The Precipice of Power

by Nameless32

This story is dropped. I'm sorry.

In short: Weak to strong, but there's always someone stronger. Wholesome twins try to navigate a cruel and selfish world. 

When a mystic has reached the peak of their world’s growth, they are able to ascend, leaving it behind in favor of a higher, more potent plane. Since the dawn of existence, ambitious prodigies have pushed the boundary of what seems possible, ascending beyond countless worlds in search of the peak.

Hong Tang Kiro… is not one of those geniuses. However, his twin sister just might be. Secluded on a border world and selected for their talent in fire mana, the siblings are unknowing participants of a centuries-long experiment, hosted by a powerful eccentric on the verge of immortality. Follow the twins as they learn of and attempt to escape their predicament, before venturing out into the wider world(s).

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HashBrown
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Style: 5/5

I gave it 5 star because even though I prefer 1st person perspective, the 3rd person style of this story is well-executed and written. I also like the pacing and how long each chapter is (some say that it's on the short side but for me, it's just on the right side). Also, the worldbuilding isn't heavy to follow and the story keeps on getting interesting as you progress.

Grammar: 5/5

Nothing too much to note so yeah...5 stars

Story: 5/5

The story is interesting. At first, I'm just interested in Kiro's improvement but as I continue reading, I also got intrigued on Seira's growth too. The story folllows the adventures of the two so I gave it a 5 star.

Character: 5/5

I like the twins character and I also like how the story didn't introduced too much characters in the early chapters. That's my problem to some stories I've read here in RR and reading this fiction like this made me give it a 5 star.

Over-all, it's 5 stars too me until chapter 10. Looking forward on how will this story unfold.

Orphiex
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From the start, there's a feeling that this story has a direction and is heading there with a will. The story seems to meander at first, shifting between the protagonist and several closely-linked deuteragonists, but it feels like it's picking up speed; in fact, it feels more like a published novel which has had its chapters split up into smaller excerpts. It's well-written, the characters are showing some good depth and development, and overall I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Auraptor
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Excellent Xianxia Entry

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

Being fairly new to RoyalRoad, I'm not familiar with a lot of its genres and Xianxia is one such genre. I've heard many negative things about it, such as how it's all just power fantasy with unlikable protagonists.

Fortunately, this story breaks all these stereotypes.

The characters, be it Kiro with his mistreatment by the clan or Rynn with his forbidden love, all have very human struggles. Even Kiro's talented twin sister Seira has it far from easy, given that she has her very own set of societal expectations to deal with.

This is, I think, going to be one of those cultivation stories, but one where we just want Kiro to become stronger. Right from the beginning, I might add because the author doesn't take very long to get the story started.

The plot is also well-put-together. Multiple POVs are seamlessly woven together through a unifying theme (how the clan treats people on the basis of power). I've seen some people wish for more meat in the worldbuilding which I can kinda understand, but ultimately, I think keeping the story/prose in motion is more important. I'm sure we'll get to know the world as the story goes on.

Finally, I think the author's prose style is perfectly suited for web fiction. Neither confusing, nor patronizingly simple, nor filled with tedious exposition dumps.

Whether you're a diehard Xianxia fan or a newcomer, I think this story has something for all of us.

frostwolf86
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I rather enjoyed this. I'm not one for many words, but I will say that this is worth the time to read. It's a great story, I'm looking forward to reading more. The characters are great, there are some you can even relate too, being on the weak side of the spectrum. The villains (that old lady) are great, it's easy to dislike them. They are not one dimensional, but have real motivations.

My words can't do this story justice. I suggest you stop reading the reviews and read it. Are you still reading this review? Seriously, stop, go, read it. You'll enjoy it.

John Fong
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Thunderbolt, but also Cozy Fantasy

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

When it comes to Xianxia and Wuxia, I'm inherently biased since I am an avid consumer of the media, straight from the source. I'm the kind of guy who read Condor Heroes twelve times when he was a kid. In Chinese.

So naturally, this makes me the old and grouchy shifu archetype, bashing all the youngin's for not being as good as things were in the olde days.

But this? There isn't exactly enough for me to give a full blast review since there's basically only 20 pages of introduction/beginning by the time I'm writing this review, but that's more than good enough.

