Parallel Hearts

Parallel Hearts

by Edge Valmond

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

Loneliness of deepness, racing in an abyss of blackness, trailing hands of shadows. Shackling to the land, silence for longness. No longer willing in enduring, breaking free. Seeking a desire far inside, countless more existing within. Birthing underneath the light of the blood moon, embracing her selfishness and imperfections. Shouting what is within, never ending turmoil. Continuously falling, rising even stronger. Mirroring hearts, both of the same. Memories of haziness, wars of grandness. Stepping on a plain far above her own, her heart of softness. A night of eternity coming, bringing demise in the wake of her despair.

"There is light in the deepest of darkness..."

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—> Also, Infrequent Strong Language. So, the profanity part is almost nonexistent. 

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336 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Parallel Hearts(Book 1) ago
Chapter 1: Endless Night(Part 1) ago
Chapter 1: Endless Night(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 1: Endless Night(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 2: Regret ago
Chapter 2: Regret(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 3: A Shattered Soul(Part 1) ago
Chapter 3: A Shattered Soul(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 4: Two Halves Once Whole(Part 1) ago
Chapter 4: Two Halves Once Whole(Part 2) ago
Chapter 4: Two Halves Once Whole(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 4: Two Halves Once Whole(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 5: Old Friends(Part 1) ago
Chapter 5: Old Friends(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 5: Old Friends(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 6: What is Rightfully Her Own(Part 1) ago
Chapter 6: What is Rightfully Her Own(Part 2) ago
Chapter 6: What is Rightfully Her Own(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 6: What is Rightfully Her Own(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 7: Lost Pride(Part 1) ago
Chapter 7: Lost Pride(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 8: Harmonizer-Lost Memories(Part 1) ago
Chapter 8: Harmonizer-Lost Memories(Part 2) ago
Chapter 8: Harmonizer-Lost Memories(Part 3) ago
Chapter 8: Harmonizer-Lost Memories(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 9: Destruction of the Kingdom(Part 1) ago
Chapter 9: Destruction of the Kingdom(Part 2) ago
Chapter 9: Destruction of the Kingdom(Part 3) ago
Chapter 9: Destruction of the Kingdom(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 9: Destruction of the Kingdom(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 10: Shrine of the King(Part 1) ago
Chapter 10: Shrine of the King(Part 2) ago
Chapter 10: Shrine of the King(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 11: Those Without Salvation(Part 1) ago
Chapter 11: Those Without Salvation(Part 2) ago
Chapter 11: Those Without Salvation(Part 3) ago
Chapter 11: Those Without Salvation(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 11: Those Without Salvation(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 12: A Somber Morrow(Part 1) ago
Chapter 12: A Somber Morrow(Part 2) ago
Chapter 12: A Somber Morrow(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 12: A Somber Morrow(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 13: Selfish Aspirations(Part 1) ago
Chapter 13: Selfish Aspirations(Part 2) ago
Chapter 13: Selfish Aspirations(Part 3) ago
Chapter 13: Selfish Aspirations(Part 4) ago
Chapter 13: Selfish Aspirations(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 14: Growing Fear(Part 1) ago
Chapter 14: Growing Fear(Part 2) ago
Chapter 14: Growing Fear(Part 3) ago
Chapter 14: Growing Fear(Part 4) ago
Chapter 14: Growing Fear(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 14: Growing Fear(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 15: A Reprieve(Part 1) ago
Chapter 15: A Reprieve(Part 2) ago
Chapter 15: A Reprieve(Part 3) ago
Chapter 15: A Reprieve(Part 4) ago
Chapter 15: A Reprieve(Part 5) ago
Chapter 15: A Reprieve(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 16: Infiltration(Part 1) ago
Chapter 16: Infiltration(Part 2) ago
Chapter 16: Infiltration(Part 3) ago
Chapter 16: Infiltration(Part 4) ago
Chapter 16: Infiltration(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 16: Infiltration(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 17: Darkness Ever so Deep(Part 1) ago
Chapter 17: Darkness Ever so Deep(Part 2) ago
Chapter 17: Darkness Ever so Deep(Part 3) ago
Chapter 17: Darkness Ever so Deep(Part 4) ago
Chapter 17: Darkness Ever so Deep(Part 5) ago
Chapter 17: Darkness Ever so Deep(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 1) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 2) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 3) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 4) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 5) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 6) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 7) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 8) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Part 9) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 18: Those Who Eternally Sin(Character Profile) ago
Chapter 19: Nearing the End(Part 1) ago
Chapter 19: Nearing the End(Part 2) ago
Chapter 19: Nearing the End(Part 3) ago
Chapter 19: Nearing the End(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 20: Those Who Embrace Hatred(Part 1) ago
Chapter 20: Those Who Embrace Hatred(Part 2) ago
Chapter 20: Those Who Embrace Hatred(Part 3) ago
Chapter 20: Those Who Embrace Hatred(Part 4) ago
