MERTICORE

by Onch

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Meet Ian.

Ian is an IT consultant who accepted a supposedly impossible job for an incredible amount of money. However, he quickly learns why his colleagues avoided that gig like the plague.

Ian now hates his job, and wants to be fired to get severance pay. However, things don’t go as planned when he downloads MERTICORE, a mysterious program that popped out of nowhere.

After that, the life of Ian has changed drastically. Gone are the days of drinking bad coffee while staring at a screen.

His days are now filled with magic, fighting weird creatures and even weirder people. Let’s not even mention the comrades he collects along the way, which are more often than not worse than the (numerous) enemies he makes as he bumbles through alternate dimensions.

There’s also a disturbing number of laundromats for some reason.

Release Schedule: One or two long(2.5k+ words) chapters per week, maybe more depending on real life. 

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BubblesWritesTrash
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Matrix LitRPG/Fantasy but with a protagonist missing neurons

Reviewed at: Chapter 6: Same Day Delivery

When I first read this I was like...Huh, this feels a lot like the Matrix. Protagonist in dead-end job getting some weird godlike powers, and it sounded quite interesting. And for the most part it's fun. That's it. This is a very funny, extremely easy to read piece of fiction, but one that I don't think particularly stands out.

Style:

Nothing to say here, the style is easy to read, a bit too simplistic at times, but I can't complain about that, since it's the nature of the genre. At times, there are a couple of repetitions that become a little annoying, but apart from that, yeah, good stuff mate, keep it up ;3

Story:

Easily the worst part here is the progression of the story. I can't say it's not creative, it's extremely so, although the particular melting pot of tropes tends to be a bit...heterogenous at times, what with technology and fantasy trying to mingle. Regardless, the issue I have is that after six chapters...nothing really happened. The plot is probably as far ahead as it was when I first started, the only thing having changed being the protagonist's knowledge of his abilities. With the chapter structure being quite dull and major events being barely sprinkled throughout with no real sense of consequence, I'm kind of at a lost for interest. The stakes aren't explained and even for a light read, I can't really ignore that. Not to mention the full-on expositiony nature of certain scenes that are nothing but telling the reader information, as if they're perusing a glossary.

Grammar:

Nearly perfect, but many instances of words missing and commas not being properly used. A reread will obviously iron these mistakes out, but until then, it's not flawless enough to warrant a full 5 stars.

Character:

Looking at it through the lens of the Japanese LN style, the characters are what they need to be. Simple, two-dimensional actors to a plot that's comedic. And they do that job quite all right, with the only issue being that the two sisters are nothing but one-liner, expositioning machines, whilst the main character is a wise-cracking jackass. They serve their purpose, but their purpose is just not good enough, in my humble opinion.

At the end of the day, this is a fun, high-spirited, light read, and I'd definitely recommend it to people just looking to have fun delving into wacky shenanigans that don't need too much effort to comprehend. 

YAK Edge
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Unlimited power...very limited brain space

Reviewed at: Chapter 6: Same Day Delivery

Merticore takes place in a world where science and fantasy mesh and where all kinds of different genres meet. It's a RR chop suey and quite funny. Though how well connected and integrated they are is something one has yet to see.

The style reads nicely and there not many issues. Same for Grammar.

As for the characters, our MC Ian is many things. But intelligent, he is not. He's a knack for making stupid descisions and questionable judgement calls. It will be fun to see it blow up in his face. Besides that, he or the other characters don't feel remarkable to so far.

ztaylor
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Style - Written in first person, focusing mostly on our main character. His thoughts are fun to read, and everything flows incredibly well. There were multiple points where the MC's inner monologues had me laughing, which is pretty rare in stories. I don't read much comedy, but this definitely does it's job well. 

Story - Worldbuilding and system here is outstanding! Really different from a lot of the Isekai I see on here. It seems that we're still in the setup stages, but I think it's gonna take off soon. 