Although the prose could use some improvement and the story is a little unclear at the moment (hence the slight dinks in story, grammar, and style), that's my old rusty and droll bones showing. Don't let an old man get in the way of your cozy Xianxia fun.

This is a promising start to a good story, and I'm interested in seeing where it goes.

Jon Wander
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I WISH MORE XINXIA FICTION WAS LIKE THIS

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

I put off reading this for too long. If you've been around here you may have been burned by stories in this genre as well.

Put those fears to rest, this is a well crafted, highly enjoyable story with actual good guys as well as villanous bad guys and an entertaining struggle between them. 

The plot is intersting, well-paced, and has a fresh feel to it.

The writing style flows well and has a way of making you go 'just a bit more' again and again.

The characters are well done, as someone with a twin sister that's always a nice relationship to see portrayed well. People are rootable, hatable and various forms of in-between as appropriate.

In summary: If you like xinxia, want to try xinxia, or want to refresh your enjoyment of the genre. Read this and be happy.

CoCop
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cultivation but with characters you care about

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

This is a rewrite of a cultivation novel that I greatly enjoyed the first time.  It's better.  It has all of the tropes you come to expect with the genre- unfair worlds where strength rules all, alchemy, and mysterious masters, but it does it with a light enough hand that they don't FEEL overdone.  It's a little early in the story's development, but it has more than enough potential to follow at this stage.

Style
The story does a good job of advancing hte plot with alternativing third person points of view.  There were one or two spots where things went a TAD too fast and it got a little confusing, but beyond that pacing, word choice and tone are all very good.

Grammar
I didn't notice any mistakes.  They might be there, but they didn't jump out at me.

Story
Right now we're just in the foundations of the novel.  We're spending more time learning who the characters are and what the world is than we are watching them DO things.  That's the only reason for the half star ding- nothing has happened yet but that isn't a bad thing.

Character
I liked the characters in the first iteration and I love them now.  They feel real as I read them and I'm interested in each of their goals, struggles, and trials.  If this story follows the pattern of the original, that will be the focus going forward and I'm looking forward to it.

Montizuma59
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Good potential, horrible pacing

Reviewed at: 14 - A Saint's Arrival

The story is great, all characters are great, and in general, it's very fun to read. Except, there a few BIG flaws that greatly hold it back  

The caching of the story is horrible. You reach chapter 10 and you feel like you barely read anything. At this point, it should feel like something should have happened in the story, but nothing has. 

Not only that, but the story has a tendency to spend long chapters on characters and events that are best just explained in a paragraph or two. Half the chapter, maybe, given the length of these chapters. 

Two examples of this are the clan matriarch's story, and Rynn's story. The matriarch's story could have been cut down by a lot. We did not need to know everything about her past. The only thing we don't know about her is what happened in her birth and childhood.

Spoiler: Spoiler

The story is great, but the author really needs to get to the -point quicker. 

Laika
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Shoutout To Wholesome Content

Reviewed at: 12 - A Mother's Love

So, true story, I haven't actually read any cultivation stories before this one.  And wow!  It's great for a first-timer to cut their teeth on the trappings of the genre.

The worldbuilding is lovely and detailed, while the characters are eager and raw.  Wholesome doesn't even begin to describe the bond between the main siblings.  Even sixty-some pages in, the Saint stands above everyone as a unique figure - likely one with connotations that a genre-savvy reader would better understand and appreciate.

The grammar is excellent and the dialogue conveys the scenes so naturally!  Epistolary interjections - or, to be less pretentious, when the author chooses to have characters exchange notes - keep the reader entertained while delivering a ton of information.

I'm hooked, and I cannot wait to learn more about the genre through this fantastic story.

George Haufman
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Overall: the story's setting seems to fit the narrative and the characters interact very believably. Aside from some minor pacing issues at the start, I thoroughly enjoyed the progress the plot was making each chapter.

Style: Third person omniscient narration fits the novel well. It let's you really get into the thoughts and feelings of the charcters

Story:
So far seems like a pretty page-turning start to a great xuanhuan. The plot seems to always be progressing forward at a believable pace, which makes it a pleasurable read.

Grammar: nothing too noticeable so I'd say its good grammar!

Character: The characterization is very well done, bravo author. I look forward to the twins' relationship developing more!