Chapter 20: Those Who Embrace Hatred(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Eternally Resist(Part 1) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Eternally Resist(Part 2) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Eternally Resist(Part 3) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Eternally Resist(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 22: Those Who Seek Revenge(Part 1) ago
Chapter 22: Those Who Seek Revenge(Part 2) ago
Chapter 22: Those Who Seek Revenge(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 23: What Should Have Never Been(Part 1) ago
Chapter 23: What Should Have Never Been(Part 2) ago
Chapter 23: What Should Have Never Been(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 24: A World in Ruin!(Part 1) ago
Chapter 24: A World in Ruin!(Part 2) ago
Chapter 24: A World in Ruin!(Part 3) ago
Chapter 24: A World in Ruin!(Conclusion) ago
Finale: Final Transmission(Part 1) ago
Finale: Final Transmission(Part 2) ago
Finale: Final Transmission(Part 3) ago
Finale: Final Transmission(Conclusion) ago
Book 2 Promotion/Parallel Hearts-Additional Information ago
Parallel Hearts(Book 1): Final Exam ago
Parallel Hearts: Cursed Memories(Book 2) ago
Chapter 1: Those Who Lurk in the Shadows(Part 1) ago
Chapter 1: Those Who Lurk in the Shadows(Part 2) ago
Chapter 1: Those Who Lurk in the Shadows(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 2: Those Who Carry On(Part 1) ago
Chapter 2: Those Who Carry On(Part 2) ago
Chapter 2: Those Who Carry On(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 3: Those Who Regret(Part 1) ago
Chapter 3: Those Who Regret(Part 2) ago
Chapter 3: Those Who Regret(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 4: Destined Reunion(Part 1) ago
Chapter 4: Destined Reunion(Part 2) ago
Chapter 4: Destined Reunion(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 1) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 2) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 3) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 4) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 5) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 6) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 7) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Part 8) ago
Chapter 5: Where it All Began(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 6: Unspoken Emotions(Part 1) ago
Chapter 6: Unspoken Emotions(Part 2) ago
Chapter 6: Unspoken Emotions(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 1) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 2) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 3) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 4) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 5) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 6) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 7) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Part 8) ago
Chapter 7: Those Who Must Sin(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 8: Awakening(Part 1) ago
Chapter 8: Awakening(Part 2) ago
Chapter 8: Awakening(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 1) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 2) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 3) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 4) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 5) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 6) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 7) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Part 8) ago
Chapter 9: After the Rain(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Part 1) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Part 2) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Part 3) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Part 4) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Part 5) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Part 6) ago
Chapter 10: Olden Days(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 11: Hearts Desiring For the Past(Part 1) ago
Chapter 11: Hearts Desiring For the Past(Part 2) ago
Chapter 11: Hearts Desiring For the Past(Part 3) ago
Chapter 11: Hearts Desiring For the Past(Part 4) ago
Chapter 11: Hearts Desiring For the Past(Part 5) ago
Chapter 11: Hearts Desiring For the Past(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 1) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 2) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 3) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 4) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 5) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 6) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Part 7) ago
Chapter 12: Those of Differing Worlds(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 1) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 2) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 3) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 4) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 5) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 6) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 7) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 8) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Part 9) ago
Chapter 13: Those Without Will(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Part 1) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Part 2) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Part 3) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Part 4) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Part 5) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Part 6) ago
Chapter 14: What Could Have Been(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Part 1) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Part 2) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Part 3) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Part 4) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Part 5) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Part 6) ago
Chapter 15: Ultima Weapon(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 16: Big Sis(Part 1) ago
Chapter 16: Big Sis(Part 2) ago
