The Precipice of Power

by Nameless32

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Female Lead High Fantasy Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Multiple Lead Characters Wuxia Xianxia

In short: Weak to strong, but there's always someone stronger. Wholesome twins try to navigate a cruel and selfish world. 

(Book 1 already written in rough draft form. Will be releasing edited/rewritten chapters 2 days a week, but a lot more currently because I'm on trending)

When a mystic has reached the peak of their world’s growth, they are able to ascend, leaving it behind in favor of a higher, more potent plane. Since the dawn of existence, ambitious prodigies have pushed the boundary of what seems possible, ascending beyond countless worlds in search of the peak.

Hong Tang Kiro… is not one of those geniuses. However, his twin sister just might be. Secluded on a border world and selected for their talent in fire mana, the siblings are unknowing participants of a centuries-long experiment, hosted by a powerful eccentric on the verge of immortality. Follow the twins as they learn of and attempt to escape their predicament, before venturing out into the wider world(s).

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Also, huge thanks to Fuyu Dust and Dragon of Rochester for cover stuff! :D

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Characters with Character

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

We definitely hit the ground running here, getting immediately thrust into the action with our main man Kiro have to deal with a sticky situation. What follows is a nice bit of worldbuilding woven into the text, not just laid out bare like some instruction manual. It makes for a good intro to the rest of the story.

I've been liking the style so far. There's enough description to give you an idea about whats going on, but the author keeps concise enough that you don't get bored. The pacing has been good and the story flows well as your reading it. I haven't run into any text that has me confused about what's happening.

Grammar is good, I haven't noticed any issues. Gotta say that's a breath of fresh air when reading a Xianxia.

The story has been good so far, we've met a few characters that all seem to have their own things going on, but are clearly linked. We've already had some nice story hooks baited and goals the characters are working towards laid out in a way that feels natural. I'm looking forward to seeing how things develop.

I'm liking the characters we've met so far. They clearly have their own voice, and don't suffer from 'everyone sounds like the same person' syndrome.  So far, it seems like Kiro is not going to fall into the role of the stereotypical Xianxia protagonist. Namely, an amoral 'might makes right' character who commits atrocities and is praised as a hero for them. It looks like our enthusiastic cast has an actual set of morals, which I am always grateful to see in a story. Most Xianxia turn me off of them because their main protagonists fail the basic decency check. This one does not seem to be heading that direction.

Overall, I'm drawn in and can't wait to see where this story leads. I'll definitely be following this one!

JDFister
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Read this story and ascend into another world!

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

Style: The author writes with maturety, varying both sentence length and word choice so that no scene ever feels flat. The splashes of italics here and there to accentuate certain things or give a feel of voice to the narration is masterfully done. You can tell right away this is an experienced writer.

Character: I found these characters to be emotionally resonant. They're very driven and high on the proactivity scale which makes them likeable. Interaction between characters also helps drive interest to keep reading. The back and forth banter between Seira and Kiro while they're putting a meal together for instance just felt natural and was a great way of developing characters through dialogue.

Grammar: A few things here and there, but only minor complaints that don't leave you confused or lost. Very clean.

Story: This is the stand-out. World-building is a clear strength. There are just so many meticulous elements of this world assembled with such care to craft a high fantasy that takes you away to a different place. The magic system that extends the common idea of auras into a physical force, the caste system, the manifestation of the soul. You learn the titles of all these different classes of people and you're constantly being taught the ins and outs of this world, but if you stick with it you'll find the effort is worth it.

Kamikoto
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Boy, oh boy, oh boy. This story has everything!

Reviewed at: 8 - Unraveling

Whew, I've been reading some good stories recently and the last one started with an exceptional intro. So did this. I have never read cultivation, at least not that I know of, but damn. This be good. (Lucky my parents stuck to words most of the time.)

Grammar: Very clean, didn't spot anything wrong. Though that could be due to how good the story and characters are.

Style: I didn't expect much going in but this brought me back. The only stories I have been reading recently have been LNs and WNs, for maybe over a year now. This gave me flashbacks to reading the chronicles of ancient darkness series. In my opinion, that's a great thing. I absolutely love this style, the flow, the prose. Everything. It's great. Also pushing me to start updating my own prose from LN type prose to a bit more detailed.

Story: Wowsers. I haven't actually read a xianxia or wuxia before, maybe that one isekai that may have technically been one bu yeah, never. But wowsers. When I read the casual mention of nipping to another world to get some potion, I... I don't even know. I just know it tightened its grip on me, cementing me as a reader who shall read every chapter. 

