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Noah Fel was a [Ritualist] for the Collegium.

As a professor, his daily routine consisted largely of grading papers, writing apprentice recommendations, and helping to ensure that his students didn't blow themselves up.

Truly, it was a rewarding job.

Now, displaced from his home in the after-effects of a ritual gone wrong, follow Fel on a fantasy world adventure!

Here you’ll find Rituals, Monsters, Magic, a permanent slouch, and more nervously written author’s notes than you can shake a stick at!


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Scheduling a new chapter for every Monday, as best I can.

(Am I allowed to write author's notes in the Synopsis? Yeah why not- random thoughts, Go!)

I've never done this before, but I've got this neat leather-bound notebook and a will to write, so let's have an adventure!

If I do write something stupid, inconsistent, or strange, however... please do call me out on it?
I love well-meaning corrections, they're one of the best ways I could improve!

With all that out of the way, the author will sit here and transition into talking in the 3rd person while on break. It's the only time he's able to write. Don't worry, the work-break won't last long. Something is always sure to go wrong here at th

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Irradiated Slag Heap
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During a ritual gone wrong, a professor is transported to... somewhere. Certainly not his classroom, definitely not his office, there’s not a student in sight. What’s more, there’s an unfortunate amount of monster blood in his immediate vicinity, which means there are also an unfortunate number of monsters. This is, obviously, suboptimal.

 The story doesn’t really have much to it yet, or I’d give a better description of the exact circumstances our erstwhile professor finds himself in. What I can say, though, is that I find this work to be exceptionally well-written, brilliantly paced, and above all, incredibly interesting. The plot has thoroughly hooked me, and I am eager to find out what the Author has in store.

Stillness
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This is an interesting story with a solid premise. The first two chapters were a good introdution to the story. The problem is that there is only one plot thread, which is to figure out what is happening to Fel. Without that, the story isn't interesting. Fel needs to stop being willfully ignorant of his stiuation, get some sort of goal and be proactive enough to drive the story. Also, coffee seems to be avalible in two places continents apart without being treated like a rarity. More worldbuilding would help explain this and flesh out the story.

EmpireofTrust
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Early days yet for this story, well worth the read so far and I have high hopes for its future if it continues with its hinted at depth and texture of its story world.

blonddude42
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It's a reasonable story, but it doesn't feel like it has anything too special.  There's nothing outright wrong, but it's been painfully slow and boring.  I'd rather have read the daily life of the MC as a professor rather than this "Mystery" plot.

It doesn't dive deep into anything and the mystery of what's happening to the MC doesn't feel well handled because of the times we leave his perspective.

Maybe it'll get better, but the beginning has greatly turned me off to the story.

TheReaperKing
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Well written and it's got a ton of promise I'm looking forword to following this.

Solarlancer
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So far the story is interesting. there is a lot of mystery and a lot of trying to find out what is happening with minimal clues. The MC has good personality considering he is a profesor and a Ritualist. His character so far was consistant and other characters have perosnalities. The worldbuilding is just starting so there is noting much to say except that it has been good so far. 

what im trying to say is give this story a shot, it has a lot of potential and it's good.

I gave it 4 stars because it is to early to judge if it deserves 5 stars or not

kffs
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Great job!

A combo of very fun conceits to play with, and the author executes on it in an engaging and well paced way.

 

Highly recommend, and am looking forward to seeing how this plays out!

 

The main character has a lot of room for growth while still being very likeable at the start. It's clear that he's going to get into increasingly interesting situations with characters that the author has been doing a great job of making interesting and compelling.

 

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Zedo
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Very well written, I like the story so far, the characters are interesting and I'm confident that it will only get better from now on.

The only problem I have are the non existing chapters I want to read...

 

Pale imitation
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The author's style is scatalogical and slow. But what bothers me the most is that the fine detail in which the world is described does not match up to the thoughts and dialogue of a MC that is written as a stupid bumbling fool. You would think that a MC that can describe the world in such detail and care would be more careful and intelligent.