn. She is also confrontational with everybody in a way that should piss others off while appearing very young. This another reason why dialogues are strange sometimes. I would fully expect actual adults to tell her off more often. instead, most people indulge her, and I personally find that grating.

I commend the soft magic system and the lore. There is a real work on it.

All in all, this might not be the best Isekai on the website but this is still worth your time.   

TeamDman
Overall

I don't mind that the story touches on the topic of slavery and misery for a protag in a child body. However, the execution is lacking. Having characters being literally traded as slaves referring to their captors as "meanies" and "jerkface" just breaks the story. To claim endless anger and lust for revenge one moment, but reverting to the vocabulary and cunning of a 5 year old is tiresome. Sequences repetitive, the same interaction or description used over in the same chapter

Banarok Lionrage
Overall

It's honestly hard for me to review this, i do like the main character but overall character interaction feels forced most characters feel fake, like they are playacting or rehersing a script rather than live the story, they always feel a bit "off" but i can't put my finger on WHY i feel so.

and that's what make it hard to put my finger on EXACTLY what i dislike about Melas, i liked it enough to read up to chapter 68, but i've just lost all interest in continueing, and that is despite it picking up the pace, i might come back to it some time because it's not awful it's just not good enough to hold my interest.

keepthywits
Overall

It was okay but then, lost interest

Reviewed at: Chapter 79: Course of Action

For a beginner, it's good. However, lately, it feels like the story is dragging itself out. The beginning was great but then somehow...it just became flat. Something that the story had in the beginning was gone. I am a fan of earning power rather than just being op all the time but this is just not the story for me. 

As for people who are looking to read this story, give it a try. 

Edit: This story is not bad, it is just not the best. You can decide on your own whether it is worth the time or not.

dstroar
Overall

Continue reading this review with a pinch of salt since this is my first written review. In short, unless you are someone who wants the lead to see a situation and understand that sometimes an act of small good can do more harm than good, and are just here to understand whether this is even worth reading, give it a try.

This story has an interesting world where magic is actually considered a forbidden practice. The style is pretty good and the story seems to be building up to be something bigger judging from the interludes. While the world is sort of dark, it's not enough to be considered a grimdark fiction so if you cannot take lead characters which have to get down and dirty with what they do and cannot swallow any morally questionable act then you don't need to worry. Honesty, I believe if you are reading this and are just like what I just stated, you should give this a try. For those who want to know why I dropped this, read the spoilers.

Well, I am going to keep this short. Melas finds out her teacher is a rapist. Magic is a forbidden practice in this world and his teacher is part of an organisation fighting to legalise it. The organisation, hereon referred to as DC, decides that they want her teacher to capture a fort and keep it under DC's control stealthily. He rapes the captain of the guards after taking them prisoner and Melas finds out. Her reaction is to free the captives, of an attack supposed to be kept under wraps , and to confront her teacher about his actions. Let it sink, she decides to talk to him after freeing the captives(who he planned to rape and thinks is his right beacuse of certain psychological scars) and making him fail his mission which is ruthless because the war to legalise magic is ruthless. And she expects hopes her teacher to understand that he is wrong after thoroughly destabilizing his mental faculties by giving him this blow. How she managed to kill her teacher after that is something that I can't even begin to comprehend. The only reason I didn't rate it further down is because the rest of the story is well done and I believe that for those that actually like these kind of MCs it will be an amazing novel.

 

Starveling
Overall

It has above average world building and below average character development. It finally ended its first major arc but it fell quite flat. It has the same problem that most portal fantasies do — the author can't decide on how to characterize their protagonist.

The first arc ends with some "twist" about one of the characters not being who you thought they were. Unfortunately, since the author struggles with character development, it’s particularly uncompelling.

Spoiler: Spoiler

Characters not being all that they appear to be is a common trope and there are many examples on how to do it well and how to not do it.

Spoiler: Spoiler

Trusting a self proclaimed terrorist and zealot whose job description is nothing but breaking the law is something that a child might do. A real child.

Melas is not a real child and It breaks suspension of disbelief for someone who is mentally an adult to find any of this surprising and to react so much like a headless chicken. She can go ahead and take the actions that she did, it doesn't matter because that's not the unbelievable part of the situation.

This entire plot point is like reading a story where a woman befriends a high ranking mafia member and then the author expects the reader and the main character to somehow find it surprising that the mafia member is a criminal.

Iume
Overall

Good start, but got bored with story

Reviewed at: Chapter 38: Interlude III - The Saint

As the story starts out I find myself hooked.  I look forward to each next chapter & Melas , but after a bit it became meh.  The story has a very interesting premise but I became bored and dropped the series once I realized I didn't actually care what happened anymore.

Danniboss
Overall

It is not my taste. The author told us it was weak to strong but this felt like those chinese novels with more plot armor and mary sue moments. I came thinking that Melas will grow as a character after the first tragedy or the second one that happened, but no I didnt get any of that for the first arc. She mary sue her way out of some many situation just for the plot to continue. This will be for other people but ill have to leave.

jaristos
Overall

Italics are maddening when used excessively

Reviewed at: Chapter 1: Prologue - Murdered

This is my revenge, MelasD, for subjecting me to italics. What the absolute f888 made you italicize every other word in your damn story? I'm trying to enjoy it. I really am. Even with the slavery which I absolutely hate in any story. But you are driving me mad with these italics. Fortunately, I can at least read them with my poor vision. 

You really needed to ask yourself: does any other author over-use italics like this? Because any reader could tell you the answer was no. 

Also, a ten year old girl is an odd choice for an MC. Ah, well. Killshot Apocalypse is fun, at least. 

DITO8SHADOW
Overall

Good start, lacking follow through

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: Monster Attack

The story started off fairly good. Nothing truely unique about the characters, but while simple they were well defined and not flat from what I have read. The world building seemed to start quite interestingly, but before anything could actually grow properly there is the main issue:

Readers beware: large chunks of the story are missing and if you want to read past chapter 5 you need to buy the books