The classic rank system. Any guesses why I chose the word classic? 'Casue it ain't generic, but amazing! Accompanied by the other world-building, it creates such a deep world. Knowing that there are thousands of people each with their own class, probably higher than our good friend Kiro, makes me tense every time we are meet some. Every time a new character appears it makes you tense, waiting to see what rank they are. 

Also, alchemy! I used to think 'meh' to alchemy as a kid, but I definitely appreciate it a lot more, though it can still feel grindy. And the very few bits of alchemy I have read have carried the same feeling of 'grindy', yet this doesn't!

Characters: Still wondering why a few of them are assholes but I quite like the most of them. Saint, suns, braves. We have a whole slew of characters a slew of different ranks. This makes each character's first meetings amazing, a reason on its own to read tbh. 

Now with all that said, I'll add that I'm definitely hooked. Can't wait to read more and see more of the characters. Excellent stuff, namless!!

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An Absolutely Perfect start to an Colossal Epic!

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

As soon as you start diving into the prologue, you'll instantly be hit by more feels than you could possibly handle, and if you were raised by Asian parents, you might get gobsmacked by that childhood PTSD...

Style - It's a pretty standard 3rd person POV, the prose is good and jumps back and forth between characters and even time in a way that's pretty simple and easy to follow. As long as you're actually reading it, I doubt you'd be confused, the author does good word jumping between 3 and a half plot lines (twins is kinda 1.5, Rynn, and Aer), all interconnected by this asshole of a supervisor called Ba.

Grammar - Spotless, couldn't spot anything wrong, nothing I would really want to change either.

Story - As I've mentioned before, the story, as of chap 7, follows 3.5 plots around, and they're done in a way that's not at all confusing and you'll kind of get the gist of what the author is going towards. I've read the previous version of the story, and if it does follow a similar plotline, then the 3.5 plots will converge, and we'll definitely be in for a treat!

Character - 7 chapters in, and surprisingly, the characters are very well established. Although we're still left to wonder how some of the characters became the assholes they are, we're already introduced to their basic traits, their main goals, and the struggles they face.

Despite the short few chapters we have at the moment, I already feel heartfelt derision for a few of the 'villains' of the story, which is in a feat of itself, props to the author, so as of this moment, I really can't wait for them to suffer and die, which, besides the excellent story and great MCs, will definitely be a motivating factor in me reading this further, :P.

Origin, The Creator
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I had a couple of older sisters growing up and a few younger sisters as well. The beginning of this story... it really brought back memories of a different time. I connected with that alone so wholly that I binged the entirety in less than 30 minutes. I saw the cultivation theme, and that's not really my thing, and then was very pleasantly surprised that my preconceived notions were set to the wayside. I'm very impressed- like very, very impressed- and I can't wait to get more. Your style is very smooth and I only saw a mistake from time to time. The society you've created is incorporated so seamlessly that it boggled my mind with how easy it was to understand. Your chronology is very interesting and is well done. You pull off the multi-pov very well. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story with a of us!

John Fong
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Thunderbolt, but also Cozy Fantasy

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

When it comes to Xianxia and Wuxia, I'm inherently biased since I am an avid consumer of the media, straight from the source. I'm the kind of guy who read Condor Heroes twelve times when he was a kid. In Chinese.

So naturally, this makes me the old and grouchy shifu archetype, bashing all the youngin's for not being as good as things were in the olde days.

But this? There isn't exactly enough for me to give a full blast review since there's basically only 20 pages of introduction/beginning by the time I'm writing this review, but that's more than good enough.

Although the prose could use some improvement and the story is a little unclear at the moment (hence the slight dinks in story, grammar, and style), that's my old rusty and droll bones showing. Don't let an old man get in the way of your cozy Xianxia fun.

This is a promising start to a good story, and I'm interested in seeing where it goes.

Tejoka
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Cultivators can be nice, too ... some of them.

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

This was a good story so far, and I have high hopes for the future. It's definitely xianxia, although not the same as the typical translated novel.

Style: Quite good. The story is written in third person POV with different viewpoints. A few times, I found the wording a bit awkward, but that might just be the genre and its conventions. But otherwise, it flows nicely.

Grammar: Good, I didn't notice any mistakes. Great job.

Story: It has only started so far, but the beginning shows a lot of promise. The world is shown well, especially the society of the clan, although there's never much explanation of it.  A little more worldbuilding might improve it, but it's not really necessary. The story is paced well, and it steadily builds tension, connecting various characters' perspectives.

