𝕽𝖊𝖇𝖊𝖑𝖑𝖎𝖔𝖓

by Slyze

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The Kingdom of Silveria is a broken nation, long put under the colonial rule of the distant Albionic Empire, with it's people and pride shattered to work a life of desperate struggle under their overlords. Former King Justus can only watch in silent contempt as his people are taxed, burdened and broken. How will Silveria rise from the ashes, and forge it's own road to independence?

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Chapters are released once every two days, and occasionally early.

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Cobblehoof
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Intriguing start to what promises to be a sprawling epic

Reviewed at: Safety

I have been waiting until enough chapters were posted to justify a review, but from first discovering the story it was something I was keen to do. Rebellion is an intriguing tale with a large cast of characters and a grandiose setting - something that is not easy to pull-off, especially when writing for the web vs. traditional publishing. So far it works, and it works well. 

Stylistically, the story is rich with description and dialogue. The pacing feels right, with enough information trickling in to peripherally introduce us to the world, without excessive info-dumping or plot lag. The writing is generally strong, although at times feels slightly cluttered. The author could benefit from trimming some fat - sometimes using a single description is better than two. That said, this is a minor quibble given the author's daily release schedule. 

Grammar seems mostly fine. There has been the odd instance of using the wrong word that I picked up on, but again, this is to be expected given the release schedule. 

The story... well. It's unraveling at just the right pace. There is a lot to unpack here. The setting is steeped with history, and due to multiple POVs and jumping around, we get to see events unfold slowly and with insight that would not be possible for a single POV. This works well. The author does a good job of keeping the focus tight whilst allowing for a little meandering where necessary. Sometimes however the jumping can be a little jarring, and some sections feel too short - I found myself becoming immersed in a section for it to end seconds later. 

Characters are well defined. I have no issue understanding who is who within the plot, despite a fairly large cast already. 

I am excited to see where this story goes. Slyze has quite a task on his hands due to the sprawling nature of Rebellion, but I am confident so far that he will deliver. Can't wait to see where the story goes. Recommended.

Lyrical
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Does a great job at writing in a good manner and hooking you in, but does require more background information so as to not leave the reader confused at times.

I recommend adding more chapters detailing the backstory of each character, and the overall story itself.

nerdy_n_dirty86
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(As of Chapter 3) Interesting Story

Reviewed at: Uncanny

Enjoying this so far. Parts of these chapters seem a bit disjointed and doesn't flow that well. Maybe a bit more information to tie it together. Looking forward to this story though!