Chapter 16: Big Sis(Part 3) ago
Chapter 16: Big Sis(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 17: Those Who Are Inferior(Part 1) ago
Chapter 17: Those Who Are Inferior(Part 2) ago
Chapter 17: Those Who Are Inferior(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 18: Eternal Reason(Part 1) ago
Chapter 18: Eternal Reason(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Part 1) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Part 2) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Part 3) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Part 4) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Part 5) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Part 6) ago
Chapter 19: Those Who Bring Demise in the Wake of Their Despair(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 20: Day of Ruin(Part 1) ago
Chapter 20: Day of Ruin(Part 2) ago
Chapter 20: Day of Ruin(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Seek Forgiveness(Part 1) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Seek Forgiveness(Part 2) ago
Chapter 21: Those Who Seek Forgiveness(Conclusion) ago
50,000 View Mile Stone ago
Parallel Hearts: Covenant ago
Valentine's Special(Part 1) ago
Valentine's Special(Conclusion) ago
Must Read ago
Therapy Session ago
Parallel Hearts: Short Stories ago
Spoiler Ahead-Please Read ago
A Heart Evermore Free(Part 1) ago
A Heart Evermore Free(Conclusion) ago
A Heart Evermore Free(Character Profile) ago
Sins of Reality(Part 1) ago
Sins of Reality(Part 2) ago
Sins of Reality(Part 3) ago
Sins of Reality(Conclusion) ago
Sins of Reality(Character Profile) ago
Spring of Life ago
Iguana Isekai ago
Iguana Isekai(Character Profile) ago
Halloween Special(2) - Reflecting Despair(Part 1) ago
Halloween Special(2) - Reflecting Despair(Conclusion) ago
Halloween Special(2) - Reflecting Despair(Character Profile) ago
Those of Greed(Part 1) ago
Those of Greed(Conclusion) ago
Those of Greed(Character Profile) ago
Summer Special(2): Maze of Mysteries(Part 1) ago
Summer Special(2): Maze of Mysteries(Conclusion) ago
Summer Special(2): Maze of Mysteries(Character Profile) ago
Parallel Hearts: Deleted Scenes ago
Parallel Hearts(Book 1): Deleted Scenes ago
Judgment of the Night ago
Judgment of the Night(Character Profile) ago
Those Seeking what is Within ago
Queen of Monsters ago
Chapter 1: The Will to Resist(Part 1) ago
Chapter 1: The Will to Resist(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 2: Those Who Must Ascend(Part 1) ago
Chapter 2: Those Who Must Ascend(Part 2) ago
Chapter 2: Those Who Must Ascend(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 3: A Fleeting Dream(Part 1) ago
Chapter 3: A Fleeting Dream(Part 2) ago
Chapter 3: A Fleeting Dream(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 4: Those Who Are an Enemy(Part 1) ago
Chapter 4: Those Who Are an Enemy(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 5: Those Who Seek the Past(Part 1) ago
Chapter 5: Those Who Seek the Past(Part 2) ago
Chapter 5: Those Who Seek the Past(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 6: Hope(Part 1) ago
Chapter 6: Hope(Part 2) ago
Chapter 6: Hope(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 7: Undying Bond(Part 1) ago
Chapter 7: Undying Bond(Part 2) ago
Chapter 7: Undying Bond(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 8: Hatred Ever so Deep(Part 1) ago
Chapter 8: Hatred Ever so Deep(Part 2) ago
Chapter 8: Hatred Ever so Deep(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 9: Emotions Forever Strong(Part 1) ago
Chapter 9: Emotions Forever Strong(Conclusion) ago
Finale: Sinful Desires(Part 1) ago
Finale: Sinful Desires(Conclusion) ago
Queen of Monsters(Character Profile) ago
Solem et Lunam ago
Chapter 1: Those Operating From the Shadows ago
Chapter 2: Dishonored ago
Chapter 3: Inescapable Past ago
Chapter 4: What was Once Home(Part 1) ago
Chapter 4: What was Once Home(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 5: Remnants of the Past(Part 1) ago
Chapter 5: Remnants of the Past(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 6: One Who Will Hear(Part 1) ago
Chapter 6: One Who Will Hear(Part 2) ago
Chapter 6: One Who Will Hear(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 7: Soldier ago
Chapter 8: A Life of Condemnation(Part 1) ago
Chapter 8: A Life of Condemnation(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 9: Reverberating Emotions(Part 1) ago
Chapter 9: Reverberating Emotions(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 10: Those Who Conspire ago
Chapter 11: Resisting Heart ago
Chapter 12: Chaotic Sacrifice(Part 1) ago
Chapter 12: Chaotic Sacrifice(Conclusion) ago
Finale: Wings of Ruin(Part 1) ago
Finale: Wings of Ruin(Conclusion) ago
Solem et Lunam(Character Profile) ago
Vita et Mors ago
Chapter 1: Purpose ago
Chapter 2: Innocence of Death(Part 1) ago
Chapter 2: Innocence of Death(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 3: Differing Realities(Part 1) ago
Chapter 3: Differing Realities(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 4: Dusk of Endlessness(Part 1) ago
Chapter 4: Dusk of Endlessness(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 5: Unrelenting Resolve(Part 1) ago
Chapter 5: Unrelenting Resolve(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 6: Eternal Resolution(Part 1) ago
Chapter 6: Eternal Resolution(Part 2) ago
Chapter 6: Eternal Resolution(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 7: A Troubling Heart(Part 1) ago
Chapter 7: A Troubling Heart(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 8: Despairing Truth(Part 1) ago
Chapter 8: Despairing Truth(Conclusion) ago
Chapter 9: Desdemona ago
Finale: Vita et Mors(Part 1) ago
Finale: Vita et Mors(Conclusion) ago
Vita et Mors(Character Profile) ago
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Blind_Watcher
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The story is very well written, and I genuinely have very few complaints. Unfortunately though, this story was not for me.

