The Precipice of Power

The Precipice of Power

by Nameless32

This story is dropped. I'm sorry.

In short: Weak to strong, but there's always someone stronger. Wholesome twins try to navigate a cruel and selfish world. 

When a mystic has reached the peak of their world’s growth, they are able to ascend, leaving it behind in favor of a higher, more potent plane. Since the dawn of existence, ambitious prodigies have pushed the boundary of what seems possible, ascending beyond countless worlds in search of the peak.

Hong Tang Kiro… is not one of those geniuses. However, his twin sister just might be. Secluded on a border world and selected for their talent in fire mana, the siblings are unknowing participants of a centuries-long experiment, hosted by a powerful eccentric on the verge of immortality. Follow the twins as they learn of and attempt to escape their predicament, before venturing out into the wider world(s).

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Not really anything special yet.

Reviewed at: 9 - The Blessings of Youth

It truly is too early to say anything about this story and which direction it will take. But here are my thoughts about it.

Overall it has a nice start already introducing the MCs and how their whole world is a lie.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

The style is alright, chapter 0 also has a strong start.

The grammar had no problems, there hasn't been any filler storywise yet and everything has been building our world, and the characters are also fine. Not much to say about them, as their interactions have been few as of now.

All in all, a nice start. But there are way too many positive reviews even though this isn't anything special yet. This story also can go either way, becoming top on trending and going to the best rated section, or either having becoming boring and being forgotten after trending. As of now, if this doesn't become more exciting(in some way) soon, I will most likely drop it. I will read at least another dozen chapters or so until I decide about that dropping part though.

VMJaskiernia
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Amazing Xianxia with great worldbuilding and characters. I read the original and I liked it, and I'm reading the rewrite with delight. You can definitely see that the author is getting better, and he was great to begin with.

I love Kiro and his situation just makes me feel for him. You root for him right from the start, and it's going to be great to see him grow and become strong.

Grammar and prose is great, characters excellent, style good. Go read it and support the author.

strand VV
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Great and awesome start.

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

This story follows a normal cultivation genre but is an extraordinary story so far, even though it has 4 chapter which I felt I read in 5 seconds.

Since the story itself is top notch, What I would want if I wanted it to be better would be making it more realistic, I am talking in the sense where if an actual world like this existed, people would not go shouting their names or giving a full explanation on what they intend to do, since individual power is easy to comr in hand, it is bound to be very cruel, where kindness to strangers could actually mean death. This is just my 5 cents on the topic. 

 

Just a notice, the story by the time I am writing this is 20 pages so I cant actually fully delve into a review when not much was seen, that would not be doing it justice.

 

The style befitted the story theme of cultivation masterfully done, while the grammar accompanying it was clean.

The story as I implied is a page turner, I read through them without realizing I actually read the 4.

The characters were all fleshed out from the beginning with all of them having distinct characters from each other. 

DrAlt
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Unfocused With Too Many Perspectives

Reviewed at: 9 - The Blessings of Youth

My impression is that this story is very unfocused.  Shuffling perspective characters in nine chapters means I don't know who the main character is even supposed to be.  Is it the saint Aer looking for apprentices, or maybe either the brother who is the clan's downtrodden yet budding alchemist?  Is it the sister who is heir to the clan?  I don't think it is the trouble causing supervisor Ba, but it'd be a great suprise if it was her.  Or could it be one of the young lovers, the male who got burned for looking beyond his station?  Maybe it's the obsessed woman who starred in chapter nine?  

I feel like any of these people could be focused on and used to tell a good story... but trying to tell all their stories at once has left me a sense that everything is jumbled and messy.  So while I liked the way most scenes went, they are not coming together well as a story.

KrazeKode
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Wholesome XianXia! Too OP!

Reviewed at: 13 - Together

This is an unusual review from me as I don't really make these unless the story is out of its first few legs BUT, this one deserves it. I see too much potential here to not make a review and from where I am so far, it looks promising. 

We start with the premise of a mana-less child shunned by his family as a failure while his sister is hailed as a prodigy but they both have a good relationship and are forced apart by their families as they are forced to watch each other struggle from afar in their own ways. I 

Style: I haven't read this style a lot in XianXia but so far, I'm digging it. The story starts GREAT and pulls me right in. The tension and reveals area all extremely well done. There is a bit of edit needed in a few chapters but I am willing to overlook it and give a five star, the wholesome is too strong for me not to. 

Story: An interesting premise of an underdog but instead of the story revolving around the underdog it also revolves around his prodigy sister! And they are very close to boot! Plus as we go ahead more and more characters come out that actually have the depth to them. It somehow manages to keep the traditional xianxia appeal while also removing the flat and mindless face slapping that plagued it. The cultivation system is extremely interesting as well and I see a lot of long term potential here. Grammar: nothing much to say here except its great, no major flaws that I noticed and the text flows smoothly.

