Artificial Jelly

by Materia-Blade

Original ONGOING Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Tragedy Dungeon Female Lead GameLit LitRPG Low Fantasy Non-Human lead Strategy Virtual Reality
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Born to die and be born again, Gell, the Jellyfae must discover her strange connection to the horrible monsters called humans, that speak with words she understands, but seem to want nothing but her death. Driven by a desire for safety and freedom, she ventures forth to Tread the Sky, and finds more worlds than one.

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Cedrych Skye
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Greatly enjoyed finding this story. I've been reading hundreds of LitRPG novels on Kindle Unlimited for a few years now and this one is a breath of fresh air that stands out from the typical MC you find in most LitRPG novels.

Style is good. Easy to read.

Story is great.

Grammar is good, but a few phrases here and there are a bit awkward. Not enough to dampent enjoyment of the story however.

Character's are well thought out. Gell is a delight and the concern shown by Amy and Iron Crock is touching.

Twilight Pages
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Good reading, watch out for those pitfalls

Reviewed at: A Friendly Chat

Been reading this for a while. I don't normally go in for LitRPGs or GameLit due to a lot of people using those systems as a crutch for their novel without actually telling a story and just doing it to live out their power fantasy, but this one seems OK so far. Very light on the game elements, the author doesn't seem to be over-reliant on tropes or cliches, and so far hasn't fallen into any of the pitfalls of a game novel. Seriously, no one needs or wants to read about what stats are or what leveling up does! This novel hasn't done anything like that thankfully.

 

I'm a bit worried about where the character is developing, but ultimately I'm interested as long as it doesn't go into a spiral of loner/edgelord. A tragic traumatizing backstory does not make your character interesting, it just means they need to see a shrink. And honestly, that would be more interesting to read.

 

 

Istyatur
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A litRPG that avoids most LitRGP problems

Reviewed at: This Hallowed Sky

This review contains some spoilers; nothing I would consider out of place as a back-of-the-book teaser but if you hate any spoilers at all, you have been warned. 

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 

Venan
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This story is good. There is no question about that. The characters, world, pacing, everything was well done in my eyes.

My only gripe and why I am dropping the story and why I will not continue past the 'Experience Points' chapter, is that everything feels pointless. There is no hope for the main character.

This may be resolved later in the story, but I don't think I can make it to that point. Everything is against the mc. The world is just taking a big poop on the mc and all our adorable jelly can do is grin and bear it.

It makes me feel terrible, and I guess thats the point. The author succeeds in making in you care for the character. However, the circumstances of the mc just make me depressed. I do not see any way of it getting better anytime soon.

It all feels so hopeless.

 

JeffersonSighs
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Major level good shit. Major level good shit. Major level good shit.

 

Nothing else to say. 

Vera Anne Wolf
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It’s easy to see how this rose hard and fast in the ratings. The idea of a mob gaining consciousness is unique and presented realistically, but with enough subtle detail to make you think there’s more to this little Jellyfea than meets the eye. This was a story easy to pick up and slip into. You can tell when a writer is comfortable with their style because the writing reflects that smooth experienced hand and the read is effortless and enjoyable.

Gell, despite resembling one of my least favorite species (a jellyfish), was immediately likable while not being too perfect or predictable. The transition of her emotions from beginning to end only tangled me up in her story even more. I was literally frustrated and angry with her when Red Thorn returned after such a long absence to slay her again.

Both the game world and the real world side of this are well presented. I would not say a lot of world-building was done, but I wouldn’t say it more was needed either. There was just enough here for the plot to slither forward as it follows Gell’s struggle for freedom and a world outside her very limited cave.

Where most litRPG/gamelit stories make you want to jump back into a game and tackle monsters, this one made me cringe just a little with guilt. Though I’d probably still have no problems killing anything with tentacles xD

I have read a few complaints on pacing but, having caught up to the latest chapter, its easy to see that Gell’s world is about to get much bigger and the story the better for it. Personally, there were parts of the story I wanted to skim past but that happens in every story, and for me, the pacing was just right.

Would definitely recommend. 25/25

P.S. I know she/he is a jellyfea, but still…

hye
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Surprising story, surprising author

Reviewed at: Scramble

Alright, so I've just caught up to the latest chapter so far.

I really like it, it's enjoyable and the world and characters seem rather interesting. I feel as if some of the sidecharacters are a bit bland, but it's still newly made and we haven't seen a lot of them yet. 

 

Now, what really surprised me was when I finished the newest chapter and went back to review and follow. I noticed the author was Materia-Blade. Damn, I've been reading their stories over on spacebattle and the like for years, they've always been some favourites of mine, and to think I can find a new story still in the infancy and follow from the beginning. Lucky me! 

 

Love the story, it's fun as heck

Virne
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It's easy and smooth to read. I must not reread sentences multiple times for understand them (English is not my first language). 

You can really feel what Gell feels and I like the way, how thinking someone nonhuman is described. It's convincing. 

SuperRedNova
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I hope the author has a good day

Reviewed at: Lingering Instinct

Simply a well written story with intruige and mechanics that don't get in the way of one's enjoyment of it. 

Evernight
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Full of emotion without excess

Reviewed at: A Friendly Chat

MC is like a baby raised by nature, without any prior contact with human society. Through her new contact with humans, she goes through many new emotions such as fear, frustration, helplessness but most dominantly, curiosity. 

As MC is a clean slate, you can feel the character growth from one chapter to another. I just hope that once her character development reaches to a certain degree, author will stop adding more to it and making it bloated.