One of the things I liked most, was the main characters warring nature, how they were almost contantly at adds with themself over what they were doing and what they had done. Very well written and presented.

The story was alright, in terms of plot and pacing, it certainly gets you from point A to B without picking things apart, which is a plus. The only downside is that the narrative format can make it difficult to follow events sometimes, but I'll leave that under style.

The grammar and spellsing are all fine and fit with the style, so you won't experience any jarring moments due to run on sentences or missrepresented dialogue.

I know there are people out there who will disagree, there are atleast a dozen or so in the reviews section alone, but the writing style really doesn't work of me. In short bursts, it comes accross as very fitting for a high fantasy narration, such as an excerpt of Gandalf narrating a momentous occassion of middleearth.

The problem is that much like sugar, there can be too much of a good thing. I quickly found that once I reached my tolerance point, my opinion of what I was reading would rapidly go down hill.

Having said that, I am reasonably confident that most people would be fine with the style choice and implementation knowing about it in advance. I am just not one of those people.

If classical epics are your thing, I would definitely give Restoration a shot. 

AlexaLee
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It is not a particularly easy read due to the writing style but if you are looking to read something poetic and well written, this is it.

Story: An interesting story, telling the tale of Cyra and Rose, once called Maria as they fight in a world seemingly abandoned by the potentially dead Gods.

Style: This is written in third person, present tense. The writing is almost poetic in nature but there is some over repetition of words (specifically evermore) and strange word choice however, according to the author, this is intentional. At first, this calls for rereading and a lot of concentration but, once you’re used to it, it doesn’t detract from the overall enjoyment.

On a couple of occasions, there is the use of “…” which I don’t like because I think that it is unnecessary but that is just personal preference!

Grammar: The grammar was pretty good. It goes hand in hand with the writing style in that there are a lot of commas but, once you get used to it, it was not a problem.

Characters: The main character is one person with two warring halves- one a fallen angel, the other a once magic-wielding warrior. At first, this is slightly confusing but the conflict and clash between the two halves is written very well.

On the whole, I really enjoyed this book. The writing style is unusual for Royal Road but it is very well done. I feel that fans of classic literature and epic fantasies will enjoy this greatly!

Genuine55
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I'm not going to do this like a standard advanced review, so bear with me.

First off, grammar is impeccable, no complaints, moving on.

Lets talk about style. For better or worse this is the sort of work to unironically use the word "evermore". This is also the sort of work that likes to drop articles from the beginning of sentences and to use other atmospheric types of sentence structure. This isn't a good thing, or a bad thing, but in my experience that sort of language polarizes readers, and a reader aught to know what he's getting into. ;) Take this passage:

There is another influence driving this determination. No matter the morrow, even if it is near on impossible, then it is mattering little.