Grammar - Zero complaints, well done!

Character - Ian is the one we've gotten to know the most, but I really like him so far! Him and his party are tropey, but the author seems to be well aware of that fact. Gotta love a self-aware story, especially if those tropes are gonna be played with later down the line. 

All in all, I would highly recommned this story. Super well done job, author. 

Eyeball1844
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Style: It's pretty well done for the most part. The author does a good job of injecting character voice into the descriptions and the narrative. The only issue is that I wasn't particularly moved by the detail of places and characters.

Grammar: It's good. I didn't see any major mistakes or see anything that made me have to stop and reread.

Story: It's very comedic and silly. Lots of light-hearted fun to be had here and MERTICORE is a cool system. I wish it was explained a bit more or that the MC would expand how he tried using it.

Character: The MC just seems a little too slapstick at times but it's fine because this is a comedic story after all. The sisters, Nicole and Mary, seem a bit out of their depth but maybe that's just because Memelord is too powerful.

Overall: I liked it. It was fun and worth giving a try. We need more funny novels like this.

Half Life
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Download and Install Immediately!

Reviewed at: Chapter 16: Relooking

Merticore is a fun character driven story. Ian, our main character, is primarily what makes this story so enjoyable. He is just as snarky as Kazuma (from Konosuba) or Quill (from Guardians of the Galaxy). All events filtered through his narration are a joy to read and elicited several laugh out loud moments.

The systems that control this world are well conceived and play off each other in interesting waysEven if this was only a serious story, the details of the world(s) setting would be enough to keep me interested, but the humor is so good that that this story pushed itself into my favorites immediately.

The writing is mostly straightforward traditional novel style, with a touch of Japanese light novel sensibilities mixed in, for a breezy and easily accessible read. Highly recommended!

strand VV
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This is a pseudo half isekai half litrpg. The isekai part is that it seems the MC will get to travel to different worlds, but this is a regular thing where it all happens and the world has a mature society based on this. The litrpg part is the that the MC has a system but it is used in this story as a more of a raw source of power than the regular one with stats and descriptions. 

 

The style is a comedic first person. The style never fails to capture how the MC feels in a given moment and almost displays most of the MCs thoughts to the readers.

 

There was no problem in the grammar so no problem from me.

 

The characters were all fleshed, each with their own set of action and their bckgrounds affecting it. The MC is honestly the most fleshed one since this is a first person story. 

MrBadWithNames
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Style 4.5/5; The strory is written in first person, the POV changes occasionally, personally the POV changes feel a bit off, but I know that's a bit of a personal thing.

The pacing is good and the author has a cool sense of humor that makes the whole story fun to read.

 

Grammer 5/5; No mistakes that I could find.

 

Story 4/5; At where I am in the story the MC just for properly brough into the supernatural world, his limits are vague and I never know if I'm over or underestimating him combat ability, in a way this keeps all the encounters tense, though I never feels like the MC is in any real danger.

 

Characters 5/5; the MC is an absolute legend, he's funny but he can't seem to stay away from self-inflicted cringe, be it by calling himself "Memelord" or by wearing a spandex super-hero outfit.

 

In conclusion Merticore is a funny scify/fantasy story that blends the two worlds together very well!

As long as you have any interest in either comedy, magic or scify I think you should give this story a go!

JDFister
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A Fresh Take on Action Adventure SciFi Fantasy! Worth the read!

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: The Other Side Of The Mirror

I imagine (with painful empathy) while reading this story that the author must’ve endured work in a hellish office environment at some point in their life. The descriptions are too damn specific not to be shaped by lived experience. I’m not a computer programmer myself, but I could relate to the descriptions of a work environment that’s strung together with string and bubblegum even if some of the specific programming details were over my head. I would be shocked if an expert came in and said the technical details were wrong because it felt so real to me.

