The Precipice of Power

by Nameless32

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In short: Weak to strong, but there's always someone stronger. Wholesome twins try to navigate a cruel and selfish world. 

When a mystic has reached the peak of their world’s growth, they are able to ascend, leaving it behind in favor of a higher, more potent plane. Since the dawn of existence, ambitious prodigies have pushed the boundary of what seems possible, ascending beyond countless worlds in search of the peak.

Hong Tang Kiro… is not one of those geniuses. However, his twin sister just might be. Secluded on a border world and selected for their talent in fire mana, the siblings are unknowing participants of a centuries-long experiment, hosted by a powerful eccentric on the verge of immortality. Follow the twins as they learn of and attempt to escape their predicament, before venturing out into the wider world(s).

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Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

We definitely hit the ground running here, getting immediately thrust into the action with our main man Kiro have to deal with a sticky situation. What follows is a nice bit of worldbuilding woven into the text, not just laid out bare like some instruction manual. It makes for a good intro to the rest of the story.

I've been liking the style so far. There's enough description to give you an idea about whats going on, but the author keeps concise enough that you don't get bored. The pacing has been good and the story flows well as your reading it. I haven't run into any text that has me confused about what's happening.

Grammar is good, I haven't noticed any issues. Gotta say that's a breath of fresh air when reading a Xianxia.

The story has been good so far, we've met a few characters that all seem to have their own things going on, but are clearly linked. We've already had some nice story hooks baited and goals the characters are working towards laid out in a way that feels natural. I'm looking forward to seeing how things develop.

I'm liking the characters we've met so far. They clearly have their own voice, and don't suffer from 'everyone sounds like the same person' syndrome.  So far, it seems like Kiro is not going to fall into the role of the stereotypical Xianxia protagonist. Namely, an amoral 'might makes right' character who commits atrocities and is praised as a hero for them. It looks like our enthusiastic cast has an actual set of morals, which I am always grateful to see in a story. Most Xianxia turn me off of them because their main protagonists fail the basic decency check. This one does not seem to be heading that direction.

Overall, I'm drawn in and can't wait to see where this story leads. I'll definitely be following this one!

J Pal
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I'll preface this review by saying: I'm not a fan of cultivation stories. The whole 'saving face' element and honour doesn't sit well with me. The power scaling part is fun but the social aspect of it just rubs me the wrong way. I ended up reading Precipice of Power for a review exchange and I'm glad I did because what I found is a pleasant surprise.

Don't get me wrong. Like all cultivation-based stories, this has the annoying social tropes with the protagonist being on the wrong side of it, but it's very well balanced. It's his own parent doing the dickish treatment while the rest of the world(mostly) is compassionate. 

Best of all, our dear protagonist isn't cultivator(at the start of the story, at least) but an alchemist and passionate about his craft. I'm a sucket for crafter protagonists (I mean look at what I'm writing). Throw in some beautiful sibling love, and the first part of the story is rather touching.

There isn't enough substance to the story(yet) so its too early to make a call but I the author's writing style, grammar and characters give me confidence. It feels like he knows what he is doing and I look forward to seeing where the tale is heading.

P.S.: Someone decapitate the mother. Please. As a lowly Sun, such pleasures are out of my reach.

Unintelligent Donkey
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An Absolutely Perfect start to an Colossal Epic!

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

As soon as you start diving into the prologue, you'll instantly be hit by more feels than you could possibly handle, and if you were raised by Asian parents, you might get gobsmacked by that childhood PTSD...

Style - It's a pretty standard 3rd person POV, the prose is good and jumps back and forth between characters and even time in a way that's pretty simple and easy to follow. As long as you're actually reading it, I doubt you'd be confused, the author does good word jumping between 3 and a half plot lines (twins is kinda 1.5, Rynn, and Aer), all interconnected by this asshole of a supervisor called Ba.

Grammar - Spotless, couldn't spot anything wrong, nothing I would really want to change either.

Story - As I've mentioned before, the story, as of chap 7, follows 3.5 plots around, and they're done in a way that's not at all confusing and you'll kind of get the gist of what the author is going towards. I've read the previous version of the story, and if it does follow a similar plotline, then the 3.5 plots will converge, and we'll definitely be in for a treat!

Character - 7 chapters in, and surprisingly, the characters are very well established. Although we're still left to wonder how some of the characters became the assholes they are, we're already introduced to their basic traits, their main goals, and the struggles they face.

Despite the short few chapters we have at the moment, I already feel heartfelt derision for a few of the 'villains' of the story, which is in a feat of itself, props to the author, so as of this moment, I really can't wait for them to suffer and die, which, besides the excellent story and great MCs, will definitely be a motivating factor in me reading this further, :P.

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Right off the bat, the story pulls you in. You're introduced to the two main characters in a gritty and heart-wrenching way, which instantly makes you care for them.

I find the style very appealing. Not only is the prose and diction suited to the setting, it all flows well. Sentences are just the right length, and you hardly ever feel something is out of place. Easy 5/5.