The atmosphere and the writing is great. Dark, heavy, and solid. There are sentences and paragraphs in this work that make me want to stop and read passages out loud, and that's not something that happens often in any book, let alone web serials. Seriously, I'll say that again - this story makes me pause and read bits out loud. That quote above, try reading it out loud yourself. I want you all to understand how serious of high praise that is.

 


The author is clearly concerned with his prose, and has just as clearly put a great deal of effort into it. Unfortunately, the same prose that makes me want to stop and savor a phrase also tends to obscure the story and overwhelm characters. Rereading a paragraph because I enjoy it is fine, but rereading because I got stuck in a transition between flowery description and action can be a problem.

Similarly, the characters have a lot of potential, but setting them against that prose makes them feel flat. It's hard to read the characters as more than another tragic element of the setting, rather than as active purposeful figures that move through their own worlds. By chapter five this was improving, and I woudn't be terribly surprised if it continues to improve as the characters develop and evolve.

Buller
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The most prominent feature of this work would be its style. Sentencing is never too long yet likewise never too short. In reality, it stays the same length for most of the story. However, the feeling of each set of words is drastically different from the previous, and it requires great thought to concentrate on.

In other words, this is not a story that can just be skimmed. It requires in-depth reading constantly, lest one gets confused pretty quickly. I personally read casually, making this an ill fit for me. However, I can still appreciate the character design, no matter how little I got to see of it(due to me not reading too far in and not due to a lack of it.) Grammar has no large problems with it, though there might be a few moments where a sentence needs to be reread. Trust me. It will happen.

Overall, I give this a 4.5 out of 5. I think others will enjoy it very much.

HWPerfidy
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Disclaimer: I don’t know how to rate this story. On one hand, it’s confusing. On the other hand, maybe I’m just stupid.

Story: I’m reviewing the volume Queen of Monsters. So far it’s a story about a lady who’s trapped in a game with a bunch of other people. They can’t log out. Die in the game, die in real life. The first chapter reminds me a bit of the introduction to a certain anime I won’t name, but that’s okay.

The poetry like style makes it a bit confusing, and hard to understand what’s going on. I started getting confused at chapter 2. The mc’s backstory is something that I find difficulty in understanding. But from what I saw in the comments, the ambiguousness of the story is intentional.

Pacing feels a bit fast, but given that the volume is 9 chapters long, I suppose it’s okay.

Style: The style reminded me a bit of reading ancient Chinese texts. It’s elegant, flows like poetry, but takes more than a bit of effort to understand fully. It’s personally not for me and gives me a headache when I read too much in one go but I know that there’s people who’d read this type of style, especially when it’s so well written.

Character: I…honestly don’t know how to rate this. I was so focused on trying to understand what was happening that I couldn’t really get a good grip on the characters’ personalities. It feels like trying to catch water. It’s probably there, but you just can’t seem to get ahold of it.

Grammar: No mistakes that I could see.

Esbe Esi
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The story is masterfully written, with all the flowery words to paint the scene, inspire emotions in the reader, to set up the atmosphere. 

Except the story doesn’t go anywhere. 

Well, that’s not exactly true, the story does go somewhere, it just goes to the five different places at once, with the short, self-contained chapters each focusing on someone and something else. Everything seems equally important. And when everything is important, nothing is. 

They may share the universe they are set in, and they could even influence each other, but there doesn’t seem to be any coherent, linear storyline we can follow.

Instead, chapters are like little snippets the author did for worldbuilding purposes. 

They even include character profiles. 

This story was not supposed to be read in the serialized format, it is supposed to be read as a large block of work, a true, complete novel, exploring multiple facets of the fictional universe. Best to binge if you have a free day. 

Keep it in mind while reading. 

JEPayne
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DISCLAIMER: This review pertains specifically to the short story Sins of Reality.

This story is a lot. It's beautiful, poignant, exciting, and it demands a lot from the reader, transcending beyond passively consumed entertainment into an interactive experience.

Style - the most unique part of this story, and the author's other works, is the prose. It's deliberately beautiful and, at first, a little difficult to read, but sticking with it and learning the author's patter and style, it soon begins to flow. The story is told and the scene is set through tone and emotion as much as concrete detail, with the effect that, once you're in tune, the scenes playing out in your head will be more vibrant and detailed than what can be achieved through pragmatic prose.

Story - the story itself is fairly simple when distilled to its most basic components, but the story here serves to illustrate the nature of the main character, and it does this beautifully. A synergy of story and character extremely uncommon. (Damnit now I'm talking like this too!).