Style: Onch constantly interrupts the narration with clever asides from the MC that establishes a strong voice right away. You don’t have to second-guess the absurdity of any given situation, the narrator does it for you! I also appreciate an eye for visual elements, and the bolded marked off text for inputs from the MERTICORE program is very useful framing device to visually separate these lines from the rest of the narration.

Grammar: There are a few mistakes here and there but nothing jumped out to take me out of the story. The only tip I would have is for the author to make sure they’re not using a dash when they mean to use an emdash (please look this up!) but they look about the same, so I didn’t sweat it.

Character: In the opening sequence you can see that the author wants to guide the story toward an implementation of this MERTICORE program, but rather than force the issue they efficiently establish the characterization of the MC as that of someone willing to throw caution to the wind despite obvious red flags. This didn’t feel forced at all but I appreciate the difficulty of such a task. The MC’s “I just don’t give a fuck” attitude was a comical delight that I bought into completely. This just makes the turn-around in his attitude after the…. Okay, I’ll avoid spoilers here, but suffice to say the character growth was satisfying to experience.

Story: I’ll be honest that I don’t read a lot of science fiction, so I can’t comment on whether this story exhibits any common tropes that more experienced readers might be tired of, but in my experience I found the ideas very novel. The concept of being able to edit the real world like one would program a computer felt fascinating and fresh to me. This is definitely a soft-science fiction whose technology borders on magic, and I found this more conducive to escapism than most harder science fictions. And I do think the Metricore API is a science fiction system, as the magic is shown to be a totally separate system later on. It makes for a neat sci fi/fantasy blend. If you want to get the fuck out of the real world and dive into an enthralling story, MERTICORE is for you!

It is an absolute travesty that this story isn’t getting more attention! It is at least as good a read as Mother of Learning and deserves to be exposed to a wider audience!

Talo Segura
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Let's get the stuff I don't like out of the way first. The mixture of past and present tense, "I yawn and sigh,..." spoils the flow right from the start. That said, the writing had no real problems or errors, so it's a question of style, you like it or not.

The main character, Ian Jones, is rather a boring choice of protanganist, his job sounds like a solicitor or lawyer, the geek computer programmer, doesn't do much to attract, but he does grow on you and he has a few surprises up his sleeve, or in his glove box, like the Gloch 20 pistol. He's got short black hair, the one aspect of his appearance we get told, which strangely I remembered. It does sort of reinforce the geek image.

The reader is blatantly introduced to this computerised, magic, world: "What will happen? What can happen? I'm not expecting something magical, that's impossible." "Could this be magical?" "It heats up and glows green." I used the same description in my own magical fantasy, perhaps subconsciously we all associate green with magical temporal change.

The creating objects and filling up his bank account is a little hint of comedy that we might expect anyone to be tempted by. Look no further than Patreon, everyone wants to make a buck out of nothing.

By chapter three, other people pop up, "the two wizards jump in surprise,..." two women whose conversation he over hears. But shouldnt that be witches? I thought wizards were male? Still actresses are actors in this modern world so why not female wizards? "We are Mary and Nicole Farsight. We are on a mission to investigate the suspicious Mana readings coming from this area. We are from the Central Magic Agency." Is this comedy? Without a doubt, by now I'm convinced, let's face it, that line about the CMA has to make you smile.

Chapter Five we're getting Mertipoints and crystals and are really in the game. This Is a kind of geeky magic adventure which I'd say was for children except for the profanity. You know, like one of those kids stories with adult stuff that goes over the kids heads, but the parents can appreciate. It's a clever story full of comedy, almost, if not completely, a parody of itself.

RicksySnowy
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Interesting take on semi-litrpg

Reviewed at: Chapter 13: Forced Vacation

Fast paced action story. Gets quickly from point A to point without much fluff weighing it down. A few grammatical mistakes here and there but nothing deal breaking. The world is well realized and has an unique identity. The MC is quite fun but a douche. Just the way I like it. Feels like in prologue stage setting up a grander story. Can hardly wait for the future.