The story is still unfolding, but I can tell that it's going somewhere amazing. The amount of thought Nameless has put into this novel is clear to see, and that tells me this is going to be one of Royal Road's gems.

Grammar? Perfect. Unless you're an English professor who dives into the greatest detail of every sentence, you should have no problems regarding this.

Characters are fleshed out and believable. Listen, if you can make me fall in love with a character, you've already won in my eyes. I love Seira. Her actions, her mannerisms, the way she speaks, everything. It feels real. That goes for every character as well, and that should speak volumes for the author's skill when it comes to dialogue and the likes.

I'm not the biggest fan of Xianxia novels, but my goodness, if more were like this, I would be.

Read it or else.

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Bad Things Happen To Good People

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

Note: I'd written this review when this story was still part of its pre-rewrite version. Pasting it here for the new story page.

This story is really something special. It's a xianxia, through and through, but one that attempts to put some new spins on tired tropes, and thus far, it succeeds in this endeavor. Instead of a cold-hearted, abusive protagonist, here we have a brother-sister duo who care deeply for each other, trying to make it in a terrifyingly brutal world. The juxtaposition between their characters and the side characters' more typical xianxia personalities makes for a shocking contrast, one that would go completely unnoticed in more standard takes on the genre.

 Characters

This is the real strong suit of this story. Kiro and Seira are believable, compelling protagonists who you just can't help but feel for. Thrown into a brutal world and treated like objects by their own mother, they support each other perfectly, shining like diamonds in the rough. Luckily their mentor is a similarly-minded character, which is really exciting to see! It makes for a stark contrast with the rest of their clan, who can be summarized as: scum. I'm eagerly looking forward to the demise of their mother along with the clan matriarch. Solid cast of protagonists, antagonists, and side characters. Easily 5/5.

Grammar

Really good! There are a couple of minor mistakes here and there, but the author is quick to fix issues, which is excellent to see. Sentence construction and flow is among the upper tier of what you see on royal road!

Story

For me, it is the interaction between the cold-hearted killing machines who treat humans as tools, and the MCs, that make this story incredibly interesting. We grow to hate the antagonists. We begin to root for our protagonists, and hope that they grow past the evil machinations of their society. It makes for a gripping story, one that feels like it's just getting off the ground. The pacing may not be the fastest of all stories, but I guarantee it will hook you. Even as early as chapter 10, there are some bombshell reveals that all-but-guarantee your interest. That said, it is still early days, so the story's not quite there yet, hence the 4.5.

Style

There's not a lot of flourish going on here, but I think that is fine for this kind of a story. I especially enjoyed the on-genre analogies that are presented; they are very well done, and fit the narrative beautifully. 5/5.

 In summary, while things are still early days, the edited version of this story(haven't read the previous version) is definitely worth anyone's time. If you like xianxia and are tired of old tropes, try this for a breath of fresh air!

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Boy, oh boy, oh boy. This story has everything!

Reviewed at: 8 - Unraveling

Whew, I've been reading some good stories recently and the last one started with an exceptional intro. So did this. I have never read cultivation, at least not that I know of, but damn. This be good. (Lucky my parents stuck to words most of the time.)

Grammar: Very clean, didn't spot anything wrong. Though that could be due to how good the story and characters are.

Style: I didn't expect much going in but this brought me back. The only stories I have been reading recently have been LNs and WNs, for maybe over a year now. This gave me flashbacks to reading the chronicles of ancient darkness series. In my opinion, that's a great thing. I absolutely love this style, the flow, the prose. Everything. It's great. Also pushing me to start updating my own prose from LN type prose to a bit more detailed.

Story: Wowsers. I haven't actually read a xianxia or wuxia before, maybe that one isekai that may have technically been one bu yeah, never. But wowsers. When I read the casual mention of nipping to another world to get some potion, I... I don't even know. I just know it tightened its grip on me, cementing me as a reader who shall read every chapter. 

The classic rank system. Any guesses why I chose the word classic? 'Casue it ain't generic, but amazing! Accompanied by the other world-building, it creates such a deep world. Knowing that there are thousands of people each with their own class, probably higher than our good friend Kiro, makes me tense every time we are meet some. Every time a new character appears it makes you tense, waiting to see what rank they are. 

Also, alchemy! I used to think 'meh' to alchemy as a kid, but I definitely appreciate it a lot more, though it can still feel grindy. And the very few bits of alchemy I have read have carried the same feeling of 'grindy', yet this doesn't!

Characters: Still wondering why a few of them are assholes but I quite like the most of them. Saint, suns, braves. We have a whole slew of characters a slew of different ranks. This makes each character's first meetings amazing, a reason on its own to read tbh. 

Now with all that said, I'll add that I'm definitely hooked. Can't wait to read more and see more of the characters. Excellent stuff, namless!!

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Read this story and ascend into another world!