On another note, while I can see how the story is 'wholesome', there's quite a bit of violence, including child abuse in the prologue. Just wanted to mention that in case someone has an issue with that sort of thing.

Characters: Honestly, this is the weakest point in my opinion, although that doesn't mean much. The characters are described pretty well, but they feel a little flat. Granted, this is only the beginning, and there's a lot of room for character development. I'd think teenagers with a backstory like the twins might have more issues, but maybe it's just their coping mechanisms. In any case, none of them are really unrealistic, and it's not a huge issue.

Overall, this story is off to a very good start. It feels like a classic fantasy, and at the same time a subversion of the genre. If you like fantasy, especially cultivation, give it a try.

I Don't Bite...
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Hurry it up, next chapter!!!

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

Seriously! there just isn't enough of this gem. Not bragging, but I've probably read a truckload of cultivation novels, and despite their addictiveness, there are a sizable number of things that frustrate me about them. While it's too early to pass on a proper judgement on the story, I haven't noticed any of those elements in it yet...

The prose flows really well with the story, bar a few instances where I found some wordings a bit unsuitable, with no noticeable grammatical errors, this one just drew me right in with its distinct and likeable characters and intriguing story...

So now I'm just waiting for more chapters to gobble up...

(This goes without saying, but all above are my opinions and mine only)

Kerma B
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This is the first cultivation story I've ever read, and I won't be surprised if it spoiled me for all to follow. There's a lot of good stuff already - a great sibling relationship, mysterious Saints, forbidden love and intrigue - and it's only at a little over ten thousands words as I write this.

But let's start at the beginning :

Story: The prologue manages, in just a few hundred words, to introduce two protagonists, show a bit about their relationship, raise the stakes for them, and provide a clear, logical goal for one of them to strive for - in short, it made me care about Kiro and Seira. It doesn't feel unnecessary, either, as so many prologues do, and it flows smoothly into the first chapter - which feels like a mirror of the prologue, but with a twist - and from there on onwards.

We aren't deep into the story yet, but so far, it's all believable and engaging. As someone who is new to this genre, I am missing a little bit of world building. Seasoned readers in Cultivation novels might disagree, but I could use a few more explanations. 

Style: No complaints, really. It's well written, and easy to read. 

The grammar is good. I didn't notice any typos, either. 

The characters is where I'm really divided. The twin's introduction is great, as I wrote before, and it gripped me right away. However, a part of me wondered, in the following chapters, how someone with their kind of childhood turned out mostly normal. Especially, since nearly everyone around them seems to be - let's go with less than kind. But then again, we're only at the very beginning of the journey. Clearly, there is more to come and much more to be revealed about their past. 

Overall: I cannot rate this against other cultivation stories, as I have never read one before. But I can say that this is a very good story, regardless of its genre. I'll be sure to keep it on my list to come back to. 

Kraze Kode
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Wholesome XianXia! Too OP!

Reviewed at: 13 - Together

This is an unusual review from me as I don't really make these unless the story is out of its first few legs BUT, this one deserves it. I see too much potential here to not make a review and from where I am so far, it looks promising. 

We start with the premise of a mana-less child shunned by his family as a failure while his sister is hailed as a prodigy but they both have a good relationship and are forced apart by their families as they are forced to watch each other struggle from afar in their own ways. I 

Style: I haven't read this style a lot in XianXia but so far, I'm digging it. The story starts GREAT and pulls me right in. The tension and reveals area all extremely well done. There is a bit of edit needed in a few chapters but I am willing to overlook it and give a five star, the wholesome is too strong for me not to. 

Story: An interesting premise of an underdog but instead of the story revolving around the underdog it also revolves around his prodigy sister! And they are very close to boot! Plus as we go ahead more and more characters come out that actually have the depth to them. It somehow manages to keep the traditional xianxia appeal while also removing the flat and mindless face slapping that plagued it. The cultivation system is extremely interesting as well and I see a lot of long term potential here. Grammar: nothing much to say here except its great, no major flaws that I noticed and the text flows smoothly.

Characters: THIS is WHY I read this. The characters, I can rant about how much I love them or I can simply tell you TO READ THE HELL OUT OF THIS. If you are a XianXia reader and want something great while also having a little depth and flavor in characters' interactions then stop. Take a deep breath, AND READ THIS! I cannot stress enough how interesting I see this fiction becoming. 

Special bit: The author notes were too wholesome to not mention. A sprinkle of wholesome over a wholesome feast of a fic. I'm sold, plz take my money and gimme more.

TL;DR Go read it its great!