Vyndra Stories

Vyndra Stories

by MtrokArt

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After a horrible experience, Tom begins his new life in Vyndra. It is a new planet with a very different way of life than what you were used to. It is not only inhabited by human beings but by other alien species and virtual creatures that swarm in the network.

  Being a Gifted, he is obliged to serve his species, being nothing more than a child, he only follows what they indicate, but he will try to find his place and a goal to move forward.

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This novel,while with a rather generic story, is well executed. The included illustrations are good, they help visualizing the scenes. The grammar needs some work, there's also issues with how the sentences flow.

Characters are defined and have their distinct personality, but sometimes they feel a bit 2-dimensional. Maybe it will be developped in later chapters?

 

To conclude, this novel has promises if the author adresses the points raised in this review.