Characters: THIS is WHY I read this. The characters, I can rant about how much I love them or I can simply tell you TO READ THE HELL OUT OF THIS. If you are a XianXia reader and want something great while also having a little depth and flavor in characters' interactions then stop. Take a deep breath, AND READ THIS! I cannot stress enough how interesting I see this fiction becoming. 

Special bit: The author notes were too wholesome to not mention. A sprinkle of wholesome over a wholesome feast of a fic. I'm sold, plz take my money and gimme more.

TL;DR Go read it its great!

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Hurry it up, next chapter!!!

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

Seriously! there just isn't enough of this gem. Not bragging, but I've probably read a truckload of cultivation novels, and despite their addictiveness, there are a sizable number of things that frustrate me about them. While it's too early to pass on a proper judgement on the story, I haven't noticed any of those elements in it yet...

The prose flows really well with the story, bar a few instances where I found some wordings a bit unsuitable, with no noticeable grammatical errors, this one just drew me right in with its distinct and likeable characters and intriguing story...

So now I'm just waiting for more chapters to gobble up...

(This goes without saying, but all above are my opinions and mine only)

Traitorman
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There's a lot to be said for the basics. A lot of stories can get caught on twists, subversions, and attempts to re-invent the wheel.

Precipice of Power falls into none of those traps. What we have here is the opening to what feels like an epic western fantasy adventure story delightfully fused with the setting of fine Xianxia. A unique system of cultivation is present - one that doesn't overwhelm you with numbers out of the gate. Instead we're provided with simple titles that allow you to slip into the system.

Style
Nameless has a fine style here, one that focuses on smoothly conveying information but with a growing amount of poetic flourishes. Some of them could be placed a little better, but it's clear that Nameless style is improving with the later chapters.

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No issues that I detected, and if there are any they will not distract you from the story.

Story
I am enjoying so far. It's a fun, back to basiucs fantasy-xianxia adventure against a bloated caste system. I can't wait to see how the characters work to overcome their trials.

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The good guys are likable: sweet, even. The villains, however, are quite detestable. Only issue is that sometimes the dialogue feels a little stilted.

[Note as of chapter 11 that the characters have deepened and feel more natural. I got sucked in completely and - as such - am upgrading the character score to 5]

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This is fantastic. If you like stories with the vibe of Avatar - like I do - then you'll like this. Can't wait to watch it grow!

Drakaos
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Power Obsessed Idiots

Reviewed at: 8 - Unraveling

I've made it all the way up to chapter 8 and all I can say is... every other character in the story is a power-obsessed idiot.

It's absurd, I understand that in some way, this is supposed to be a satire of a traditional Xianxia novel, but this is way too much. Out of all the characters introduced, maybe 30% of them have an IQ above a snowball. At some point, you have to wonder, how are these people still alive? Their society is a complete mess, and with how easily people are offended, I'm surprised that there are even enough people alive to even form a society. As much as I like a good xianxia satire, this is too much. Everyone except the main character and a couple of people around him are braindead, and some bullsh*t concept of "Power is everything", isn't going to make this story bearable.

The author seems to be a decent writer, but really, you could have done a better job with worldbuilding and character design.

Tejoka
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Cultivators can be nice, too ... some of them.

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

This was a good story so far, and I have high hopes for the future. It's definitely xianxia, although not the same as the typical translated novel.

Style: Quite good. The story is written in third person POV with different viewpoints. A few times, I found the wording a bit awkward, but that might just be the genre and its conventions. But otherwise, it flows nicely.

Grammar: Good, I didn't notice any mistakes. Great job.

Story: It has only started so far, but the beginning shows a lot of promise. The world is shown well, especially the society of the clan, although there's never much explanation of it.  A little more worldbuilding might improve it, but it's not really necessary. The story is paced well, and it steadily builds tension, connecting various characters' perspectives.

On another note, while I can see how the story is 'wholesome', there's quite a bit of violence, including child abuse in the prologue. Just wanted to mention that in case someone has an issue with that sort of thing.

Characters: Honestly, this is the weakest point in my opinion, although that doesn't mean much. The characters are described pretty well, but they feel a little flat. Granted, this is only the beginning, and there's a lot of room for character development. I'd think teenagers with a backstory like the twins might have more issues, but maybe it's just their coping mechanisms. In any case, none of them are really unrealistic, and it's not a huge issue.

Overall, this story is off to a very good start. It feels like a classic fantasy, and at the same time a subversion of the genre. If you like fantasy, especially cultivation, give it a try.

Pukas O
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Moral Characters in Xiaxia???

Reviewed at: 8 - Unraveling

It is very rare to see actually moral characters in a xiaxia story and this story doesn't have just one but multiple! Multiple characters that don't just kill whoever threatens them and their family and friends without thought. The immortal mentor figure even does something to help someone of lower cultivation TO THEIR OWN DETRIMENT! Woah crazy right?? It's extremely refreshing!