Grammar - flawless, if dense for readers unwilling to invest the effort to read it. Like I've said before though, it is definitely worth the effort, this work giving you an experience you won't find elsewhere on rr.

Character - beautifully represented. Despite very little dialogue for the word count, every character shines as an individual through their inner thoughts and external actions. The MC in particular is a glorious character, a complex dichotomy of destroyer and saviour, bearing the weight of sins passed and prices paid, allowing her to save multitudes of the innocent. Absolutely fantastic! And Valor is the perfect foil. The loving but long suffering companion is incredibly relatable despite his status as a dirty, injecting levity and humour alongside his compassion into what is otherwise a very tense story.

Also that iguana. My God I laughed!

Drew Royston
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Style and substance there is for one who seeks it

Reviewed at: Chapter 6: Hope(Part 1)

Queen of Monsters pulls at one, it does. Words tripping. Meaning teasing. Questions posing.

If easy it is one seeks. If superficial it is one craves. Not the story for one of that ilk it is.

Working to understand the secrets. Striving to solve the clues. Yearning to better know the characters. That the prize here is. If one chooses to pluck it.

Not for all this is. For those for whom it is, rewards there are.

Where one falls? Until one tries, one will know not.

Detailed scores

Style: If in the wake of Finnegan’s Wake Joycean-like one seeks to return to the winding words from the shores of the Isle of Emeralds, this may to safe harbour bring you.

Story: Charging sometimes. Crawling sometimes. Back and forth in space and time. Confusion deliberate? Sometimes. But always?

Character: Through speech. Through action. Through thought. Through absence drawn. On occasion though, the author it is, or the character it is? Clarity blurred, necessary it is?

Grammar: A humble eye. Flaws none did find. Reading smooth is.

[Note: To be clear this is written in affectionate homage to the extraordinary craftsmanship that the author has brought to this story. I'm in no way trying to mock or parody it.]

DukeFluffingtons
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Unlike most stories on Royal Road that feature a blank protagonist who barely elicit any emotional growth, Parallel Hearts has depth in spades.

Style - The novel is unapologetically full of poetic prose, each sentence formulated to get maximum Oomph. Unfortunately, I could see this as being quite divisive as the average reader might struggle to really sink their teeth into it. Still, it hit the mark for me, and definitely left me wanting to turn the page!

Story - For me, this was the highlight. The world building is perfect, dropping just enough breadcrumbs to leave you wanting more, and the story feels fresh and engaging. While the story of two opposites being destined to battle it out is a common one, Parallel Hearts gives a fresh spin on it, and I can appreciate that.

Grammar - No issues on this front, the grammar flows perfectly.

Character - Each character is quite distinct and fleshed out. I particularly liked the character sheets giving little tidbits of info about each person. While we're thrown in the deep end with Rose, much more care and detail quickly comes with Cyra, giving a nice contrast between the two major characters.

Overall, this is an easy 5/5 from me. I'd recommend the story to anyone getting tired of cliche stories, to those who love poetry in all it's forms, and anyone looking for a genuinely great read!

Dragonborne
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Style

I will not grade on style, but it is extremely poetic and a bit dense in certain places. It was fun to read, but as the author warned me, not a casual read--I had to make sure I could sit down and focus to best understand the story. 

Story

The story is difficult to follow, but I honestly don't think that's a bad thing. The only reason it takes a bit to keep up is because of the poetic style, but once you get going, it's incredibly thorough, in-depth, and a fun time! 

A tale of seemingly dead gods, we follow Cyra and Rose through their adventures as they try to unravel what has happened. They are interesting characters, and I particularly enjoy how contemplative the characters can be. It makes every plot point and decision impactful.

Grammar

The grammar is good, and I know some of the technical errors are completely due to the style of the story. I can spot intentional grammar rule-bends, and I think it heightened the style. 

Character

The characters are deep, and they are constantly at battle with themselves. I love the dynamic of Rose and Cyra, and how they combine forces to become that much stronger. Cyra is already a strong, powerful fighter--when paired with Rose, they are a forced to be reckoned with. 

Overall

This is not a casual read. But it is a FUN one! The concept is refreshing, and the world is deep and realistic. I warn you, though, if you blink too many times you will lose essential lore or information in the poetry. If you read carefully, and intentfully, you will find an amazing story with two powerful, fun characters.