Reviewed at: 4 - A Saint

Style: The author writes with maturety, varying both sentence length and word choice so that no scene ever feels flat. The splashes of italics here and there to accentuate certain things or give a feel of voice to the narration is masterfully done. You can tell right away this is an experienced writer.

Character: I found these characters to be emotionally resonant. They're very driven and high on the proactivity scale which makes them likeable. Interaction between characters also helps drive interest to keep reading. The back and forth banter between Seira and Kiro while they're putting a meal together for instance just felt natural and was a great way of developing characters through dialogue.

Grammar: A few things here and there, but only minor complaints that don't leave you confused or lost. Very clean.

Story: This is the stand-out. World-building is a clear strength. There are just so many meticulous elements of this world assembled with such care to craft a high fantasy that takes you away to a different place. The magic system that extends the common idea of auras into a physical force, the caste system, the manifestation of the soul. You learn the titles of all these different classes of people and you're constantly being taught the ins and outs of this world, but if you stick with it you'll find the effort is worth it.

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Raised Separate, Still Close

Reviewed at: 7 - Weak

Don't let the relatively few chapters deter you from reading. Nameless has the beginnings of an excellent xianxia/cultivation world that immediately draws you in from the get go.

I'll start with the strongest part of the novel, the characters. They jump off the page with how cool and full of personality they are. The sibling dynamic between Kiro and Seira is really cool, you see that despite the struggles that get introduced in the first prologue chapter they have remained very close. Aer, the Saint, is just cool as hell and does whatever the hell they (she? I'm not so sure, they seem like a they to me.) want. Aer's intro chapter has to be one of the coolest OP character intros I've read so far. And the two least developed, imho, immediately define themselves in their short intro and get expanded on quickly in their standalone chapter. I can't wait to see how they will develop and grow. So I'll need Nameless to hurry up and post more chapters.

The story, so far, is sparse. But there are enough hints at a larger, more expansive Murim-inspired world of cultivation hijinks that I believe it's worth giving a 5. The bits and pieces that we get are enough to tickle the imagination and keep one sated until we get to enjoy the rest of the world.

Rolling grammar and style into one because I found no problems with either. The pacing is excellent and rarely, if at all, meanders. I consistently forgot I was reading a chapter because of how enjoyable the experience was. I spotted little to no grammatical problems that pulled me out of the reading experience. And the author has a tight command over their writing and is able to infuse a good amount of voice.

Overall, I can't wait to see what the future of The Precipice of Power looks like. I am biased as I am a fellow disciple of Fuyu Dust, who worked on my cover and the cover for this book. But that bias really only enhancements my enjoyment for myself.

Kerma B
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This is the first cultivation story I've ever read, and I won't be surprised if it spoiled me for all to follow. There's a lot of good stuff already - a great sibling relationship, mysterious Saints, forbidden love and intrigue - and it's only at a little over ten thousands words as I write this.

But let's start at the beginning :

Story: The prologue manages, in just a few hundred words, to introduce two protagonists, show a bit about their relationship, raise the stakes for them, and provide a clear, logical goal for one of them to strive for - in short, it made me care about Kiro and Seira. It doesn't feel unnecessary, either, as so many prologues do, and it flows smoothly into the first chapter - which feels like a mirror of the prologue, but with a twist - and from there on onwards.

We aren't deep into the story yet, but so far, it's all believable and engaging. As someone who is new to this genre, I am missing a little bit of world building. Seasoned readers in Cultivation novels might disagree, but I could use a few more explanations. 

Style: No complaints, really. It's well written, and easy to read. 

The grammar is good. I didn't notice any typos, either. 

The characters is where I'm really divided. The twin's introduction is great, as I wrote before, and it gripped me right away. However, a part of me wondered, in the following chapters, how someone with their kind of childhood turned out mostly normal. Especially, since nearly everyone around them seems to be - let's go with less than kind. But then again, we're only at the very beginning of the journey. Clearly, there is more to come and much more to be revealed about their past. 

Overall: I cannot rate this against other cultivation stories, as I have never read one before. But I can say that this is a very good story, regardless of its genre. I'll be sure to keep it on my list to come back to. 

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Not really anything special yet.

Reviewed at: 9 - The Blessings of Youth

It truly is too early to say anything about this story and which direction it will take. But here are my thoughts about it.

Overall it has a nice start already introducing the MCs and how their whole world is a lie.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

The style is alright, chapter 0 also has a strong start.

The grammar had no problems, there hasn't been any filler storywise yet and everything has been building our world, and the characters are also fine. Not much to say about them, as their interactions have been few as of now.

All in all, a nice start. But there are way too many positive reviews even though this isn't anything special yet. This story also can go either way, becoming top on trending and going to the best rated section, or either having becoming boring and being forgotten after trending. As of now, if this doesn't become more exciting(in some way) soon, I will most likely drop it. I will read at least another dozen chapters or so until I decide about that dropping part though.